Lakshmila OS : The Loss Of A Heart..

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Hello everyone ... 😃😳

This is Sumi..😳

So Yes , I am yet again back with a new OS which is as usual emotional but I have put some light moments as well... 😆😛

I hope you like it..😃

Please do read and review...😳

Thanks everyone ❤️ ⭐️.

Special thanks to my crazy sis Mili and Tha doll..😆😳😉
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Lakshmila OS : The Loss Of A Heart ..

Everything was going smoothly ... everything ... Ram's Rajya was going in peace with happiness all around... The three brothers especially Lakshman always gave their strong support to Ramemotionally as well as in his kingly duties. The 6 princes - Taksh ~ Pushkal , Angad ~ Chandraketu , Shatrughati ~ Subahu were successfully running their respective states.

But a gloom , a sudden and shocking gloom is about to enter in their lives again after Sita's Bhumi Pravesh ... yet again..

"Arya , Arya , where are you ?"

Urmila searched for Lakshman in palace's corriders because he hadn't taken food since afternoon as well as he was late.

"Urmi , I am here , what happened ?", came Lakshman from other side.

"You are asking , what happened , come here , I will tell you , what happened", said Urmila in anger yet with a funny tone.

Lakshman knew that he was in trouble now for sure.

"Come in Arya , sit here , I will tell u", said Urmila sitting on sofa with bit of anger in her eyes .

"Who will eat the food ?", asked Urmila.

"I will , I will , only when you will feed me ", said Lakshman in a teasing tone.

Urmila sighed and giggled.

"Then Come , sit here", said Urmila laughing.

Lakshman goes and sat besides her , Urmila removed the cover from the food and she started feeding food to Lakshman.

"You never take care of yourself , Never , I have told you so many times , take care of yourself but you are no less than your own sons Angad and Chandraketu.", Urmila scolded Lakshman in a soft and concerned voice while feeding him.

"I have to always look after you , what you will do and who will take care of you when I will leave this world forever ?" , said Urmila in a concerned voice.

Silent tears rolled from the corner of Lakshman's eyes.

"URMILA , NEVER SAY THAT AGAIN", said Lakshman in a angry yet sad voice.

"5Ok , Ok , forgive your Urmi , you love me this much ?", asked Urmila smiling.

"You can never imagine the love , I have for you , it is very deep, way deep", said Lakshman sadly looking straight into her eyes.

Urmila smiled gently and felt blessed...

"Thank you Arya for loving me so much ... Okay ..Okay , take care of yourself, that is only want from you , take food on time , take proper rest otherwise you will fall ill in no time..", said Urmila while bringing a blanket for Lakshman in a concerned yet in her chirpy mood .

She wrapped the blanket around Lakshman ...,"You will catch cold , it's chilly outside".

Lakshman smiled looking at her and dragged her too beside him and covered her.

"And take care of yourself too", said Lakshman smiling at her innocent and pure love.

"Hmmm ... I will ... I am not like you",said Urmila giggling.

Lakshman sighed happily and spent some time talking with her.

"It's going to be midnight , let's sleep", said Lakshman.

"Hmmm...Okay", said Urmila.

They both moved to bed and slept together.

Dream of Urmila ~


"Urmila.."

"Urmila.."

Urmila heard someone's calling her , the voice which was very familiar to her.

"Siya Didi.."

"Urmila , my dear sister".

The voice was of none other than her dear sister Sita.The image of Sita appeared in her dream which was initially appearing blur to her.

"Didi , where did you gone leaving me and everyone?",asked Urmila crying.

"Do you have any Idea of how much I missed you ?", asked Urmila.

"I know my dear , the motive of my life was completed so I decided to leave this world", said Sita wiping Urmila's tears.

"And now it's your turn , Urmila", said Sita with a gentle smile.

"What ?", asked Urmila.

"Yes Urmila , it's your time now , first of all , thank you so much for raising my sons Luv ~ Kush as your own", said Sita joining her hands.

"No didi , they are not only your sons , they are my sons as well , there is no need to say thank you to me , I loved them as my own",said Urmila holding Sita's hands.

"Urmila , now your life's motive is complete , come with me dear ", requested Sita.

"Didi , I will love to come with you but what about Arya?", asked Urmila in a worried tone.

"My Dear Lakshman... I know... He will too join you very soon ...", said Sita forcing her tears aside.

"What do you mean Didi ?", asked Urmila tensedly.

"Dear , everyone take birth for some important purpose , when the motive is achieved then the person has to leave the world but Lakshman 's life motive is not completed yet , but , it will soon..", said Sita.

Urmila heard her with full concentration yet she was confused that what her sister actually wanted to say.

"Dear Urmila , you are no ordinary woman , you are Ksheera Sagar , you are Vimala , the milky ocean on which your husband Sheshnaag rests and on him I and World Protector MahaVishnu rests", said Sita showing her divine form of MahaLakshmi.

"And your husband Lakshman is incarnation of sheshnaag , your Sita didi is the incarnation of mine and your Ram bhaiya is the incarnation of MahaVishnu", said Sita as MahaLakshmi.

"You were the one who also asked us to join in our journey on earth to help us in anyway", said Mahalakshmi.

Urmila was left with her jaws open.

"I know , Urmila this is a bit unbelievable to you but I will show you the real and divine form of all of us", said Mahalakshmi.

Mahalakshmi pressed her thumb on Urmila's forehead to show her divine form of themselves.
Urmila realised her divine form with Lakshman , Ram , Bharat , Shatrughan.

"Greetings Jiji", bowed Urmila.

Mahalakshmi blessed her , " Now , will you join me my dear Ksheera ?"

"Yes , I will come with you , I will come Jiji", said Urmila in tears happily.

"Come , my dear Ksheera", said Mahalakshmi spreading her arms to her.

"Jiji", said Urmila hugging her and they both disappeared with a bright flashing light to vaikunth.

Next morning -

"Urmi.. Urmi.. Urmi ... wake up , it's bright morning now " , said Lakshman coming to her after fresh up and smiled at her Urmila who was sleeping but she was not actually sleeping.

"Urmi , wake up , you very well know , we have to go to temple", Lakshman sat besides her.

"Dear Urmi , wake up ," he touched her forehead.

Lakshman became dead scared , her body was freezing cold.

"Urmi.. wake up ".

"Urmi ... Urmila wake up ..." said Lakshman shaking her constantly.

"URMILA ... URMILA... WAKE UP , RAM BHAIYAAA !!", screamed Lakshman .

Everyone came inside including Ram , Bharat , Shatrughan , Mandavi , Shruthkirti and Luv ~ Kush.

"Bhaiya , Urmila is not waking up , her body is freezing cold ", said Lakshman crying to Ram.

"Calm down , Lakshman , Calm down", said Ram supporting Lakshman.

"CALL DOCTOR , FAST " , commanded Ram to one of servants.

Servant called Doctor and he appeared in room in no moment , the doctor checked Urmila's pulse and heartbeat and let his head down.

"I am sorry , Urmila is no more in this world", said Doctor.

Lakshman was numb , he wasn't able to cope up with what doctor said.

Everyone began crying on Urmila's sudden demise.

"Lakshman , Lakshman !!" , said Ram shaking him who was numb.

"URMILAAA", screamed Lakshman and he falls on floor devastated.

"Control yourself , Lakshman", said Bharat , Shatrughan and Ram holding him.

"URMILAAA , RAM BHAIYA , URMILAAA , WHERE DID SHE GONE LEAVING ME BEHIND?", said Lakshman crying in uncontrollable way.

"Pitashree , please control yourself ", sobbed Luv~Kush.

"URMILA , you can't go leaving me , you just can't , wake up Urmila , show everyone that you are absolutely fine", said Lakshman crying after taking Urmila's head on his lap and holding her hand.

"Lakshman!!", said Ram controlling him pushing his own tears aside to lose a dear sister like Urmila.

"Bhaiyaaa , Urmila can't go , she can't go", cried Lakshman heavily in Ram's arms.

"Lakshman , please control yourself", said Ram rubbing his brother's back.

"Lakshman !!!! Lakshman !!!!!".

Lakshman wasn't in a state to speak anything , he was shocked and depressed.

"BRING SOME WATER", ordered Ram holding him , shruthkirti brought some water in a glass .

Ram made Lakshman drink some water.

"Lakshman , I know and I can feel your pain but please control yourself for Urmila's sake , she would never like to see you in such state , please Lakshman", said Ram ruffling Lakshman's hairs.

Lakshman wiped his tears ,"Okay , Bhaiya".

Ram hugged him tightly and Lakshman cried very slowly.

Mandavi and Shruthkirti dressed Urmila like a bride before her funeral.

"Our time is also coming very fast , Shruthkirti ", said Mandavi while putting bangles in Urmila's hands.

"I know didi ", said Shruthkirti placing Urmila's maangtika on her middle parting of her hair.

"Did you have the same dream , Shruti ?", asked Mandavi.

"Yes , Didi", said Shruthkirti.

"URMILA MAA !!!! " all 6 princes screamed other than Luv ~ Kush .

6 young princes of Ayodhya together came back from their respective states when they got the news of dear Urmila's Maa death.

They all ran and hugged Lakshman who came inside the room. The sons cried with Lakshman silently supporting them.

Lakshman then put sindoor in the middle parting of Urmila's hair , all moments he spent with her flashed on his eyes , their first meet , their marriage , their separation , their reunion , birth of their sons , all the moments , his tears falls on Urmila's face but he wiped it off.

The funeral rites happened , when Angad Chandraketu were going to give fire to Urmila's pyre, Luv - Kush , Taksh-Pushkal , Shatrughati ~Subahu too came and joined them.

"Only her sons can do this act ", said priest.

"She was also our mother", said Luv.

"Yes , she also took care of us in the best way possible ... she was also our mother ...", said Kush.

"We will also perform as she was mother of all of us", joined Taksh~Pushkal and Shatrughati~Subahu.

They all gave fire to Urmila's pyre together.

Tears rolled from Lakshman's cheeks when he remembered his last night with her and all those little caring things and huge sacrifice she did for him , but , Ram completely understood his brother's heart and supported him by his shoulders. He felt the same pain again seeing Lakshman when he lose Sita many years back.

"May god bless your pure soul , you were great Urmila , you were great , you did a lot for us , you will be remembered for ages to come for your sacrifice and your devotion towards Lakshman and all of us..", said Ram joining his hands infront of Urmila's pyre smiling in tears.

Lakshman looked towards Ram with a gentle smile when he heard this.


Few days later -

"Lakshman , are you ok ?", asked Ram putting his hand on his shoulder .

"Yes Bhaiya ", said Lakshman forcing a smile.

"Lying again?" asked Ram.

"NO Bhaiya ", said Lakshman looking away.

"Then what is this ?", asked Ram wiping the lone tear that escaped from Lakshman's eyes.

Lakshman couldn't control himself anymore and burst crying in Ram's arms.

"Bhaiya , I miss my Urmi...", cried Lakshman.

"I know Lakshman , remember , when Sita left me , you were the one who consoled me , asked me to cry out loud , don't take it in heart , same situation is here , take it out whatever is burdening you", said Ram with a very gentle smile.

Hearing this , Lakshman cried out loud which lessened his pain which was bothering him from long back , Ram supported him by continuously rubbing his back because he knew now it was his turn to console him.

Time was repeating itself again but in different relations.

Years Later :

"So how was the journey on earth for you Shesha", asked Mahavishnu.

"Lord , with you , the journey for me was very memorable , the only painful thing was separation from you , Devi Mahalakshmi , Ksheera but see , we are reunited here again",said Lakshman who was Sheshnaag now in his original form.

"The fights which I have with Vimala on earth were my most favourite moments", said Shesha.

"Oh Ok", Ksheera showed her anger with strong waves.

"Oh..Sorry ... Sorry Vimala... ", said Shesha.

"Wherever they will stay together whether it is in vaikunth or on earth , they will always fight with each other", said MahaLaskhmi giggling.

Ksheera silenced her waves into a moderate one hearing this.

"And your love for Mahavishnu will never decrease..."said Sheshnaag in a teasing voice.

"Neverever", said MahaVishnu blushing.

"We teached a lot to the world anyway", said Bharat who was now a conch shell of MahaVishnu.

"Yes , I hope , that, world will learn from our sacrifices we did, togetherness , strong values we had on earth and we still have", said Shatrughan who was a sudarshan chakra of MahaVishnu.

"It will happen or if not , I will take another incarnation to teach the world , to protect the world", said MahaVishnu with a gentle smile.

"And I will join you ", said MahaLakshmi smiling.

"Lord , I will too", said Shesha bowing to him.

"Me as well", said Ksheera/Vimala with a very gentle movement of her waves.

Everyone smiled and enjoyed the reunion in Vaikunth after so many years...


THE END !!
Edited by LakshmanMila..1 - 8 years ago
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NOTE : THIS OS IS PURELY FICTION BASED ... IT IS NOT MEANT TO HURT RELIGIOUS SENTIMENTS... 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Lovely one Sumi! Loved how you encapsulated the pain, the happiness, their relatioships and the divinity, as a whole, of their avatars in a single OS!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Really very nice OS. Thank you for sharing with me. 😊. Your imagination and the words which are used to tell the emotions are very nice that anyone can visualize the scene what you write.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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SUMI LOVE 👏
This was definitely one of the best OSs you have ever written !!!!

You have such a wonderful knack for writing emotional stories, its really amazing!
Your love for the Lord makes me so happy and proud 😃

Coming to the OS, it is really really good!!!!!! I haven't read a lot of the story after Sita's Bhumi Pravesh, but truly this one is really nice!
Wonderful job dear.. Specially the part where Lakshman asks for his consolation from Ram and Urmila's dream... Really good!

Keep the wonderful work coming!
Looking forward to reading more genres from your side !

Thank you so so much Sumi for writing this 😃
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Sumi, this was SO beautiful! I loved each and every scene. Lakshman and Urmila's last moment together was quite endearing, and I did not feel sad because I knew they'd be reunited in Vaikunta again, same as Mahalakshmi and Maha Vishnu. Sita and Urmila's moment was also really beautiful, as was Ram consoling Lakshman. The final moment in Vaikunta was my favorite. The teasing and camaraderie among the siblings seemed so natural.

Really great job, my dear. 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Sumi Really Loved Reading The Os. It Was Painful Yet Beautiful Ending.
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Hey Sumi! A beautifully written os this was! The emotions were brought out well. I love the simplicity of this piece and the ending had me smiling. Write a lot more.
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I don't know what to say! As usual!😆
Sumi, this update was too bittersweet. The poignant love story of Lakshman and Urmila is hardly ever narrated. But you've been so awesome dear sister. Even the snippet at the end between Mahalakshmi, Vishnu, Shesha and Ksheera was amusing and very calming. The death of Urmila scene was really well written. This is probably the very fiirst time I am reading something like this. Thank you for writing this OS. Keep up the good work. Loved it.❤️



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