~THE UNDOING~(MG) (UPDATING & Note-Pg 32) - Page 6

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nice story, misterius. Please please please continue soon
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who force her
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waiting next

very nice part
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Intriguing parts and loved the concept!!!
its catchy and i wanted more!! :D
Loved the updates!!!
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seems very interesting story...

I think it is some supernatural story...and I love that...

and I assume the narrator is girl...

eagerly waiting for next part...

thanx for pm...
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Congrats for new story
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lovely update
geet felt something or someone but ignoring it
thnx for update
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Edited by angelwords - 8 years ago
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~THE UNDOING~

Chapter-3







I heard bird chirping, i slowly opened my eyes and sunlight directly came to eye. I closed my eyes again. I love snuggling to my blanket. I again open my eyes and told myself to get up. I hate morning. I don't want to leave my bed early morning. I saw towards my side table and observed that it was 10 o'clock. I quickly sat on my bed and cursed myself for waking up so late. It strange my mom didn't same to wake me up. Our house has rule. My Mom late indiscipline . Our house rule include- waking up on time , having breakfast on time and other normal rule. I quickly jump off my bed and ran to my washroom. I quickly brushed my teeth and got ready. I climbed down the stair and started searching for my mom. There was complete silence in the house and it was strange. I started searching for my mom in different places but was not able to find her. I ran outside my house to search her. As soon as i opened my house door and went outside. I saw that there no one outside. I started walking towards our neighbor house, but i noticed there was no one on whole road. Everything was silent. There no one, not even a single person. I started to panic.I didn't understand what was happening. I ran towards more houses in our neighbor. But there was no one. Now i started to get scared. I started shouting my mom and dad names.Hoping that they would listen. That someone will listen and seek for me. But no one came. I started running in different directions, in a hope to see one person. But no one came out.

I pacified myself saying its just a bad dream. Yes a bad dream. It will be over in no time. But alas!! it didn't get over. I pinched myself, hoping that after this i will wake up from this dream. But alas!! i am still standing there alone. I heard a moment. I quickly jumped out of surprise. I was scared. Scared for my life. With lots of courage i started to walking towards the source of moment. I reached a old house. I opened the door and i saw a old man. He was very very old. I think around 85-90. His eye was closed. I slowly reached to him. With shaky hand i tried to touch him. As soon as i was going to touch him, he opened his eyes and saw towards me. I stumbled backwards. He started laughing. It was scary laugh. i was panicking. He mumbled some words. I was not able to understand it. It was strange language. He stopped laughing and saw towards me with the smirk. And started shouting Its Happening' Its Happening' . I was curiously watching him when he grabbed my hand and pulled me towards him. He whispered in my ears vv..v'. I was not able to understand what he was saying when i felt the weight of his whole body on me. I started pulling myself from him and felt no responses from him. When i heard some voices from behind me. I saw a lady in her old 30's, walking towards me and behind her i saw my mom. I shouted my mom's name. She and the lady saw me and ran towards me. The lady shouted father. She started crying. I knew why, He was dead. I quickly ran to my Mom and hugged her tightly. She started rubbing my back slowly, understanding my fears and anxiety. My mother consoled me. She said its okay.

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Here is Part 3

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Edited by angelwords - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Great update
Waiting to know how the mystery unfold
Thanks dear

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Posted: 8 years ago
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my God update was so scary...

what is happening...where was Geet's parents...and other people in neighborhood...where were they...

the old man whispered something but soon he is dead...


waiting for next part...

thanx for pm...

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