A different rebellion Story- Ghulam fanfic

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Tani

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Posted: 8 years ago

Ok, I know the show has just began and probably its too early for a fanfic...but this idea is just stuck in my mind and refuses to go away...so here I am writing a take on "Ghulam", its more of a story of rebellion. And I take a different perspective on Rangeela and Veer's bond...honestly I am just obsessed with the idea.

CAST:

Veer Pratap Chaudhary - Vikas Manaktala

Randeep Pratap Chaudhary Aka Rangeela - Param Singh

Rohini Pratap Chaudhary - Jennifer Winget

Chapter 1:

A normal morning of a normal household in Mumbai...A mans voice is heard...

"Rohini, Rohini...ROHINI"

"Aati hun baba"

A lady, in her mid thirties, wrapped in a housecoat, her hair in a tight bun comes in through door of a room.

"Kya hai?"

"Mere kapde nikal do na pls" the man calls from the bathroom. The lady takes out a navy blue shirt and a light grey pants and puts them on the bed neatly, as she is doing so, someone hugs her from behind.

"AAH, off ho Veer, Kya tum bhi subah subah" she said half chuckling..

"Arrey maari meethi chasni, raat ho yaah hum toh pyaase hi ravhe hain." He said in a native Haryanvi accent.

She pushed him away, he playfully shakes his head spraying water all over her face.

"Veer, achha nahi hoga" She said..

Veer pulled her closer, "Ke nahi hoga?"

"Achha nahi hoga" she said, putting her arms round his neck. They were just lost in each other suddenly there Rohini's phone beeped, snapping them back to reality. She checked the message, it was from her clinic, they just mailed her todays appointment list.

Veer had also started dressing up, as Rohini was moving out he asked "Shahzaade ki neend khulli ki nahi ?"

"Nahi, kal kaafi der se soya thha...waise bhi bulaye bina woh kabhi uthhta hai. Tum aayo main uthhati hun usse"

"Arey nahi tum breakfast laagao, main jagata hun usse" he was speaking in a normal accent again.

Another room of the flat. This room had blue cheery walls, one with a big poster of Sachin Tendulkar and on another wall was Barcelona team photograph. A desk, a book shelf, a wardrobe, and in one corner some weights, dumbles, and a football. On the bed a boy of about 26 was sleeping. Veer walks into this room. He smiles at the peacefully sleeping boy, he walks upto him and gently shakes him.

"Rangeela, uthh ja beta" his voice was soft and laced with care "Uthh ja rangeela, aarey suraj sar pein chhar aaya, uthh bhi ja"

"Toh main kya photosynthesis karun" Rangeela mumbles in his sleep turning to the other side.

"Arey, neend mein bhi sarcasm jhar ryah hai, chal uthh bhi jaa na. Arey chal bhai" He pulls him up. Rangeela criges his eyes and somehow shakes himself awake.

"Good morning bhaiya" He says sleepily

"Good mornind, ab chal jaldi se ready hole, teri bhabi breakfast laga rahi hai aur tujhe bhi college ke liye late ho jayega."

Half an hour later they were all at the breakfast table, Rangeela quickly gobbled up something and left, remembering that he had early lectures today, in his hurry tripping on the sofa, leaving Veer and Rohini in splits.

"Suno" Rohini says after Rangeela left "Kal Sarkar aur Amma jail se chhuth gaye, Ridhhima ka phone aaya thha"

"Mujhe pata hai" Veer said, his face had hardened. "Raghav ne batay, Rangeela ko kuchh batane ki abhi jarurat nahi hai. Kal uska Janam din hai, khamka kyun usse hum wo sab bohot pichhe chhor aaye hai..."

There was no more talk on this topic. They day went on as usual, they all came home. They had dinner together and went to bed.

"Like a normal family" Veer thought in bed "No one round here knows that our happy family hid such a hideous past. It all started from Behrampur, U.P..."

A story of rebellion, injustice, love and of a master and a slave...

Edited by livelyandlovely - 8 years ago

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Posted: 8 years ago

Seems interesting... Love the casting..

Waiting for the next part

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Anupama

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Posted: 8 years ago

very nice n crisp... the peaceful life of 2 brothers tinged with the horror of b'pur ... nice writing again

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Tani

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Posted: 8 years ago

Chap 2:

The story goes back 13yrs, to Berehmpur, to a place where as its name suggests mercy was scarce, where law and order were just words without meaning. There ruled, the tyrannic ruler without a crown, Bheema Pratap Choudhary. This was a land of cruelty, where power flowed only through the barrel of the gun. Women were treated like objects and men like slaves. The lady of Behrampur, Guguli Devi Choudhary, wife of Bheema Pratap Choudhary. A woman probably as dangerous as a snake, as shrewd as fox. Bheema Pratap Singh had three sons the eldest Ranvir Pratap Singh, as mean as his father and as shrewd and plotting as his mother. Their second son Manvir Pratap Chaudhary, a drug adddict, who was someone who didnt much approve of his fathers ways, he tried to oppose it. He tried to change the system and the system changed him. And his youngest son Veer Pratap Choudhary, the spoilt child, who had everything in a golden platter from birth, even a slave. Yes, a slave, Rangeela, an orphan boy who Bheema brought home when Veer was 10yrs of age and Rangeela was four. The master and slave had grown up together, and Rangeela had known nothing but slavery, he was a mere object for everyone something to be used. As age increased Rangeela accepted the fact that he will always be at the receiving end of Veer's anger, his personal punching bag. He would do Veer's odd jobs and for some strange reason he respected Veer sincerely. Veer was different from his brothers, he was powerful, tyrannic with a subdues anger on something always burning in him. But along with these, he had another side, he was really keen on completing his studies. He completed his class 12th from a school in neighboring village (Berahampur did not have schools, the only lesson they learned was how to fire guns). He got his degree in B.Com on correspondence course. He had seen from childhood that oppression was rule and had accepted as though it was right.

The story starts when Veer was 24 and Rangeela 18. The 18 years boy was already feared in Berahampur, his courage, power and wit was unparalleled. Everyone knew that he was lethal fighting machine, who obeyed veer without question and it was on his shoulders now that Choudhary empire was sanding, yet he was on his knees. It was usual day in Berehampur, Veer was body building in the morning, while Rangeela awaited him, it was the day of Shivratri. Today they had kidnapped a girl, she was to be married with Manvir. Manvir was still in his dilerium, and the girl was refusing to marry him. She was girl from a neighboring village. That night it was the sangeet ceremony of Manvir, all were present except Rangeela. Everyone was dancing and enjoying, completely ignoring the sobbing bride. Manvir was still intoxicated.

Bheema: Ghana Majja aa raha Veer. Rangeela kaha hai?

Veer: Shivratri hai sarkar, mandir mein hoga.

Bheema: Ha ghulami toh woh yaah teri kare hai yaah toh bhagwaan ki.

They both laughed.

Suddenly there was a crashing sound, and about 50 men armed with swords and rods attacked on them. The girls village people had attacked Berahampur to protect the honor of the girl. A bloody fight ensued. But how long could swords hold up against guns, soon they were overpowered and killed.

Bheema: Chale thhe Berahampur pe hamla karne.

Suddenly there was a gunshot, the bride had somehow laid her jands upon a gun and shot herself.

Next day Rangeela returned from temple. Veer called him to his room. As soon as Rangeela entered, Veer started beating him with belt.

Rangeela: Mujhse kya galti ho gayi malik?

Veer: Berehampur ki suraksha tere pe hai, phir kal wo log yaha ghushe kaise? Wo larki ne apni jaan de di...aur tu mandir mein para raha.

Suddenly Manvir who was passing by saw the scene and started laughing.

Veer: Has kyun raha hai?

Manvir: Kyun is bachhe pein apna gussa nikal raha hai? Aur tera gussa hai kis baat pein woh log ghush aaye uss pe yaah woh larki mar gayi uss pe...

Veer stopped dead in his tracks...this was question he couldnt answer himself. Manvir left. Veer started beating Rangeela with renewed anger.

Little did Veer know that soon he will have the answer to this question, and that answer make him question his own life...

Authors Note: First of all a big big big thank you to all those who liked my fanfic and all those who reviewed it. Thank you soo much for the response I am so happy.😊😳🤗 . Here's the second chap. Please read and tell me if you like it...please Read and Review...

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Tani

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Posted: 8 years ago

Chap 3:

Rangeela had taken Veer's beating silently and then gone off to do his daily jobs. He worked tirelessly all day. When he came back that night, suddenly Veer said.

Veer: Kal chalte ek cinema dekhna, yahi paas ke gaon mein.

Rangeela: Jaisa ap kahe malik...

So they went for the movie next day, Veer, Rangeela, Manvir (who had somehowhad been able to stay sober for 24 hrs) and two of their henchmen. The drove through the village market of Belapur, suddenly Veer said "Gari rok jara? Manne thhora halka hoke aana hai" He got down from the vehicle and slipped into a public toilet. When he was coming back he grabbed a packet of ciggerate from a vendor and casually walked off without paying. Everyone was terrified of Choudharys and especially of offending Veer, even in the neghboring village. As Veer was walking back to the car while lighting his sigerate. As he neared the car he didnt notice a girl in frot of him, he pushed pass herl and tripped. Instead of apologising he turned back and harshly said "Ohh Madam dekh ke nahi chal sakti." The girl calmly replied "Aapke sar ke pichhe aakhe hain kya?" "Ke?" Veer asked. "Nahi hain na, meri bhi nahi hai isiliye tum dikhe nahi.." Hearing this the others also ccame down from the car "Jyada hoshiyaari na kar chhori main kaun hun jaanti nahi hai tuh bavli, Veer Pratap Chaudharu naam hai inka, chup chaap ghutne tek ke maafi manglo aur chalti bano." one of his henchmen said "Toh" the girl replied "Yeh kya bhagwan ho, yaah yeh sarak inhone hai." "Mardon se jabaan larati hai" Veer shouted. "Kyun mardon se jaban larane pe tax laga hai kya?" the girl said "Aur tum apne mard kahte ho, aurton pe zulm uthhane waale kamzoro pein apni taqat dikhane waale namard ho tumlog." "Ohh madam khamkha baat ka batangar na banao, uthhwa lenge aur aisi jagah pohuchayenge jaha se tum wapas aa na paao." "Aur kar bhi kya sakte ho tumlog" She said "Suna tumhe apni dulhane bhi uthhake laani parti hai, ab zahir si baat hai jo apni aurton ki raksha nahi kar sakte upar se khud unhe chot pohunchate hain, waise na mard kaunsi ladki apni marzi se shaadi karna chahegi." "Kaun hai tuh? Kya samjhto hai apne aapko?" Rangeela said "Insaan hun, jis shabd matlab shayad tum log ko nahi pata" she said "Iss gaaon ki haspatal mein posted hun, doctor hun, Rohini Singh naam hai mera. Kabhi apne bigde huye dimag ka ilaaj karvana ho toh aa jana." And she stormed off "Ruk..." Rangeela was about say something but Veer stopped him "Jaan de Rangeela...Bavliyon ke muh nahi lagte" Rangeela stopped. "Suno" Veer said to his henchmen "iss sab ke bare amma yaah Sarkar ko pata nahi chalna chahiye, khakha jhamela mat barao" The henchmen nodded. Hearing this Manvir started laughing. "Bhai tuh phir kyun has raha hai?" Veer asked irritated. "Haaye, Chinghari koi bhadke toh saavan usse bujhaye aag lage jo saavan mein usse kaun bujhaye" Manvir said "Kuchh nahi chal phillam miss ho javegi chal." They left. They watched the movie, and came back. But Veer was still irritated, for some reason he was unable to get the girl out of his minds. Her big dreamy eyes, her fiery glare and her words as hard hitting as a slap on face...yet he couldnt bring himself to plot against the girl, it was the strangest most frustrating feeling in the world...

Authors Note: Here's the third chap...hope you guys like it, pls pls review it your point of views matter a lot to me...pls pls like and review even if you want something particular to happen in this fic pls let me know...I will definitely consider it...

Also I removed the character of Shivani from cast now because I am not sure if at all that character will be there, because its more of a RanVeer bonding story and also Veehini's love story...so I might introduce her later but not now...

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Tani

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Posted: 8 years ago

Hey next update when i get atleast four reviews...pls tell me if anythings wrong with the story or if you like apart just let me know that you want to read this story or not...pls friends...

Edited by livelyandlovely - 8 years ago

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NONIE

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Posted: 8 years ago

Fantastic parts😃

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Tani

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Posted: 8 years ago

Guys first of all my apologies for my outburst. I am really sorry, but it feels bad to lose your readers. Anyway I am really sorry for the outburst and for disappearing. I will continue to write the story no matter what because the story just wont go away from my mind. But still its a humble request, pls review or like or do something to let me know that you guys are still reading pls its a deperate humble request. And to make up for the delay of upload today I will be uploading a long chapter...

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Tani

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Posted: 8 years ago

Chap 4:

Veer had instructed his men not to tell anything to his parents but the word spread like wildfire. His parents called him for a talk. "Ke sun raha hun veer? Ek chhori tujhe khara khota suna ki chali gayi, tanne kuchh kiya nahi." Bheema, Veer's father said. "Ha baba" Veer said, knowing there is no use of lying "Chhor diya, bavli chhori thhi. Kabhi bhi uthha ka phikwa sakta hun." "Toh uthhwa le chhori ne" his Mother, Gulguli. "Nahi amma" Veer said "maar dushmani hai manne hee niptani hai" "Thhik hai" Bheema said "varna hum tor denge uska gurur. Aur maara beta hai tu, aurton ko paaon ki jutti ki tarah rakhna sikh. Varna log kahenge ki Bheem rao ka beta napunsak hai. Aur yeh mai katahi bardash na karunga."

Veer came out of the room irritated. "RANGEELE...RANGEELE" "Kya baat hai malik" one servant asked him. "Rangeela kaha hai?" "Belapur gaye hain. Sarkar ne kisi kaaam se bheja hai." "Belapur!!!" Veer was astound. "Kahi sarkar ne us dactarni ko toh..." Veer thought. And with an inexplicible concern he rushed out grabbed the keys of the jeep, and drove in almost the speed of air to Belapur and went straight to the government health centre. "Yaha koi Rohini hai" he asked a nurse rushing in. "Jee ha! Woh..." "Kaha?" Veer asked. "Yaha" He heared a voice from behind, he saw Rohini standing in a blue fitted salwar, an apron over it. She wore very less jwellery and was smiling a confident smile that Veer was not very accostomed to see on girls faces "Toh aapne khaali dimag ka ilaaj karne ka phaisla kar liya" She asked in a jeering tone. "Dekh chhori jyada hoshiyaari na maar.." Veer said "Sirf bata Rangeela aaya thha kya yaha?" "Rangeela, matlab woh ladka jo uss din tumhare saath thha." She asked "Usse subah bazaar mein dekha thha. Sach kahu tum logon mein uss eki se main impressed hun. Sher ka jigra hai, aaj yaha ke panchayat ne ek ladki ko bina ki saboot ke hi saaza de di, uski koi galati bhi nahi thhi, wo ladka usse pareshan karta tha aur panchayat wo baat sunne ko tayyar hi nahi thhe. Maine rokne koushis ki, shayad rok bhi leti, par ariyal bayal hai, ladna mushkil hai. Fir na jane kaha se Rangeela aaya, kya akad hai aur kya dhaank hai. Sach tumlogon ek mard toh hai." "Rangeela hai toh sau ke barabar" Veer said almost to himself "Aur sun mauri (mauri means girl) zara sambhal ke rahiyo tu, Berehampuriyon ke muh lagi hai tu." Veer said to her. "Arey tum jaise na mardon se main nahi darti." Rohini said "Waise tumhe meri itni chinta kyun hai." "Chinta nahi chetavni de raha hun" He said and walked away. "Veer Pratap Choudhary" Rohini from behind, Veer stopped. "Ajeeeb hai tumhari chetavni aisi hoti hai, koi aur sunega toh sochega ki tumhe meri chinta hai." Veer ignored her and walked to the car and drove towards the market. Rohini also followed him in her scooty, she found Veer a very interesting psychological study. Veer was seething in fustration, it was a running conflict in his mind. He drove to the market, stopped in the middle of the market place. Rangeela who was eating at a thhela near by seeing Veer's jeep rushed to him. As soon as he reached the jeep, Veer slapped him. "Bohot zor ki lagi na" Veer asked "Ab laga apne aap ko itne hi zor se." Without any question, Rangeela started slapping himself. Rohini was stunned, she had seen this same boy fighting with all those angry villagers for a girls dignity. "Woh ladki mujhe itna kuchh boli uss din aur tuh sunta raha" Veer said, Rangeela kept on slapping himself "Teri vajah Amma aur Sarkar mereko suna rahe hain, pata nahi uss ladki ke saath kya..." "Ek minute" Rohini same rushing from her scooty and held Rangeela's hands tightly, stopping him and turned to Veer. "Tumhara dimaag sach mein kharab hai kya?" She asked "Tumne uss din inhe kuchh karne se roka, aaj yaha chale aaye yeh janne ki Rangeela mujhe uthhane aaya thha yaha nahi. Aur ab apni fustration iss pe nikal rahe ho." "Dekhiye aap bich mein.." Rangeela started. "Tum chup raho." Rohini shouted. "Main tumhare maalik se baat kar rahi hun." She again turned to Veer "Tum gussa kis baat pe ho?" Rohini asked. "Agar meri sachchaiya sun kar tumhe gussa aa raha hai, toh main aur do din hun yaha fir main yaha se Delhi chali jayungi. Agar badle ka mood bane toh mujhse badla lena isse nahi." "Dekh chhori" Veer said.. "Mera naam Rohini hai." Rohini replied. "Dekh Rohini" Veer said. "Tuh Berehempur ko jaanti nahi hai, maare sarkar teri aisi halat karenge na...tuh thora sambhal ja." Rohini smirked "Honestly, mujhe na lagta hai tum isliye fustrated ho, kyun ki tumhare bauji ne mujhe maarne ki dhamki di." Rohini said. "Agar aisa hi hai toh roko unhe. Aur agar nahi rok sakte toh bhul jao, mai apni dekbhal kar lungi." "Aisa kuchh na hai." Veer said. "Agar aage kuchh boli main hi teri jabaan khinch lunga, chhor Rangeela ka haath." Rohini left his hand. Rangeela was about to slap himself again. "Rangeela ruk" Veer said. "Tuh bike se aaya?" "Nahi bus se" Rangeela said. "Kaam ho gaya yaha ka?" Veer asked. "Haan" Rangeela replied. "Chal gaari mein baithh." Veer said. Rangeela was about to get in the drivers seat. But Veer didnt budge from there, "Yaha nahi baaju mein baithh." Veer said. Rangeela climbed in. Veer drove off. Rohini stood there confused, "Ajeeb hai, yeh ariyal tattu meri baat maan kaise jaata hai." she thought "Pata nahi."

Veer was driving in great speed to keep his mind off Rohini. She fustrated him, why had he rushed to her this morning, obviously Rangeela had gone there to finalise the arms deal with the sarpanch of village, why had he been so worried about Rohini. After that why had he punished Rangeela, really what was he angry at. Rangeela was sitting next to him silently, he was a slave he didnt have right to complain, cry, shout or be angry. He had been punished for no reason, but then he was used to bieng punished for no reason. Veer looked at him. He suddenly opened the dash board, picked a chocolate. "Yeh le" he said extended the chocolate to Rangeela. Rangeela took it silently and smiled.

Two days later they Rangeela and Veer were returning from a Village upnorth, from a MPs sons marriage. Veer was invited and he had taken Rangeela along. Rangeela was driving humming to himself, they were near Belapur, driving through a jungle when suddely they had to stop, a log was there obstructing the road, Rangeela went down to remove the log. Suddenly someone hit him on his back. Within a split second Rangeela turned and landed a blow on his attackers shoulder. About 20 men, armed with sharp weapons had attacked them. Veer had also came out of the car and started fighting. Rangeela was trained fighter, a lethal weapon. He simultaneously fought the men while shouting to Veer. "Aap gaari mein wapas jao malik, maanne sambhal lunga." But Veer was also doing his part. They fought like two shadows, destroying their attackers. Half of them ran away and some lost consciousness. "Pata nahi kaha kaha se aa jaate hain." Veer said. "Lagta hai koi aur thhakur ne gunde bheje thhe aapko maarne." Rangeela said. "Yaa tujhe marne" Veer said, Veer now Rangeela was target of their rivals, he was there most efficient henchman. "Chal wapas chalte hain." Veer called. As they were walking, something unforseen happened. Suddenly there was sound of two gunshots, and Veer watched horrified as Rangeela dropped to the ground. Veer saw the man, Rangeela had beaten unconscious had somehow regained his senses and fired, before he could fire another shot, Veer shot him dead. Then he rushed to Rangeela. "Rangeela" he called "Rangeela, aankhe khol." His mind wasn't working any more, as though his world had crashed in that moment. He lifted Rangeels up, there were two wounds one on his hand and the other on his chest. He laid Rangeela on back seat of the car after tying his wounds to stow the flow. He then drove as smoothly as he can towards Belapur. The only thing his mind could think right now was "Hospital" and the nearest was in Belapur.

Precap: In a hospital, Doctors talk that saving Rangeela will be hard. Veer hears. Rohini consoles Veer.

Authors note: From next chap Veer's journey to light begins so guys pls pls tell me what you think about it, pls pls. I love to read your POVs and opinions pls...

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