Sameer-Naina SS- Unanticipated Moves (Part-10 Updated)PG-44

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Samaina_1990

@Samaina_1990

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Posted: 6 years ago

#331

Dearest Minu!!!

Hats off to you for this incredible story! Matlab I was getting the Sherlock and Agatha vibes..such a fast paced one...so glad you didn't drag it too long- an art many of us, including me need to learn from you!

It's a feat to be able to write extensively yet not loose the rhythm of the tale...but it is equally important to be able to put across one's point in as concise a manner as possible- something I really think is important for a story in suspense/ thriller genre...and a thing at which one of my most favorite authors ever (J K Rowling) couldn't succeed- I'm in love with the way she wrote Harry Potter...but somehow her unnecesaary detailing and verbose content put me off her crime ventures.

So take a bow my love for you've nailed it!

Also, I beg your pardon for being one of the irregular readers and reviewers where this story was concerned...but I hope you will forgive me considering my tight schedule!

Coming to the story- I actually re-read some of the parts before I forayed into the new updates!

The first and foremost which came to my mind was the kiss!

Wow! 👏 The snowcaps melting, rivers gushing and separating and finally melding into one was sublime! It shows that you are an ardent student of literature! I loved it! No vulgarity- no more descriptions than what your readers need...gratifying indeed!

And now coming over to the mystery! Is this Vikas an idiot? Matlab camera conscious nahi hai couple in love...how dare he intrude into someone's privacy- such a brainless creature- apt for Sunaina (though she's a much better soul in your story than in the show)...matlab yaar pictures click ki to ki...delete bhi karne ki responsbility lo na...what if the pictures fell into the wrong hands? It is so risky! Khair der aaye durust aaye- help to kar di to nail down Kartik!

Sameer Sherlock Maheshwari ne dho daala...kya speech di...kya gaana gaaya...and Naina of your story is confident...I really liked the way she was wondering if it was really wrong...and told the same to her chachiji! Agar show ki Naina hoti to kya hota- behtar hoga na hi kuch bolein!

The ordeal in principal ma'am's room...😵 My bechara dearies...wo bhi parents ke saamne kiss pakda jaana aur wo neck pe kiss to kya se kya hi lag gaya hoga sabko! Dusht Kartik! Isko sabak milna chahiye...acha hua Priyank aur Sunaina bhi sahi hain idhar!

I'm impressed with the way you introduced new twists and turns and slowly unfolding them bit by bit...again something I need to learn from you!

But what happened to Naina- I hope she isn't going to leave Sameer!

Eagerly waiting!!

Once again! Congratulations for writing a masterpiece of suspense on the forum!

Love it to the core!

PS: Deri ke liye khed hai!

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Shreya

@PehliDafaHai

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Posted: 6 years ago

#332

So, it was Kartik all along. He was in top of my suspect list and I feel like I have succeeded too. 😆

Ved is innocent but, still, I don't like him. I just don't know why. Because, we come across boys like him so much.

I liked the character of Vikas, he came clean and helped Sameer in his plan but still it annoyed me a little, how can someone photograph a couple's private time?! Ugh.

Sunaina, for the first time, looked sweet to me. She is in her own world but I guess, that's better when you have cunning fox like Kartik before you. Speaking of Kartik, his condition in the room where he got exposed...I was whistling and hooting, kya watt lagaya hai! By spoiling others life, one can never lead a good one. He deserved all the punishments and he lost his genuine friends too and he is hated by the college now.

What is going on in Naina's mind?! Why did she say that?! You just closed a suspense and now, you opened one too. 😆

Minu Di, you are doing a very good job with this one! Update soon! 🤗