Wounds - An Udariyaan OS

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Hi friends,


I am new here. I looked into Udariyaan after I got a request for Fatejo OS on Wattpad. The story sounded good (Of course, I am not talking about the current track) and I just know only the storyline & few characters. Since this is an Udariyaan OS, I thought of updating here as well. I don't have much knowledge and hence this OS may lack some character justice. I hope you would still give it a try. Thank you.

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“No, I won’t wear this at the evening function. No way” Tejo shook her head vehemently.

“But, this is good” Jasmine said in a peak voice adamantly.

“I have brought a dress from home. So, no need for this” Tejo stated.

“But I have bought this dress for you. You don’t like it, Tejo?” Jasmine pouted.

"No, believe me, I love it. But I could not wear it today. I will do one thing. I will wear this on your wedding day!" Tejo said with a bright smile to convince her sister.

“No, you are lying. If you can wear it after four days, why not today?” Jasmine shouted angrily and threw the dress on the bed. She walked towards the window and stood facing outside with her hands folded across her chest.

Tejo shook her head in exasperation and went near her younger sister.

“Jasmine…” She called Jasmine and tried to turn her around. But, Jasmine just shrugged off her older sister’s hands off of her shoulders.

Tejo again tried and this time, successfully turned her sister to face her. Jasmine was looking down with a big pout. Tejo cupped her sister's cheeks and tilted upward.

"I truly love the dress. It's very pretty but I can't wear it today because of the blouse design." Tejo said in a gentle voice. Jasmine got confused and rushed towards the bed. She picked the blouse and looked at it carefully. After searching for a solid two minutes, she looked up at her older sister with a raised eyebrow.

"What is wrong with this design? Everything looks intact" Jasmine frowned and held out her hands to show her older sister the front of the blouse.

Tejo sighed heavily and took the blouse from her younger sister's hands.

"The problem is not at the front but at the back." she said, showing the back of the blouse to Jasmine.

“But there is nothing on the backside” Jasmine squealed in confusion.

“Exactly!” Tejo squealed as well, making her younger sister more confused.

Jasmine opened and closed her mouth resembling a fish, like she doesn’t know what to speak.

“It’s fully transparent on the backside” Tejo reasoned.

"So?" Jasmine enquired her older sister. Now it was Tejo's turn to look like a fish.

“Are you afraid that your sasural would not let you wear it?” Jasmine asked.

“No, they are not the problem” Tejo shook her head quickly.

"Then what, Tejo?" Jasmine asked tiredly.

"I don't think Fateh would like it if I wear this today" Tejo bowed down and murmured.

Jasmine smirked at her older sister’s lowered head.

“Why? Do you think he would not find you pretty?” she asked in a sarcastic tone but Tejo started laughing out loud.

"Maybe! But I assume he would be more concerned about his visible marks on my back." Tejo replied in between her laughs making Jasmine gasp in terror.

Jasmine looked like she had been hit by thunder. Her mouth worked on its own.

"Which marks?" she whispered but Tejo was still giggling and hence, didn't notice.

Jasmine grabbed her older sister’s shoulders and started shaking impatiently.

“What do you mean by ‘his marks on your back?” she inquired in a loud voice snapping her older sister back to reality.

“Oops… Did I say that aloud?” Tejo said while blushing red, making her younger sister gasp in shock.

Jasmine quickly turned Tejo and untied her suit’s Dori. Tejo gasped and tried to move away but Jasmine’s hands were working frantically. Within two seconds, she unzipped her older sister’s suit and it was her turn to gasp.

Tejo’s marble back was covered with short black lines. Jasmine peered at it and let out a small gasp again when she realized them as the scratching marks made by nails.

Jasmine slowly reached and touched her sister’s back making Tejo wince. Jasmine eyes teared up on their own.

Tejo turned around clutching her dress and got shocked looking at her younger sister’s state.

“What happened, Jasmine?” Tejo asked, worried but the younger one continued sobbing like a child. When the startled Tejo touched Jasmine’s shoulder lightly, the younger one instantly hugged the older one tightly and started crying louder.

Tejo's heart broke seeing her baby sister in agony. She patted the younger one’s head gently and started murmuring comforting words.

“It’s okay darling. Please don’t worry. I am not hurt. It’s just that…” Tejo stopped in the middle and chewed her lips uncomfortably.

Jasmine disengaged from Tejo and wiped her tears away. She held her elder sister’s hand to her heart.

“I... I am sorry... Tejo. Please... forgive me.” she stammered, confusing her older sister.

“What for?” Tejo asked worriedly. Jasmine blinked rapidly and started looking around the room.

“I am sorry that I overreacted and unzipped your suit.” Jasmine drawled scratching her ear.

“Well, if you really want my forgiveness, you need to do one thing.” Tejo demanded folding her hands across her chest.

“What?” Jasmine asked impatiently.

“Please zip up my suit back for god’s sake” Tejo said in a teasing tone. Tejo started laughing and slapped her younger sister's head lightly. Jasmine smiled back nodding her head.

“Wait Tejo… I will put some cream on your back so that these wounds will disappear soon with no visible marks.” Jasmine said in a gentle tone and Tejo nodded happily.

Jasmine walked to the cupboard and pulled out a cream tube. Once she came back to Tejo, she signaled her older sister to turn around.

Tejo turned her back to Jasmine. Jasmine exhaled in relief and got ready to do the needed task. At that exact moment, the door opened and Fateh walked inside.

He halted in his steps when he noticed his wife standing with bareback and immediately closed his eyes with his palm.

“Sorry Tejo!” he squealed, making the girls turn around. Jasmine rolled her eyes while Tejo blushed.

Jasmine moved near Fateh and stamped his foot with such a force that he almost screamed in pain crouching.

“It’s not like you are seeing her bareback for the first time, anyway.” she snapped with a glare making him gasp.

“Jasmine…” Tejo called her out in a pleading voice and Fateh looked at her shockingly.

Jasmine shook her head in disbelief and walked towards the cupboard again. She pulled out something and came back near Fateh. Fateh was still looking at Tejo and snapped back to reality only after Jasmine grabbed his hand. She opened his palm and placed the cream tube.

“Not my job anymore. You apply medicine for your wife, Fateh JIJU!” She said brightly, making Fateh gasp again.

Quickly moving towards her older sister, she gave her a nail trimmer.

“Please trim your husband’s nails. I could not see you hurt.” Jasmine declared, making the couple blush and then she ran towards the door.

“Wait, Jasmine…” Tejo tried calling her but got interrupted by her younger sister shouting.

“No, I can’t. It’s already late. I need to meet Gippy regarding my passport re-appeal.”

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How was it? I hope you liked it. Please let me know your feedback on the comments below. Thanks in advance and sorry if this was not entertaining enough.


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Posted: 4 years ago
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Damn....I actually liked Jasmine in this😲😲😲

I am shocked.

You made me actually like her teeny weeny bit.

Man...I wish this actually happened. It would fit the characterization of the sisters well😅

But of course....nahi hoga.


Anyway, brilliant write up.


- Niki

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Posted: 4 years ago
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I for a moment thought Jasmine will end up scratching and hurting Tejo more..

Nice change to see a good Jasso here..

Its really good..👏


PS: Good to see a fellow kdrama fan..She Was Pretty..❤️ I am rewatching What’s Wrong With Your Secretary!!! Park Seo Jun!!!

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Posted: 4 years ago
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This is good! So lovely to see Chameli being protective about Tejo for once.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Nicely written. I always thought that somewhere down the lane Jasmin and Tejo would be back to what they were again. But I guess we are not that lucky. Lol

But it is nice to see if this was the story how it would sound.


Please do write more stories on FaTejo if you could.




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Posted: 4 years ago
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Yeah it is pretty good really surprising when I read the line of Jasmin frantically opening her zip i like gayi Bhais pani main and yeh ab khud kya Pura tabela lakar jayegi paani main but as I read further I was like oh Teri yaha toh Jasmin achi hain kahi natak toh Nahi kar rahi but then at the end I was really happy and felt maaza aa gaaya. Felt good to see her actually acting like a sister and not the Mona darling she is on the show. 😊😊😊 plz write more would love to read more of ur works.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Wonderful. Such a light hearted moment. If only we could get this in place of the 💩 we are getting every week.

Jasmin here is so much true to her character that was introduced in the beginning. Sadly...itv main bina vamp ke story hi nahi badti.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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very well written! Loved Jasmine more for a few seconds than I could ever love her while watching the show!

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Originally posted by: mistofshadows

Damn....I actually liked Jasmine in this😲😲😲

I am shocked.

You made me actually like her teeny weeny bit.

Man...I wish this actually happened. It would fit the characterization of the sisters well😅

But of course....nahi hoga.


Anyway, brilliant write up.


- Niki


Thank you so much, Niki 😊 I am glad you liked it. I was very afraid that I may have written something unnatural to the characters.

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Originally posted by: poo_j

I for a moment thought Jasmine will end up scratching and hurting Tejo more..

Nice change to see a good Jasso here..

Its really good..👏


PS: Good to see a fellow kdrama fan..She Was Pretty..❤️ I am rewatching What’s Wrong With Your Secretary!!! Park Seo Jun!!!


Jasso! Of course, that's the nickname. To write this OS, I read the wiki page and saw some weekly rewinds where I learnt the Jasmine's nickname - Jasso. But when I finally started to write this up, I forgot her pet name. Hence, wrote with her original name itself. However, I felt the story was not good enough because sisters talk almost by calling pet names only. Hence, whenever Tejo called Jasmine, it felt so wrong.


Thank you so much 😊 I am glad you liked my OS


Yes, I am a big fan of K-dramas and I love Park Seo Jun, Hwang Jung-eum and many more. I guess I already watched She was pretty at least 20 times now ❤️ 😃

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