MaNan Drabble (updated)

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@navk

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Posted: 10 years ago

#21

This is so beautiful

Loved it

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Sharyn

@-LarryGurl-

Voyager

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Posted: 10 years ago

#22

He froze everything in his wake. Such was his reputation. But his icy cold heart melted when she smiled. She stood up for her friends without fear. She withstood his monstrous behaviour. And she retorted. She baffled him. She made him want to believe in goodness and selflessness when all his life he had been taught that in this life, it was all about give and take. She shook all his beliefs. She had that much power. This small girl, half his height, had the power to bring him down to his knees and beg. And that scared him. It made him want to roar, to lash out. And he did. At her. He punished her for being so fearless, so brazen. He punished her for making him think about her all the time. He punished her for replacing the stars in life. He wanted her to break. To stop shining so bright. To leave. Then he would stop thinking about her.

This was absolutely spellbinding. I reread this atleast six times, I swear. You've put into words, all of Mnaik's thoughts, his fears. And so perfectly, at that. Brilliant piece of writing. A pleasure to read. :D

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MKrayZee

@MKrayZee

Dazzler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: -LarryGurl-
He froze everything in his wake. Such was his reputation. But his icy cold heart melted when she smiled. She stood up for her friends without fear. She withstood his monstrous behaviour. And she retorted. She baffled him. She made him want to believe in goodness and selflessness when all his life he had been taught that in this life, it was all about give and take. She shook all his beliefs. She had that much power. This small girl, half his height, had the power to bring him down to his knees and beg. And that scared him. It made him want to roar, to lash out. And he did. At her. He punished her for being so fearless, so brazen. He punished her for making him think about her all the time. He punished her for replacing the stars in life. He wanted her to break. To stop shining so bright. To leave. Then he would stop thinking about her.

This was absolutely spellbinding. I reread this atleast six times, I swear. You've put into words, all of Mnaik's thoughts, his fears. And so perfectly, at that. Brilliant piece of writing. A pleasure to read. :D

Thank you so much. It is always humbling to be appreciated in this manner.

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Bushra Iqbal

@Sanely_Insane

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: MKrayZee
He froze everything in his wake. Such was his reputation. But his icy cold heart melted when she smiled. She stood up for her friends without fear. She withstood his monstrous behaviour. And she retorted. She baffled him. She made him want to believe in goodness and selflessness when all his life he had been taught that in this life, it was all about give and take. She shook all his beliefs. She had that much power. This small girl, half his height, had the power to bring him down to his knees and beg. And that scared him. It made him want to roar, to lash out. And he did. At her. He punished her for being so fearless, so brazen. He punished her for making him think about her all the time. He punished her for replacing the stars in life. He wanted her to break. To stop shining so bright. To leave. Then he would stop thinking about her.
He looked at the sky. Not a single star appealed to him. He wanted the one he did not want to want. Nandini Murthy.

This paragraph stood out for me. It's my favorite now. It's crisp, to the point and still manages to give out exactly what he's going through. Good job Zee.