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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: idunno

oh Rose thanks for your lovely comment.

To be frank I never wrote anything, I used to write sher and shayari when i was in uni, it has been long forgotten, I came to geet forum accidently, even geet serial I had started to watch after 10 month of actual serial release.
after become adicted of maneet and reading so many ff i also was wanted to portray them as per my wish, but as my english is very ordinary, never dare to right, but i always comment.
first update i wrote in ghsp family ff where someone has started this thread and everyone has to continue story as per their imagination.; There i had updated few episodes, but it was others story i was updating with my imagination.So in a way this OS is my first try to write on my own.
you may will find many flows but will like true comment to correct my errors so i can improve myself.
now coming to your concern,
1-the starting of this os is currant situation where 36 years old man was seating near beach in his farmhouse ,was remembering his past, about his geet ...
and all other story is past.
in short , initially they meet in college compound and had spark of first sight attraction, then they become friend and friendship end up in love.
Maan is son of millionaire but he was studying in disguise to keep away from scrutiny of media and their enemies as you know when the person is extra rich and famous they might have heir rivals and enemies.
Vandana is the foster mother of geet who had brought up her ,after death of her parents so in a way geet herself didn't knew her true identity. she only knows she is the daughter of untouchable and she got admission in maan's collage on scholarship as she was extremely intelligent.
i had add some collage scenes. now so many ff has got collage canteen scene so i make it different by playing game and winning competition she cant loose her self respect and help ki help ho jaye.and now they plan excursion to goa and aage age dekho kya hota hai...?
Thanks one more time and i wish in future also guide me of my mistakes to correct.I think I need to introduce myself and little concept of story so people knew what is there and can decide whether they wants to read or not. next week end i will try to do as this eek i am quite busy.


Hi rose thanks i had gone through my story and corrected all mistakes which were confusing you thanks for that.
Edited by idunno - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#22
Read Barsaat ki ek Raat, love the title song, but so far no behene de song.
So 36 yrs of Maan remembering Geet it means Geet is not there but her memories are there.I guess either they are separated or Geet is no more and her memories stayed there.
They Meet one toofani raat, become friends and fall in love.
The heated argument between maan and family and dadimaa.
their is conservative family, where as geet is untouchable, they cant allow Maan to marry Geet.
Maan is upset about it.
here there is collage camp, all friend arrange meeting ,geet denying to go, abgad organised aankh micholi competition and Geet winning and Angad sponsor her expenses.
so now they will go to goa for camp, and ...waiting eagerly what next.
Thank for such lovely story, keep on writing will definitely improve you writing.Best luck for further writing.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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BARSAAT KI EK RAAT
Teaser

All this thing happening has made him upset as he has to select one, very difficult decision, he was ready to live wealth, power, everything for her but to live his parents was bothering him.

Zindagi ki kashmakash mein ulajta ja raha hoon main

Oh...mazi kinara bata doobta jaa raha hoon main...!

One thing is sure I am not going to live her, If I will at all marry, than she is her not anyone else.

He had decided to discuss this matter with family after coming from Goa trip but was determined to propose her, and will make her his in any adverse circumstances.

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Edited by idunno - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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@idunno: Yeah !! Add concept at the first post of your story... It will be more clear then...

Yup, remember you did pm me ...But, am so sorry, couldn't find time to go through that thread, as of yet...

And Though am very less active these days, you can pm me for anything... 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Nice update, Geet agreed to marry Maan.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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BARSAAT KI EK RAAT
PART-5

All this thing happening has made him upset as he has to select one, very difficult decision, he was ready to live wealth, power, everything for her but to live his parents was bothering him.

Zindagi ki kashmakash mein ulajta ja raha hoon main

Oh...mazi kinara bata doobta jaa raha hoon main...!

One thing is sure I am not going to live her, If I will at all marry, than she is her not anyone else.

He had decided to discuss this matter with family after coming from Goa trip but was determined to propose her, and will make her his in any adverse circumstances.

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Everyone gather at collage compound with their backpack, but Maan still hasn't came, everyone was worry about him, bus will live at any moment and there is no sign of Maan and his phone is also not working, now what to do...? everyone was worried at that time his phone call came and he said guys don't worry about me , you carry on as my car is break down on road I call mechanic but will take some time I will come by car and will catch up with you guys,,,,...

Geet said she will go with him and will wait for him, maan try to convince her but she didn't agreed and bus left... do premi ko pitche chod ke , ek anjaane safar ki aur...

After 20 minutes Maan came and maneet started their journey,they took short cut to catch up with them fast...

On the way they had seen temple, and some gathering as if some one's wedding was going on.

Geet Maan look there is Temple can we go for Darshan?

Maan Geet we will be delayed to catch them up.

Maan na jane kyun, mujhe koi force us mandir ki aur kheench rahi hai, jaldi se darshan karke nikal jayenge.

They Park the car, came out and start walking and they have seen one baba was standing there and was continuously chanting some mantra.

They ask baba ye kiska temple hai aur ye itni bheed kyoun hai? lagta hai jaise koi shadi ho rahi hai?

Baba haan bacho , aap sahi keh rahe hai yaha shadi ho rahi hai.

lekin baba itni door aisi ekant jagah pe shadi kutch samaj nahi aaya...?

Baba aapne theek socha lekin is jagah ke bahot mahatva hai, kahte hai ye mandir , shadi karne wale jode ko kabhi juda nahi hone deti aur agar juda hojaye to unhe mila bhi deti hai.Batcho aap shadi shuda ho...?

ji nahi baba hum collage mein saath padhate hai.

baba aur pyaar bhi karte ho..?

Haan, both said together.

phir to aap sahi jagaha pe aaye ho.

hum aapka matlab nahin samjhe.

Dekho bacho, shayad bholenath ne tumhe yahi bulwaya hai, uski ichha se hi tum yaha aaye ho, aap usko bholenath ka ashirwad samjho,kyunki mai dekh raha hoon tumhare pyar ko waqt ke bahot toofano se gujarna padega, to isae bhagwan ka sanket samjo aur yahi pe bhagwan ke samne shadi karlo , aap dono ko wohi duniya ki devil sakhiyon se bacha lenge, juda hoke bhi aap ko koi juda nahi kar sakenge.

Babaji hum samjhe nahi?

Jab kutch samaj na aaye to upar wale ke upar chod dena chahiye.

usne apni jholi me se do tawiz nikale aur dono ko kaha jao bacho, bhagwan ke samne ye taweez ek doosre ko pahena do aur pujari se kaho aap ka gandharva vivah sampann kare...aap ka bhala hi hoga...Alakh niranjan keh ke baba wanha se chale gaye.

Maan in his mind, today only I pray to God and today only this fakir hume kutch bata gaya lagta hai ye sab bhagwan ki marji se hi hua, na gaadi bigadti, na hum yaha aate na hum baba se milte , ye sab kudrat ka kutch ishara hi to hai...

Maan...Maan...and Maan came out of his rewire and said haan geet bolo?

tum kya soch mein pad gaye...?

He smiled at her and said , mausam bhi hai, manjil bhi hai, aur woh khuda bhi hai ...and he blinked his eye to her...he seat down on his knee took out one box from his pocket and took her hand in his hand and said,...manzil bhi hai, dastoor bhi hai, sahil bhi hai, aur sajaan bhi hai phir kyun na hum ek ho jaye...?

Geet , I loves you mujhse shaadi karogi...? Maine ye angoothi aaj tumhe propose karne ke liye li thi, aur is se acha mauka aur jagah kahan milega, bolo geet?

Geet got shocked, she can't think for moment, tear came out from her eyes, and said Maan , I love you but hum ek nahin ho sakte...

Maan got disappointed and told her kyun nahi ho sakti? bolo geet bolo?

Kyunki main Achoot hun..your family will not alove u for this rista Maan hum milke bhi mil nahi payenge, ye duniya ki unchi diwaro hume ek nah hone denge...isliye behtar ye hi hai hum ek doosre ko bhul jaye.

Maan Geet main ye unch neech jaat paat mein nahi manta, agar tum sath dogi to main chattano se bhi takrane ki himmat rakhta hoon, aur suna nahi baba ne kya kaha? agar tujhe baba par bharosa hai to haan kahe de...Geet agar main shadi karunga to sirf tumse, koi aur tumhari jagah nahi le sakta...

Geet lekin ye duniya ye samaj ,sabka muqabla kaise hoga...? aur apne friends kya sochenge?

Agar tum sath ho to ye duniya ye samaj kya cheez hai?

and geet didn't knew what happen to her she said haan... haan mai shadi ke liye taiyaar hoon,

and Maan in excitement put ring in her finger immediately and took her in his embrace and kissed her passionately.

Geet ummm...Maan sab dekh rahe hai ...dekhne do...mujhe kuch nahi farak padta and he lift her in his arm and started to walk towards temple...

Will be continue next part very soon probably last part of behene de...

I will like to thanks to everyone who had commented and shown my flaws, which make me quite happy.

I am going to edit my previous part 1-3 very soon very soon so who remain unable to read properly will be read and comment properly, Though I had already edited on IF forum of same story, but will edit here letter on as i will be free.Till that time read this update and let me know what u think about this, true comment, from you heart i will always appreciate.



Edited by idunno - 11 August 2015 at 3:34am
Edited by idunno - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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BARSAAT KI EK RAAT

NOTE-
A Gandharva Marriage is one of the eight classical types of Hindu marriage. This ancient marriage tradition from the Indian subcontinent was based on mutual attraction between a man and a woman, with no rituals, witnesses or family participation The marriage of Dushyanta and Shakuntala was a historically celebrated example of this class of marriage.
Gandharva marriage is, according to Apastamba Grhya Sutra - an ancient Hindu literature, the method of marriage where the girl selects her own husband. They meet each other of their own accord, consensually agree to live together, and their relationship is consummated in copulation born of passion. This form of marriage did not require consent of parents and anyone else. According to vedic records, this is one of earliest and common form of marriage in Rg vedic times.

n Rg vedic opinions and classical literature, the commonly described marriage method was Gandharva, where the bride and the groom had met each other in their ordinary village life, or in various other places such as regional festivals and fairs, begun to enjoy one another's company, and decided to be together. This free choice and mutual attraction were generally approved by their kinsmen. A passage in the Atharvaveda suggests that parents usually left the daughter free in selection of her lover and directly encouraged her in being forward in love-affairs. The mother of the girl thought of the time when the daughter's developed youth (Pativedanam, post puberty), that she would win a husband for herself, it was a smooth and happy sort of affair with nothing scandalous and unnatural about it.[6][7] The translated version of the Atharvaveda(STRIKARATNI, ii.36) passage is:

May O Agni!, a suitor after our own heart come to us,
may he come to this maiden with fortune!
May she be agreeable to suitors, charming at festivals, promptly obtain happiness through a husband!

As this comfortable cave, O Indra!, furnishing a safe abode hath become pleasing to all life,
thus may this woman be a favourite of fortune, beloved, not at odds with her husband!

Do thou ascend the full, inexhaustible ship of fortune;
upon this bring, hither the suitor who shall be agreeable to thee!

Bring hither by thy shouts, O lord of wealth, the suitor
bend his mind towards her;
turn thou the attention of every agreeable suitor towards her!

In today's life it is called love marriages, and this type of marriages are still performed in some of villages.

I am going to convert this os in ss thanks-
Edited by idunno - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Nice description of gandharva vivah

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