Aa Leke Chalu Tujhko - Avneel SS

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hey guys, I'm back with another short story!
Before you guys decide to read it, I want to let you know that this story won't be following the current track of the serial. The characters will remain same and the past track is the same too but the ongoing will be different. All criticism are welcome.


An hour ago...
The Mehta mansion was filled with happiness, Neel was finally getting married to Rhea. Dayawanti Mehta was giving tasks to every servant after-all, she didn't want anything to go wrong in the rituals especially now that she was so close to winning the deal from Prakash ji. By now everyone in the house knew that the old lady would fly abroad taking her grandson along with her, not caring about anyone else. So the only happy people at the venue were Dayawanti and her grandson Amol.

Avni who was now angry that her plan to make Rhea run away foiled became furious when she learnt that Dayawanti had threatened to kill Rhea if she doesn't agree for the marriage. She wanted to end it all...she knew that her brother would be taken away from her once again and the old lady will escape unscathed. She would end this once in for all she thought, only to be stopped by Neela.
Having no other choice they came back to the ceremony.

"Very soon..." he thought "Very soon, your truth will be exposed Avni Mehta". Neel knew Avni's truth and was keeping tabs on her observing her every move. He could see the restlessness in her eyes, the thirst for revenge fr what she had been through. Just when he was thinking about his plan there was a power failure, the only source of light was the holy fire burning in the havankund. There was a slight hustle as no one could see anything properly and that's when they heard it, a loud BANG, people started screaming and running to the exit. Neel stood up, his police instincts taking over him and was asking people not to move and stay calm. BANG they heard it again, the marriage laid forgotten as everyone dashed towards the door.

Present...
Dayawanti Mehta's body was lying in a pool of blood, no one could believe what they were witnessing. As all the guests had left the venue when they heard the gunshot, it was easier to investigate. Few stood there silently trying to comprehend what just happened while other were in tears. Her grandson Amol was beyond the madness/rage/shock/sadness and was howling like a hurt wolf but there was only one suspect in everyone's eye...Ananya.

"I WILL KILL YOU! IT'S HER, I KNOW IT'S HER...ONLY SHE CAN DO IT! SHE'S THE MURDERER. I WILL NOT LET YOU LIVE ANANYA...I WILL KILL YOU!!!" Amol was shouting at the top of his voice and had to be restrained by Ketan and others while Neela, Nanno and Ali were watching helplessly.
"Miss. Ananya Verma, you are under arrest for planning and executing the murder of Mrs. Dayawanti Mehta" was the last thing Avni could comprehend before Neel asked a female constable to take her into custody.



to be continued...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Damn interesting. ... do continue soon..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Amazing. .👏 .. btw title aa leke chalu tujhko .. jail mein ?🤣
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: My_Shining_Star

Amazing. .👏 .. btw title aa leke chalu tujhko .. jail mein ?🤣


I know right? Wherever I thought she was going to go with that title...and what happened instead 🤣
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: My_Shining_Star

Amazing. .👏 .. btw title aa leke chalu tujhko .. jail mein ?🤣

Thank you! you can decipher the titles meaning in the following ways...
  • Avni jo bhi kar rahi apne maa ko insaaf dilaane ke liye hai and whats more apt than this song to know the bond between the two
  • Journey from infant to a state where innocence is broken through harsh realities.
  • Neel's path to guide her and mend her ways
  • Zyaada nahi bolungi warna plot yahi pata chal jaayega😆
Waise dekha jaaye toh "Aa leke chalu tujhko... jail mein" achi title hai! 🤣

PS : I'm taking a pic of your comment Miss. Shining Star, couldn't control my laughter for one whole minute after i read it.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: sammy17


I know right? Wherever I thought she was going to go with that title...and what happened instead 🤣

Mystery hai, how can I let you guess it so easily😛🤣
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Very interesting. Do continue soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Very nice and different too...
Now it will be interesting to know how supercop saves his supergirl..
Thanks for writing dear update next part soon😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Amazing
But a cliffhanger continue soon
Eagerly waiting for next update
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Intriguing concept
Avni cannot kill dayawanti
It must be someone else
Update soon please

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