Poem: Manzar | Completed

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Note: I'm really bad at titles. Do let me know if the title makes sense :)


HINDI VERSION:


Kalam ki syaahi,

Ugte suraj ki roshni,

Sach ka prakash ,

Bas inhi se the,

Zindagi me rang!

Phir ek din,

Kisi se mulaqat hui,

Anjaane me hi sahi,

Ek nayi roshni ghuli,

Ek naya rang simta,

Rangon ki ugaayi me uski!


Mehekti khushboo mitti ki

Gaanv ka mahaul dil me shaanti sa dhala,

Hothon par yun muskaan khili

Kuch hi mulaqaton me woh dil me chupke se utri!


Bekhabar tha woh uss taazi fiza se

Jo neeras hayaat me use halke se badalne aaya,

Jo tapti josh ke dhoop me

Ghani varsha banne aaya!

Bekhabar tha woh uss chandan ki khushboo se,

Jo jeevan ko mehkaane aaya

Jo dabe paanv khud anjaane se,

Hriday me utar aaya!


Par kismat se kaun hain bach paaya?

Naadan kismat pe naam na kabhi bhaaya

Aandhi sa woh saral sehej jeevan pe barsa

Dono ki kahaniyon ka aadhar basaya!


Bandhan me bandh gaye donon,

Pehchaan mili toh taazi hawa ka woh leher na bhaaya,

Roundi hui aatm samman ne gusse se taandav hi karvaaya!

Woh jaan na paaya,

Un shabdon ka bhaav jo uss aatma ko chub rahe the

Woh samajh na paaya uss diye ke lau kahi bujh rahe the

Woh pehchaan na paaya uss jaan pe kya beet rahi thi

Woh jaan na paaya dard uske komal se man ko kis kadar nichod rahi thi

Uss chehekte sitaare ke baaton se jo sama jagmagata

Woh dekh na paaya uspe khamoshi kaise dhal gayi thi!


Phir ek din aisa aaya,

Kismat ne aankhon pe se thoda sa parda sarkaaya,

Tez baarish me usne

Shabnam ki uss boond ko patte se girta paaya!

Uss ek lamhe me aisa khauf dil pe chaaya,

Use khone ke khayal se ruh yun khap-khapaya,

Tab ehsaas hua woh zaroori hain jeene ke liye,

Tab yeh anubhuti dil me ghar kar gaaya!


Aage waqt aur kismat gawa hain

Woh kahan se kahan pahunche!

Waaqif nahi they jo pehle

apne jeevan ke berang dhang se

Pyaar ke bandhan se

rangon se aaj waaqif ban gaye!


Der se hi sahi par use uss jannat ki pehchaan mili

Aur phir tha ek lamba kathin raasta aur atal ladaai!

Thaamke uska haath, uske sheetalta aur prem se himmat jutaai

Usme aag aur barsaat ko apni baaton ke hoslon se yunhi jagayi

Sang chale ek hi path aur manzil ke hamrahi!


Poochoge usse toh aaj woh kahega aur sweekarega iss sach ko - usne apne liye ek aalaukik heera nasamajh duniya ke nakaare paksh se dhoondhi aur hamesha ke liye uss bandhe phir bhi aazad panchi ko apne prem ke pinjre me qaid kar liya. Aaj woh uski aankhon me dekhke kahega, poori duniya ke saamne kahega, use apne liye jannat ka ek bhaag mil gaya hain. Woh maila chaand mil gaya hain jo maila sirf duniya waalon ki nazar me hain kyunki uske liye toh woh daag sirf uski kurbaaniyon aur sangharshon ke chin hain!


ENGLISH VERSION:


The translation cannot be done word to word else the English version won't really be even a bit poetic to read. I have tried my best to make it as poetic as possible. They may not rhyme at places though😅


Ink from pen

Rays of rising sun

Light of truth

These were what filled his life .

And then one day

He met someone.

Unbeknownst to him,

A new ray entered his life

A different shade coloured him

Adding to this collection of colours!


The fragrance of soil

The ambience of village which settled akin to peace in his heart

A smile that bloomed on his lips

In just a few meetings, she stealthily entered his heart


Oblivious was he to that fresh breeze

Which has flowed in to subtly change his monotonous life

Amidst the heat of zeal and vigour

Who is going to be the cool rain showers

Unaware was he of the fragrance of that sandalwood

Which has come to add fragrance to his life

Which has stealthily, unaware of it herself

Has entered his heart


But who has been able to escape fate

Innocent was never a word meant to describe it

And so it burst out akin to storm on their simple lives

Placing the foundation for their story!


Bound were they in a relationship

That fresh breeze on recognition wasn't beloved anymore

Because that crushed self respect just could bring in anger and nothing more!

He couldn't understand the value of the words he used which were hurting her soul

He couldn't comprehend that her brightness was diminishing bit by bit

He couldn't recognise the hurt that soul was going through

He couldn't ever know just how much pain her soft soul was facing

That shining star who's talks brightened the ambience

He couldn't see just how they got shrouded by silence!


And then came the day when fate decided to intervene

It made circumstances such that the blindfold blinding his eyes shifted

In those heavy rains, he witnessed his dew drop almost slip from the leaf

(When the drop hits the ground it splatters and 'dies', that's what is meant here)


In that one moment fear encaged his heart

His entire soul shook with its onslaught

That's when he realised he needed her to live

That's when this realisation made its place in his heart


Fate and time are witness to what happens ahead

To where they have reached and from where

For the ones who were unaware what colours their world lacked

To the ones who have together in their world, many colours unraveled


Albeit late still he recognised his heaven

Which was followed with a long path and an inevitable battle

Holding her hands, he derived strength from her gentle yet deep love

Explored her elements and motivated them

Together they walk - the companions of the same path and destination!


Today if you ask him he shall surely accept the truth - he has got for himself a unique and special diamond from the backgrounds of the ones whom society degrades each time and has caged that bound yet free bird aka her in his love and heart forever! Today he shall say looking into her eyes, to the whole world - he has got a slice of heaven for himself. Has got the maligned moon which is maligned only for others because for him the scars on her are the evidences of her sacrifices and struggles!


Love,

PSR

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Posted: 4 years ago
#2

Originally posted by: Ps143

Note: I'm really bad at titles. Do let me know if the title makes sense :)


HINDI VERSION:


Kalam ki syaahi,

Ugte suraj ki roshni,

Sach ka prakash ,

Bas inhi se the,

Zindagi me rang!

Phir ek din,

Kisi se mulaqat hui,

Anjaane me hi sahi,

Ek nayi roshni ghuli,

Ek naya rang simta,

Rangon ki ugaayi me uski!


Mehekti khushboo mitti ki

Gaanv ka mahaul dil me shaanti sa dhala,

Hothon par yun muskaan khili

Kuch hi mulaqaton me woh dil me chupke se utri!


Bekhabar tha woh uss taazi fiza se

Jo neeras hayaat me use halke se badalne aaya,

Jo tapti josh ke dhoop me

Ghani varsha banne aaya!

Bekhabar tha woh uss chandan ki khushboo se,

Jo jeevan ko mehkaane aaya

Jo dabe paanv khud anjaane se,

Hriday me utar aaya!


Par kismat se kaun hain bach paaya?

Naadan kismat pe naam na kabhi bhaaya

Aandhi sa woh saral sehej jeevan pe barsa

Dono ki kahaniyon ka aadhar basaya!


Bandhan me bandh gaye donon,

Pehchaan mili toh taazi hawa ka woh leher na bhaaya,

Roundi hui aatm samman ne gusse se taandav hi karvaaya!

Woh jaan na paaya,

Un shabdon ka bhaav jo uss aatma ko chub rahe the

Woh samajh na paaya uss diye ke lau kahi bujh rahe the

Woh pehchaan na paaya uss jaan pe kya beet rahi thi

Woh jaan na paaya dard uske komal se man ko kis kadar nichod rahi thi

Uss chehekte sitaare ke baaton se jo sama jagmagata

Woh dekh na paaya uspe khamoshi kaise dhal gayi thi!


Phir ek din aisa aaya,

Kismat ne aankhon pe se thoda sa parda sarkaaya,

Tez baarish me usne

Shabnam ki uss boond ko patte se girta paaya!

Uss ek lamhe me aisa khauf dil pe chaaya,

Use khone ke khayal se ruh yun khap-khapaya,

Tab ehsaas hua woh zaroori hain jeene ke liye,

Tab yeh anubhuti dil me ghar kar gaaya!


Aage waqt aur kismat gawa hain

Woh kahan se kahan pahunche!

Waaqif nahi they jo pehle

apne jeevan ke berang dhang se

Pyaar ke bandhan se

rangon se aaj waaqif ban gaye!


Der se hi sahi par use uss jannat ki pehchaan mili

Aur phir tha ek lamba kathin raasta aur atal ladaai!

Thaamke uska haath, uske sheetalta aur prem se himmat jutaai

Usme aag aur barsaat ko apni baaton ke hoslon se yunhi jagayi

Sang chale ek hi path aur manzil ke hamrahi!


Poochoge usse toh aaj woh kahega aur sweekarega iss sach ko - usne apne liye ek aalaukik heera nasamajh duniya ke nakaare paksh se dhoondhi aur hamesha ke liye uss bandhe phir bhi aazad panchi ko apne prem ke pinjre me qaid kar liya. Aaj woh uski aankhon me dekhke kahega, poori duniya ke saamne kahega, use apne liye jannat ka ek bhaag mil gaya hain. Woh maila chaand mil gaya hain jo maila sirf duniya waalon ki nazar me hain kyunki uske liye toh woh daag sirf uski kurbaaniyon aur sangharshon ke chin hain!


ENGLISH VERSION:


The translation cannot be done word to word else the English version won't really be even a bit poetic to read. I have tried my best to make it as poetic as possible. They may not rhyme at places though😅


Ink from pen

Rays of rising sun

Light of truth

These were what filled his life .

And then one day

He met someone.

Unbeknownst to him,

A new ray entered his life

A different shade coloured him

Adding to this collection of colours!


The fragrance of soil

The ambience of village which settled akin to peace in his heart

A smile that bloomed on his lips

In just a few meetings, she stealthily entered his heart


Oblivious was he to that fresh breeze

Which has flowed in to subtly change his monotonous life

Amidst the heat of zeal and vigour

Who is going to be the cool rain showers

Unaware was he of the fragrance of that sandalwood

Which has come to add fragrance to his life

Which has stealthily, unaware of it herself

Has entered his heart


But who has been able to escape fate

Innocent was never a word meant to describe it

And so it burst out akin to storm on their simple lives

Placing the foundation for their story!


Bound were they in a relationship

That fresh breeze on recognition wasn't beloved anymore

Because that crushed self respect just could bring in anger and nothing more!

He couldn't understand the value of the words he used which were hurting her soul

He couldn't comprehend that her brightness was diminishing bit by bit

He couldn't recognise the hurt that soul was going through

He couldn't ever know just how much pain her soft soul was facing

That shining star who's talks brightened the ambience

He couldn't see just how they got shrouded by silence!


And then came the day when fate decided to intervene

It made circumstances such that the blindfold blinding his eyes shifted

In those heavy rains, he witnessed his dew drop almost slip from the leaf

(When the drop hits the ground it splatters and 'dies', that's what is meant here)


In that one moment fear encaged his heart

His entire soul shook with its onslaught

That's when he realised he needed her to live

That's when this realisation made its place in his heart


Fate and time are witness to what happens ahead

To where they have reached and from where

For the ones who were unaware what colours their world lacked

To the ones who have together in their world, many colours unraveled


Albeit late still he recognised his heaven

Which was followed with a long path and an inevitable battle

Holding her hands, he derived strength from her gentle yet deep love

Explored her elements and motivated them

Together they walk - the companions of the same path and destination!


Today if you ask him he shall surely accept the truth - he has got for himself a unique and special diamond from the backgrounds of the ones whom society degrades each time and has caged that bound yet free bird aka her in his love and heart forever! Today he shall say looking into her eyes, to the whole world - he has got a slice of heaven for himself. Has got the maligned moon which is maligned only for others because for him the scars on her are the evidences of her sacrifices and struggles!


Love,

PSR



i simply love your writing and you are very talented plz do keep writing …


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Posted: 4 years ago
#3

Beautifully written dear. Please do keep sharing. Love to read your work.

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Posted: 4 years ago
#4

Lovely piece of work❤️.. Keep writing dear👍🏼

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Posted: 4 years ago
#5

Mrg peeps,

Wow dear such a long poem n really nice.. Let me understand the word by word n will give nice comments on it. ❤

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Posted: 4 years ago
#6

Originally posted by: Ps143

Note: I'm really bad at titles. Do let me know if the title makes sense :)


HINDI VERSION:


Kalam ki syaahi,

Ugte suraj ki roshni,

Sach ka prakash ,

Bas inhi se the,

Zindagi me rang!

Phir ek din,

Kisi se mulaqat hui,

Anjaane me hi sahi,

Ek nayi roshni ghuli,

Ek naya rang simta,

Rangon ki ugaayi me uski!


Mehekti khushboo mitti ki

Gaanv ka mahaul dil me shaanti sa dhala,

Hothon par yun muskaan khili

Kuch hi mulaqaton me woh dil me chupke se utri!


Bekhabar tha woh uss taazi fiza se

Jo neeras hayaat me use halke se badalne aaya,

Jo tapti josh ke dhoop me

Ghani varsha banne aaya!

Bekhabar tha woh uss chandan ki khushboo se,

Jo jeevan ko mehkaane aaya

Jo dabe paanv khud anjaane se,

Hriday me utar aaya!


Par kismat se kaun hain bach paaya?

Naadan kismat pe naam na kabhi bhaaya

Aandhi sa woh saral sehej jeevan pe barsa

Dono ki kahaniyon ka aadhar basaya!


Bandhan me bandh gaye donon,

Pehchaan mili toh taazi hawa ka woh leher na bhaaya,

Roundi hui aatm samman ne gusse se taandav hi karvaaya!

Woh jaan na paaya,

Un shabdon ka bhaav jo uss aatma ko chub rahe the

Woh samajh na paaya uss diye ke lau kahi bujh rahe the

Woh pehchaan na paaya uss jaan pe kya beet rahi thi

Woh jaan na paaya dard uske komal se man ko kis kadar nichod rahi thi

Uss chehekte sitaare ke baaton se jo sama jagmagata

Woh dekh na paaya uspe khamoshi kaise dhal gayi thi!


Phir ek din aisa aaya,

Kismat ne aankhon pe se thoda sa parda sarkaaya,

Tez baarish me usne

Shabnam ki uss boond ko patte se girta paaya!

Uss ek lamhe me aisa khauf dil pe chaaya,

Use khone ke khayal se ruh yun khap-khapaya,

Tab ehsaas hua woh zaroori hain jeene ke liye,

Tab yeh anubhuti dil me ghar kar gaaya!


Aage waqt aur kismat gawa hain

Woh kahan se kahan pahunche!

Waaqif nahi they jo pehle

apne jeevan ke berang dhang se

Pyaar ke bandhan se

rangon se aaj waaqif ban gaye!


Der se hi sahi par use uss jannat ki pehchaan mili

Aur phir tha ek lamba kathin raasta aur atal ladaai!

Thaamke uska haath, uske sheetalta aur prem se himmat jutaai

Usme aag aur barsaat ko apni baaton ke hoslon se yunhi jagayi

Sang chale ek hi path aur manzil ke hamrahi!


Poochoge usse toh aaj woh kahega aur sweekarega iss sach ko - usne apne liye ek aalaukik heera nasamajh duniya ke nakaare paksh se dhoondhi aur hamesha ke liye uss bandhe phir bhi aazad panchi ko apne prem ke pinjre me qaid kar liya. Aaj woh uski aankhon me dekhke kahega, poori duniya ke saamne kahega, use apne liye jannat ka ek bhaag mil gaya hain. Woh maila chaand mil gaya hain jo maila sirf duniya waalon ki nazar me hain kyunki uske liye toh woh daag sirf uski kurbaaniyon aur sangharshon ke chin hain!


ENGLISH VERSION:


The translation cannot be done word to word else the English version won't really be even a bit poetic to read. I have tried my best to make it as poetic as possible. They may not rhyme at places though😅


Ink from pen

Rays of rising sun

Light of truth

These were what filled his life .

And then one day

He met someone.

Unbeknownst to him,

A new ray entered his life

A different shade coloured him

Adding to this collection of colours!


The fragrance of soil

The ambience of village which settled akin to peace in his heart

A smile that bloomed on his lips

In just a few meetings, she stealthily entered his heart


Oblivious was he to that fresh breeze

Which has flowed in to subtly change his monotonous life

Amidst the heat of zeal and vigour

Who is going to be the cool rain showers

Unaware was he of the fragrance of that sandalwood

Which has come to add fragrance to his life

Which has stealthily, unaware of it herself

Has entered his heart


But who has been able to escape fate

Innocent was never a word meant to describe it

And so it burst out akin to storm on their simple lives

Placing the foundation for their story!


Bound were they in a relationship

That fresh breeze on recognition wasn't beloved anymore

Because that crushed self respect just could bring in anger and nothing more!

He couldn't understand the value of the words he used which were hurting her soul

He couldn't comprehend that her brightness was diminishing bit by bit

He couldn't recognise the hurt that soul was going through

He couldn't ever know just how much pain her soft soul was facing

That shining star who's talks brightened the ambience

He couldn't see just how they got shrouded by silence!


And then came the day when fate decided to intervene

It made circumstances such that the blindfold blinding his eyes shifted

In those heavy rains, he witnessed his dew drop almost slip from the leaf

(When the drop hits the ground it splatters and 'dies', that's what is meant here)


In that one moment fear encaged his heart

His entire soul shook with its onslaught

That's when he realised he needed her to live

That's when this realisation made its place in his heart


Fate and time are witness to what happens ahead

To where they have reached and from where

For the ones who were unaware what colours their world lacked

To the ones who have together in their world, many colours unraveled


Albeit late still he recognised his heaven

Which was followed with a long path and an inevitable battle

Holding her hands, he derived strength from her gentle yet deep love

Explored her elements and motivated them

Together they walk - the companions of the same path and destination!


Today if you ask him he shall surely accept the truth - he has got for himself a unique and special diamond from the backgrounds of the ones whom society degrades each time and has caged that bound yet free bird aka her in his love and heart forever! Today he shall say looking into her eyes, to the whole world - he has got a slice of heaven for himself. Has got the maligned moon which is maligned only for others because for him the scars on her are the evidences of her sacrifices and struggles!


Love,

PSR

🤗🤗🤗

Beautiful.....

BTW I miss Prakash....

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Posted: 4 years ago
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This is so beautiful and how true that ones perception cannot determine when and whom we learn to love. How pious is his realisation and his yearning of wanting own his truths and live his feelings in her in them.

Holding her hand because he wants too rather than having to makes this little poem so much more one can feel his battles within. I love the warmth and fear it showed in him but most of all it’s like the warrior in him has risen to battle.

Lovely message that the beautiful lay in the beholders eyes and love can never be bothered about what others think it just happens when we least expect it. How amazing is it that it only takes one person to see the value of another that makes it all worth while.


Simply amazing and thanks for the tag. 😊 one cannot help but root for them some more 🤗


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Posted: 4 years ago
#8

Originally posted by: Dreamer007



i simply love your writing and you are very talented plz do keep writing …


Thank you so much ❤️

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Posted: 4 years ago
#9

Originally posted by: raaz19

This is so beautiful and how true that ones perception cannot determine when and whom we learn to love. How pious is his realisation and his yearning of wanting own his truths and live his feelings in her in them.

Holding her hand because he wants too rather than having to makes this little poem so much more one can feel his battles within. I love the warmth and fear it showed in him but most of all it’s like the warrior in him has risen to battle.

Lovely message that the beautiful lay in the beholders eyes and love can never be bothered about what others think it just happens when we least expect it. How amazing is it that it only takes one person to see the value of another that makes it all worth while.


Simply amazing and thanks for the tag. 😊 one cannot help but root for them some more 🤗


So true.

Thank you so much ❤️

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