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Karaali

@Karaali

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Posted: 9 years ago

#11

This is amazing. I agree with one of the other posters that they should not be marrying anyway but it is OK.

I wish some of the turmoil a girl goes through after such an event. Sharmila just walks around with a swollen face. You have done a great job telling her side of the story.

Neel-Sharmila story also need some time on the show. I would love to see how they grow as a couple. Earlier reports that Sharmila was negative. I really hope that is not true. Gauri, her mother adnd Kalyani are enough!

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_innocent_

@_innocent_

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Posted: 9 years ago

#12

So Tannu Ji...I finally get to read one of your creative pieces...I have to say, kudos to you for writing all of that on your phone.

I loved the story...I loved your take on what transpired between Sharmila and Neel. Sharmila was given the platform to express herself. She felt suffocated, as despite being the victim she was being treated as if she was the one who committed the crime. I loved how she sat there imagining her perpetrator at home smirking, etc.

Neel repenting and confessing his wrongs to her. That was lovely. As she was then put in a dilemma...wondering whether or not to forgive him, etc...!

Honestly, I liked this take from Sharmila's perspective. You've handled it a lot better than the makers did. Well done!

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950842

Hibernated

Posted: 9 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: Katori
This is amazing. I agree with one of the other posters that they should not be marrying anyway but it is OK.
I wish some of the turmoil a girl goes through after such an event. Sharmila just walks around with a swollen face. You have done a great job telling her side of the story.

Neel-Sharmila story also need some time on the show. I would love to see how they grow as a couple. Earlier reports that Sharmila was negative. I really hope that is not true. Gauri, her mother and Kalyani are enough!

Thanks a ton! My friend has gone through this turmoil and she has been vocal about it to me so it was not very tough to imagine how Sharmila must have felt in that situation. The dread, the constant fear, the humiliation when you are not the one to blame, the pressure to get married to save your dignity, the whole fact that society has to point fingers at a girl because she decided to stand up for herself (whether positively or negatively). There is no option but to give in to society. And if the world progresses in the same manner, we will be back in the age when women had no rights or voice at all. I hope she does not turn negative on the show but if she does, I for one would understand where that comes from. Mutual respect for your work. Love it. Adore it. Bookmarked it to make sure I dont miss out on updates!!

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950842

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Posted: 9 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: _innocent_
So Tannu Ji...I finally get to read one of your creative pieces...I have to say, kudos to you for writing all of that on your phone.

I loved the story...I loved your take on what transpired between Sharmila and Neel. Sharmila was given the platform to express herself. She felt suffocated, as despite being the victim she was being treated as if she was the one who committed the crime. I loved how she sat there imagining her perpetrator at home smirking, etc.

Neel repenting and confessing his wrongs to her. That was lovely. As she was then put in a dilemma...wondering whether or not to forgive him, etc...!

Honestly, I liked this take from Sharmila's perspective. You've handled it a lot better than the makers did. Well done!

Thank You Aisha Ji.

I genuinely value your feedback and opinion.

I wanted to have it grounded in reality. No matter how far we come, when it comes to actually showing us respect, this society fails. And the imaginations stem from the fact that you have seen so many of those sadist people that you lose trust in humanity. In fact, I would say sometimes I feel even that is dead. I simply wanted to stick to their characters and not deviate much because then it loses its appeal, so Neelu Bhaiya is exactly like he is in the show and so is Sharmila, except she is more vocal about everything that is going on in the interiors of her mind in my OS. I wanted to bring to light the injustice that these girls suffer because whether you are knowingly or unknowingly tarnishing her self respect, she is the silent sufferer in the process and has to give her own life up to a person she can perceptually never learn to love or respect. I get very disturbed when I read such cases and I am truly one of the proponents that cannot make much change in the world as of now by representing such people but through the course of my story, I wanted to bring about my own thoughts on this issue. I am glad you like it so much because I put my heart and soul into this one, there is no fantasy about it.

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Mithi373

@Mithi373

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Posted: 9 years ago

#15

Wow!! This was a great story! You reallyy managed to write a beautiful first person point of view on a victim of rape or almost rape ! This states a lot of things that need to be touched on in Indian dramas or just in general!! I love this! It's so well written! Again wishing they had unfolded the story differently, perhaps showing Sharmila fighting for her rights instead of getting revenge'

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950842

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Posted: 9 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: Mithi373
Wow!! This was a great story! You reallyy managed to write a beautiful first person point of view on a victim of rape or almost rape ! This states a lot of things that need to be touched on in Indian dramas or just in general!! I love this! It's so well written! Again wishing they had unfolded the story differently, perhaps showing Sharmila fighting for her rights instead of getting revenge'

Thank You. This is the most personal I've ever gotten with a writing piece. Literally poured all my sentiments and resentment towards how society sees a girl who is not wholly at fault and cannot be the one blamed alone and forced into something without consent. The fact that Neelkanth sees her as she is and gives her the right to take her decision was my way to show his character like he is. He may have gotten provoked, but under no circumstances does he mean ill to her on a personal front. The game of revenge could have been shut when Sharmila made him dance to even out his illicit kiss, that was in no way a way to stop her.

There were other non humiliating methods to reason out with her. Both have been wrong at some point and through my tale, I make them acknowledge that. Revenge is never an answer for anything, it just complicates things further. Hate is harmful. Rape is atrocious but so is molestation. Just imagine, when we travel by local trains and are molested and cannot do anything even about that as society, we have certainly not evolved. And by propagating regressiveness in this show, they destroyed a character that would have been the voice for justice as Meenu seems like a very strong person, she carries off those lines with more ease. Her potiential got somewhat wasted in their stereotypical storyline.

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Mithi373

@Mithi373

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#17

Very well said! This is amazing, I can see your effort!!! You brought justice to their characters perhaps something the makers failed to do!!! Everything was very well said in your reply! I love the way you think!