Story : Girl With A Gun (My Shatir Lekhak Entry- 1)

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Rifah

@HIDEnSEEK06

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#11

Nice one.👏

I liked the girls hypnotism part.

But ending is not satisfactory. Seems like FW style rushing ending😆

Rajiv is gonna get the property...so he can be...then chase...culprit is in Cid's hand!

U could have added some more investigation parts.😳

Anyways, good one😃

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Kulasya.

@Kulasya.

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#12

Thank you both .

@RIfi , I wanted to increase it . My story idea needed some more pages. But FW limit 45 mins uska kya kare ? They already took at least 10-12 minutes from the story in the theme itself .

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Gamayun

@Minionite

Channel Moderator

+ 53

Team Silver Trio

Posted: 9 years ago

#13

After reading this I can understand why there were less entries from IFians. But you did a great job with this plot. I honestly read the plot and thought "what crap", but you did a great job. 👏

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23Diya

@23Diya

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#14

Finally I'm here too.😆

You really managed to bring some good words to avoid those 🤢 words...that's the biggest achievement.

The way the girl was hipnotised was something new and I liked it.

Culprit was guessable.😆

But overall it was an awesome attempt.👏

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Rifah

@HIDEnSEEK06

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: Kulasya.
Thank you both .
@RIfi , I wanted to increase it . My story idea needed some more pages. But FW limit 45 mins uska kya kare ? They already took at least 10-12 minutes from the story in the theme itself .

I can understand😊

Write more stories😃

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Kulasya.

@Kulasya.

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#16

Thank you all of you . Your words mean lot to me . 😊

@Diya , Just starting to read your story . Was very busy in other things. Sorry for that 😊

@All , I have a story of one more plot 😛 Will post soon 😉

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23Diya

@23Diya

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: Kulasya.
Thank you all of you . Your words mean lot to me . 😊
@Diya , Just starting to read your story . Was very busy in other things. Sorry for that 😊

@All , I have a story of one more plot 😛 Will post soon 😉

That's no problem.

I too am always late.😆