(ArHi) For The First Time: OS 2, 3 & 4, pg 21 (26/11/2015)

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Aparamegha

@Aparamegha

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Posted: 10 years ago

This is freaking awesome..love the total ambience and the ending is fab..I was having this uncanny feeling that most likely Arnav is already there but you have managed to keep the suspense till the end..brilliant...

I love your new FATAFAT technique about keeping in touch

First time ever for me to be able to comment on the first page of your writing...gosh 🥳

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xBabyAngelx

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Posted: 10 years ago

Lovely story

Beautifully written

Loved it very very much

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javeria

@Javeria3991

Rocker

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Posted: 10 years ago

wow, this is awesome idea and fantastic story. 👍🏼

i enjoy reading it alot.

The scene descriptions to set the horror, Khushi's feelings and suspense, everything was very well written that for a minute it made me think that the house was haunted. 👏 👏 👏 👏

I hope next will be Arnav first time.

Hope to read next update soon.

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Arshi67

@Arshi67

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Ocean of Happiness

Posted: 10 years ago

You totally nailed the sense of dread that engulfed her. The initial feeling of something not quite right to the rising panic to the final fainting, were really well built up.

Looking forward to reading more in this series :)

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gurukhush

@gurukhush

Explorer

Posted: 10 years ago

Awesome LL, this was really good...gripping till the very end though we could have had a little more of the very GROUCHY K at the end... Thanx😊😃😃

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nitrit95

@nitrit95

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Posted: 10 years ago

firstly welcome back lazyleaves writer of the most heart wrenching ff destroyed n now u r back with a scary story awesome cant wait for the next update take care n all the best in everything u do

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Alone111

@Alone111

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Posted: 10 years ago

Wwwooww superb one
U totally nailed it,.
Awesome shot

Loved it

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tuli_jayee

@tuli_jayee

Voyager

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Posted: 10 years ago

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This si awesome. Apart from the romantic genre, you should experiment with other genres too. This first experiment, I must tell you is a huge success. Eager to read more such os's from you.