AshNi poem: Dil mein chhupe sawaal

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Hi friends...i'm back with my new poem on our favorite couple AshNi...in this poem I have tried to present the plight and fears of Nidhi when she and Ashu are seperated due to a misunderstanding...

Hope I can express what I wish to do...Please do read it and let me know whether I was successful in doing so?

Here it goes...😊


Jeevan bhi hai kitna ajeeb dikhaye apne rang hazaar

Kabhi khushiyon ki thi raunak aaj hai dukh ka bazaar

Socha na tha padega yeh din bhi kabhi dekhna

Ek galat fehmi ka yeh nateeja hume padega sehna

Jo kehna tha wo keh na sake jo socha na tha wo hi samjha aapne

Duniya ki bheed mein kho gaye mere sab rishte naate

Kal the jahan meri khushi ke mele aaj hum khade akele

Akelepan ka dard kya hai jaana aaj humne

Ek darr tha basa jo dil me aa gaya wo saamne

Kaash hum bata paate aap kya ho humare liye

Jaane hua kyun aisa jo dard humne aapko diye

Kaash ho kuch aisa jo hum bata payen apne dil ka haal

Aap ke dil mein kya bana payenge fir jagah hai yehi sawaal


Thanks for the read😊

  

 

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braveheartdoc thumbnail
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Posted: 6 years ago
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No-one  here to read it even😭
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Wonderful poem sweetie...β­οΈπŸ‘
You pen down Nidhi's feelings very well...πŸ‘
Lovely poem dear...like it..❀️.πŸ€—
Thank you so very much Manu πŸ€—
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: braveheartdoc

No-one  here to read it even😭


some days are not in our favor... so cud not come n see your very touching creation,,, πŸ˜³
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Nice emotional lyrical... β­οΈπŸ‘

Hey its festive time... how about something that relieve us...relieve us from our day to day stress.. 
or may be some other time,,, will wait,, ,
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Nidhi's sad heart is brilliantly shown in this very beautiful poem Manisha... β­οΈπŸ‘
Very good effort... loved the life's battle fought.. but a bit later.. !!!
Thanks so much dear.. .😊
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: bawaswift


some days are not in our favor... so cud not come n see your very touching creation,,, πŸ˜³


I agree, and sorry for keep you in wait Manisha di, i was not well.
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Heart wrenching poetry with Nidhi's feelings and tears coming out clearly in your words Manisha di πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘
I never liked the separation Kerala track, but your poem will be loved ever !
Thanks for this beautiful effort di, loved it, love U β€οΈ
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Heart felt wordings and sadness poured!
Very well shown the poignant times of our AshNi πŸ‘ Loved the lyrics gelling so well with the separation track!
Thanks Sweetie, as always you have touched the hearts of all your readers!
Luv ya to the core β€οΈ πŸ€—
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: braveheartdoc

No-one  here to read it even😭


I am here now...yaah...days are not that great for me too...