Ishq hai vo ehsaas..:.. A lakshmila Story cmpltd on pg 6

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Posted: 9 years ago
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hola amigos!
i tried to write something on lakshmila... please please please dont bang your head on the wall after reading it,,, may be it is all crap but i just wanted to share it with you all
after yesterday i just cant stop myself thinking about them
<font face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif">GOSH... I JUST LOVE THESE TWO</font>
do drop your comments guys,,,😊
all the andas and tamatars are wellcome
and <font face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif"><font size="3">i have learned to embrace criticism positively</font>😉</font>
<font face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif">plz ignore all the typos and grammer mistakes as i am very bad in both the languages😆</font>

INDEX:

PART 1- BELOW
PART 2- PAGE 2
PART 3- PAGE 3
PART 4- PAGE 5
LAST PART- PAGE 6

PART 1

She was sitting on the banks of river lost in her thoughts
dipped her hands in the water,,, how calm the sacred water is,how beautifull is
the pinkish sky blue colour,,, how peacefull is the sound of waves,,, she loves
to stay alone feeling the water for a long time,,, then she saw herself in the
water... she was scared, shivering, and then her face turned calm silent,
protective... she turned to see it is... HIM with anger in his eyes staring
at the huge dragon like snake ,,, he was angry ,,, angry as if someone tried to
snatch something important from him, as if someone tried to threaten the person
he is very protective for, his face turned red as he looks on daringly at the
snake ... and in the next moment the snake disappeared so as her thoughts...


Why on earth she is thinking about him, what is happening
with her, she didn't sleep at all last night the incident continuously kept
flashing infront of her eyes and this flower... she touched the lotus and then
flashes of the scene appeared again in her thoughts,,,,, how lakshman gave her
the flower,,, how hesitant she was to take the flower,,, and his words this
was my duty to protect you janak putri'... ohh it is the hundredth time i'm
recalling these moments she said in an angry tone,,, what the hell is happening
with me it is my sister's wedding and i'm in my own world... own world' Hey
from where on earth this jijaji ke anuj' came in your so called OWN WORLD ...she
wanted to bang her head but luckily there is no wall around...huh


You're gone mad urmila... may be this is the after effects of
yesterday's incident may be i'm still scared now... enough i'll not think about
him from now onwards... i think it's too late SITA DIDI must be worried about
me, i have to leave,,, she turned only to see him standing infront of her...


Urmila freezed for a while oh almighty first this man has to
look sooo sensually hot and now he came looking for her just to tease her...huh



Laxman- pranam devi... (he said with a light smile)



His voice brought her back to her senses only to notice that
she was staring him..


Urmila-p... pranam


La- aap yahan... mujhe laga ke kal jo hua uske pashchat aap
yahan aane me bhaybheet ho jaengi,,, vaise achha hai aap yahan aa gayi manushya
ko kisi bhi cheez se ya kisi bhi paristhiti se darna nahi chahiye varna vo
aajeevan buri smritiyo se ubhar nahi pata,,,(he paused for a second)... aisa
mere bhaiya kehte hain'


Urmila was stunned to hear this and was listening to him
curiously and a smile appeared on her face. Lakshman looks at her confused.



La- kya hua rajkumari... maine kuchh vichitra keh diya kya
(he asked as he was clueless about her reaction)



Ur- nahi dashrath nandan... hum to ye soch kar muskura rahe
hain ke jijaji or didi k vichar kitne milte hain,,,, nahi milte nahi balki unke
vichar ek hi hain... she corrected herself turning towards the river


Aaj prataykaal mein jab hum yahan aane se darr rahe thhe to
unhone hume yahi kaha thha jo abhi abhi aap ne kaha



Lakshman smiled... un dono ke vichar hi nahi ve dono bhi ek
hi hain devi,,, achha hi hua jo aapne apne bhay pe niyantran rakha or yahan aa
gayi ... he exclaimed


Bhayy kaisa aap hain na yahan... urmila uttered lost in her
thoughts,she bit her tongue as she realised what she just said ...
LAKSHMAN was stunned to hear this... ummm humara kehne ka tatparya hai ke jab
itne bade yoddha yahan rehte hain to mithila vaasiyo ko darne ki kya avashyakta
hai she corrected herself just to make sure he should not misunderstood her


Lakshman sighed still unconvinced by her given answer...



aap,,,, before he could complete urmila again peeped in '
humare praano ki raksha karne k liye ek bar firse aapka dhanyavaad raghukul
nandan' she said lowering her eyes stading infront of him a bit conscious.


La- ye aap kya keh rahi hain humne koi upkaar nahi kia hai
aap par " kal agar aapko kuchh jo jata to hum kya karte, hum to khud ko maaf
nahi kar paatey"... urmila was hell shocked to listen all this but inside she
was joyous,she was happy ... uhh vo hum,,, arthat agar aapko kuchh jo jata
to hum bhaiya ko kya uttar dete bhabhi ko kya kehte,,, unhe lagta ke unka devar
itna bhi saksham nahi hai ke unki behen ka dhyan rakh sake... ah hain na!!!...
he said pouting like a small baby.


Urmila smiled at his expressions like a child is caught red
handed after stealing a candy... ji satya kaha aapne,or ab hume chalna chahiye
kyun ki humari didi or aapki bhabhi humari prateeksha kar rahi hongi,, she said
looking at him.


Ji avashya ... he said lowering his eyes and turned aside to
give her space... urmila steps forward and turned to him.. aap nahi challenge,,,
she asked lakshman


Hum saath hi challenge devi... parantu aap aage chaliye hum
aapke peeche aate hain...


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Posted: 9 years ago
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You know this OS complimented yesterday's moment.Thank you for writing this.Glad too see LakshMila's growing popularity.😃
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Please continue soon!This was what I wanted to read,after watching yesterday's epii...Thanks for bringing out your imagination and you've done an excellent job!
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Beautiful story
Loved it
Continue soon
Edited by radianteyes. - 9 years ago
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Amazing story !!!!
Plzzz give next part asap 😛
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superb...😳
well done yaar...😳😳
cont soon😃
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A great start!!!!
Beautifully written.
Loved it.

Please do write more.
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thanks for the positive reviews guys
updating the last part below this post
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PART 2

They were walking towards the temple when suddenly urmila looses her balance,,, she closed her eyes due to fear of falling when she felt two strong arms wrapped around her waist ,"kuchh nahi hoga aapko, main hoon na",,, she opened her eyes worriedly only to see lakshman holding her with care and affection in his eyes she smiled up at him with her one hand moving to wrap around his neck and the other clutched his uttariya,,, (intense eye lock)...

In ankhon me tum
Jab se ho gaye gum
Sara jahan tera chehra
Preet ka ye rang ab to tere sang
Aur bhi ho gaya gehraa...


he tucked her hair traces behind her ear,,, a shiver coursed down her body

she was breathing heavily drowning in his doe like eyes...

BEAUTIFULLthats all he can say about her in this moment he thinks... lakshman,,, hold on man you're loosing control... he thought to himself

They were completely lost in each other,,,their eyelock is broken by the sound of thunderstorm she turned away from him, blushing furiously... running towards temple she crashed into sita...

S- kya hua urmila... *she said worriedly

U- k.. kuchh nahi didi... she couldn't meet her eyes, still breathing heavily she said chaliye na bahot der ho gayi hai,,, ma humare liye chintit hongi

S- sita was clueless about what happened to her baby sister,,, but the expressions she noticed on her face was somewhat familiar and known to her,,,,,, THOSE EXPRESSIONS when she met her would be husband for the first time...



WHAT... is urmila ... no no,,,yes... she was blushing,,, but if someone is there in her life, she could have told me,,, but who is the guy,,, she was lost in the thoughts with plenty of questions ruling her mind when she saw lakshman coming towards her from the same direction from which urmila had come,,, she smiled as now she understood her sister's reason of blushing... she smiled looking at him as he stopped in front of her folding his hands

L- pranam bhabhi... aap yahan

S- pranam,,, kyun bharata lakshman hume yahan dekh kar prassann nahi lag rahe hain aap, kisi aur ko dhoond rahe thhey aap? She asked teasingly with a grin on her face

L- n.. nahi nahi bhabhi hum to bas ... yahan vo... han hum is nadi ki sheet lehron ka anand uthaane yahan aaye thhey,,,bas * he sighed with relief and tried to hide his nervousness

S- "sheeth leher"... lekin vo to chali gayi

L- ji...*he said horrified*

S- kuchh nahi ... aagya dijiye, ab hume chalna chahiye,, pranam
she left leaving behind a stunned yet blushing lakshman...



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Edited by zubi_23 - 9 years ago
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LakshMila

I'm loving these two in the show nd ur story is taking me to a different world where only LakshMila is there.

Plz continue soon

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