NEW DRABBLE : THE SOULFUL TRUST (Rudhita) - Page 4

Originally posted by: listmist

This is brilliant shaheen👍🏼

Love your writing❤️

How I wish the ki episode me bhi aise scenes dikhate cvs😳 do write more shaheen🤗

Haina isiliye hamare stories hi kaafi hai..

Will definitely try to write more yaar. ❤️

Originally posted by: rmahi25

ohhooo ye end toh tumne BB makers ke tarah kiyaaa🤣🤣....I was like abhi andhi kutaegii!!!!

Firstly,sorry for commenting late😆.Btw loved how you showed Ani being angry still cared for her and fought for her. And meri patni from him is🤪....

Loved it Shaheen❤️

I am glad you liked it Mahi... I wish ke Ani would have handled the situation maturely like this..

Sorry for the late reply... ❤️

Originally posted by: Rudhitafan

Shaheen🤗❤️😙

Love you too much dear.....this drabble made my day..... 😳...I'm so touched you write this on prit and my insistence. ....I'm happy that you write this finally after some time in this forum...and you know what you created it so beautifully🤗❤️

Your vocabulary and screenplay is so so beautiful dear

I loved how you used rishta tera mera as bgm too❤️

Having finished reading this I'm so heartbroken realising some true emotions that we missed in the actual scene in the show🥺💔:

A concerned as well as strong elder sister who has guys to speak up for her sister💔

A supportive friend who could have helped ani in catching briju and a caring brother in law who could have wished for Bon's well being .....both these in saurabh💔

Pati babu who could have been worried for bon for her injuries at first place above interrogating her ignoring his anger💔

Pati babu who fumed in anger on hearing allegations against his wife💔

Damn 🥺

But, here the wolf ran off with lioness only to fall prey for Lion's wrathful vengeance.omg.... what a line yaar

Brijwasi is unknown of the perspicacity of little divinity Bondita...even ani is unaware of this yaar

"Chalo Bondita, sambhal ke tum aage aage chalo aur mein tumhare peeche peeche chalunga. Agar zara bhi pareshani ho toh mujhe batana ah Bondita",i badly want this in the show....can we rewrite the episode😭?

How I wish your ani was present in the original episode too...😭💔

Curious to know how bon came to know of her pati didi being busy didi😉

Shaheen I love how you used simile here

Ani as lion

Bonditha as lioness

Briju as the wolf

Ani ready of his scavenging 👏👏👏

In love with your vocabulory so much dear🤗❤️

So sad we missed such a dignified way of ani to handle this issue🥺

Thank you so much for this drabble dear.

Write more often now. ...I'm always eaget to read your creations

I am glad you liked it and I could keep up to your expectations.

Your review on my short work made me so emotional and heart touching re.

Yep, they failed to Penn down all emotions actually.. That's why I tried to involve in each and every character here...

@U Thanks Krishna.. That's my favorite line too..

I wish we can rewrite the episode...😭

Thank you so much for this review Krishna... Readers like you always encourages the minimal writers like us to write more... Thanks yaar🤗

Will definitely write more👍🏼

Originally posted by: --Lalz--

Shaheen 🤗

You penned it just the way we wanted to be shown in show

It's just amazing ❤️

Why did you ended it on cliffhanger? 😭 say that you going to continue ⭐️

If yes, then update it soon 😆

Thank you so much for the comment❤️.

Will definitely continue it as a Os sometimes later...😊👍🏼

Originally posted by: Arpita_De

This beautiful piece of writing is like "Thandak to the kalijas" of ours The 2nd best part was you gave the good for nothing couple a task to do and they did it 😃 the best part was obviously our RudhIta ❤️ You have merged Ani's concern and his disappointment really well like he was hurt about Bon not trusting him enough but his concern overpowered that 👏 Overall superb 👍🏼

I am greatly obliged and glad you liked it.

Thank you so much... Getting a comment from such a great writer is always a bliss🤗

The mentions regarding every characters were savage 😁

Nice & very dhamakedar story 😀

👏👍🏼🤗

Diiiiiiiiii you ended on a cliffhanger. It was amazing as usual. Please update soon. I getting very impatient omg.

Originally posted by: Home786

Drabble : THE SOULFUL TRUST

Heyyy!! Here is the short drabble for you all guys. It's just my imagination how the story/scene would have played in a dignified way. Thanks to @Prit and @Krishna for the encouragement, finally made me write this after months in this forum. Please comment on your valuable reviews here guys.

It's the third day of Brijwasi in Tulsipur where he is planning to take Roy Chaudhry's Bahu Bondita along with him to another place. The little kid doesn't know his greedy and ravenous intentions. She came to his Ashram by once again reclining her Pati babu's trust which is burning her inwards. But the little kid is helpless bound to her sister's promise. Brijwasi, the cunning gluttonous man is waiting to swindle Tulsipur's innocents with his duplicitous acts. But to his, unfortunate the Barrister Anirudh Babu reached there to uncover his Janus - faced before everyone. He is really angry and disgusted with him as he is the one who seized his best friend Mini's liveliness in eyesight. People opted not to trust him as they are blindfolded with their extreme superstitious beliefs. But, Barrister Anirudh is stern with his choices and words of explicit. It's like Lion is roaring before he chases the most cynical predator. This Brijwasi doesn't know the consequences of hurting a lioness of a roaring Lion. Knowing the threat of commination from people, he decided to run off from the place along with Bondita. But the girl is so smart to ascertain his intentions. She felt shattered and embarrassed to break the man's trust whom she worships. The poor little kid shedded drops of her tears after encountering her foolishness to believe such a murderous person. She battled to make her way out of his trap but of no use he hauled her belligerently making her unconscious. The lioness felt unconscious while roaring out helplessly.

Finally, Anirudh breaks the impedes of people stopping him to enter the wolf's den. But, here the wolf ran off with lioness only to fall prey for Lion's wrathful vengeance. When he entered, Brijwasi already scurried from there with her wife approaching a Bullock Cart to move towards the Jungle. Anirudh started to scavenge the place but nothing found as a disappointment. Everyone looked detached and bewildered with the Brijwasi's betrayal and disloyalty.

"Bondita, ke khanghan", saying that Sampoorna picked up the solo golden bangle, the kid used to wear. " Bondita, kahan hai, kahin woh khatre mein toh nahi, kahan meri Bondita ", blabbered Sampoorna again in tears. " Yeh kya keh rahi aap? Ab iss mein Bondita kahan se aa gayi?, interrogated Anirudh with a stern clueless expression. "Main puchta hoon Anirudh babu '', said in an extremely low voice. " Yeh kya keh rahi ho tum Sampoorna?, exclaimed Saurabh. Everyone along with Anirudh is looking at her for a reply. But before she could spell out anything, Anirudh heard the noise of a bullock cart, and immediately he peeped out of the window. He sees Brijwasi trying to escape from the place in haste. " Ae rukh, rukh Brijwasi, ek kadam bhi aage mat badana", said Anirudh in anger. But that selfish man started to move out from there giving a devilicious smirk to Barrister Babu and "Main tumhari hi biwi ko tumhare hi saamne se le jaa raha hoon aur tum Kuch nahi kar paoge", by expressing evilful thought in mind. Anirudh sprint down stairs to chase him up. " Main tumse baad mein baat karta hoon Sampoorna", saying this Saurabh followed Anirudh. To much surprise, Munshi too followed them. Anirudh and Saurabh are racing towards the Jungle.

On the way towards the sunless and crepuscular Jungle, Bondita gains consciousness gradually while Brijwasi makes his way faster and faster to decamp the place. " Brijwasi Babu kahan le jaa rahe ho aap mujhe? Mujhe mere Pati babu ke paas jaana hai. Chodo mujhe.. Agar unneh pata chalega na toh chodenge nahi aapko. Dande maarte waqt ghinte nahi hai mere pati babu", said Bondita in a woozy voice. "Yeh ladki chup kar. Ab chup chap chalo mere saath, jaise main kehta hoon waisa karo. Warna bahut bura hoga tumhare saath. Samjhi"… Brijwasi shuts her up.

Brijwasi is unknown of the perspicacity of little divinity Bondita. He is galloping the cart faster. Unknown to his knowledge, Bondita took a silver thaal near her filled with jewels and coins. She slowly moved the accessories from thaal and took it in her hand, hitting on the head of Brijwasi hardly leaving him to tremble for a few minutes. She got down taking her Kaka Sasurji's ornaments/assets and ran off from there hitting Brijwasi leaving him in pain. Brijwasi stood up and started to chase Bondita " Tujhe main chodunga nahi ladki. Mujhse hoshiyaari, bahut mehengi padegi Tumhe "...

Bondita is running in haste while stumbling with bare feet in a thorny jungle. Her only motive is to reach RC mansion safely to expose Brijwasi. " Pati Babu, Pati Babu Kahan ho aap? Pati Babu bachalo mujhe. Bacchalo apni Bondita ko", she is uttering continuously as a stance to keep her safe in a lonely jungle. She is running without stopping due to her fortune, her luck hits again with her savior. She got bumped with none other her Pati Babu. "Bondita, tum yahan? Kya kar rahi ho yahan? Kaise pahunchi yahan tum woh bhi akeli?", he uttered in his usual angry tone.. Saurabh is stood beside him silently as a spectator.

" Pehle aap yeh pakadiye. Main batati hoon aapko sab sach uss Brijwasi babu ke baare mein. Ek dum dhust hai dhust. Bahut jhooth bola hai unnoh ne sabse. Dekhiye mein Kaka sasurji ke saare dhaan dakshna kiye hue cheeze bhi wapas le aayi. Main hi thi jo shlok aur mantar padha karti thi. Bahut sataya woh Brijwasi babu ne mujhe. Bhagte hue aayi hoon main yahan", said Bondita in fumbled voice with tears of disappointment in eyes…

" Bondita, tum mujhe pehele yeh batao ke tum jaaya karti thi wahan? Woh bhi Mujhse jhooth bol ke, ah?, questioned Anirudh in most angered tone. He also ordered Saurabh to chase Brijwasi and catch him to summon before villagers. Abiding to his orders, Saurabh went to chase Brijwasi. "Bondita main tumse kuch puch raha hoon, Batao mujhe kyun jhooth bola mujhse? ", said Anirudh.

"Pati babu, woh main", she is about to utter something but she felt dizzy and stumbled a bit. " Bondita, kya hua tumhe? Theek toh tum? Yahan baitho, dhyaan se. Sambhal ke Bondita", exclaimed Anirudh in a worrisome voice. He helped her to sat under the tree for sometime. He knelt and bowed down to her height looking at her with deep stress. Bondita again initiated to speak out but Anirudh interrupted and stopped her to emote. " Bondita, halat dekhi hai tumne apni. Aisa halat mein kya baat karna hai tumhe? Chup raho aur jo bhi baat karna Ghar jaane ke baad kar lena samjhi. Lekin tumne mujhse jhooth bol ke acha nahi kya Bondita. Bahut dil dukhaya hai tumne mera. Ek bar bolke toh dekha hota tumhe aisi musibat mein padne deta kya mein Bondita? Mujhpe itni bhi bharosa nahi tumhe? ".. He is about to continue but Saurabh came there dragging Brijwasi by his collar. Munshi has been watching all these scenario from distance and ran to create hell out of heaven before Villagers and Roy Chaudhry's. Anirudh ordered Saurabh to summon guilty Brijwasi before everyone. He will follow him back along with Bondita. " Saurabh le jao isse and gaun walon ke hawale kardo. Ab joh dhand dena hai woh denge. Main Bondita ko leke peeche peeche aata hoon"...

"Chalo Bondita, sambhal ke tum aage aage chalo aur mein tumhare peeche peeche chalunga. Agar zara bhi pareshani ho toh mujhe batana ah Bondita", he uttered with displeasure yet with great concern. ( Rasmon ka shor bada hai plays in bg) . They both walked slowly yet together to reach destination.

Both Anirudh and Bondita reached the RC haveli where people were gathered. Binoy and Mini are standing together giving a villainous smirk. Munshi is smiling inwardly as if he created a victory out of charishma. "Anirudh, suna tumne kya keh raha yeh dhongi Brijwasi. Pata nahi kya kya keh raha hamari Bahu ke baare mein. Suno uske muh se", said Trilochan Kaka by throwing Brijwasi in Anirudh's foot..

Anirudh helped him to get up. He sternly asked him "Bolo kya kehna hai tumhe apne aapko bachane ke liye ? Kya kehna tumhe Bondita ke baare mein? ", where Binoy and Mini is almost ready to cherish the sequence of this drama. "Main kya kahoon? Puchiye apni patni se ke Kaise iss ne", Kaka interrupted Brijwasi "izzat, izzat se baat karo, jisse ke baare tum keh rahe ho woh hamari Bahu hai ek bhi galat shabd nahi sunenge hum"...

" Theek hai Trilochan Babu hum toh izzat dedenge aapki bahu ko lekin kya samaaj de payega yeh jaan ke woh meri saathi hai. Ab sabko bewakoof bane ne meri madad apki bahu ne. Apke vishwas ke najaayaz faida maine nahi balke apki bahu ne uthaya hai. Apne faida ke liye aapki bahu ne mera faida uthaya hai, haan", uttered Brijwasi focusing Anirudh. The little girl is heart broken hearing his useless and unfamiliar talks with tears. " Ab hoga asli tamasha jisse gurur maanta tha Anirudh wahin aaj uski sharmindagi ka karaan ban gayi", says Mini with villy smirk sighing towards Binoy.

" Kya kaha tumne faida uthaya Bondita ne", saying this Anirudh slapped Brijwasi. " Faida, dhoka, saathi ", he slapped him again ans again thrice consquetively before everyone. " Himmat kaise huwi Tumhari aisi baatein meri patni ke baare mein bolne ki? Kya soch ke tumne yeh sab bola ah? Sharam nahi aati ek bacchi ko uss ke marzi ke khilaaf istemaal karna? Kya socha tumne ke tum kuch bhi anab shanab bologe aur main chup chap kadhe sunta rahunga", he literally devastated in anger and asked Saurabh to handover him to police immediately. While Mini and Binoy get dejected with Anirudh's witty and unexpected response.

" Kaka yehi hai woh aadmi jisne ab sabko dhokha diya, aapke vishwas ke galat istemaal kiya. Isiliye kehta tha mat bharosa kijiye aise andhvishvaas pe. Bondita ke saath hi nahi balke dekhiye uski pari didi ka kya haal kar diya hai uss dhongi Brijwasi ne? ", explained Anirudh in an extremely dejected tone..

" Pari Didi nahi, Buri Didi hai woh bahut buri", exclaimed Bondita in tears rolling down her tears where everyone along with Mini gets shocked. The story freezes on Anirudh, Bondita and Mini's faces.

Ok its good.. 💗💓💖💞

"Tum thik to ho..sambhal k chalo' evoked very cutely noty thots 😃

More more more plz

Originally posted by: Mlodhia

The mentions regarding every characters were savage 😁

Nice & very dhamakedar story 😀

👏👍🏼🤗

Originally posted by: briti_asfiya

Diiiiiiiiii you ended on a cliffhanger. It was amazing as usual. Please update soon. I getting very impatient omg.

Yes I ended it in a cliffhanger as it's getting longer...

Sure will try to update.. ❤️🤗