armaan.....a poem!!!!

it goes lyk dis

tumhi meri life ka gitar ho

infact' us guitar ka taar ho

tumhi ho meray dil ka wire

tumhi ho jagaate ho meray mann mein desire

tumhi toh ho meray dil kay armaan

tumhi mein bassi hai meri jaan

hai armaan, hai armaan

hai armaan, hai armaan

plz comment

i wrote it myself

tell me if its gd

plz plz plz comment

😆 😆 😆 DILL KE WIRE...!!!
DILL KE TAAR..!!!
OMG....TOO FUNNY...

GREAT...!!KEEP IT UP DA......!! 😊

HI nix.....nice one...feeling that u r an amateur poet..but dont worry...brush up ur talent...u can write better poems 😳 😳 n one more thing

"tumhi meri life ka gitar ho

infact' us guitar ka taar ho

tumhi ho meray dil ka wire"

guitar ko zyada mat bajana...wire tut jayega... 😳 sorry last line is pure joke...dont have ne intension to hurt u dear!

nice one ya.....pretty gud!! 😆 😆 😉

😛
gr8 words yaar....too gud 👏

Nice one 😆 ....keep it up 😉

thnx for d comments every1
nd ya azaan_best u were rite i am an ameteur poet
thnx for ur advice
i'll definitely try 2 use better words next tym
buh u guys also read my other poem

Originally posted by: nix nd soni

thnx for d comments every1
nd ya azaan_best u were rite i am an ameteur poet
thnx for ur advice
i'll definitely try 2 use better words next tym
buh u guys also read my other poem

Thanx Nix that u didnt take my words wrong....after writing the last line I was really feeling guilty...after all it is obvious from ur poems that feelings for armu came straight from ur heart...keep it up buddy 😊

sure I wl read ur other poem too

hey thnx azaan_best
no i didnt mind at all
n u dont need 2 feel guilty abt anythin coz i just lyk learnin more stuff
n yeah my other poem is definitely better than this 1(i guess so)
lolz
pls read n comment on tht