Originally posted by: shahbhavini
⭐️Acute Chronic Eccentric Imagination disorder⭐️
What a title... 😛 Beautifully written OS😃... Wow👏... In one short story, I was able to connect with all character... The way you have introduced Jodha's parent and their worries... concern simply connected to the character and the story and on another hand Jodha's goal and disinterest in marriage well written. Awesome beginning
>>>OMG Bhavi! 😲😲 Seriously when you said you will read it later. I didn't even thought you will read. But you commented too. OMG! *** I faint *** Please someone sprinkle some water! 🤢
>>>Thank you so much really I'm honored!
Jogesh and Tharani didn't like to send her daughter far away in the name of work. She's their only child and they always see her as a blessed gift of their love life. Even her name was taken from joining their first letters.
In one line reader can guess how happy Jodha's life is so far.
>>> Yes she is! 😊
Sometimes fate has different plans for you! "If it's another girl, definitely she would have cried alone at least for an hour but what I did was preparation for another set of arguments to go for work." She stealthily grinned at the opportunist in her.
She got lucky... definitely, destiny has a different plan for our Chellam.
>>>Awww It's so nice to hear 'Chellam' from you!
"Yeah yeah I always forgot that you're not taken from garbage can" he jested. "Paa..." She cried placing her hands on hip and making a puppy face.
This joke is popular in my home... My sis used to tease me they found me in Mela... heheh
>>>My home too. My elders always tease me!
Lovingly watching her daughter's cute antics, Tharani thoughtfully called "Jomma" Puzzled Jodha, directed her glances straight at her mother because it's very rare her mother calling her Jomma. If she does, then she is going to talk something very serious. She looked up to her father questionably but her father chuckled seeing her daughter's face and assured her by blinking his eyes.
This line again connects me with the family and their understanding for each other in deeper way... U R really good in gripping readers into the story.
>>>Aww ☺️ Thank you 🤗
"Chellam... Let amma finish. It's actually good news for you!" Jogesh built up the suspense. Getting the cue, "Ok ok... Enough is enough!!" with a mischievous grin, Tharani happily announced, "So, in order to broaden our search of Prince charming for our princess of heart, we thought of sending her to exile in the name of work; so that both parties will go through probation period of separation till Prince charming making his grand entry!!" Jodha's eyes widened in surprise.
"That doesn't mean we restrict you from bringing Prince charming all by yourself" Jogesh playfully winked, "and we don't mind even if you say that your beautiful eye beggar as your better half" with that all of them broke into a bout of laughter.
What a sweet family... and loving parent who not only understands their daughters wish and need for the time but trust her equally.
>>>You got it rightly.👏 It's obvious Jodha need some time before anything. That's why they thought of allowing her to work as her wish. 😳
"Yeah Anna... It's restricted in peak hours but we can take 'U' turn in next signal." Driver perplexed hearing her strange reply. She zipped her lips tight and turned her face away not to erupt her chuckles out. "Who in the earth prefer traveling 500m more that too in the snail pace traffic rather taking few strides across the road? You're a gone case Jodha!" She self-chided, "But I'm too tired for anything!! Let's pay some attention to road side Romeos!!"
Relaxing herself in that not so comfortable seat, she lazily watched the bustling view on her opposite direction. Life in the city is always challenging though it has its own advantages still... The Noise... The Smell... And the traffic but if you're not in a hurry, you can enjoy traffic jams also. As she was screening the morning rush, something caught her attention. "What's that?" She leaned forward to get the better view. "Woah!! It's Jaguar!!" Her lips curved into a beautiful smile. Weren't Jalal and Jaguar inseparable?? Recalling the favorite line from her favorite novel, she went on checking further. "My my... It's the latest sport model. Sleek and seductive as advertised!" With the smile of satisfaction, she was about to check the interior.
What I love about this two para... how U describe every detail of the surrounding including her uncomfortable seat... traffic... noise... smell... the rush hours feel... I did not only visualize in my mind but I even smelled it... Kalgi I never read any of your writing before... You really awesome my dear.
What a splendid gift to Jhanu... As soon as I read Jaguar I thought about pbd... heheh
>>> Bhavi you got to be kidding me. 😆This is the only writing I've ever tried. But I take it as compliment. Thank you dear. And Yes I've imagined Jodha as PBD reader. 😳
Ruku... Surya and Jo...
>>>😆
"We have got smokingly hot new BOSS... My God! He is the handsomest man I've ever seen. Uff" She mimicked fanning herself.
Simply interesting dialogues ... perfectly written convo between two colleagues cum friend.
>>>Thank you!😳
SMOKINGLY HOT. A masculine form with cute frowned face flashed in Jodha's mind. "If I could kiss that contracted brows..." She unconsciously closed her eyes in that passionate imagination. "What??" She terrified by at the same time. "I think I'm also suffering from Acute Chronic Eccentric Imagination disorder!" Expelling her thoughts, "then what happened to our old boss?" she sounded worried but her friend presumed her terrified expression as her worry for old boss.
Again this scene... perfecting placed imagination... Jodha's imagination soared to the owner of Jaguar...
>>>You guessed it right! 👍🏼
Omg... After this part... I just read without putting a second thought in my mind to comment... I was so engrossed... each and every line are written with an art. JODHA AKBAR... Well, when I read Akbar... I imagined our stranger AKBAR in the modern era as Steaven Seagal... Maybe because I just watched one of the old movies of Steven Seagal... That call Acute Chronic Eccentric Imagination disorder...heheh...
Tell u the truth last half I felt I was reading PBD... I felt in every dialogue Jhanu's wit... Seriously what and an amazing treat to our Jhanvi...
Superbly written OS...⭐️⭐️
>>>I'm honored Bhavi. Thank you so much for your encouraging words. 😳 Seriously I didn't expect this from you. Thank you so much for your time and beautiful comment beside your busy schedule. It means a lot. 🤗
Sorry 😕for late comment...🤗
>>>No... No worries actually I'm so happy that you've read my one and only work 😃
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