Story: The search for Abhijeet - Page 5

Originally posted by: suhani.cipamisa

Hi viz!
Reading it today intermittently while at work lol!
So the story as usual started with abhi! Your shuddha hindi is quite good, the dialects the villagers use is quite natural.
The rural problems of connectivity issues are bang on!
Abhi's reaction on seeing baidji os priceless! Can literally see it!
Viz your stories make me 'see', a mark of a great writer!
Hm the bellboy is stupid to not to have gone to police at once. Why tell the manager at all! Manager is definitely involved.

A suspect cannot be kept in custody after 24 hours without proof. So 24 hours having passed by, thankgod chitrole made them release kumar otherwise things would have gone awry for praddy!

Thx

Wow acp and daya are so experienced to realise that something is fishy. Thank goodness they didnt rush to nagpur at once.
Ok now insp gaurav tells abt bellboy. What would make daya feel something is wrong here?
Am sure manager killed. Obvious.
Touches of kd pathak style investigation lol!
O btw freddy in ure stories is always wt either of duo- u r so fond of that dear chap!
Gaurav is too keen to know case details... Daya telling him nearly everything? Cops are usually discreet and reserved on info... Kya pata gaurav hi gadbad hai!

Why should CID team unnecessarily suspect every other uniformed cop? 😆 Even in Crime patrol they show cops sharing info...

Very very apt- freddy is right, too coincidental of phone getting switched of at that very very coincidental!
I like how daya freddy go on foot (or rather in car) to see in details where abhi's last position was pinpointed. "Between two tolls" is quite a good idea but of huge distance. Poora din lagega!
Wow viz u have researched so well on names, routes, highways etc!
O 100km! Great viz u have left no loophole! Ure stories have realistic touches!
Back to abhi. A bit more background story to how the case came to cid and how/why mumbai cid insp has to go to goa at all could have sufficed. Why not just take help of goa cops, whether in mumbai or goa, goa cops could have been involved...

As it is the story was long I wanted some things to be left to the reader's imagination.

How did his phone go missing? The car was damaged right? When the villagers got him out, did they not see if he had any identity papers etc? O why wasnt the local police or forest officials informed?

The guy who caused the accident stole it along with ID cards so that even if the body is discovered they don't know that it's a cop immediately. forest officials are not present all over the place. They took time to arrive and villagers came before them.

If mumbai-goa road is damaged, how come daya-freddy came to goa? Another route?

Mumbai Goa route is not damaged. Abhi went off the highway when he realised his brakes are not working.

How coincidental of them to find the dhaba. Would have been less coincidental if they searched for any stops like dhaba as well...

O now daya feels that it is likely abhi may have stopped here... Wow viz u ans my ques in the next sentence lol. But it would have been more natural if the dhaba wasnt the same dhaba but the idea would have stuck.

I didn't go into more details about places they enquired and didn't get info. Already the story was so long.

Wow u used that aloo-allergy reference! Ure favourite!
O the only other customer in that dhaba was following abhi... Hm
Btw ek sawaal achanak aaya dimag mein- when abhi came to know that the manager shut the bellboy up, why didnt he suspect and investigate spot on, or inform acp and daya?

no. he thought the manager was only trying to avoid controversy...he was in a hurry to reach Mumbai with the evidence. There were lot more things which couldn't be whatsapped. So he had to reach Mumbai before Chitroley ordered CID to release the suspects.

Haha that whatsapp retry sending video is so so apt for all of us!
2g? Very realistic!
Cops in your stories are normal human beings and u still have that golden era touch!
So normal to search for a location for hours and then to trek... They have to do it... All part of being cops in such situations... By the way how is acp being updated every hour? Or is he?

Yes, as long as signal is available.

Nice image! That very place or somewhere else?

That very place??? 🤣 This is fiction, ok?

Was the forest officer having the area cleared?
So when abhi's phone stolen, was abhi there injured and unconscious? Didnt the person check abhi's pulse, as it was raining and the car flames died down quickly?
Didnt the suitcase get damaged? The car bonnet could be opened easily?

The person was more concerned about taking the phone and other evidence and vanishing from the place. Cars don't always burst into flames like that. The engine starts burning and then the flames reach the diesel tank...by then he escaped. but later, it rained and the flames were put off.

Suitcase is at the rear end...engine was burning, you know...

Hi again. Now reading 4th part. Was under the weather so couldnt finish.
So... Finally duo and freddy together.

Btw had a train of thoughts while reading the other parts so may not remember my questions fully.

Quite difficult to trek in monsoon with no gear.

When the boy called daya he supposed to pass abhi's mesg abt 21st july. So why did daya sound surprised? Why didnt the boy pass this mesg as well?

Maybe the boy was confused and forgot.

Who took the phone? Why were nagpur police not asked to trace it to the thief?

No point really...they knew that the guy who stole the phone would have thrown it into a lake and left the place...what's the use tracing the phone now?

Loved the duo bantering! Lolz
Trekking wt abhi already still healing. Very difficult yaar! Anyway yeh ek kahani hain! Aur sab kuch mumkin hote hain!
Wifi and dropbox backup is a marvellous idea!
Btw the bellboy was stupid to have told the manager abt telling abhi...
Camera man and uncle sam idea... Hmmm wow vizz nice idea... But then camera man as chief minister... Innovative but coincidental! Has to have some logic as to how abhi reached that conclusion... Or was he informed abt the guest lists?

Sometimes they just get a hunch...like ACP in 571E1115. 😆

O so the audio engineer followed abhi and left the phone in nagpur?
Kumar is innocent then?
Btw how was reena's phone wt cid mumbai when she was murdered in goa?

They didn't murder her and dump the body somewhere. She's an actress. they made it look like she was in her house and someone came and killed her.

Cant goa police hunt for manager? Why does duo have to go to goa?

The case is in Mumbai, Goa police can take him into custody but duo have to bring him to Mumbai.

Haha loved abhi's expression! Can imagine daya's evil face too!

Overall, a fabulous viz style story! Please dont mind my too many questions!! I loved it and it kept my attention till the last word!

Keep writing!