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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hayee, I'm just blushing madly. I loved when natcheket pulled out another package from his pocket. I loved the bond they made with their children and when aagham walked in on them. This is by far one of the greatest fanfics on the forum. Please do continue. The chemistry you created was immensely captivating. I cannot wait to read more, not to mention the setting is very unique, flirting in the train is an unusual concept and I love how you developed it. Again, an amazing chapter as usual.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#52

Originally posted by: JB-US

Hayee, I'm just blushing madly. I loved when natcheket pulled out another package from his pocket. I loved the bond they made with their children and when aagham walked in on them. This is by far one of the greatest fanfics on the forum. Please do continue. The chemistry you created was immensely captivating. I cannot wait to read more, not to mention the setting is very unique, flirting in the train is an unusual concept and I love how you developed it. Again, an amazing chapter as usual.


Oh god, now I'm blushing like crazy! 😳😳😳

Thank you so much Azka! I know, that care for their children that they really should have as parents is almost entirely missing in the show. Awww, one of the best on the forum--that's so incredible to hear from you! 😳

I'll update soon(-ish) and you too please update your FF! 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow 😳 ... I loved it... So sweet and it brought a smile on my face... Loved NeiRa as parents and as a couple... Please update soon 😊 ... I am eagerly waiting to read more...

P.S: Sorry I couldn't comment before... But I was busy and didn't get time to read this amazing piece...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Tiana.Disney

Wow 😳 ... I loved it... So sweet and it brought a smile on my face... Loved NeiRa as parents and as a couple... Please update soon 😊 ... I am eagerly waiting to read more...

P.S: Sorry I couldn't comment before... But I was busy and didn't get time to read this amazing piece...


Oh thank you Tiana! Don't be sorry--a big thank you to you too for always being there to comment on my work and encourage me to write more! I'll try to update sometime either today or tomorrow. 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Today or tomorrow? YAYNESS!!! :D
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Originally posted by: neiralove



Oh thank you Tiana! Don't be sorry--a big thank you to you too for always being there to comment on my work and encourage me to write more! I'll try to update sometime either today or tomorrow.😊[/DIV]



Your writing makes me comment... Its wonderful... I am so excited for the next update 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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First off, thank you all for your love--I couldn't write this without reading your beautiful works for inspiration and reading your lovely comments for feedback!

I guess today's episode wasn't the greatest so I decided to work on this and I just finished it up for you all. It's not that great, but at least it's something? 😊


Part 4

Nachiket pulled the curtain closed behind him. He was careful to take soft steps as he walked up behind Ragini. He placed the plate and tinfoil wrapped package down on the berth and ran his fingers through his hair, admiring his love. The way her hair fell down past her shoulders. The curves of her delicate body. Her soft and dainty little hands. He held his breath as he got closer, not wanting to alert her of his presence. He took a great big whiff of her hair and waited for a second, proud that she hadn't detected him yet. Finally, Nachiket wrapped his arms around her bare stomach just as Ragini was reaching up on her toes to grab her bag.

Ragini gasped loudly and instinctively leaned back on her heels, burying herself deeper in Nachiket's embrace and grasping his hands, partly in surprise and partly in pleasure. Nachiket bent his head into the crook of her neck and rubbed his stubble against her neck; he knew how she loved that.

"Kya kar rahe ho...Nachiket!" Ragini managed to say, closing her eyes and envisioning them alone together. Somewhere, anywhere...just the two of them in a room...

"Pyaar...," Nachiket whispered into her ear as he bit her earlobe and hugged her tighter.

"Don't...," she said, and making false attempts to escape his grasp. "Stop...," Ragini cried, not actually wanting him to quit. If it were up to her, she would make him love her like this forever.

"Mmm?" teased Nachiket, planting kisses down her neck. "Don't stop?" Ragini smiled and turned crimson, overcome by his passionate, red hot love.

"Mom! Paani hai kya?!" cried Suhani. Ragini and Nachiket froze, her back arched in his arms and his lips sending jolts down her spine, brought back to reality by the interruption.

Nachiket looked away, completely irritated. Suhani bhi na, bilkul wrong time pe hi....he shook his head. Ragini smiled at Nachiket's reaction and grabbed the water bottle she had originally come in to get. She turned to leave the coupe, but Nachiket still had his arms around her waist. Ragini grabbed his hands and forced them apart and slipped between them. She was a little surprised he had let her go so easily; she smiled at her success and took a step forward. Then she realized she hadn't won yet.

Nachiket had grabbed hold of her wrist. Ragini turned and gave him an irritated look, hoping he would let her go for the sake of the kids. Nachiket gave her a stern smoulder back. Pani dena hai toh aisa hi dena padega.

Ragini furrowed her brow. She was pretty close to the door and could probably at least reach her hand out to give Suhani the water bottle. But what would they think of me sticking my hand out like a busy newlywed--the kids, Karthik, Jignesh, Pam--they would all laugh at us romancing at this age. Ragini looked pleadingly at Nachiket and tried pulling her hand free, hoping he would see reason. Nothing. He wasn't losing this one.

"Mom?" Suhani asked loudly. Ragini heard snickering from the others waiting outside. Ragini realized she had no choice. She reached as far as she could and stuck the water bottle out from the edge of the coupe, closing her eyes. Laughter erupted on the other side of the curtain, as their doubts about the couple alone with the curtain drawn were confirmed. The bottle left her hand and Ragini sighed in relief, pulling her hand back quickly.

Nachiket pulled hard on the arm he was holding and spun his Ragini toward him. He grabbed her waist as her hand landed hard on his chest. Ragini's eyes were wide open due to the unexpected action and Nachiket gazed into them. She was beautiful, and she was his.

Ragini took a moment to gather herself (and let Nachiket stare at her) before asking, in the cutest possible way she could to avoid sounding unromantic, "Sirf ye sab karne aaye the ya phir koi aur wajah bhi hai?" Part of her hoped there was something else that might justify this to the others outside, and part of her just wanted more of him.

Nachiket's smile disappeared in an instant. He let her go and quickly moved towards the curtain. Ragini's heart sank and she hated herself for asking. "Nai!" cried Ragini, instinctively. Nachiket paused as Ragini finished, "Please math jao..."

Nachiket turned and raised his eyebrows at her, cocking his head to one side. He reached down and grabbed the plate and tinfoil wrapped package that he had brought with him earlier, his eyes never leaving hers. Ragini's eyes widened as her gaze fell on his hands and she realised he wasn't planning to leave at all--she blushed hard and Nachiket loved her even more.

Ragini moved towards Nachiket as he unwrapped the tinfoil and placed two rotis in the plate. "Yeh sab kya hai?" she asked, trying to move the topic away from her recent outcry. Nachiket put the plate back on the berth and placed his hands on Ragini's shoulders, forcing her to sit down. As he sat down beside her, Ragini spied the plate and her face clearly showed her confusion.

"Nachiket, yeh khana?! Agam ko ma--" Nachiket stuck a piece of roti into her mouth before she could finish her sentence, surprising her yet again. Ragini covered her mouth with her hand and ate the bite quickly, hoping to prompt him for answers with an empty mouth. But Nachiket was ready with another morsel of food for her. As Nachiket reached towards her, Ragini caught his hand and turned it around, feeding him the next bite. He hadn't eaten his dinner either, and she wasn't going to eat without him. As he was chewing, she took the opportunity. "Ab batao, tumne che roti order kiye the, aur bache voh sab kha gaye. Toh phir ye do roti tumhe kahan se mile?" she asked demandingly. Nachiket smiled as he fed her another piece.

"Maine tumhe bola tha na, ki main woh roti bache ke liye le raha tha? Ragini, I don't lie!" he said mockingly. "Mujhe pata tha ki do roti Agam bhi khane wala hai, iss liye maine che roti order kiya tha. Uske baad maine tumhare do roti alag se order kiya tha aur apne blazer main rakh diya taaki bache uspe nazar na dale."

"Nachiket!" said Ragini sternly, but quickly broke into a smile. She pinched his cheek, "You're so cute, you know that?"

"I know Ragini, but I'm not as cute as you," he said, tapping her nose playfully.

In the midst of all their talking, the two lovebirds didn't even realize when night had fallen.~
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Loved it just what was needed after todays epi.
Thank u soo much
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: shabz50

Loved it just what was needed after todays epi.

Thank u soo much


Dawww thank you Shabz!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Thank you Hamna! 😊 😳

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