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irama1

@irama1

Beginner

Posted: 9 years ago

#51

Simply amazing...wow..Is it poetry or a prose?Thank you so much for sharing such a beautiful and soulful piece of writing.Hope to read more from two very talented writers...

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albmum14

@albmum14

Inactive

Posted: 9 years ago

#52

"Whilst the moon decks herself in Neptune's glass

And ponders over her image in the sea,

Her cloudy locks smoothing from off her face

That she may all as bright as beauty be;

It is my wont to sit upon the shore

And mark with what an even grace she glides

Her two concurrent paths of azure o'er,

One in the heavens, the other in the tides:

Now with a transient veil her face she hides

And ocean blackens with a human frown;

Now her fine screen of vapour she divides

And looks with all her light of beauty down;

..."

G Darley, "The moon and the sea"

They were each other's anchors, but when the storm came those anchors were not enough to keep their boats from capsizing in the tsunami of their own making. The links of the anchors' chains were too weak; misunderstanding, distrust, missing faith, quick judgements and kneejerk reactions breaking them further. Anchors lost at the bottom, as their lost and broken boats drifted away from each other...

But hope is the greatest anchor, keeping one looking at the moon, and the other standing by the ocean, navigating them to each other's thoughts, giving wings to one and opening the arms of the other. Hope allowed them to repair their anchors and win over the despair and anguish and fan the flames of their yearning and longing to give them back each other, to make love more than a word. Together now, these anchors are unbreakable, quitening the restless ocean and brightening the moonlight.

I loved the poems, your vocabulary allowing us to feel the sorrow surrounding them. Your collaboration flowed from one to the other to glimpse into the power of a love that has more patience than their stubbornness, more resilience than their remembered pain and more hope as the time went by.

A love that finally brought them together...

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Chaitalee Ghosalkar

@Eccentrica

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 9 years ago

#53

Beautiful...just beautiful!

I'm yet to go through all the EOLs but from what I've read till now, there have been instances of a happy life between Arnav and Khushi. I'm definitely not complaining; after all that is what I wanted. but somewhere I yearned for an alternate course in the path of Arnav and Khushi's lives, much like how it was portrayed in the story.

That the two have been two distinct individuals, different as chalk and cheese is something that was evident in the show as well. But you two brilliantly brought them together through the moon and ocean...wonderful concept.

It was nice to see Khushi in a different role over here.

The build-up to the climax deserves a mention. I'm sure many will relate to it as well. You make up your mind, steel yourself to cut off someone from your life completely and for good reasons, yet his or her very presence breaks the walls you've so meticulously built around yourself. When I saw that happening with Khushi, I couldn't help but be taken away by how it was showcased.

Another thing worth mentioning is the conversation towards the end. Arnav asking about Khushi's well-being and the latter saying 'I'm here' and vice-a-versa. Few words spoken, yet they meant volumes!

I've read almost all of Ridz's stories but this one seem different. Perhaps that's the beauty of a collaboration. The writing synergies of two people merge and bring out a stunning piece.

As for Mirabell, I haven't your work(s), but have come across your comments on multiple stories that we both follow. And while those itself are something you cannot miss, the same goes for this OS as well. You sure have a way with words and I'm glad to have read this one😊

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esha85

@esha85

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#54

This was so poetic and brilliant! Their names are apt to how their characters in the story pine for each other...

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Bhuvana

@NASAKE

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#55

Mira i know i am extremely late in my comments for this OS... am sorry... but i loved to d core d way u have portrayed d ocean n moon... an ultimate, beautiful creation of nature by d creature...it is so mesmerizing... with our be loved, beautiful couples arnav n khushi... though d story holds pain n hurt of d couples but d end is perfect... very light hearted, soothing...

thx for pm mira, with lots of love...