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Natalia

@Natalia

Inactive

Posted: 10 years ago

#231

Hi sandhya. I am glad you wrote this piece on Akash. Often I have seen writers skim over characters who have as much potential as the lead only to give importance to the lead. You did complete justice. Akash has his own problems which like others started with losing his twin and followed by a disastrous marriage. But everyone is so absorbed in their own sorrows over losing Anjali that no one really paid much heed to his grief.

With the worst storm is yet to come did you hint at Arti finding about khushi and Arnav. ? That was ominous ending.

Anyways looking forward to the neXT part. Sincere apologies for lack of comments. I only get to read on my phone and that too during commute and I suffer from motion sickness. I still manage to read with difficult but typing makes me extremely dizzy on the phone and on the go. Will try comment whenever possible but a LIKE would always be there from me.

Also to answer your question. Never thought the story could be skimmed. I thought the story has begun when you started posting at a regular interval. Otherwise it was always gripping. Even a justified break in pace disrupts readers interest. Hope you are doing well health wise.

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yoga123

@yoga123

Sparkler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#232

Beautiful chapter dedicated to Aakash...he has suffered all along...his twin sister went missing 20 years back...he faced a lot in his earlier marriage...fighting his addiction...poor guy...felt happy he found Lavanya who will be his anchor...in spite of the heated discussion with his mother he did not try to drink...that shows his resolution to move on with his life...Coming to the question... for me story started from the beginning...

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Mrieshka

@Mrieshka

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#233

It was interesting to see so many views to your questions Sandhya. I was very surprised honestly. I just have to write this that you have your own unique and brilliant style of narrating a story which has all the elements necessary. Most important thing is that it is not only about Arnav and Khushi scene but so many things which is very necessary to a plot . If a story involves only a and k, it will be very unrealistic and boring . Family ties are very important in your story as it was in DND( btw I am still waiting for it to be available to read again). I can not even think of skimming this story as it is so tightly woven. Only time I skim any story is when there was cliff hanger and I want to know what happened in this update before reading whole story as I am impatient to know the results before I read and many times I read comments first to kill my dying curiosity in those situations( it happened to me few times in DND). I love the unique combination of ASR and Arnav in your story which is also very realistic personality than the totally rude, ruthless and sometimes monster type ASR in many other FF. Somehow I can never like ASR who can go to the extent of rape and people still love those FF. Similarly your Khushi, and in fact all other characters are also very realistic and still preserve the essence of IPK.

I am not very good in expressing as I I used to be silent reader and recently started commenting only. However just have to say that you are one of brilliant writers on IF and please continue to write not only this but hopefully many more stories in future. 😊😊

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Arshi67

@Arshi67

Sparkler

+ 13

Posted: 10 years ago

#234

Originally posted by: AquaSandhya

Ruchi, I will say what I said to someone else here...You are biased towards me and also, you are too sweet :)

Glad you think that the words I write have a reason behind them ...ex: Aarti wanting pandit to come the previous day.

My dear Sandhya, I have much to be biased about :) *warm hug*

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bkamber

@bkamber

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#235

Originally posted by: AquaSandhya

Thanks for your support, those wonderful pics and for your encouragement with such lovely comments. Frankly, I believe every reader skims because I skim (at leas a little when the book is unputdownable and terribly when it is boring and bad. But the fact that you are here with great interest tells me that you don't think its bad and boring. But I am waiting for you to elaborate 😆

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My elaboration ...😉

For me, it's about how I read and interpret a Chapter; meaning that not everything is crucial (to me), has to have an answer or signify a plot line. However, everything you write adds a worthy and aesthetic picture in the mind which enthralls a reader.
You hit the nail on the head re the amount of skimming and the circumstance.
I am going to elaborate on this Chapter in this story re my skimming. I do read each Chapter more than once, the first read is to capture the essence (I am impatient by nature) and subsequent reads are in piecemeal for specific scenarios. I also re-read parts of previous Chapters to refresh my memory.
The Chapter started with a breakfast strained, so the mood was set. Aarti who is very methodical and particular, was fidgety, rolling her place mat and talking softly on the phone, Arnav focused on his ipad and food, in walks an edgy sweaty Akash...a storm churning slowly.
Now as soon as I read Arnav reading e-mails, I skipped the sentence because what he is eating is not crucial to me..
Akash's alcohol problem and resolution to go to rehab is known to us. I am also aware of alcoholism, so I skimmed thru most of the details focusing on few words in each row until Arnav's focus shifted to Aarti and I felt the change in the air with her stronger clearer tone on the phone.
The rest of the Chapter I read more thoroughly since it dwelt on the unforeseen breakfast events along with Akash-Lavanya getting closer and more insight into her family.
Your DND was dynamic and the Sleuth in me was evident to you. I also remember not being too kind about that Arnav many a times.
This story is equally captivating and in no way boring to me. My comments and visuals reflect my interpretation and feelings.
I am very often blunt, not politically IF correct (and don't care), but aim to have a good rapport with author and IF buddies as long as it is mutual.
Love and hugs. ❤️
Kerrie

For you...hope you like yogurt. 😃

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646714

Hibernated

Posted: 10 years ago

#236

Hii dii I had stopped reading the story in between as suspence stories is not my cup of tea normally but still your characterization of the messed up but strong Kushi and Arnav who is though wanting to take the easy way out of his distorted family and feelings for the girl who herself confessed is a broken person his perseverance of weathering the storm trying to make yhe the best of what life is throwing at him has made me reread once again the story and I am in for the journey.

Akash deserves a second chance and Lavanya is brave to stand with him. I love how the whole mystery is involving indirectly every individual like Lavs father's surgery and the lack of available organ transplant ...doing a fantastic work. .

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rk2127

@rk2127

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#237

Alright, so finally read it and my reaction at first was, it has began.

The disintegration, the painful process of breaking apart to pieces before healing has begun. Akash's melt down, his bodily reaction to detox and his internal fight was a example of how he turned out. A by product of what transpired 20 years ago and was never treated the wY in should have been so that the wound have healed by now. Rather it was wrapped and hidden beneath the plush carpet of time, to get nasty only.

Akash' need and craving for alcohol, acted as the tipping point for his failure to move on. And to diverted from it he snapped at Arnav but when Arnav didn't take the bait he turned to Aarti. His venomous words hit where it hurt the most bring Aarti to her new low. Breaking her completely.

Akash is right, what he did cannot be undone but he is also right that this is Long Overdue. For all of them to move on past Anjali's disappearance/ death, this detoxing is required for all. I'm happy that Akash found his strength to fight his demons in Lavanaya and even more glad that he decided to come clean with her before they take there relation ahead. And Lavanya's replay brought that hope and balm to Akash's disrupted life and bruised heart.

Now Aarti, makes me think that of all the people Aarti hates. Khushi is the only one who like her thinks that Anjali is alive, that she disappeared that day and isn't dead. On a separate note, Aarti is very specific and control freak, she was asking pundit ji to come a day before to make sure everything is set up beforehand.

Now to answer your question, I'm a sucker for suspense, mystery and than romance, and you have it all here in HOT. You had me with the prologue, and if you will look at my comments fm the beginning I had all the fun putting out different theories. As for the pace is concern, both phases had there own, for the previous phase pace picked up after Aarti and Khushi face off at the temple. And in this phase, Khushi's tail, that guy following Khushi brought in the suspense and pace for me.

About skimming, I don't do skimming unless I'm reading a new writer (for me) for the first time to see if I wants to read what's written. Especially, your work has so many minute and precise laid out picture, at large and at closer look too that I have to read twice sometime even more to grasp each scene, reaction, clue. That's the charm of your write and the genre you are writing.

Part 2 thoughts.

Edited by rk2127 - 10 years ago

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1chilly

@1chilly

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#238

When do we get part two, Sandy?

Been waiting since ages!

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docs

@docs

Navigator

Posted: 10 years ago

#239

Wo wo wo ... Interesting

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Shaivya Clo

@ShaivyaClo

Beginner

Posted: 10 years ago

#240

Dear Sandhaya,

Thoroughly enjoying your story, your pace, your characters, your setting, and especially your Arnav and Khushi. This is such interesting genre to write on-thriller/mystery with doses of romance :)

To answer your questions: For me the story began at Chapter 4, not because the earlier chapters were not fabulous but there was absolutely something enigmatic about Aarti Raizada. There had to be a strong antagonist (if u can actually call her that) with the ever strong bond of Arnav and Khushi-it had just had to be something grand and ruthless, because frankly nothing else would work. I don't know where her character will lead into but for now, I can understand her pain and revulsion and loathing towards Khushi and the life left after Anjali. so bravo on her conception.

Yes, I do skim parts. I don't have a reason but its just that certain aspects in the story become personal and pleasant and you try to connect the most with them. I won't say which because don't want to offend anyone. I read EVERYTHING Arnav and Khushi, but then I guess that should not surprise you at all.

I only come to IF to read your story but very recently found another absolutely amazing author-so thanks for keeping me hooked on your work and IF. I hope you write more often as you truly are gifted and I hope to read another story of yours one day :)