Ghayab- Avneil SS epilogue pg 29

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Tentative title: Ghayab

Posted about a story idea back in October before I left for a trip. I decided now to post a prologue


She gained conciousness in the midst of chaos. She felt some blood on her forehead. She turned to spot the little girl she had seen possibly before losing her senses. But where was her mother?She reached out to the child to gather her in her arms. She peered around the desolate area around her.

It was supposed to be mission of a matter of a few days. Now it has been three months since he last saw her.

They had first met three years ago. A misconception brought them together. The misunderstanding cleared and they gradually got closer. It was when the couldn't bare to be without her that he had proposed marriage. They married but a sudden twist changed what should have been happy new beginning to something else all together.

Now he would give anything to have her back with him again. He would have to destroy the evils that seperated them. Then he would bring her home again.



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Posted: 8 years ago
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thanks all for your comments
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Part One-The First Meeting
Avni sat on the coach and sighed with relief. Dayavanti Mehta hated her foster mother Neela Verma. She had taken her hatred to another level tried to block her exit from the country. So she changed her name to Aanya Verma for the purpose of this trip. She needed to get away and she also wanted to find her brother. She could not go to him directly. This is why she had hopped on this coach in Barcelona. She had gotten lost several times but somehow made it here in time.

The other travelers gradually filled in around her. She had no idea how her life was about to change in a moment.


A young man who appeared Desi introduced himself as Neil Desouza, their tour guide. Avni looked at him quzzically.

Something was off. This Neil Desouza did not seem like the typical tour guide. Had her grandmother or Neela Ma contracted him to follow her?

She was just trying to get some freedom after all the stress of dealing with the older guardians in her life. Neela wanted her to live her life fully and Dayavanti wanted her to marry into a rich business family to grow her riches. Her cousin Riya was studying in London and be approached for this goal after Avni would be wed.

She felt his gaze on her when he came around to count the number of people on the couch, He flashed her a slight smile. She tried to remain firm and disinterested. However something about him made her want to give up the facade and engage him in a conversation.

She turned away her gaze as he walked back up to the front of the coach. She heard whisperings of the other girls exclaiming how hot he was. She rolled her eyes as she peered out the window.

It was a cool morning and it would continue to cool throughout the day. They stopped in a small town in France. Neil told them to meet him back in the square once they had lunch and explored. Avni chuckled when he said he wanted them back five minutes before 2pm.
She joined two other girls and they went for lunch. They were greeted by a sweet Italian man who had lived in France several years now. He gave them the specials and they agreed to spilt a bottle of wine.

Avni got seperated from the girls for a few minutes as the line for the washroom was longer than she expected.

She nearly stumbled forward when strong arms caught her.

She looked up into warm chocolate orbs. His fingers caressed her exposed skin under her top.

She stepped away and mumbled a thanks.

"Why don't you walk with me Miss Aanya?," he whispered.

She merely nodded.

Neil talked causally being from South Mumbai originally but he had gotten an offer through a travel agency to be a trip manager. She sensed there was way more to his story but she listened and smiled slightly as they reached the town square.

She didn't know it then but a new angle was being introduced into her life. An angle she thought would never come about.




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Posted: 8 years ago
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Intriguing..!

So DVM doesn't hate Avni & consider her her grandaughter, even if its to make a business deal...thats a first!

Neil as a tourist guide...I can actually imagine what the other girls were feeling!! btw, is he the guy DVM want Avni to marry...??

Continue soon😃
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Originally posted by: paayaal

Intriguing..!


So DVM doesn't hate Avni & consider her her grandaughter, even if its to make a business deal...thats a first!

Neil as a tourist guide...I can actually imagine what the other girls were feeling!! btw, is he the guy DVM want Avni to marry...??

Continue soon😃


time will tell lol, but yes this story has some elements I wish happened to me like this first part for example, my tour guide was really mysterious and used to find us at random spots but I always with at least two other people when these incidents happened, too bad didn't find love in Europe myself, but Avni and Neil have, even though they are new to each other and at least one of them using an alias .
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I know first part was boring just wanted to get the background of the story straight, will try to update later today to explore their journey
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Part Two


The tour group approached Monaco. They posed for a group picture. Anaya tried to be composed and fit in as much as possible. She was used to being caught in conflict between the the strong headed females in her life with extended family members sided with one or the other. She felt like she had the shorter stick. What about her own wishes? Maybe she wanted to fall in love naturally or maybe she wanted just to be left alone? This is why she had left home ten days before everyone else before Aman's college graduation. She would be meeting them in London.


Avni had befriended two girls already that were her roommates the past two nights. Their names were Celeste and Brittany. Celeste was a few years younger than Aman and Brittany was Aman's age. She pondered why she hadn't embarked on such a trip before her in life. Why did she wait until now at the age of 27 to take off without her family. They had no idea where she was, just that she would join them in London.


The three girls had not signed up for the special dinner tonight, so they wandered the currently abandoned streets of Monaco. The royal family was currently away, therefore there was it much less populated than usual.


The girls ended up dinning at restaurant close by to one where Neil and the rest of the group were eating at.


Avni made small talk with the girls. Suddenly they felt a presence behind them. Avni felt some kind of spark and some goosebumps as she turned to see those chocolate orbs yet again.


"Hey Neil are we running late or something?, Brittany asked.


Avni quietly looked at him, stunned that she had not realized he was behind her right away. How did he suddenly find them? Wasn't he supposed to be at that grand dinner chaperoning the majority of the group?


"No girls you have another forty-five minutes, we still got another two courses, he stated to all of them but Avni seemed to think he was only looking at her.


He spoke briefly to them before he returning to his dinner.


Brittany and Celeste pondered how he suddenly found them and it was odd they didn't realize he was right nearby.


Avni commented on the same but a lingering feeling that there was more to Neil Desouza that met the eyes.

Outside the restaurant Neil smiled to himself.


" Two can play this game, he whispered to no one in particular.


They all hopped on the coach, Neil did his high fives with everyone had reached back safely.


He flashed Avni a smile. She smiled slightly back at him. She was still puzzled how easily he had found them before.


The next day the tour group would enter Cinque de Terre then move onto Florence.


Neil handed them the rail passes and encouraged them not to block the way for the rest of society.


Avni had to chuckle at this. For the first time in her life she was living without the extra tension. She would miss these days when she returned to her family in London then back to India.



They got to see the five lands. Avni and a few other girls got close and posed for pictures together.


Avni and her friends made it to the last stop in time for the sunset. She got a few great clicks and was pleased to have these memories to keep in her mind forever.


The girls spotted Neil and surrounded him. He was munching on gelato and it looked like he was relishing them.


From a bit of a distance, Avni spoke up, " Looks like someone has a sweet tooth.


He paused and smiled at her warmly before checking the time on his wrist watch. He warned everyone the last train was approaching.


Avni and JoAnn another fellow traveler ended up across from Neil in the train.


For some reason she felt daring. She had overheard JoAnn wanting to advise Neil about something before they had sat down across from him.


"She wanted to talk to you about something Neil, Avni said feeling slightly shy as soon as the words came out.


She was inwardly trying not to giggle.


JoAnn offered some advice about keeping his notes from his travels organized and Avni paid a bit attention but also was trying not to look directly into his eyes.


Once JoAnn was finished she met his eyes anyway. She could sense some amusement in them.


They arrived and Avni along with the others had to rush to keep up with him. Neil was sure quick. But Avni was lighter than some of the other girls on the trip and was able to soon catch up.


They arrived at the hostel later that evening. Neil gave Avni a considerate nod as he handed her the room key, she would be responsible for returning them and letting her roommates in if they retired after her.


Avni joined some of the gang in the main room of the hostel. Across the lobby she noted Neil discussing the extra activities with Celeste. She was going to call Celeste over to join them but did not want to interrupt the conversation.


Neil looked at Avni's retreating figure, he hoped to get a moment to talk to her after he finished speaking to Celeste.







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Posted: 8 years ago
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Wah!
It seems like I'm on a holiday...visiting places, roaming on the streets & watching sunsets..!!

So Neil is playing a game...now m seriously thinking hez the guy shez being pressurized into marrying...he knows it, but she doesn't...but why is he doing it...??

Answer soon..!
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Originally posted by: paayaal

Wah!

It seems like I'm on a holiday...visiting places, roaming on the streets & watching sunsets..!!

So Neil is playing a game...now m seriously thinking hez the guy shez being pressurized into marrying...he knows it, but she doesn't...but why is he doing it...??

Answer soon..!


taking inspiration from my recent trip that is why you feel that way, all will be revealed when Avni reaches London , keep your seatbelt on and enjoy the ride.
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Superb.I think neil is playing game.but y he doing that.waiting for next.continue soon.

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