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Posted: 9 years ago
#41
So guys i m posting part two of my drabble... do read and tell me how it is... plz read part 1 on page 4 before reading this.😊 next drabble on or after friday... have exams till thrusday.

PART 2

Bharat went inside with a smile; he guessed who they might be. Bharat said,"bhaiya,some girls r here and they said they want to meet u". Ram said, "who? " I don't know bhaiya, they said they won't tell me they will only tell u,but I guess they maybe bhabi's sisters, the way they were dressed they can't be random girls", said bharat with a smile." let's see if your guess is correct" said Ram with a smile and a pat on bharat's shoulders and went outside.

Ram went outside and saw three girls, dressed like rajkumari, standing with a lot of questions behind those inquisitive eyes and a soft smile." Pranam yuvraj. I am mandavi, this is urmila and that is shrutkriti. We are sita didi's younger sisters", said mandavi pointing at urnila and shrutkriti respectively,with her hands folded for pranam. Ram smiled and said," I recognized u all from your dresses, so did my brother. Now tell me what you want to say. I will be happy to answer all your questions." Urmila said with an unsure smile," woh we wanted to ask whether we would be allowed to visit ayodhya to meet didi once she gets married? We have never been away from her for a long time". "please" said shrutkriti with tears threatening to fall from her eyes any moment.

Ram said with a warm smile,"ofcourse it's your right; you don't need my permission to meet your sister. You can come anytime you want. The gates of ayodhya are always open for you all."..." thank you so much yuvraj, u have lifted a huge burden from our heart, Ma said we won't get to meet didi once she departs for ayodhya, so we need to practice to stay without her" said mandavi wiping the few drops of tears which spilled from her eyes. Shrutkriti said,"ok, now that the confusion is clear we need to run away before anybody spots us here. Please promise ur brother and u won't tell anyone about our meeting". Ram said," I will not tell anyone. But u need to promise something, that you will call me bhaiya not yuvraj as you r like my sisters". "of course I will" ,said urmila still unsure why he said this. And with that the three girls ran away with a contended smile that their sister will marry a person who has a heart of gold.

Ram thought with a smile," these girls a so good and innocent, what if they could be married to my brothers. I will talk to rishi vishamitra and all the elders"...

Note: In ramanyana, I have felt that another relation totally left out was the relation between lord Ram and his sister-in-laws. As all relations in ramanaya are deemed ideal, so I tried to bring out the ideal aspect of this relation as well. Do tell me whether I passed of failed. 😳

Edited by tuna_star - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#42

Originally posted by: jayvenk

Tuna We will create our own love story then..

of course jaishree... what are imaginations for😉 ..
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Posted: 9 years ago
#43

Originally posted by: NEIRAlover

Tuna loved it.

Jaishree and Tuna both of you are fantastic.

Your way of expressing is beautiful!!!!


Please do write on Urmila and Lakshman.

I will definitely try naira... 😊 and thanks
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Posted: 9 years ago
#44
thanks dear... part 2 bhi par lena😊😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#45
Four beautiful brides
Four handsome grooms
8 lives will change
8 lives will be tested
One will have his wife taken away
One will be separated from his wife
Two will turn monks as they await their brothers.
One will be taken away by evil, her hair in his fist.
One for her husband for 5110 days will sleep.
Two beside their husbands will stand and for their sister will await.
The father will grieve and
his eyes open, wanting just one glimpse of his eldest,
Will take his final breathe.
The mothers three will wear mournful white.
Their sorrow hidden by a veil of strength..
They will await for the day each of their 8 children will return.

The two kings and their wives stood.
Dressed in all finery of gold and silk.
The kingdom of janak vibrated with mantras and music,
Signaling the union of the divine...
The grooms stepped forward to garland their brides.
A shower of fragrant flowers and turmeric rice on their bowed heads.
A million voices blessed in a voice one
For them to have a long and happy married life.
From above the devtas let out a sigh,
Knowing what lay ahead.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#46
Both the parts are SUPERB Tuna...👏 ...the simplicity with which it came across is so heart touching ...Loved, loved it.
@ Barbie doll...lovely poem. All you guys are so talented. It's great to have you among us.


@jaishree my eyes are swelled with tears as I write this...your poem ( which I just read as I was about to post this comment ) has touched my heart in such a way that tears aren't just stopping...Oh GOD !!! It's sooo beautiful.

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Posted: 9 years ago
#47
Jaishree this one is the best yaar... My favourite till now...
Nd nayva thanks dear... :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
#48

Originally posted by: jayvenk

Four beautiful brides
Four handsome grooms
8 lives will change
8 lives will be tested
One will have his wife taken away
One will be separated from his wife
Two will turn monks as they await their brothers.
One will be taken away by evil, her hair in his fist.
One for her husband for 5110 days will sleep.
Two beside their husbands will stand and for their sister will await.
The father will grieve and
his eyes open, wanting just one glimpse of his eldest,
Will take his final breathe.
The mothers three will wear mournful white.
Their sorrow hidden by a veil of strength..
They will await for the day each of their 8 children will return.

The two kings and their wives stood.
Dressed in all finery of gold and silk.
The kingdom of janak vibrated with mantras and music,
Signaling the union of the divine...
The grooms stepped forward to garland their brides.
A shower of fragrant flowers and turmeric rice on their bowed heads.
A million voices blessed in a voice one
For them to have a long and happy married life.
From above the devtas let out a sigh,
Knowing what lay ahead.



Can I share this on my Facebook timeline , Jaishree ? I would love my friends to read it coz they aren't on IF.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#49
Waise navya is there a fb page for skr fans...?? I want to join too... Pretty please... My fb name tuna dutta...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#50
Thank u navya and tuna. Please do share. Thank u once more.
Feel humbled

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