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Posted: 7 years ago
ch 9 page 17

Shurid wooah didn't expect Bauji here. But so happy you brought his thought front and center yay!
He failed many many times acting absolutely dumb in front of g3. g3 fooled him with his eyes open and he let her do it - I never could believe how dumb can he get šŸ¤”šŸ˜•šŸ˜†

Prem's conflicting thoughts - happy side and the regretful side shown in parallel is fabulous.
Hey why do you call yourself average writer - this piece of scene is the most difficult!
Do you know ppl never get Prem Juneja - the writers write him as they please and never really pay attention to what exactly he was in the show. It's a very tough task to be honest.

You handled this really very well ā­ļøšŸ‘ I am very proud of you. Of course Prem in the show would never let g3 go to jail ... in your story Prem is quite liberal and so is Heer. That is an advantage for us fans / readers. šŸ˜Ž
Heer is subtle and affectionate so kind of her. šŸ¤—

I wonder what would bauji possibly discuss at dinner table šŸ˜†

Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: AASUS

šŸ¤— YOU are amazing writer. Very detail scenes you wrote on this story - clearing up missing scenes / povs of characters that could have enhanced the drama in a huge satisfactory way.

This is greatly appreciated.šŸ‘ā­ļø

Thanks for your compliment sister. I hope you all will support me in future.
Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: AASUS

ch 9 page 17

Shurid wooah didn't expect Bauji here. But so happy you brought his thought front and center yay!
He failed many many times acting absolutely dumb in front of g3. g3 fooled him with his eyes open and he let her do it - I never could believe how dumb can he get šŸ¤”šŸ˜•šŸ˜†

Prem's conflicting thoughts - happy side and the regretful side shown in parallel is fabulous.
Hey why do you call yourself average writer - this piece of scene is the most difficult!
Do you know ppl never get Prem Juneja - the writers write him as they please and never really pay attention to what exactly he was in the show. It's a very tough task to be honest.

You handled this really very well ā­ļøšŸ‘ I am very proud of you. Of course Prem in the show would never let g3 go to jail ... in your story Prem is quite liberal and so is Heer. That is an advantage for us fans / readers. šŸ˜Ž
Heer is subtle and affectionate so kind of her. šŸ¤—

I wonder what would bauji possibly discuss at dinner table šŸ˜†

Lalit obviously failed his family by ignoring Gayetri's action. He should have been more pro active in solving family conflict but he behaved like mute spectator. Lalit has a nickname of ullu for a reason.
Prem as a character had a great potenials and sadly cvs were unable to do justice with his character. I try to imagine Prem's inner thought in my ffs.
Ye to tum behano ko payyar hain jo apne bhai ki khamio ko najar andaz karti hein. Thank you sister for your kind remarks, it means a lot for me.
Prem, Heer will be more liberal in upcoming chapter.
Heer will obviously support her soulmate in every phase of the life.
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Posted: 7 years ago
Shuridh how are you. Me have holiday and hv appt in afternoon. But before that I'm aiming to chk ur other stories. Ok so i lob the sci fi FFs you have šŸ˜† I usually pick that 1st and work my way down in list but this time I decided to go in order. So started from this FF. Lets see how far I get today.

woohoo gona hv fun reading yay🄳 you rock šŸ¤—
Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: AASUS

Shuridh how are you. Me have holiday and hv appt in afternoon. But before that I'm aiming to chk ur other stories. Ok so i lob the sci fi FFs you have šŸ˜† I usually pick that 1st and work my way down in list but this time I decided to go in order. So started from this FF. Lets see how far I get today.

woohoo gona hv fun reading yay🄳 you rock šŸ¤—

I am sister.
I am glad that you like my sci fi ffs.
I will update my another sci fi Prem Juneja in parallel universe tomorrow.
Happy reading sis.
Posted: 7 years ago
my second ff which gets more than 50 fb likes. i am so happy because of that.
Posted: 7 years ago
Chapter 10 will be updated now
Posted: 7 years ago

Life is still beautiful with you

Chapter 10

Preet and Meher were shocked when they learned about the whole drama between Gayetri and Ash. Inside of their room, they were feeling sad for Prem and Heer

"Meher kein sapne mein bhi kabhi ye nahi socha tha ki mera maa itna gir jayegi. Unka dil nafrat mein itna dhub jayegi ki wo jaherali nagin se bhi samjota karne ki koshish karegi. Janti ho Meher aaj se pehele mein maa se thoda naraz thi kyunki mujhe lagi thi ki wo Heer bhabi ko abhi acche tarah se apna nahi rahi hain. Lekin uske uske saad muj mein ye ummeet bhi thi ki shayed waqt ke saat unki aur Heer bhabi ki samndh acche ho jayegi.

Lekin aaj court mein maa ki sacchyi janne ke baad mujhe lag raha hein ki mein meri maa ko kabhi bhi acche tarike se pechan nahi paye.

Ek insan aapni galat phemi, nafrat ke wajse kis tarah acche se bahut bura insan ban ja sakti hein iss ki ehasas mujhe aaj hua. Unhone Heer bhabi aur Prem bhayia ka saat jo kiya usko mein kabhI maaf nahi kar paonga.

Mein, Harman bhayiya bhi maa se bahut payyar karta tha. Lekin Prem bhayiya ka maa ke liye payyar hum sab se jyda tha.

Prem bhayiya ne kabhi bhi maa ko sautela samjha. Itni shiddat se unka samman kiya, unki har ek baat ko manna hein Prem bhayiya ne.

Maa aur Prem bhayiya ka rishta hamara pariwar ka ek takat tha. Ek misal tha kaise aatma ka rishta bhi khoon ke rishte se kam nahi the.

Mujhr samaj nahi aa raha hein kyun maa ek bar bhi ye sab karne se pehele Prem bhaiya ka kushi ka fikar kyun nahi kya. Aapne nafrat mein badle ke liye unhone Heer bhabi ko chuni jo Prem bhaiya ka patni hein tumhe nahi.

Unko iss baat se koi farak nahi padti ki agar Ashlesha unki offer maan leti aur unki motabik kam karti to Prem bhaiya ki ijjat sare duniya ka samne mit jati. Sari dunya unko ek bewafa, character less admi kahike bulati. Duniyawala ko to choro agar maa ki plan mafik sab kutch hoti to Prem bhayiya khud ko bhi kabhi maaf nahi kar pate." Preet told Meher.

"Preet mein tumhara halat samj saktI hu, maa ki galad kadam ne hamare pure pariwar ko mushkil mein dal diya hein. Sare duniya ka samne hamari pariwar ka majak udgaya.

Kahi na kahi iss sab ke piche mein bhi thodi doshi ho. Geet ne mujhe agowa kiya thi maa ki galad harkato ki bare mein. Lekin mein unki warning ko ye soach ke undekha kar diya tha ki shayed waqt ke saat saat maa ki najariya mein badlao ayegi. Lekin aaj samoj mein aarahi hein ki maa ki dimag mein di ke khilaf itni zeher se bhara thi ki unke man mein, sahi aur galat ka koi farak nahi tha.

Mujhe maa ki irade paheli samaj na cahaiye thi, unki upar najar rakne chahaite thi. " Meher told Preet in a sad voice.

"Meher tum bhi iss ghar ki baki sadyiso ki tarah kabhi bhi ye nahi soacha ki maa itne ghir chuke hein. Meher mujhe lagta hein maa jail mein jana deserve karti hein." Preet told Meher.

"Par Preet tum bhi samaj sakti ho ki Ash ne maa ko fasya aur jab tak maa jail mein rahengi hum medi ka khorak ban te rahenge." Meher told Preer.

" Meher court mein maa ki video tape dekne aur audio tape shunne ke baad mein nahi janta hu mein maa ke upar kitna yakeen karsakoo hu. Ha mujhe bhi lagta hein ki Ashlesha ne maa ko fasaya. Lekin Meher kya tum ye baat se inkar kar sakte ho ki maa Prem bhaiya aur Heer bhabi ka gunahgar hein.

Maa ke galad kadam ne Prem bhaiya aur Heer bhabi ko taklif diya hein mentally.

Maa ne emotionally abuse kiya hein un dono ko. Maa ne undono ka rista jodne se roka, aur uske baad job rishta jod gaya tob usse todne ki koshish ki.

Maa ne hamari pariwar ki buniad ko hila diya hein apne khud ke galad irade se. Heer bhabi khilaf unki har kadam ne unki upar hamara biswas aur astha ka opoman tha.

Aur rahi baat mediawalo ki, Meher jab apana hi sikkag khota ho, to dosro ko kyun kose. Maa ne kaam aise kiya hein jisse samaj ki ungli hamare pariwar ke upar pade.

Aapni nafrat ko unhone unki upar is tarah havi hone di ki uske liye unhone sari hade par kar di. Unke harkate hindi film ki villain sautela maa ki tarah thi.

Media ne ye sab notice kya aur wo chup nahi batenge agar maa jail se bahar nikle to bhi.

Maa ne hamra family ko ek melodramtic tv serial ka family jaisa bana di dunya ke samne. Iss liye mujhe aab unkI jail mein rehene se jyda farak nahi padta."Preet told Meher.

In another room of Juneja mansion.

" Prem tumhare haat mein ye kya hein? " A curious Heer asked her husband.

" Heer tumhe yaad hein, hotel mein rehene waqt meine tumhe bataya tha ki hum court case ke baad Rajsthan ghumne jayenge. Ye do ticket Jairpur jane ki plane se." Prem told Heer.

Heer felt sad when she heard that. Before today, she was also hoping to travel with her soul mate in Rajasthan. She was also thinking about spending some quality time with Prem when no one would disturb them. She was hoping that Rajasthan trip would bring a fresh start in their life.

"Lekin Prem aab hum Rajsthan nahi ja payenge ghar ki halat bahut najuk hein. Iss waqt mein hume bahar nahi jana chahiye." Heer remarked.

" Mein bhi ye samaj ta hu Heer. Lekin mera bahut arman tha tumhare saat Rajsthan ghum ne ka." Prem told Heer.

Heer sat near of Prem on the bed and placed her head on Prem's right shoulder.

" Prem itna mayus na ho, hamare samne hamari puri zindegi padi huyi hein. Hum kisi aur waqt uha jayenge." Heer told Prem.

Prem pulled Heer little closer to him.

" Ha mein bhi khud ko yahi kahake tasalli de raha hu ki hum sari zindegi ek saat rahenge to hume phir mauka milenge."Prem told Heer.

"Prem hum zindegi ki safar mein aur bhi place jayenge ek saat. Aur waise bhi iss waqt tumhara jyda bahar jana accha bhi nahi media ne tumhe national romantic hero bana diya.

Aab agar tum uha par gaye to log tumhe sawal kar karke pereshan kar dega.

Pata hein Harman ne mujhe batya ki fb mein tumhara fan page bhi khul chuka hein. Aur usme se jyda tar fan female hein jinki umar 18-30 hein." Heer told Prem.

" Ek minute kahi iss liye to tum hume Rajasthan jane se mana to nahi kar rahe ho. Tumhara pati aab national celebrity ban gaye toiss liye Rajsthan mein bahut sare ladki tumhari handsome husband pe dora dal sakte hein." Prem teased Heer.

"Har ek ladki jo meri pati pe dore dalne ki koshish karegi usko ye Heer Juneja janmo ka sabak sikhayegi. Prem Juneja sirf sirf Heer Juneja ka hein kisi aur ki nahi. Kyunki mujhe pata hein tumhare iss dil ki dhadkan sirf mein hu. Prem tum sirf mere liye meri pati nahi hu. Tum meri ruhu ka saathi ho.

Tum meri wo sathi ho jiska saat mein har janam mein chaongi. Agar kisi rasteke samne maut bhi khada hua to mein nahi darongi agar tum meri saat ho.Tumhari saat bina zindegi se Wo maut bhi haseen hein jisme tum meri saat ho. "Heer told her husband in an emotional voice

Prem held Heer more close to him after hearing that.

"Sahi kaha tumne sirf tumhi ho mera dil ka dhadkan. Heer mera najar mein tum iss dunya ka sabse khubsaroot ladki ho. Mera ye ray tab bhi nahi badlenge jab tumhari sari baal safed ho jayenge aur hum apne pote -potio ka saat khelenge. Kyunki tum mein je khoobsartia hein wo waqt ke saat kabhi nahi dhalege.

Heer tum mein shayed kabhi bata nahi sakoonga ki mein tumhe kitna chahati ho. Mera ye chahat tumhari saat ke liye. Mera ye chahat ek dosre se mein khone ke liye. Zindegi ho yaa maut, asman ho yaa zameen, uttar ho yaa dakshin Prem Juneja ka dil sathi hamesha Heer Juneja hogi." Prem told Heer.

Prem after that closed the distance between their lips and giving her a kiss that convey his never-ending commitment to her, his undying love and desire for her.

The delicate touch of his lips on her soft lips was creating pleasure, desire, and hope inside of Prem.

He felt a pleasure for feeling her touch. He felt a desire for holding her close to him. Finally, he felt a hope for their better future together.

Heer could understand these feelings. The gentle touch of Prem's lips on hers was making her to close her eyes to feel his love and touch more closely.

Her heart filled with desire and love for Prem. She soon responded to his kiss and applied her lips own pressure on his.

Their kiss was slow, as they were trying to express their love, respect, and desire for one another. It felt like haven for both of them. A haven of Prem and Heer that was built with love, desire, respect, and trust.

They faced too many difficult situations in their journey of love but both of them were determined now to preserve the bond of love between them. Both of them now decided to enjoy their life with one another even when the situation could become difficult.

For both of them life is still beautiful with one another.

Later in the dining table of Juneja mansion.

All members of Juneja family was gathered in the dining table, all of them were waiting for Lalit to start the conversation.

"Baccho, aaj jo saach hum sabke samne ayya, wo hum kabhi soach bhi na sakte the.

Mein hamesha proud feel karta tha ye soach kar ki hamara pariwar mein sab ke bitch jo payyar ka bandhan wo ekta hein wo bemissal hein.

Shayed ye hi waja thi ki mein Gayetri ke dil mein barte hue nafrat ko pechan nahi paya.

Gayetri ki glad kadmo ne mujhe mera aapna hi najare mein gira diya hein. 28 saal ka saat thi hamara, lekin muj mein shayed koyi kami raha hoga jiske wajase mein usse aaj tak acche tarike se pechan nahi paya.

Gayetri ne apne harkato se sirf maa beta yaa saas-bahu ka rishto kamajzak nahi banaya wo ek pati ka aapni patni ka upar jo biswas tha usse bhi tod diya.

Mujhe nahi lagta ki iss hadse baad mein kabhi bhi Gayetri ko biswas kar paonga.

Aisa lagta hein ki hum dono ke rishte ki sare tar ek jhatke mein bichar gaya. Iss liye meine faisala kiya iss rishta ka koi bhabiysat nahi." Lalit told everyone in a sad voice.

"Bauji ye aap kya bol rahe hein." Meher commented in a panicked voice.

"Mein wohi ke raha hu jo tum log samj rahe ho. Meine Gayetri ko divorce dene ka faisala kiya hein." Lalit announced his final decision.

Chapter end

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Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: mijanur

my second ff which gets more than 50 fb likes. i am so happy because of that.

šŸ¤—
Edited by AASUS - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
amazing cool update.

PH Rock! bauji is interesting.


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