OS: my last wish; FULL udt on 13.6.15. pg-2

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Hello members/friends,

As u all know that this is my story/ writing. Before this I have only read, so if I do anything inconsistent with the forum/ os rules then I, sincerely apologize. This os will be in 2 parts. 1st I am updating now. 2nd will be sooner.

BASE: this OS have its trace/roots to the point where FR has already happened. Every thing was in zigzag motion. No body knew that would be dsp's further reaction. Trust & relationships were on the verge of stake. Every one was terrified of dsp'd reaction. So from this point, this OS starts.

It has been around 2 weeks that fateful night came but it became the most unfateful night'. It feels that somebody's bad omen came in front of my happiness. It feels that somebody has spited on my dreams. Could a wedding night become such a dreadful thought in any one's life? yes, it could be if a person whom u love , on whom u trusted blindly, you rely on her even foe a breath , stabs u back in the hardest & cruelest way by putting her eyes in your eyes, with utter boldness. How one could be so shameless and still asking for one more chance! It is only because of her that today I am deprive of all my relationships. Yes, she have to pay for this. She will get her due punishment in the same way as she has snatched my happiness forever. With these thoughts dsp came out of his room and decided on something.

It was after her wedding that naku felt loner in this large palatial house , as now her family opted to move out on Naku's behest, out of PN. Where they could be was still a question unanswered for naku. Other than her husband, AS, Kala taayi , even baaji was not there for consoling her and with whom she can share her pain ,her worry about her saab. Among all the living creatures, it was madhu only who was understanding the plight of naku as well of baaji but she was herself so confused that she couldn't help more my locking herself in the room for the whole day. So while praying to bappa , naku found a new task of going to a temple ; situated too far away from PN. Going there daily, without any vehicle was the way of naku to punish herself for being the sole reason of pain of her saab. Sometimes she even rejected the request of madhu to go in a car for this reason. It is today only, after so many days, baaji offered her to go with her but naku denied as it was her penance and baaji is not a part of it.

While coming out of temple, naku felt something hard, as if piercing her. This is not a usual case. Nobody in the town do have the courage to look at her in such an awful manner , as now she is DUTTA SHRIRAM PATIL'S wife . yes, she is beautiful like an angel but now what is the use of this beauty when this has become a curse for her life, her love & more than that for her saab , literally. What if her saab , this divine creature in humanly figure, would have had met her before ? So there wouldn't have had been any need to hide herself behind this fake dark face. Nor it would have created such a mess, a disaster in her life neither it would have had troubled her saab for even a small flick. But then again, it was my bappa's wish that I should conceal myself even in front of my saab , my entirety. So in this way I will be able to help him to get acknowledged to the fact that it is nothing related to the face or color but only to one's inner-heart or to one's love for that other person. It is only love which should be acknowledged, accepted & most importantly to be loved back. Love should be trusted back so that one can be able to make his life beautiful. But here it's because of her mistake that she made realized wrongfully her saab that she considers him same as regard & in comparison to the other people in her life or to the whole world. Comparatively she didn't considered him the only person to whom she should have told the truth firstly , instead he was the last one !! oh! bappa , what a sin I have committed . I am ready for my penance but please fill the colors of love & happiness in the life of my saab forever & for eternity.

This is what she has been praying before her marriage & now also, till a sharp gaze scrunched her entire attention from her saab. Who it could be? Now , in this town, every body show respect to her. Nobody would dare to have an eye on her. As, a child feels safest in his/her mother's lappy , naku feels safest on this earth when her saab is around her. And to be precise & accurate, when she sees the vermillion, in her parting in the name of her saab, for her saab . With these thoughts naku started coming out of the temple through the stairs. She has seen this car. Oh yes, this is AS's car. But here? Where is AS? Why is AS not getting visible to me? Or AS is already in the temple? But I was also in the temple & still I am on its stairs. So how come I have not seen her . No this is not possible. Or is there anyone else who have came here to take her back to home , as now everyone in the house, knows that it is the religious practice that she follows everyday of coming to this temple. Or it could be baaji? Yes, it can be possible, as today itself he approached her to take her to temple . Or it could be madhu? Okay now I should go there & have a look that among of her family members who is this new devotee in the town . She rushed to meet her could be much lovable family member. GASPED!!!!! This is what!!! As soon as she reached the back portion of the car, the car rushed at the speed of more than 80 as if the car was fearing of getting in physical contact of naku. Or the car person was desirous of playing hide & seek', so it was Naku's turn to run after him /her.

Naku stood there bewildered, baffled for some moments. She was not able to comprehend anything. Her town, her home car, her supposed' car person; then why such a rush when she was about to meet him or her. And, any member in her family do not drive on such a high speed, not even the drivers. It is drivers of the respective cars those are responsible for the speed. only two members are there in the family who drive on their own. One is baaji and the other one is... OMG!!!! So it was he!!!!!!!!! So he was there!!!!! Did he came to meet me?? So why did he ran the car? Or he was following her as for now; she has broken his trust onto her & shattered it into pieces. And he is getting more hurt day-by-day as these shattered pieces of trust are irking him; stinging him to no end , piercing him every moment, every second & blood is coming out of his heart every now. Yes, he is bleeding badly.

So, he is keeping an eye on her. What a ridiculous thought? She ridiculed herself - he, keeping an eye on me, when he even does not want to have a look on my face ; cursing himself for having me in his life, for trusting me. No. it couldn't be him. Or yes, it could be baaji. But why the hell he would rum instead of asking me to get to the home with him . Totally perplexed and having an astounded like feeling she decided to head towards PN. In the mean time, all she was thinking that baaji never ever drives in such a harsh way. This is his typical style.' strangely' a smile appeared on Naku's lips. Inwardly she was feeling a sense of triumph. But over what & whom? She was not able to comprehend, to ascertain but it was for having a sight of him'; the invisible sight'. He was there, definitely it was he. And he was only for her. Might be due to hatred, but this hatred was also only fo r her. Finally naku started to have a feeling of priced possession' of something. Her dreams, her hopes, were about to become fulfill, sooner.

In the mean time. DSP is in a conversation with a person, and asks him, " get my meeting fixed with him. Today all the balances and scores will be settled; forever. I want it to happen tonight only, as I have a very important thing to do tomorrow. ". It has been two days, when a person who was his agent in Mumbai, called him off that he was hounded & was about to get tortured severely, when was departing from a conjoint meeting between the builders of Mumbai and local administration . yes, he was DSP' agent of his land business for Mumbai area, specifically. The meeting was held relating to the safety of local builders and the issue of threatening, builders currently are receiving by the public at large was to be discussed. Nowadays, if the builders or his agent is not able to provide the public, their respective flats in the agreed time, they get threatening calls at any time, even any their family members. So, to lessen this practice or to find a safety measure, the meeting was held at town hall. There, a temporary measure was arrived at; of providing the security service,. The agent, after the meeting was finished, while coming back, got stalked. The agent firmly believed that it he hadn't been reached at a nearby police station, he would have got kidnapped and at present would have been at that stalkers hostage. But from the next day, he started to receive life threatening calls and then he informed DSP about that. When he told about that person to DSP , he at once recognized him and so decided to meet him. So, DSP asked his agent to fix a meeting with that person.

So, at night, DSP was not coming to PN and he didn't. After naku had reached PN, she enquired about baaji. He was also not at home nor that car. baaji was out to have a meeting on current deals. Naku told madhu about the happening in that temple. Both confused girls waited eagerly for baaji until he arrived at PN. And after only his arrival, naku came to know that it was not he in the car. Nor he headed towards temple. After having a further enquiry, it came out that the car got drived today by non other than her saab. So, finally it was out, clearly, the "culprit" of naku was DSP ji. So, it was dutta who was watching naku from a distance but didn't wanted to meet her , so rushed from temple in top gear. So, was dutta mellowing down towards her?? Are Naku's prayers getting answered?? So, the removal of the layer of distrust & hatred was happening between her & her Saab???

Both baji & madhu were having this belief firmly, after this incident. But naku was waiting for that final day when DSP will look her as a person, treat her as a person. they will not only have an eye-to-eye meeting but will have a heart-to-heart meeting. But baaji & madhu were on cloud 999. So they kept advising naku that from next time she should not leave any chances of having such meetings with DSP instead they advised her to leave for temple every day, only in front of DSP , so one day , he will give a stern lift to her , finally .tonight, as DSP was not at home, neither was coming, so naku decided not to cook but to only have a look at her chaand' as he was missing today to give a visual treat to her. So, when night & it's beauty encompassed naku in it's sweat arms & she dozed off to her sweat dreams, she remained unascertained by the beauty of logical chaand' of PN.

Today, naku was late. So without doing any unnecessary house chores, she left for the temple only after having a pooja & praying session at home. Today naku was unusually, high at hopes. The hopes, in naku were not unusual. Naku is made up of positive hopes. But yesterday's invisible sight-seeing by her of her saab is building higher positive hopes in naku today. Today, naku wasn't able to concentrate on her pooja. Even during aarti, her eyes were searching for someone. No, he couldn't be here. How come in one day, he can comeback from Mumbai. He must be having very important work to do. It is enough for me that he came here; just to see me. Naku's trances of deep thoughts were got broken only when pujariji called naku, for a couple of times, to take Prasad. Due to this anxiety, naku was about to drop the pooja ki thali while wearing her slippers. All thanks to that person who held her pooja ki thali, which had in it the Prasad. She thought that today, after giving Prasad to baaji and nmadhu , she will have a talk with AS , on the pretext of giving Prasad to her & naku will tell about yesterday's incident to AS. She will give AS a hope that if DSP can come to temple only to have a sight of her then tomorrow , naku will be able to take DSP inside the temple, as well, for sure.

"THANK...", naku turned to say this and was astonished to see non- other than DSP , holding her pooja plate ; waiting for her like eternity, looking at her like watching the dead end of his life. With such a cold face, an emotion-less eyes, DSP was watching naku as if seeing her fo the last time !! as if DSP doesn't remember anymore who is he , where is he , what's the purpose for his being here , in temple. But as DSP knows only one thing, only one person, having only one thing to watch; the sole reason for his being ALIVE.

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Posted: 10 years ago
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cutesapna..well done, and congrats, for the OS..
As someone who puts a few lines together to create FFs..on Laagi. I certainly found the first part engaging.👏 three cheers for your effort!
  • the ambiance is clearly LTL 1
  • you captured well Dutta's rage after FR.. how he embarks on the "take her to task syndrome,for her deceit and guile.."
  • naku's sense of guilt for cheating her Saab.. I felt you dealt with in depth..
  • inclusion of some lovable characters, baji,Madhu AS.. fully gave the feeling of PN.
  • how naku hopes for his forgiveness is heart rendering..her heart hopes for him.. and the first part ends positively.. as the mystery driver turns out to be the man she has sinned against..
cute.. me looking forward to the next part of this OS.. much love hammie

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thanks cute-sapna, good start interesting story , waiting for more soon.
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hi cutiefab start😊
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hi cutie👍🏼continue soon
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thanx to all the members for the love & appreciation😃😃. and yes for reading it.😊 i know there are many silent readers, reading it.😃 love u all also, as i was also a silent reader 1.75 year back.😳😛
will update the 2nd part on 4th june; midnight😉😆
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hammie: u found my os an interesting one, i m elated. 😳as well the others too. 😃but the fact u found so many points in it.😳😳
the 2nd part will be one which u & others readers too, never ever, would have imagined. 😉nor such a story read so far. i m saying this as i know the story.😉😉😆

luv 2 alll readers.😊
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Os: my last wish

Part = 2

Naku is flagstabbered ; literally. At first, It is only few moments before that she was thinking of him that he couldn't come back so soon from Mumbai. And the most important, it was today only she was thinking of giving hope to AS that she will be able to bring DSP back to his life, to the line of trust & positivity. And here, today, DSP not only came to see her but also to meet her. For how long he would have been standing there for her, waiting for her, to see her, to have her in conversation with him. Naku thought that,"bappa, today I am feeling that all my wishes will get fulfilled. If I would have wished for a last thing, in my life, that could be non other than for my saab, as my last wish, why do I feel that even that would have been got fulfilled today. It is the day that all my hopes regarding the betterment of the life of my saab are getting fulfilled. No other wish can be the last wish of my life; exactly this is my last wish; bappa, which you have got fulfilled today. My saab, in the temple with me, waiting for me, what else I can wish for". As if these silent prayers & thanks giving of nakusha were getting heard by DSP. A strange, mysterious, poignant & vivid smile erupted from somewhere on dsp's face, with hatred in eyes, for god & for naku too. The hatred was much visible but it was not enough for naku to see. As if she has got blind by seeing her chaand' in the daylight. She was totally mesmerized, strucked in awe of her saab that she didn't even noticed that for how long & now her saab is getting conscious of holding pooja-late & through have already signaled naku for not less than 3 times , to have her pooja-plate back. Naku in her deep trance of thoughts, enjoying a deep eye-lock with her saab but much to naku's neglection or mistake of not noticing the fact that dsp was having a tough time with each, a passing by nano-second. And it is getting uneasy for him to stand in a temple & in a accompany of such a filthy person like her, yes it was her company that... The deadlock of silence got broken, by non other than dsp when his firm and a determined for something kind of voice; recited naku...' and his naku out of her deep slumber. He gestures for 1 more time to have her pooja-plate back & this time naku was having no option other than to take back her pooja-plate. A kind of embarrassment shimmered in the eyes of naku as she takes back the plate & with a low head she is trying to hide it. Finally she decides to speak up, to this person, to her man, and for this only he is here. "What prompted him to come here, his hatred or his love? No it could not be the love. saab do not love me , any more. Now I am not less than a filthy person, a fake person in his eyes, a leech who robbed him off of all the happiness that his destiny was about to bestow on him on his wedding night. For him, now, I am a person, who has crushed his hopes, his desires to live a life of which he has dreamt off, to have a peaceful life. Now I am just a traitor, only a traitor." As these thoughts were running inside naku, there are some tears also, decide to make a run out of her eyes & to trail down through her pink cheeks. And now, naku's trial of stopping her tears in now way but turning into a request. "saab aap..." Finally naku utters these words or to better say, to suppress, to win her trial with those tears of her, she decides to ask finally. As these words have pierced something into dsp, so dsp gives a menacing, stony look to naku and wanted to ask," look who is asking. As if she asks me every time for her every decision. Did she asked me before, even for her betrayal too. She and her questions have not left me of anywhere, of anyone. These questions...made me fall for her and now her face ...oh! How I wish that I could have ...". " CHAL," with 1 word only, dsp started to move further, not even looking back that whether she is following him or not.; looking at him or not. . So much trust, in a vide ambit of distrust, how come. His naku started following him from the day 1. While coming through downstairs, dsp, felt that his heart is getting so much of an undue, unnecessary pain, getting downcast under a heavy burden. So decides to ask some thing, to tell something & to warn about something!! While opening the door of the car, dsp asks, "PUCHEGI NAHIN KAHAN JAA RAHI HAI TU"? His naku decides to keep mum & nodes in negation & this didn't get unnoticed by her saab , definitely. As he was expecting this, so, swiftly get himself inside the car, the same car which was used by him for 2 consecutive days and that held the breath of naku for 1 whole day. "Today I was thinking of giving hope to AS of getting saab back to his life and here he himself decided to own me , yes, to own me , to have me back in his life. NAKU KI LAST WISH BHI PURI HO RAHI HAI. . Now AS and other members like her, need not to live in hopes, just hopes. Yes, soon there will be an outcome. "

Soon, dsp, started to make his way clear. No, this is not the usual road which naku uses every day to come and go back to PN. It was only after some passage of time, that naku started to notice something weird, as she was not able to feel anything else, with having this fact that she is with him, her saab, her chaand, her last wish. "Oh! It could be a different way shorter than the regular one, as he might be having some important work to do. I should be only courteous that he decided to have me back to home, our would be home". Soon the car decides to move out of PV; and the speed is getting lower and lower. Naku, more like a tiny devotee, is with her god, so there is no reason to wonder, to ponder about, as he can never be incorrect. She is with her saab whom she trusts & love, even more than her bappa. Her bappa is her friend, her pat-shower. But saab is her way, her desired to walk on this way and her ultimate desire to make this way of her for the whole living life; even after her death.

Dsp , now experiencing a jittery feeling almost, tear-eyed, decides not to go further." No, you cannot do this". So dsp, about to put his weight on break, and instead suddenly presses accelerator. "No! Now every thing is in place and it will in place, that of I have always desired of. To get this rid of this pain, to an end forever, to penalize his culprits. For trust, I have always been getting distrust, in return. So now it is turn to pay off every one what is right, what is apt. every thing is under his control, his culprits, this girl & her would be punishment!! And this time I cannot move back, and after this everything will get correct automatically

Confused naku couldn't do anything more than by just peeping outside of the car window, every now. Unintentionally, this line came out of her mouth," HUM KAHAH JAA RAHAH HAIN, SAAB?"Now her Saab didn't expected this. Dsp decided to slaughter this girl her but not expecting her to ask a single question about this. The question acted like a bombshell, explode on him. Dutta stopped the car with an abrupt halt. Giving answer to a question is not his nature, nor his forte. His forte is to question back. "kyun tu jaana chahti hai, tu jaa sakti hai , waapis !!". Now this is definitely not a question. It is clearly a quest, an urge as now dsp is pleading naku, gestural, to reject this ride with him as it will be and is her last ride!! dutta's teary eyes are asking naku to jump out of the car & to run back to PN. If this could happen, he will be able to answer back his inner self, during the rigorous questionnaire session with his inner self. And if this happens, I will stride on him like "yes, I was about to penalize her, I wanted to punish her for betraying me, BUT she ran away. What could I have done at that point? Oh yes!!, she is always in a habit of betraying me by running away and leaving me behind at altar . So she left me in the midway, like always ". And in this way, naku can be back, at home, safely. Yes, she can move back, she still can back off by asking me to stop & then by running away OR by asking such questions that my mind, my soul, who is adamant on punishing her, can allow me to move back & take her to home, safely. "Yes, she will be safe and you will be suffering by seeing her at peace for the rest of your life, isn't?"This suffocation led dsp to have a tight grip over the steering of the car and glued him to his seat through his back. Dutta started breathing heavily as if, at this respiratory speed, he will blow up, at any moment. Perplexed naku, started to have a worrying and curious looks for dsp and having a short glimpse as still she is not able to look him directly, into his eyes ; not because of her guilt BUT because of dutta considering her a traitor which sometimes tear naku in thousands of pieces and yes, it is totally unbearable for her.

Again, the car is moving but left to right and vice-versa, on an empty road as now it is a highway moving out of PV. Generally, it remains empty or very less populated. At the speed of 40, it is clearly visible that dsp is not able to control the car. Naku, lost in her own thoughts, decided to ask. "KYA HUA SAAB, KUCH GADBAD HAI...". As usual, she couldn't and hasn't completed and dsp shouted at the top of his lungs, an outburst; "TU UTARTI KYUN NAHIN, AGAR TUJHSE JAANA HAI TOH, JAATI KYUN NAHIN". Naku, once again is petrified, terrified, intimidated and is taken aback. For a moment she couldn't answer dsp back. The car is about to move into a nearby tree but by the time dsp gets the car to a halt, again. In the mean time, all dsp did was glaring hard at naku, clenching his jaws but giving her a worried look. And this aroused several questions in naku. What it could that is penalizing him so much. My presence, probably; but it is he who decided to go through this all. It is he who decided to take me with him. And if he didn't wanted this, then why he was at temple for 2 consecutive days and it seems that finally he has surrendered to me . After few seconds, "SAAB MAIN KAHIN NAHIN JAYEGI AAPKO CHOD KAR", naku said firmly, determinedly by looking into him , his soul through his eyes as if once again confessing her love for him . "TOH PHIR TU..." and this time dsp hammered the accelerator, with his right foot, while changing the gear, jerked his head and started looking forward with tears, clearly visible to naku and him also. The car which was spoofing at, nearly at 40, now passing the speed of 100. And now , it's Naku's turn to stick her eyes on dsp; to read every expression, emotion & feeling evident ion his face, the feelings which arte pondering out of his eyes and saying that why do it feels that he is moving towards his dead end ; their dead end. The suicidal instinct is evident in his eyes. "Oh! Why he is driving like this, he should be careful. This road is very edgy as it falls in a hilly area. But more than this road, why do it feels that today he is getting very edgy. Do he want to kill me or himself!!". With tears in her eyes, those by now have started running down, raucously, naku start to look forward, on the road. "Where this road is leading us? Why he made a choice of this road? Saab, what you want to do?? Please tell me". Her train of thoughts came to a sudden halt when dsp parked the car in a vast barren land with no population here and there. There was not a single house and she was thinking that he is taking her to PN, their home. By the time dsp's face has turned into a stone. A tear, after having a huge struggle with dsp, dared to come out of his eyelid. Neither blinking his eyes nor even breathing; is dsp looking not more than a zombie. Naku came out of the car and while coming out of the car, it was left totally unnoticed by her that dsp's left hand raised in then air to stop her, in the mid. But his hand remained only in the air and reached nowhere. And because of this trauma, dsp's hand balled into a fist and he stroked the steering of car, hardly. With such a force that horn blown out, as if it represented the outburst of dsp. Now the trauma of dsp is clearly visible to naku as she turned to see dsp, on the sound of horn. In this process of stoking the steering, naku sees that dutta has got his hand hurt a bit.

But now there are no further questions coming out of naku as her heart have started sensing that something bad is going to happen. Naku standing out of the car with lot of questions, those are not surfacing now, inquisitively, waiting for dsp to come out. But dsp, sitting like a dead, already with eyes, piercing the infinity in front of him. Naku gathers some courage and asks, " saab hum yahan kyun aaye hain"? But this time dsp is mum as if he has vowed to keep mum. He now get out of the car and places himself in a position that naku can see him directly, in front of her; Directly peeping into the eyes of nakusha as if trying to reads her mind. the rate of palpitation in naku goes to such a high rate that now it is getting ,nearly suffocating for her. As naku opens her tiny mouth and is about to speak, there comes a vehicle with a huge storm of dust forming around it. Naku turns to her back to see that who has come. Inner-heart she is feeling that her worries, have now got a multiplier effect. And at a same time, she looks back to her saab for some relief who is busy exclusively in watching, non other than the storm of dust and the vehicle forming it. First dsp became stone hearted and now it seems that this eyes are also made up of stones, not blinking for a second. When the storm of dust subsidized, naku sees that the vehicle is non other than the police patrolling car. Now it is Naku's turn to get stony. She makes a run her dsp and asks him ," SAAB YEH POLICE YAHAN KAISE? KUCH BAAT HO GAYI HAI KYA, BOLO NAA SAAB". Naku stated putting these questions holding a bit of dsp's hand, she ended, literally stroking his hand hardly by her hand, balled into a fist. In the mean time , naku didn't realized that some of ten men those who have arrived in the vehicle, are now out of the car and they have reached very near to her shoulder. During the whole process of getting stroked by naku, dsp didn't made any movement, standing like a corpse!! But as nearer the men were approaching towards naku, dsp's painless face started turning into a bed of thrones. With his inner-trauma playing games on it. It is not due to the stroking which, dsp got recently from naku but the fear of seeing her for the last time made him to move his eyes to naku. Suddenly a word banged Naku's heart through her ears was "CHAL LE KE JAA ISKO". And after hearing this , naku started turning into a cadaver but not before seeing at the back of her, as to whom dsp was talking more than her in these few seconds in comparison to those few hours , today, which she got to spend with her saab where he only muttered or gave a edgy look.

As naku started to look upwards, she is feeling that aura, the same stinging aura, which she hates to her death. That deep rooted sensation in her which she has got buried a months ago, of which she used to fear of, hated to the core, at time was, even, ready to fight with. But after the arrival of dsp in her life, didn't require to fight ,as she felt safest with her saab. Now the same, being hovered by the devil like feeling, is back!!! And word in this word is inappropriate to describe naku, as soon as she sees him, his face, the devil that is still alive on this earth, the beast ...MOREY!!!!

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Edited by CUTE_SAPNA - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Shattered, astounded, deluged by hatred, flagstabbered, as if got stabbed directly in the heart. Naku felt that she has been stirred and fallen from form the 100th floor of a building. "MOREY, what this leech is doing here and with my saab??? Is he here to hurt him or has he deceived my saab, so he is here and too with me??? What this leech has done to make my saab come?? This sponger, for sure, might have committed any horrendous act or a treachery that forced my saab to give in and to face such a tyrant. Now, in no time he will be dead. But my saab, cannot be manipulated in any case and if the foe, the enemy is open in out. There cannot be any happening which can tempt or pursue him to SURRENDER!!! NO, my saab is dutta shriram patil , the god of Patil Vaadi and the king of Ratnagiri. He has already came a long way of such heinous acts by his foes and he never ever had given up, nor he will give up". "SAAB-SAAB, YEH KAMINA YAHAN KYA KAR RAHA HAI, AUR WHO BHI AAPKE ILAAKE MEIN!! YEH AB TAK ZINDA KAISE HAI , SAAB, BOLO SAAB, BOLO"????? By the time naku start strangling dsp and dsp is standing there, watching his eternity, his naku, like a dead, dead forever. All he could hear, SAAB-SAAB, in her voice, as a sweet little bird chirping in his ears , lost totally in her sweet chirping , dsp s hands started to take naku, her face in his palms with a content like feeling on his face, but got stopped in between when the leech, the devil, interrupted, "DUTTA". The hands got back to their position and the content like feeling got vanished into air. Naku pulled dsp towards her and got stitched to his chest with eyes closed expecting and desiring with her fullest that, right now, what she has seen, is not a reality but a dream only; the worst of all dreams till now she has visualized wither open eyes. The monster uttered further. "I didn't expected that you will fulfill your promise, so sooner; to get me to what I have been chasing from months, that seems like ages to me. MAAN GAYA MAIN TUJHE, DUTTA BHAU". I have left all the hopes of getting nakusha back, when heard that she has got married to you". Naku's heart, her mind, her wishes, her prayers, her hopes, her LOVE, her marriage, her survival, all came to a halt, a stand still, an infinity ,a ZERO, when she hears the last line of that wolf; in the skin of human. An air passed through the lungs of naku, in form of breath naming = SAAB.

Now the culprit(dutta), started hiding his eyes, so that they couldn't get the sight of her. "NO!! THIS IS NOT MY SAAB, MY SAAB CANNOT DO THIS.YES, HE CAN NEVER DO THIS. THIS IS NOT HE

HE CANNOT EVEN THINK OF DOING THIS EVEN WITH HIS ENEMY, AND I AM HIS... . I KNOW HE HATES ME; A LOT. BUT HE CANNOT HATE ME THAT MUCH, SO TO PUT AN END, MY BELIEF, MY LOVE, MY TRUST ON HIM. HE IS NOT A TREACHERUR. HE HATES TREACHERURS. AND FOR THAT ONLY, HE WANTS TO PUNISH ME. BUT HE CANNOT PUNISH HIMSELF BY COMMITTING SUCH AN ACT AGAINST THE HUMANITY, SO THAT HE COULD NOT FACE HIMSELF!!!!!! NO, IN THIS WAY HE WILL BECOME A TREACHERUR HIMSELF!!! MY SAAB, A BETRAYOR !!!!!! HAVE I COMMITTED SUCH A CRIME, SUCH A SIN THAT MY SAAB IS BECOMING A TRAITOR, HIMSELF; THE HUMANITY WILL BE ASSAMED OFF. I WON'T TELL TILL HAPPEN. AND THIS TO HAPPEN IT WOULD BE BETTER THAT I ..."now with these thoughts of naku don't have voice, it is only her eyes those are asking these questions to dsp. She now just wants to have a word on them by dutta. The culprit, whose was till now not able to look into the eyes of naku, jerked her hand off, those were holding his. With this, naku is having a feeling , as dutta has not only , left her, shaken but also her faith , her love , her trust on him which is in any case, is more than she is having on her bappa . Naku is standing; muddled; but still having some breaths left in her lungs, only. At first dsp raised his head, as if trying to raise himself in his own eyes, then looked directly in the eyes of naku.; unmoved my her manifest questions , asking him to have a word on them. "TUJHE KYA LAGTAA HAI, MUJHE DHOKHA DENE KE BAAD, TUJHE AISE HI JAANE DOONGA MAIN". Naku started collapsing with every word, coming out of him; her whole being started getting shattered, colliding into pieces, her saab, her god, her love, BETRAYED her!!!! And that too by placing her safely in the arms of a devil!!!!!!!! To that devil, who became a reason of her meeting, unison with her saab. "He saved me when he didn't even knew anything about me. and now his hatred for me has surpassed everything good in him , even the feeling that now I am his ..." as if, someone have started , throwing naku back, she is loosing control on her body, her mind and her soul as if have started parting with her, her body. How can she live without her soul, her saab, when this only soul of hers decided to bid adieu to her. Now there is no sense of ...

Dutta is watching naku, keenly, in this condition of hers. Now his purpose is fulfilled. What he wanted to bestow on her is getting, accomplished. "Now she will be able to know what he felt post FR. His naku, his love was snatched away from him and instead of her, a fake naku was there asking him to listen to her, asking him to have a look on her face !! It felt at that time that , like, somebody has killed my nakusha. Who else? This fake naku, did all that and now you will be able to feel nakusha that what do happens when one's faith, trust, his entirety comes to an end. It is the time for your penance". With these thoughts, dutta who is stranding with his side look towards naku gets his back towards her. As if the last thread, that remained in naku, BROKE-OFF!!!!! With her eyes wide open, the last word that cam out of her mouth was "SAAAB"; and then the mouth remained apart forever , with eyes those will never ever get open on their own, not having anything more left in them, except the tears.

Her physical collapse was intrigued by non other than morey . With lustful eyes, he got hold of naku by her left hand. He got what he wanted for months, but ages to him. He whispered, by bending himself a bit, to Naku's ear "CHALIYE NAKUSHA JI. JAANE KA WAQT HO GAYA HAI". His 3 men, better to say police constables, his partners in crime, not dressed in their uniforms, decided to accompany him when morey started, dragging naku towards his car. But the leech doesn't know that what he have always desired of, wanted to get, is still out of his reach and gone forever. The monster doesn't know that now a living naku is not in his hold, neither he can get hold of her , a living naku for the rest of his life , not even her sight but can only in his filthy dreams. As her bappa won't allow this to happen nor her. Morey's 3 men started looking at nakusha, suspiciously.

Now this tumult, this fake act of dsp is over for him. Now this is the time, to put his actual plan into action. He is about to signal his men (minus baaji), those are hidden behind the long, dark shaft trees, surrounding the vast barren land, when he heard a s sudden yell of one of morey's men."SIR, YEH TOH MAR GAYEE".


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Edited by CUTE_SAPNA - 10 years ago
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Morey got there shock of his life. He have now started shaking nakusha, by clutching her jaws with hi filthy hands. Sensing that dsp forgot to signal his men, they come out of their own and surround morey and his men. Morey's men try to run but it proves in vain. Morey hastily opens the door of the passenger seat of the car and lays naku on it and sprinkles some water on her face, for thrice. But there is not a single movement from her. Morey starts abusing, but whom, he himself doesn't know. "YEH NAHIN HO SAKTA KI MAIN KUCH CHAHUN AUR WHO MUJHE NAA MILE". And while howling, he raises his eyelids and start turning into a pit of fire as he watched that it was actually, the dsp's trap , into which now he is jinxed. It was not he who decided to deprive dsp of his naku, but it is he, who, now has lost his freedom, forever. By now 2 of dsp's BG's get morey in their clutches tightly and get him and his 3 men, into morey's own car and drive him off to their secret place,.

Dsp, totally devastated, his heart want to make a run, for his naku but is feeling like his legs, his whole body, have decided to give up. So now, it is his penance time that has arrived, in actual, and with killings going on in the heart of dsp, he starts walking, detestly, bogglingly. It seems that dsp took years, before reaching at that spot where is naku is lying, being laid by his own men before they drove off morey and his men to dsp' s den. "Yes, she is looking unconscious, what has happened to her? Why she is not saying anything?? Why she is not asking questions any more??? Where is her stupid chantings; this is not my naku; certainly. Where she is gone????" now it is dsp's turn to undergo through these questions. He didn't answered these questions of naku when he could but now, he wants to make questions to naku, but she can't answer. The similarity in both the cases is, the questions were asked in silence, through silence. "NAKU TU KHADI KYUN NAHIH HOTI". As dsp gets nearer to naku, he sees some blood oozing out of Naku's nose & ears. A clear indication of shock!! And because of that, internal bleeding!! Dsp knows this symptom well, as he has himself and his men too, inflicted such pain, physically on many by torturing them no end. A train of thoughts start moving on. It has been only 10 days of his marriage, when dsp decided to pick up his business as well as the call of his Mumbai agent, Shankar. He has been calling dsp for 3 consecutive days. At that time, all dsp was able to see, listen and consume was, the liquor only; from day to night and night to day. He was able to curse his fake naku for snatching away his light, his reason to live; from him. "Yes, she did all this for her own selfish reason; to get me in her life at any cost, to find a safe place of hers in my life at any cost. But from now I won't allow her to fulfill her intentions. I will get her out of my life. But my life without her will be a life to live???? But dutta, she is a traitor. She stabbed you back in the cruelest way, it was possible, you cannot forgive her". In this dilemma, swinging back and forth, dsp was consuming liquor, totally drowned in the misery of his; decided to receive the call. On the other side, it was Shankar; who told dsp that it has been 3 days that he is getting threatening calls from a person naming, morey. He was present there in the conjoined meeting held between the local administration & local builders relating to the issue of safety of builders. So obviously, police authorities, were also there.

Shankar also addressed to the SP city about the prevalent problems of the builders, they are facing and all present there did recognized him as dutta's agent. And it was after this only, the senior inspector morey and his 2 or 3 men kept gauging at him. At first they tried to meet Shankar separately, after the meeting. But Shankar decided not to meet morey or giving some weight to this person as he can demand some money in return[ransom] ; the illegitimate money, some corrupt officers, usually demand. Finally Shankar decided to avoid morey. And after his departure from the venue of the meeting, this person morey started stalking shankar. From the next day started giving life threatening calls to Shankar as it was clear and evident to morey that this issue will reach to dsp as well. But it was only when morey threatened shankar about his principal [master] that he can even reach him and dsp won't be able to save himself from morey. So what is the status of Shankar, it was then only Shankar decided to tell this all to dsp.

At the single mention of morey , dutta recognized him. Dutta thought that now it is apt with regards to the time, that morey should be dealt with finally. "But then for who's sake, I should do this. My lover betrayed me. Although this girl is my wife but I hadn't, till now, and wouldn't ever accept her as my wife. She do not deserves this status. Nakusha only deserves a punishment. So, finally, have I decided for nakusha become a prey in the hands of morey ?? Am I leaving her for nothing but that b**t*** [in typical language] morey to have her and ----------- NO, DUTTA CANNOT STOOP SO LOW BECAUSE SOMEBODY HAS BETRAYED HIM. WHAT MAY BE A REASON ; SHE IS A GIRL A LADY & THIS IS THE SOLE REASON FOR WHICH DSP IS ALWAYS THERE AND WILL BE THERE, TO SAVE THE HONOUR OF A LADY. But she is not just a ... . She has snatched away the humanity within me, which I got to understand, used to perceive , through her only. So if no humanity, then what is the basis to do something, to save her?? NO, I AM DUTTA SHRIRAM PATIL AND I DO HAVE MY OWN PRINCIPLES AND A GIRL, ONLY A GIRL CANNOT GET IT BROKEN. YES, I WILL DO IT ONLY FOR MY PRINCIPLES AND NOT FOR ANY OTHER REASON".

Dutta tried to make himself understand the reason of helping her, in best possible way, to get her out of the forthcoming danger, lurking over her." yes, this is the only reason due to which I am helping her and for no other reason, that's it. This all happened inside dsp when this struggle was hunting dsp from inside , then this idea came to his mind of getting this trouble[morey], end. BUT IN HIS OWN WAY; as he would be able to take his revenge from naku and she will learn a lesson as well. Yesterday, he thought of going to Mumbai and unintentionally he went to the temple to have a sight of her, to make a final decision. She was praying something; for what? To betray him once again, to breach is trust one again or how to ditch him more precisely???? He was about to leave when he saw her, once more. What might be she praying, he have to save her, as any reason is miniature in front of this reason that he ------- and then he made his car rushed as nakusha had seen him.

Scene shifts top morey, as he is thrown, literally by dsp's men to a jail kind of place but accurately, it is dsp's den and by this time morey has started thinking that here he has decided to get nakusha with him as well as to kill dutta, while, on the pretext of thanks-giving. But this dutta, once again managed to defeat him. "NAA WHO LARDKI MILI, NAA WHO DUTTA MARAA".

Dutta's tears have started turning into droplets as soon as he touched naku and have started caressing her face; her hair, her forehead ... Only in this and with this downpour, naku have always wanted to drip herself. But now it is her body that is not able to cherish it. "TOH YEH THA TERA VISHVAAS MUJH PAR, JISKI TU KASMEIN KHAATI THI , AUR CHAHTI THI MAIN BHI ISS PAR BHAROSA KARUOON. TU MUJHE PURI TARAH SE MITANA CHAHTI THI, ISS LIYE TUNE YEH RAASTA CHUNA". Dsp totally lost, forgone forever start to become a victim of these thoughts when his eyes start trailing Naku's face ; her eyes those are still having tears in them ; still crying, her face, her forehead and the most , the parting having vermillion, in the name and of the name of her saab. "I wanted to give you punishment and you stubborn girl, don't want to have it , so alwys kept arguing with me. Never asked me for my clemency. And now also, instead of having a lesson from this punishment of yours you have started, giving me punishment!!!!! No, I won't have it. It was only for you, not for me. You know that your saab has gone through with so many things in his life; still you are not showing any mercy to me",

With these thoughts, having an unseen conversation with his naku, dsp gets nakusha up, in his arms, keep her in the passenger seat and move swiftly to the driver' seat to ride off to PN. Some of the remaining BG's of dutta try to make a rush to him, to intrigue in between, as they can clearly see that he is not in his state, leave the thought of driving. But dutta, stopped them in the mid, with his hand, as he wanted to be alone with her, from now. To save dsp, from any further catastrophe, bg also make a run behind him in their respective vehicles. One of them tried to call baajirao, but his phone is not reachable.

At PN, there is a mild session of romance is going on between baaji and madhu. madhu, while baaji was leaving for a meeting, hastily, ask him to have his breakfast. Within a second of his denial, she gets him to the dinning table, holding him, by his hands. and after that, madhu start serving baaji, the breakfast. Now it is baaji's turn to get some stubborn like his bhau, as baaji's constant denial is still on. And madhu gets a morsel and stuffs it forcibly in the mouth of baaji. Baaji having an astonished look, gets a smile curved on his pink lips and start to have his breakfast on his own. In the mean time, madhu literally, snatches the phone resting beside baaji's left hand and get it switched off. Baaji start to feel bewildered and in that state, utters, "MADHU TUM TOH PURI----------; MERA MATLAB--------USKI TARAH----------------". Madhu finishes the line with immense politeness and says, "BIWI KI TARAH ". And after this, baaji gets chocked off, nearly, and start coughing. Madhu wordily gets a glass of water and noshing it to baaji like a baby. only at this time, baaji too gets the hold of glass of water and then happens a sincere eye-lock between him and madhu. Now it is getting cleared that, in this couple, madhu is shy a bit, so she lowers her eye-lashes and start moving out of baaji's grip, which is on her hand, on the pretext of holding the glass. "MADHU MAIN..."as, baaji do start uttering something, suddenly 2 of BG's, comes in shouting, "baaji-bhau,baaji-bhau". Baaji, at once, gets out of the brewing-up romantic session and asks loudly to bg's about the matter and about their constant ranting, so badly. "baaji-bhau, VOH VAHINI KO---------", a bg nearly opened his mouth murmuring this, baaji started raving and got frantic, asked loudly for the well being of his vahini and bhau. The bg in return informs baaji about the well being of bhau but as soon he is about to tell the happening, it starts getting clearly visible to baaji , dutta holding naku in his arms, entering the PN . Both baaji and madhu make a run towards dsp asking him about the well being of nakusha. But dutta is not able to listen anything, has turned into a deaf, for being not able to listen the voice, the voice of his life; the most desirable one. Dutta is ending by every moment, with the thought," YOU ARE MY DESTINY AND IF THE DSTINY LEAVES THE MAN, THAN WHAT HAPPENS TO HIM?? "In the mean time, all the PN members, start gathering there. AS, Kala taayi, Leela, Roops, Kishore with anay and pari . Suds was there at last. AS bewildered, and befuddled , after having a look at Naku's body, comes to her baby boy, dutta and start asking about this obscurity and how it got happened . What has happened to her DIL and why her son is not answering back??? As ,AS gave a look to her son , with tears in her eyes , those have already started bursting out, she started realizing that she is not sitting next to her son , but a stone , who has now turned to a deaf , factually !!!!!

Sitting on his knees, with hand that too are resting on his knees ,like useless now, forever, and with eyes having no tears, left in them, dsp is not giving any clue regarding his trauma, the storm brewing inside him. It was during the way of getting naku in his arms and putting her in the car to the PN where dsp, drove the car, totally like a maniac, gone and lost forever, by having his eyes fixed on naku, didn't even realizing it, that, in fact he is driving the car, so should have a frontier look, instead of his frozen eyes, fixed on naku. It seems that all his tears are decussated up in the mean time. Everyone throwing a glance at dsp, is failing to realize that dsp, after loosing his destiny, is a deaf, in actual or it could be to all the other voices except that of his naku. Then AS makes a run to baaji and madhu, those are sobbing badly, and ask about the happening. But the 2 poor souls are themselves in the trauma and are totally unascertained by the fact of what has happened, actually. In no time, AS collapse on the floor, shouting, "HEY JAGDAMBAA, YEH TUNE KYA KIYA, HUMARE BETE KA GHR TOD DIYAA, AB KYA HOGA HUMARE BETE KAA!! AUR KYA JAWAB DENGE HUM BAABI KO, NAKUSHA HUMARI BHI TOH ZIMMEIN-DAARI THI". As, started retorting and complaining as a faithful deity to the god. Kala, leela, roops and suds too, were totally puzzled by the happening, while kala was thinking about who can do this with bhau's wife, in his area . So there is some one else other than her [kala], who wanted to kill nakusha or to break their relationship forever. Leela and suds were puzzled too but were sad by and at the least. Leela is smirking inside for kala that what she has always wanted to do, some body else have done it. All her plans got backfired and now she has lost her claim of becoming the queen of PN. Roops is not sad at all but is terrified a bit, of her safety, so if any one can do this with his vahini, then the other ones are also not safe. Kishore, totally palpable at heart, start crying at the top of his lungs. He is the only one who sat beside dsp who is sitting adjacent to his naku's head. Kishore is thinking to console dsp but himself doesn't know what to say. So while placing his hand on dsp's shoulder, kishore hesitates a bit, so he shrink his hand. anay and pari too, are crying badly, so leela take them inside and they also left with a question to all PN members, "MAAMI KO KYA HUA HAI".

It is only after some time; baaji makes a call to one of the bg's and then he gets to know tahtb morey is in their hostage. So, it is he who did this. He is the perpetrator. With eyes spitting fire and both the hands turned into a rocky fist, baaji strode out of the PN. But I the midway, there are some more Bg's and from them baaji comes to know that it is not morey BUT DSP whom did all this, in his inclination of punishing nakusha, and finally lost her. Morey was only a bait of catching the fish. But who was the bait, whoa ws the fish and whos finally got hunted down, is still a question.

And here we see, morey, tied in ropes, beating the walls by his hands and legs , with mouth ; sealed in, is trying to untie himself but failing badly. He is still thinking of nakusha's beauty ; so she was used as the bait to get the big fish; morey ."Par mujhe nahin mili toh, tujhe bhi nahin mili dutta", morey laughs his villainy out.

continued...for the last part.
Edited by CUTE_SAPNA - 10 years ago

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