Lakshmila OS : Urmila's Sacrifice :)

First Previous

Page

Frequent Posters

Amaya Rishikesh

@Seraphina231

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#11

ResWa, and soon UnresWa :P

Quote

wayward

@wayward

Stunner

+ 14

Posted: 8 years ago

#12

Such a touching OS this was!

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

GumnaamHaiKoii

@GumnaamHaiKoii

Stunner

+ 34

Posted: 8 years ago

#13

Hey !!🤗

First of all thanks for the PM.☺️

I am glad to read a Lakshmila Os from you after long time

Coming to the os,

Mila and her sacrifice was defined perfectly.

Lakshman repentance was heart warming too😭

And at last the description of their penance of 16 yrs was perfect🥺

Ram had a limited screen space but I liked him. The way he stood for his lil bro and sis was adorable, are you a Ralaksh fan too??😃

And Yes do write more Lakshmila Os/Ffs ...Please! [I am greedy Lakshmila fan...😉]

Love,

Sakshi😳

Quote

Amaya Rishikesh

@Seraphina231

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: Shrinika13
ResWa, and soon UnresWa :P

This was heart touching, it was magnificent and amazing, beyond words!
The flow in your writing is flawless, it is poetry in motion! Moves like the water, soothing like the breeze and as intense as fire. Steady as the earth and all encompassing as the Sky.

*wipes sweat off brow* Demanding ladki hai re tu!

Okay onto the actual story!
You wrote the whole emotional charade so well. The part where she is pretending to be the person she isn't, that was magnificent, and that was immediately followed by the part where she breaks down.

(Yeh baat alag hai ki main iss folktale mein believe nahin karti!)

Lakshman's anguish when he learns the truth, you weaving the second vanvaas in, Sita's last act of reuniting them, perfect, flawless, mindblowing.

There you go, abb khush? 😆 ❤️

Quote

Riya

@Riya_16

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#15

Sumo...❤️🤗

What a wonderful OS. I really loved it. I know I insist that you write some happier moments too...but this update showed your devotion to LakshMila. The agony and heartbreak over the 14 year long separation was absolutely telling.👏 I want to see you explore more as a writer sweetheart just as Milu said.

Waiting eagerly for the update. You're really blooming into a competent writer.

Lots of love

Rii

Quote

_shadesnature_

@_shadesnature_

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#16

Padh lia finally ...

Comment Abhi karungi

Quote

Srutha

@SriMaatangi

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: KrishnaPriyaa
Res

UnresWa

This is such a beautiful OS Doll 🤗

Your writing has evolved beautifully, and your flow is poetic. You took a story on Lakshmana and Urmila, added true emotions to it, and gave us a masterpiece.

The love and sacrifice of Urmila, the guilt and loss that Lakshmana felt, the tears of Rama seeing His little sister and little brother's separation, and Sita's true words

Wah Doll Wah 👏👏👏

Write more, that too very very soon ❤️

Quote

_shadesnature_

@_shadesnature_

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#18

Sumi lovely story ...

You pen down the emotions of urmilla in the most scenic and beautiful way

All the her pain ,love , sacrifice everything was sclearly visible

All her sacrifice one after another really makes her a great women but still her sacrifices is hardly known to many

Just hated the way that laxman could not even recognize the real intention of urmilla at first and showered all his harsh words on her (added more pain to her life )

But really appreciate the way ram n sita took initiative for reuniting laxmilla .

Awesome story dear

And sorry for delay in responding

Hope you will write some other beautiful stuff very soon

Thanks of pm 😃

Quote

goli030291

@goli030291

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#19

Well Done

Good Piece of Write up...👏

Quote

Janaki

@RamKiSeeta

Achiever

+ 6

Posted: 8 years ago

#20

Wow, what a wonderfully written piece, Sumi, this is a true masterpiece! 👏 I was in tears the whole time, couldn't imagine that Lakshman and Urmila had stayed separate for so long. Even more than the 14-year exile, the two years after Ram's coronation seemed more painful, because they were physically present and yet emotionally distant. 😭 Sitaji revealing the truth to Lakshman before she left for the forest was another poignant moment. A mother would never leave without seeing her son happy in his life. Ramji hiding his pain and happily witnessing the reunion of his dear brother and sister-in-law was just like how a father would react, putting his child's happiness above his own. Very well written! 👏

Normally, I am not a fan of this version of the story, because it isn't very convincing. Seems a bit too dramatic for my taste, but the way you have written it, is so beautiful and I loved reading it. Well done, Sumi!

Also, here is the siggy you wished for me to find for you. I hope I'm not too late. 😆

Quote

1 2

Lakshmila OS : Urmila's Sacrifice :) - Page 2

Related Topics

Explore Topics