Ikraar PART 5C Pg15 Hero's Entry

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Posted: 18 years ago
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It was raining heavily, it was already late, and by the time she would have missed her company bus which drove them from Madhapur to her home in Secunderabad. Today she was ok as her boss Sangeeta had told her that she would get her driver to drop her off. Finishing of the final details of the project, Prachi beamed with happiness, the project they were doing for Hyundai dealers was done. She just needed to check with the final stages of testing reports next week would not be so crucial and tire some. After having dropped of sangeeta first, prachi was already half asleep, as the car suddenly stopped.

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It looks like its Milind luck or its just raining everywhere. He had come down to finalize a deal on his new pharmaceutical industry which he was setting up in Hyderabad. Swearing under his breath, he drove the car making way through the horrible traffic , he wondered why they had traffic lights when nobody followed it. His impatience was rising just as much as the water on the road due to rainfall. He had to go back to his hotel and finalize the deal call his lawyers and his partner in the new venture. His car stopped which he knew it would due to the water clogging, cursing his rotten luck, picking his water proof laptop bag (gifted to him by a friend) he walked towards the steeper raised side of the road looking for a public telephone booth. After walking for about 15 minutes he finds one.

Milind: aagee sharah hai, bearish roknay kaa naam nahi laythi, traffic karab hai, upar say dus dus meel chalo phone booth kay liye, aur yeah kya ab beejli ko bhi jaanaa tha.

Letting out a few more words of the ugly vocabulary, he tries to figure out the numbers, and waits for the other person to pick up. In the mean time, he looks around, the place looked very similar to the chawl he lived in Mumbai, it was not as big but the atmosphere was the same, there were ppl keeping vessels to fill water everywhere, mothers yelling for the kids to head back, while the kids did the teer maar dance in the middle of the road, smile crept brightening his face, as he remembered his childhood those fun filled days. Just then a really posh car comes and stops right near the kids. Milind braced himself for the guy to come out and abuse the kids verbally or even physically. Instead the figure that came out did not look like a man, but looked like a woman. In between the lighting all he could see was it was a lady, by the high heels was walking towards the kids, Wait a minute he thought, this is not right, she was not going to lecture the kids, she was taking her heels off, god she was going to join them. As she danced he was trying real hard to see her, there was something disturbingly familiar about her, so far all he could see was she was wearing a blue dress. Her body swayed gracefully as if she had let go of all her inhibitions and become a child herself.

Then struck a big lightening, making Milind speechless and shocked

Voice on the other side : Hello Milind , you there ? Hello

Voice : Milind yaar you there, array jaldi say kuch boldhay varna ayesha is eating my head off, could you plz answer it? How did it go? Hello

Milind : I am seeing her

Voice: ( talking in lower tone indicating that he was conversing with someone there ) : shutup ayesha I cannot hear, saw who Milind

Milind: Its her man

Voice( realizing its prachi): IN HYDERABAD, Where what when, common man fess up

Milind: oh Neev, she is more beautiful than ever, She is here neev she is, there is happiness bubbling in his voice

Milind stood there in trance drinking her beauty as he saw the car as it drove past the booth then the voice brought him back to this world

Voice : what are you doing talking to me man, go right now and follow her, before completing the sentence milind was already out

Milind goes behind the car as it moves slowly

pg 2, pg 4,5,7,11,12,15

It is my first attempt in to write something in kayamath, forgive all my mistakes and elaborate writing, if you like it plz leave me a comment, it helps me decide if I should continue or not

Reg

Anju

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Its good! I enjoyed reading it! Please do continue! Would look forward to some more pleasant moments!

Have PMed you! ๐Ÿ˜‰
Edited by sareeta - 18 years ago
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Anju, I have followed your writing in KS and have loved it. Am glad to see a fan fic in the Kayamath section as well.

Hmm...so it seems that Prachi after leaving the Shah mansion has done well for herself away from all the ppl who had caused her so much pain,e specially Mills. Can't wait to see what he does next...in order to find her and finally woo her back ๐Ÿ‘
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Anju Dear..

Awesome..I liked it...Waiting to see what happens next.

Just a thought, it would be good if you could write a character sketch at the beginning of the story.

But the words...carried Ummff...Really good..Waiting to read more of your FF soon... Now, howcome prachi's boss is sangeeta!!! LOL


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Posted: 18 years ago
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Anju akka, you hold on your words..I thought u just joked ๐Ÿ˜‰

I will read your FF when I come back from school ๐Ÿ˜‰ ...no time now
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Yes it is dear, sorry i am new so i dont know what you guys call them though meli told me i thought it was understood. Pardon my ignorance๐Ÿ˜Š

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Posted: 18 years ago
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gr8888888 start hmmmm.......they both are seperated
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Posted: 18 years ago
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anju dear....

great start do continue...
will be waiting for the next epi.....
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Please do continue soon! Erm... from what I understood... Milind and prachi havent as yet met in FF , eh ?! ๐Ÿ˜•

Erm... I got second thoughts when I saw comments abt them being seperated ... I was like abhi milen kahaan ?! ๐Ÿ˜†
Edited by sareeta - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Anju sis,

that was a perfect start, loved the rain scene ๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ‘ ....whats up with Michis and rains ๐Ÿ˜ณ ๐Ÿ˜†

Does Michi knows each other??? or are they separated now?? Many questions is running through my minds now ๐Ÿ˜† ...cant wait for your next installment ๐Ÿ˜ณ

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