Beyond Investigation (Ep. Name : Behrupiya)...(New Story@page 48) - Page 35

Originally posted by: CIDlover-01

My cursor stopped working all of a sudden. So, here I come with the rest of the replies.

Okays doll, so here comes the feedback of the seventh story, present on page no. 28... 😊

Thanks for telling. I had to go back and check which story it is...😆

My feedback usually happens to be long, hope you'll bear with me... 😉

I absolutely looovve long feedbacks. So no worries; feel free to make it as long as you like😃

Well, I really LOVED the way you portrayed Abhijeet sir in the room, lying in the bed, I really could see that lean and tired Abhijeet sir present there, still trying to look composed though... ⭐️

The starting conversation between Abhijeet sir and ACP sir was really full of respect, care and concern, loved that obedient officer, especially that call of "Sir", and then Abhijeet sir asking ACP sir about asking the doctor to do the further treatment at home, that was really sweet... 😳

And then the fear Abhijeet sir was having from himself for facing his own mother, really touching, you indeed did justice while explaining his feelings and worry... ⭐️ I always enjoy reading that mother-son relationship but unfortunately, there are very few writers who have touched this topic, so thank you baitu for writing something so beautiful on it... 👏

I enjoy these stories a lot myself but have only my own story to read, unfortunately. I don't know one single story written on this theme except this one and one by Vis di.

The way you showed Abhijeet sir slowly getting comfortable with his mother, his mother giving him the due space by not acting overwhelmed and then her smooth departure, after listening to that call of "Maa" from her son's mouth, just wonderful... 👏 Iss py tou aap k liye aik tight wala hug bhi hai... 🤗

Um...she actually left after a few months after he called her maa for the first time. That time she only fell unconscious. Anyways, here comes your return hug...BIG one for a big review🤗

Daya sir's supporting role towards both Abhijeet sir's mother and Abhijeet sir, thumbs-up for that... 👍🏼

Haan unka role kam ker diya na maine...khush to nahi honge mujhse aap😆😆

Then the ending, the way Abhijeet sir handled himself after his mother's demise, that composed, strong and focused officer, I could really imagine him entering inside the Bureau with all that seriousness on his face, oh man I just love him, hehe... Awesome explanation guriya, of everything, I loved Abhijeet sir there, beautifully presented by you... 👏 👏

Oh yes, that tough, dashing, angry young avatar...so many people love and miss that.

Khush raho bchcha and keep on writing such beautiful stories for us... 😃

Will try my best to come up with something. Thanks once again for taking time out to read another of my stories and giving your feedback on it 😛

Take care, may Lord bless you...

Stay safe... 😊😊

Originally posted by: CIDlover-01

Hey bchcha, I am still here, hehe... 😆

I just read your reply to Krittika and instantly thought to take an advantage from this opportunity...😉

Well have you seen the episode aired on 29th September 2018, under the name of "Radioactive"...? If yes then Okay, if No, then Not Okay, hehehe... 😆 😛

If you feel comfortable, then I am having some ghissa-pitta idea, but I can't help sharing it, if you feel Okay for giving it a try then, I would love to read it and if not, then too, I love you and love reading your other projects... 😳

But the thing is, I want some ONLY DUO dose on that episode, no ACP sir please, as I am angry from him over that episode,,, 😉 😉

Plot is, Abhijeet sir is indeed really angry or say frustrated over Daya sir for tricking him, going alone, not picking the calls and then giving up in the end... (Though I really loved Abhijeet sir there, the way he snubbed him, telling that he can do it, hehe, so beautiful... ❤️) And Daya sir is trying to take "Maafi" from the elder one but this time the elder one is not so easy... You can either make it serious or funny, but only DUO please, no ACP sir... 😛

[P.S.You can put the reference from that old episode too, in which Daya sir took the nuclear bomb alone in that boat... (Sorry baitu, I am really really bad in remembering episodes' names...)]

I don't know how much successful I remained in explaining the idea, and yeah doll, if you don't feel like writing on the plot, feel free to tell me, I won't mind, pakka... 😊😊

Okay, so tata bye bye for now...

Good night.. 😊

Originally posted by: CIDlover-01

Okays, so here I am with the next story's feedback, present on page no. 33, under the name of "Guilt"... 😊

The starting frustrated dialogue and then coming up the dull-toned response, very catchy dear... 👍🏼 Abhijeet sir's reaction listening to that reply and instantly getting soft and trying to make the younger one understand that things have changed for good, very nicely shown... ⭐️

The time spent in ACP sir's cabin, the whole explanation about the current situation and then linking it with the past and then the way of how DUO decided to deal with that past experience, very realistic approach... 👏

Then the talking without speaking, DUO are famous for, loved it yar... 😃 And after that the smooth drifting of Daya sir in the past... 👍🏼

Enjoyed thoroughly the past bond between DUO, their convo., Abhijeet sir as a teacher and mentor for Daya sir, those whole tips, guidance, that junior-senior relationship, beautifully expressed sweetheart... 👏

That scene of red-angry Abhijeet sir breaking into laughter with Daya sir, presenting his fear from the former's anger, really sweet moment Boss, that brought a smile on my face too... 😳

I had to go back and read this scene as I couldn't remember properly what I had written. Since I didn't read the whole story, it seemed like a scene with the present day Abhijeet...a small peek in the future perhaps.Those DUO car scenes are quite famous na...😆😆 Oh wow, now I'm commenting on my own story. Kya hoga mera!

Hahaha, well one thing I really enjoyed it, Daya sir being junior always look up to both seniors for help and guidance but Abhijeet sir always remained successful in analyzing the situation in the best possible way, giving ACP sir opportunity to re-think on his ideas... And guess, these are the hard-feelings ACP sir carrying in his heart since then and taking revenge now, hehehehehe... 😆 😛 Though that really shows how much big PANKHA you are of Abhijeet sir... 😉 😉

Can't deny that. Though FW initially characterized Abhijeet as the most skilled, intelligent officer of the team too. And they also showed him making plans and ACP agreeing and acting on those plans. The first example that comes to mind is of Stolen Dynamite episode. He wasn't even a part of the team then, but still ACP trusted his skills. Being the PANKHA I am, I just take it a step farther. You can't blame me for that 😉

That hesitation from asking Abhijeet sir about his personal life and the same evening, getting his wish answered by god was really cute and Abhijeet sir, inviting him at home and introducing him with his mother, that whole scenario was beautiful... ⭐️

This was actually inspired by the fact that all the CID fans are too curious to know more about the actor AS because he is the most private man on the team. Only in recent years did we get even a small glimpse in his personal life, and that too didn't come through him but his younger brother.😛

Then that whole case scene, that ended into such a horrible result, thumbs-up for that baitu, all those dialogues in the Bureau, the exchange of thoughts between the seniors, the junior's curiosity, Abhijeet sir's doubt on his own informer but still going there, though ACP sir denying in front of Abhijeet sir but allowing after he left, found really full of care and concern, such a love-filled moment... ⭐️

Again ACP's reaction was inspired from a few of the older day's episodes. Remember him saying "Just for the sake of the case, I can't sacrifice you." in the first kidney racket case? 😛

Whole that accident scene, you really brought back that whole scene yar, beautiful presentation... 👏

Then Abhijeet sir in the hospital, his treatment, Daya sir's feelings, his frustration on doctors, the helplessness, shock, guilt... 👍🏼

Abhijeet sir's condition after gaining back conscious was very well explained, his fear, that blank and confused him sitting on the hospital bed, then frustration on asking him to remember something at home, all these moments, very caringly addressed... 😃

The moment Abhijeet sir's mother came to know the truth about her son and wished it to be some prank done by him, really heart-touching moment yar, I just loved it... 👏

Daya sir's increasing guilt seeing Abhijeet sir's condition and comparing it with the old one, listening to his co-workers comments behind his back, his efforts to console Abhijeet sir's mother, ACP sir's softened attitude towards him after the happening, all these moments were taken care of nicely and maturely... 👍🏼

And finally Abhijeet sir returned to Bureau... 😃 I am equally happy as my Daya sir... 😉 Enjoyed the way you have crafted whole that scene, showing Abhijeet sir's observing nature and his strong approach towards life, and very well thought of my cutie pie, A teacher is always a teacher... 👍🏼

And then the winding up of the story, with DUO's cute loving moments was like some fresh breather for me Boss, just love seeing my DUO like that... 😳

Raaz ki baat batau? That last scene in the present time is my personal favorite in this story😛

Enjoyed it thoroughly dear, thank you for your this loving effort... 👏👏

Thank you so much for this LONG feedback. I so love it when you discuss every single thing you liked. That you payed attention to the smallest of details. Thank you so much for that!😳

Wish you a safe life guriya,

Good night... 😊

Originally posted by: CIDlover-01

Hi doll, here is the feedback of "Flashback", present on page no. 37... 😊

Well firstly, thumbs-up for choosing this episode to write on, as it is one of the favorite episodes of mine... 😃

Mine too..!! Can't count how many times I have watched it..😛

The starting was really sweet, DUO wishing each other, good wali night, hehe, so sweet... 😳

I really loved the idea of Daya sir not going behind Abhijeet sir and giving him the due space...👍🏼

Thanks...I really like space in every relationship but I had thought that some people may think that Daya should have gone behind him. It's good to know everyone liked this approach too. You too.😳

Very beautifully explained the whole thing about the letter and the recognition of the hand-writing by all three, and then the upsetting reason, I can really see Abhijeet sir standing there, denying to recognize that girl, and later the doctor's reaction after treating Survi, Boss you have really brought back the episode in front of my eyes, and love you for this... 👏

Thanks again. I just had to add that scene about handwriting recognition and further getting it checked from an expert. As much as I like that scene between Trio, it always bother me how they seemed to think it was Abhijeet's love letter just because the name was Abhijeet. It could have been a different Abhijeet na...

That whole thing of Abhijeet sir's surrendering his efforts to sleep and remembering all about those sweet sweet acts of him... (As I really found it immensely sweet, imagining Abhijeet sir, sitting on his writing table and in the light of the table lamp, writing a special letter for someone special, having that beautiful shy grin on his face, and as soon as he cutely draw that heart at the end of the page, the room door opens and Abhijeet sir's mother, standing there... And what's that, our mister serious is reading a crime thriller, well he is indeed a sharp shine, isn't he...) 😆 😆

Ah...imagination on the run. Don't worry, happens frequently with me too...😆😆

But you can write something with that thought...a small story perhaps?😉

That loving care-filled talk between Abhijeet sir and ACP sir was very smoothly narrated, ACP sir's concern for his right-hand man, one can easily sense that the way you have portrayed it, love it yar... 👏

Yeah, the man never shows concern or affection directly...always has to act strict. Remember that little scene at the end of the bomb robbery episode where he looked restless when a call came from the hospital and had tears in eyes when he saw Abhijeet and Daya unharmed when he thought them dead. And then all he had to say was "Ek aur bomb mila hai...tum dono ko hi diffuse kerna hai" 🤣 If I ignore a few recent years episodes, I really love his character. Both my mum and I love Abhi-Daya and Abhi-ACP jugalbandi. 😳😳

That next morning's sun rising and completely opposite feelings of our DUO regarding the arriving of the morning, very thoughtful... 👍🏼

DUO's convo. while going towards the Bureau, the way Abhijeet sir was worried and somehow confused for Survi and Daya sir explaining or say consoling him in this regard, found it very soft and soothing... ⭐️

That last scene between Abhijeet sir and Survi, really very heart-touching or say, heart-breaking yar, both in the episode and in your story, but still, I loved it at both places... The feelings of Abhijeet sir, the look both on his face and so many unsaid words in his eyes, man that shook of his head and later that injured smile on his face, no words to praise this all... 👏 👏

Apke comment ne mujhe wo episode yaad dila diya. Now I'm going to go and play it again...

The winding up of the story with Pari's love-filled kiss on Abhijeet sir's cheek, spot on Boss, don't know why but it suddenly remembered of Sia, the time when she pulled his cheeks and that beautiful shine in his eyes and lovely smile on his face, which both were missing here... You just nailed the ending sweetheart... ⭐️ 👏

Thanks...Yes, now I will have to watch that one as well.😆😆

Thank you bchcha, keep writing and keep rocking like this, love you... ⭐️

Thank you so much once again...you really showed your speed with this marathon story reading you are currently occupied with. When I'm at it, let me tell you that I am also trying to come up with something on your idea. But I'm planning a serious one since GD already wrote a funny one, alright?😳

And then I have a few more ideas😈

Wish you a safe and a happy happy life, take care... 😊