A SuKor OS - An Eventful Afternoon *16+*

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sahashrabdi

@..chotu..

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

Should I comment? Or shouldnt I?
Oh that 16+ warning ogles at me! So definitely I can! 🤣

This was again a fire on screen wala OS. You described everything so well! Right from Chakor's saree to Vivaan's toota hua dil! 🤣

And Sukor! ☺️
Now I'm like,
"Dil ke armaan, Sanu ke OS pure kar diye" 🤣

Maaf karo but I want to do FEVIQUIK ad here. 😛

(Suraj ke) Toote hue buttons ke liye fevikwik feviquik,
(Vivaan ke) Toote hue dil ke liye kaiuun kaiuun!
🤣 🤣

Keep writing more dear!

And people please dont report Sanu. 😭 Tell her instead. 😊

🤗

Edited by ..chotu.. - 8 years ago

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Namita

@Namita-M

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 8 years ago

Sanu, you've made my day, you beautiful girl!! I loved it so very much.
Not vulgar!! It's written well. Love how everything for Chakor centred around Suraj. It was sweet and uber romantic.
Vivaan's broken heart, was the icing on top.

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Meeshu

@LeMeesh

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

Its very well written! Just came across all of your OS' today and read through them all 😊 I liked that the feelings were more magnified than the physical act itself if it makes sense? Didn't seem vulgar in my opinion. Sukor were so adorable! Also I really liked that you made Vivaan realise what he lost 😆 Enjoyed reading all your works 😊

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Esha Singh

@eshasrk

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

What a beautiful story...I am still in daze

You are such an awesome writer and you have described SuKors feelings for each other so beautifully...the Suraj in ur story is so amazing...

And Suraj is Chakors world...he has healed her completely

And yes !!!...loved Vivaan's broken heart 😈

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crystal30003

@crystal30003

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

This was great! I've read all 4 parts and they just keep getting better and better. Plus you write 18+ and 16+ stories really well. I hope you continue writing more parts to this as your story background is different to others who have written. Writing more parts would be good and if you didn't do a big leap of months or years it would be great as I like how the time gap between the stories are short like a couple of days or weeks. Once again amazing writing.

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nycgal

@nycgal

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

Beautiful Sanya!! very well written..

Loved the little details on the emotions...mde my imagiation very vivid..#guttermind alert..lol

and as Nami mentioned I had such a sense of calm when Vivaan didnt know what hit him ..👏🤣

AND NOT VULGAR AT ALL

please keep writing

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Kavya

@Kavi.Kapoor

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

Awesome piece!Thoroughly enjoyed it, wasn't vulgar in the least.Although I loved Sukor's part, I loved Vivaan's heart-break portion more😈😆.You're a fantastic writer!!!!!

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Tabsi

@Tabsi

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

loved it.. So beautiful.. And suraj rested on chakors lap
Playful n flirty suraj is the best!!
Also just by reading this i could tell chakor is genuinely so happy n in love with suraj <3
A big slap on Vivians face. Loved how he saw them together in this state ..