SwaSan FF-|| I MISS YOU..||

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hola peeps ..!! i am back to torture you..guys
Actually this has been popping in my mind since some time ..i thought to ignore it as i have a FF to complete in hand but could'nt resist..it is just giving me headache ..so i wrote it down ...
do give your views...

love
Pooja ..

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Mumbai...,Morning 8:30

In a small yet beautiful house A lady of 30's is rushing to make her son ready as it is getting late ...
la- Come on ...get out of bathroom now ...how must time will you bath ...
son- mumma ...pls it's fun here ...
la- Ishaan..!! its getting late dear within 10 minutes your bus will come ...
son- ok ...! I'm coming...
10 minutes later...
Ish- mumma ...see i'm ready ..
la- That's a good boy ...come let's wait outside for your bus ..
Ishaan nods ...and before going he sees a picture hanging at the wall he goes near it ..
Ish- Papa..I miss you when will you come back i want to see you..
The lady gets teary eyed seeing her son..it was his daily routine ..he used to go near his papa's photo and ask him to come as soon as possible ...
la(monologue)- Sanskaar ...even i miss you ...but how will I say that you are no more to our son(teary eyed) why did you put me in such a situation ... Ishaan asks me daily about your whereabouts...and i always tell him you will come soon ...but till when will I ..? (tears roll out of her beautiful hazel eyes..)
Ishaan then touches sanskaar's feet and takes his blessing ..His mother ... adores her child who is just 10 years old yet matured and dutiful...
Ishaan is very protective of his mother ...Swara...he understands his mother brought him up with great difficulty ..and how his mother misses his father just like him ..
They were the 8 th wonder of the world a very understanding mother- son duo...
Ish- mumma...i am done come let's go...
swara smiles and takes him out ...
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Kolkata .. 9:00 in morning ...
At the Maheshwari Mansion ...
The whole maheshwari family is sitting in the table... to have breakfast
Dp- Have all come ..?
All start counting and checking ..
Ap- All came except ...
All the faces which were as bright as day become dull..
Su- Jiji...you all have breakfast i will go and give breakfast to Sanskaar..
Ap nodded..
At Sanskaar's room...
he was standing near window hugging a photo frame tightly and tears rolled his eyes...
his charming face was all dull and pale he became very lean and his face not shaven gor months ..he seemed to have lost everything ...
Sujata who saw this was extreamly in tears...
Su- Sanskaar..
Sanskaar turned towards his mother and wiped his tears ...
Su- Sanskaar ..you are cruying right ..?
sanskaar nodded telling a no ...
su- Sanskaar ..i am your mother i know about you ..
Sanskaar's eyes again became wet and with a choking voice he said..
Sa- Maa ( hugs her ) Why did this happen with me ...Since last 9 years i am living without my Swara and Ishaan ..why did she leave me ...? Why ..? i feel to die without them ...
he starts crying vigouresly ...
Su- sanskaar ...( wipes his tears ) don't cry beta ..she will come soon beta ..pls don't strain yourself..you are first itself weak...
Sa- Maa.. its better to die rather than living without my wife and child..
Su- don' t say like that beta..come have your breakfast i am keeping it in the table..
Sujatha wipes her tears and goes ...while sanskaar sheds his tears on the photo frame ...
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Should i continue ...? opinions needed...

love ...

Soundharya..
Edited by Soundharya_01 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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  • ISHAAN GADODIA - swara and sanskaar's son 10 years old .matured and dutiful and protective of this mother..


  • SWARA GADODIA- A sweet mother doctor by profession ..loves her son a lot and terribly misses Sanskaar..


SANSKAAR MAHESHWARI - A dull man misses his wife and son deeply and wants to meet them lives in that trauma since 9 years..

Rest of them will be introduced as the story proceeds..




Edited by Soundharya_01 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Seems to be full be mystery...nice...
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Edited by Soundharya_01 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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there is mystery going on... update soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome pooja 👏
Seriously a mystery one
Update soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice concept
But there is a mystery in the story
Please continue
Thanks for the pm
Waiting for your next update
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Dear Pooja,
A very very intriguing start - do update quickly.

Nyna
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow Pooja dear...
Nice start...
Waiting for futher..
Ishaan I love his role..


P.S: Waiting for other story updates!!

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