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Posted: 8 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: KUTUR

Maithili...loved the urban and classy use of Udaan characters...👏

It was a very fresh and refreshing read...Keep it up dear,,,,,👍🏼

Even my jaws dropped,in their first glances at each other,and imagining a shirtless Suraj babu...❤️


And the dining table scene was just,ah-mazing😃

waiting for next update...

A humble request as a reader-
I want this Suraj to be a full-on besharam,and an extrovert with some naughty one-liners...😉
some cute childhood fbs will be good.😳
and later I would love to see Chakor as the 'jungli billi'...living her fantasies and not being restrained...😈



Thanks a lot dear!
Same to me, can't imagine shirtless as it's 2 hot to digest.
Dining table scene is something I will like forever.

Almost finished the next part.
Will update it tomorrow.

No worry dear, he is full on naughtiness in last part 2.
Sorry, there will be no childhood fbs as according to the story, they never came face-2-face at the age they can remember things.

"Wild cat" avatar of Chakor in one of my next OS/TS/SS, this one is just "Shying" avatar of Chakor!

Thanks once again.

Edited by maithu_ - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: manopriya24

Arey yaar maithili... the storyline is so interesting and fresh that don't know how to express my joy .. update soon dear..



Thank u!😊
Next update is for tomorrow.
I will try my level best to maintain ur expectations.
See u tomorrow!

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Posted: 8 years ago
#33

Originally posted by: MysticNights

Loved It...Very Interesting..👏



Glad u liked it!😊


Originally posted by: vvv

yaar you made my weekend beautiful

waiting 4 nxt chap eagerly (naughty suraj😳)



Happy to hear that Flechazo made ur WE!
Next part 2morrow!
Naughty Suraj is still on for the last part!

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Posted: 8 years ago
#34
Hi Buddies,

As promised here is the second part of Flechazo!
Link to Part 1
Hope this is up to your expectations.

***************

Hearing the calling bell, Chakor came out of her thinking mode and went to open the door.

Opening the door, her heart stopped a bit with the shock of her life due to the person in front of her.
She didn't expect HIM to be here. She didn't even feel that she was holding her breath since the moment she saw HIM.

Seeing her facial expression, Suraj smirked and said "Hi Kitten!" but there was no response.

"Can I come in?"
No reaction.

He waved his hands before her face, but she didn't even blink her eyes.
He tried few tricks to bring her back from her shock but it was of no use.
Finally, he shook her a little by her shoulder and it's done.

Coming out of her shock and leaving her breath out, she saw him enter and take a place in couch.
She searched for her mother on the door way for few seconds before turning towards him with a questioning look.

Understanding her dilemma, he answered for the unasked question.
"Kasturi Maa went to neighbour's house to give something!"
"Hmmm" is all she could manage to say and then focused on her interesting hands which are fidgeting with her shawl.

Few minutes passed, Suraj tried to initiate a conversation but it was of no use.

Having enough of Chakor standing like a statue, he asked:
"Are you always in a Not-Speaking mode?"

"Her second name is Chatterbox. I think she has used her quota of talking, so giving rest to her mouth!" answer Kasturi who was entering the house.

Suraj smiled hearing Kasturi while Chakor face palmed in embarrassment.

After having few minutes of talk, water and coffee, he bid good night to the ladies.

Coming out of their house, his heart and eyes were fully satisfied with the intake of Chakor, her reactions and his effects on her.

*****

Next day, Suraj and Chakor came to the office and they are waiting for the personal lift to come.

Chakor is playing with her shawl edge while thinking what she can do in this one month to be composed and calm when images of few minutes before flashed before her.

******* FEW MINUTES BEFORE *******

On the way to office, Suraj came to pick up Chakor to start his new journey as Managing Director.

Being a gentleman, he opened the door for Chakor to take her seat, then he went to take his.

Seeing her lost in her thoughts, he tried to call her but it went in drain.

He neared close to her, lifted his right hand close to her face.
Feeling his hot breath on her face, she faced him with a petrified look.

He took hold of the seat belt and brought it down brushing her cheek, neck, waist and hand. Finally, he put it and settled in his seat to start the engine.

She sighed in relief that it was just to put the seat belt and turned to window side.

Suraj again tried his chance to make her speak, but her mood and no-reaction made the atmosphere terrible.

In this busiest city of India, it will take approximately 30 minutes to reach the office at this time.

Little by little, Suraj started to lose his patience. After 15 minutes of silence in the storm which is happening in their hearts, they are stopped in the traffic.

He turned towards Chakor only to find her have full concentration outside.

Listening to his heart, he took her hand and gave a simple kiss holding it tightly.

With this sudden action of his, she came out of her reverie and turned his side with shock. Tears started to form in her eyes.

Is it due to her feelings of love?
Is it due to her fear of insecurities?
Even now she is caught between her mind and her heart.

Seeing this, he left her hand as guilty took place.

Feeling her hand to be free, she hidden her hands under her shawl after brushing tear drops of her eyes and diverted her precious attention to the outside world.

He smirked seeing her antics and actions and decided to speak to her once in office.

******* PRESENT *******

They entered the lift and Suraj pressed the button to reach the 14 floor.
The door closed and Chakor went to stand in the corner.

Suraj stood opposite to her and folded his arms across his chest.

Being impatient, he asked what he wanted to know since yesterday night.

"Chakor!"
"Uhhh!"
"Why are you doing this to me, Muffin?"
"Ahaan?"

Their eyes locked for few seconds.

"Why are you avoiding me?"
Feeling his intense gaze on her, she bent her head down.

Suddenly the lift stopped, so she lifted her head to the door to find it still closed and the key missing.

She turned to see him to find him close to her, holding the lift key in his hand which slid in his pocket in the next moment.

Slowly he put his both hands on either of her sides to cage her with only few inches of distance between them.

Gaining courage, she opened her mouth:
"Wha...What do yo...you want?" but still stammering.
"You!" he replied simply.
"What?" is all that she can say in this state.
"I think you heard me Doll, I wa"
"Nooo" shaking her head.
"Let me finish Sweety!"
She is still shaking her bent head negatively.

He complemented her telling her that she looks beautiful while blushing.

She brought both her hands to hide her cheeks which brushed his arms on their way.
Thanks to this contact she got goosebumps all over her body.

He smiled seeing the effect of this one touch on her body.

He lifted her head with his forefinger to capture her eyes.
He can't describe what those beautiful eyes are doing to him.

There were a lot of girls who were behind him all those years. But he was never interested in them, all he was doing is to focus on his studies and his responsibilities until he fell deep inside these eyes the first time he met HER. So he composed himself before talking to her.

"Am I scaring you Sweetheart?"
She shook her head in all direction.
He chuckled seeing her confused.


"I saw you speaking animatedly to the receptionist when I came back after parking the car." He sighed and continued "What can I do for you Beauty?"

After few seconds of reflection and collection of her courage, she put down her hands taking care of not touching him and spoke:

"Doyoualways...withgirls?" in one breath swallowing half of her words.
"Take a break Honey and talk slowly so I can understand." with smile.
"Do you alw...always talk like this wi...with girls? Hmmm... I mean using only hmmm... sugary words." reflecting her insecurities of judging him.
"Darling, you are my first and you will be my last!"

She sighed in contentment but came back to her previous posture with hesitation visible in her eyes and he smirked seeing her reactions.

"Can we go?" she asked him.
He removed his hands and went himself near her and took her left hand in his right and said:
"If I get a kiss!"
"Ahaaa!" her jaw dropped down.

He smirked and questioned:
"Do you like me Sugar?" he saw her reaction change, so he played his joker card "You love me! Am I right?" it sounded like a statement than a question.
Her mouth opened to an "O" shape giving away an answer to his question.

"So, I'm right!"

Suraj with a smirk closed her mouth with his fingers and gave a flashing smile to her as he remembered last evening event.

He is the happiest man in the world since he saw her confessing her love for him to the coffee mug and complaining about him being intimidating while she was preparing coffee for him and he was in the kitchen entrance to get water as Kasturi went to freshen up.

Remembering those sweet moment, he happily brought his left hand to her right cheek and caressing it, he asked her:
"Can I?"

Her crush, her first love is asking her, want her. Her heart is willing to give herself to him whereas her mind is screaming.

Finally, she closed her eyes and parted her lips giving in to his wish listening to her heart.

Closing himself near her, their breath mingled and he hold her right cheek tilting her head a little.

Chakor can now feel his hot breath on her lips, with that her knees became like jelly. So she balanced herself on him as he took hold of her by snaking his right hand over her waist.

Slowly his lips find their way to her soft petal lips, capturing them to a sweet passionate kiss. Few seconds later he felt her respond equally to him.

As the kiss progressed, their tongues danced in sync.

He moaned "I Love You Chakor!"
She moaned "Hmmm" in response.

Seconds became minutes after which they broke their first kiss being short of breath.

Chakor hugged him hiding her face in his chest when he tightened his grip on her waist with both his hands.

Once their breath came back to even, he caressed her left cheek smilingly with full of love for her in his eyes.

"Studies or Marriage, Flower?" still caressing her cheek.
She lifted her head to face him.
"Maa, Pap"
He didn't let her finish.
"I will talk to them Dear. You decide what you want Baby!"

With little hesitation, she started to utter her words of hesitation:
"Why do you Li... Lov"

Seeing her face he understood what she is trying to say, so he cut her question mid-way and asked:
"You want to know the reason Angel?"

She just nodded being still in his embrace.

Holding her face with both his hands and a smile playing on his lips, he continued:

"Listen Princess!
You are My Life!
You are My Love!
You are My First Love!
You are My Love At First Sight!
You are My Flechazo!"

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Did I fulfil your expectations or let you do?
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- Maithili
Edited by maithu_ - 8 years ago


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Posted: 8 years ago
#35
Totally worth the wait the plot was well executed 👏
Also hope you an awesome birthday love 🥳
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Posted: 8 years ago
#36
Beautiful update👏
It was upto expectations😊
Happy Birthday Maithali
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Posted: 8 years ago
#37
This is intense maithu...
Sukor's first kiss...chakor's unspoken love and suraj's most romantic praposal...Everything was fabulous...beautiful written dear...love it...🤗

And Happy Birthday maithu...🥳

This one for you...

Kyon sharminda karte ho..,ye rasmi baaten pooch kar..,
Haal mera wohi hai...jo tumne bana rakha hai...!!!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#38
Thanks for this birthday treat Maithu !!! It's very delicious.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: Immaturebookie

Totally worth the wait the plot was well executed 👏
Also hope you an awesome birthday love 🥳


Thanks for the compliment and wish dear!😊

Edited by maithu_ - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#40

Originally posted by: katheriene

Beautiful update👏

It was upto expectations😊
Happy Birthday Maithali

Thanks yaar!
Hope you will like my upcoming works too!

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