AkhIra OS: Meri Hanitarak honey

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Background: Akhilesh & Ira came home after truck pulling competition.

Ira to Ballav Desai

Kea aap hamesha Akhilesh ko gawar gawar bolte rehte hai. Thik hai agar usne jyada parhai likhai nehi ki hai to. Par uske jo values hai na Pappa jo life ko dekhne ka najariya hai, jaise wo riston ko sambhalna janta hai na aisa to bahat parhe likhe log bhi nehi kar pate hain. Aur aapke jankari ke lie bata du maine Akhilesh ka enrolment correspondence studies ke lie kar dia hai, aur wo kafi man laga ke mehnat bhi kar raha hai, and in few years he will hold some basic educational degree ta ke koi bhi use gawar bolke tana na de sake.

Aapko pata hai main jo aapni parhai continue kar pa rahi hu ... ye jo last exam me maine first position achieve kia usme usne kitni madad ki hai meri, raat raat bhar meri night duty ke time pe bahar baitha raha aur subhe ghar pahuch ke morning walk ke bahane banata raha aapni ma se, mere lie kitne jhooth bole kabhi to mujhe mandir bejhta hai kabhi to pandit ji se jhoot bulwa kar moti ba ko har din lambe samay ke lie mandir bhejta rehta hai, jisne jindegi me kabhi aapne ma se jhooth nehi bola, wo meri parhai ke lie itne jhooth bole aur mera itna sath dia ke aap soch bhi nehi sakte.

Uske pas naukri nehi hai lekin hamesh kuch na kuch chhota mota kam karke hum dono ke khane pine ka kharcha deta hai oh moti ba ko, itna self respect hai usme.

Aj aapko pata hai aapki galatfaimio ke wajah se kitni bari accident hote hote reh gayi. Agar main sahi time pe nehi pahuchti to na jane kea ho jata, ek truck ka bumper uske sar pe lag jata aur aise head injury ke baad to insan ka bachna karib karib namumkin hota (Ira shivers with the horrifying thought then suddenly she remembers about the injured shoulders of Akhilesh and so much blood was coming out, she thought of checking on Akhilesh, how can he manage on his own as usual he will not ask for any help). Pappa main abhi ati hu, aake baat karti hu aap se. par itna jaror kahungi jo bhi kia wo thik nehi kia aapne.

Ira was looking for Akhilesh in Pushpa's room and Akhilesh was standing there beside the window and keep thinking about Ira's word which Ira said about Akhilesh just few minutes back and he was smiling all alone and feeling happy. Ira came there and watching him with curiosity, she was thinking how come an injured man can smile about something so innocently, she came in front of Akhilesh and Akhilesh was so engrossed with Ira's thought that he was keep looking at her lovingly, then keep a hand in Ira's chick and says

A: Dhanyabad ...

I: hain ... kis lie

Akhilesh came to his senses and removed the hand.

A: aap ne jo kuch bhi kaha mere bare me ... aap kitna achha bolti hai ... jab aap bolti hai to lagta hai ful jhar rahe ho, kano me misri si ghol

I: Akhilesh ... kea bole rahe ho ...

Akhilesh keep looking at her mesmerizingly, Ira avoided eye contact, now a days Ira is noticing Akhilesh's glances, stares have changed to something new, what is that and why is that ... she waves infront of him...

I: truck ka bumper tumhare sar pe laga nehi to ye haal hai .. socho agar o lag jata to tumhara kea hota

A: Truck ka bumper kea chhese hai pura truck bhi uske agge fail hai ... jo rog mujhe laga hai uske agge to pura jaha fail hai...

I: huh ... kea bol rahe hai mujhe kuch samjh nehi aa raha hai... chalo kurta utaro...

A: Abhi yeha... kyun

I: Tumhari aarti utarni hai .. itna mahan kam jo karke aye ho... tumhare kandhe ke jakham dekhne hai.

Then she helped him, make him sit, now he is bare bodied and Ira is checking the injury Akhilesh was saying in mind Arrey ye sab kuchh bhi nahi hai... hum pure fit hai... chahe to abhi aapko god me utha ka sare jaha ghuma sakte hai...

I: Aisa sochna bhi mat...

A (low tone): arrey bap re main to man me bol raha tha Ira ji ne kaise sun lia

I: kea suna... kuchh sunna bhi nehi hai... tumhara wohi ghisa pita dialog .. kauno jaroorat nahi hai

Akhilesh relieved.. smiling.. Ira handed a towel and asked Akhilesh to wrap it and they entered in the bathroom, Ira made Akhilesh sit and then with water she was washing Akhilesh's shoulders very gently, the door was open, Ira with her sari folded to avoid water sprinkles, pallu tucked in, hair loosely tied up was looking different to Akhilesh, he was soaking all her beauty with his eyes and thanking god for bringing Ira ji in his life.

Akhilesh felt a few drops of water on his head he looks straight to Ira, her eyes were red and she was crying, actually Ira was feeling very bad & guilty that Akhiesh has to go through all of this because of her & her father.

A: aap ro kahe rahe hai... humko aap ke ankho pe asu dekhna achha nehi lagta hai.

I: meri wajah se fir se tumhe ...

A: aap ke wajah se mujhe 10 lakh rupiya mile aur aap ke wajah se mujhe aap mili... matlab ke ek itni achhi sathi mili humko warna hum to akele hi kat rahe the zindegi

Ira smiles half heartedly but feeling sad ...

A: waise aapko humpe bahat bharosa hai ... aapne apke pitaji se sart laga di hamre upar biswas karke ...

I: tum pe biswas nehi karungi to kispe karungi ...

They both look at each other Ira cant tolerate Akhilesh's intense gaze she lowered her eyes and thinks to herself that she should not make things more complicated its better to share the light hearted friendship only.

A: aap lagta hai humko bahat pasand karte hai ..

I: main to tumko bahat respect karti hu aur pasand bhi ... Aur dekha jae Akhilesh tum to abhi mujhe garibon ke salman khan lag rahe ho ...o o jane jana ... aha aha... koi bhi tum pe fida ho jaye abhi ... par tum to kisi aur ko and Ira made a sad face

A: hum kisi aur ko ... nahi nahi ... ye aap kea bol rahe hai .. aur kiske bare me bol rahe hai... Akhilesh was all worried

I: Kyun hai na woh ... arrey wohi tumhare dil ne jise aapna kaha ...

A: Kaun kaun ..

I: tumhari miss kaddu and Ira ran away laughing.

A: aap ko kea pata hamri lie to aap hi hamri puri sabji mandi hai .. sab kuchh hai ... khali aap humse kabhu ruthiega mat... hamri to jan nikal jati hai... humto bhukh se bin khaye mar jayenge ...

There after Akhilesh came out and Ira applied ointment to his shoulder and Ira was thinking that she should move out of his life asap so that no further harm causes to him because of her, she always remember the fact that she entered as wife of Akhilesh on condition, Akhilesh had no other choice that time other than Ira and Ira don't want Akhilesh to continue the unwanted decision of his life, though she is fully aware of Akhielsh's nature she believes that Akhilesh might never be able to ask her to go out of his life as they are married but ...

And Akhilesh was thinking that I want you in my life permanently then we together will fight any odds which will come our way and celebrate our togetherness with lots of love.

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Penkie06 thumbnail
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Oh my god this is freaking awesome.
Every dialogue of Ira and Akhilesh is beautifully written.

Please continue.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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That's something that we all wanted...Ira and Akhilesh should have had some alone time after the truck fiasco and all the misunderstanding created by her father. Your OS nicely captures the feelings and character of Akhira.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thanks Penfolk & Milky for your comments, glad you like it.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Superb Bon-Bon! 👏 So in character.

This is exactly what should've happened.

Garibon ke Salman Khan' 🤣 Too funny and when Akhilesh thought Ira heard his thoughts 😆 In true MHB style.

This is great. Loved it! Do write more :)
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: InkandFire

Superb Bon-Bon! 👏 So in character.

This is exactly what should've happened.

Garibon ke Salman Khan' 🤣 Too funny and when Akhilesh thought Ira heard his thoughts 😆 In true MHB style.

This is great. Loved it! Do write more :)


Thanks Inka .. so happy you liked it ... hope you can imagine the unique background musics on the scenes 😉.

Actually that day I was disappointed to see that Dr. Ira didn't treat quite injured Gulluda at all. 😕 So ran my imaginary horses 😃
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Bonai


Thanks Inka .. so happy you liked it ... hope you can imagine the unique background musics on the scenes 😉.

Actually that day I was disappointed to see that Dr. Ira didn't treat quite injured Gulluda at all. 😕 So ran my imaginary horses 😃


Same here, even I was expecting IRA to tend to Akhilesh's wounds. Instead of spending some time with Akhilesh, who is wounded physically and mentally, she is spending more time with her pappa and in a split-second she decides to just pack her bags and leave.
Arre Shaadi Ka decision Lene se pehele to pappa ki permission Nahi li...she just acted on her conscience. Toh ab kahaan Gaya Woh conscience ?
IRA comes out to be intelligent but way too impulsive...always jumping to conclusions.

Sutli bomb ki tarah phat ti hi rehti hai

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