SS-Lament of the Rainbow...(Wrapped Up) - Page 4

Originally posted by: desi chic

Sareeta Di,

I've been meaning to read this for a while now and got it through yesterday...my lucky moment eh ?! 😉 It was very emotionally drenched. Bless my soul , thank you! Your descriptions of the regret and it's presence was really felt. Thank you! I appreciate you not using the names to address the characters as the way you've weaved it, no introductions are needed! I have never liked the use of the names in a story... coz for me its the essence that I am touching on and not the fellas in the story! But when I realized that it leant in to the feel of the way I conveyed... I stuck to it... not I can divert from the style... its jus not me... Very poetic Thank you... didnt realize it was... when I penned . The title itself, had suggested a note of awaiting or "unfinished business" and it's as if the story goes on even though the writing has stopped.The title was a spontaneous thing and this time it was the title... and one line that the male protagonist in the story says taht got me writing the entire... thing in the first place... You are a sensational writer Good Lord... thank you so much for that! I am deeply humbled... and each time you say it... it only reminds me of how much I dont know.. and how Far I need to go ...! , and I still want that copy of the book, autographed! If the day were to come... sure! Keep it up, you and words were always meant to be. *hand on heart, closes eyess* one of the compliments that has never been showered on me and that shall from now on be very close to my heart! Thank you! Its means a lot...

Cheers,

dc

Originally posted by: panache

Sareeta, I finally got a chance to sit quitely and read this one. To be honest, I was waiting for your feedback on this one... dont know why, but I really did....Your writing is drenched with the beauty of what you wanted to convey. Bless my soul... the feeling I wanted to convey was such a private ... such a pure feeling between two ppl, and something that would be left... unexpressed and yet felt.. and I could feel it all... when I imagined it... and then it all came down ... in the form of words in this lil SS... I was moved at the end of the story.. And I am moved by what you said... For a writer... nothing could mean more that what he/she tries to convey is actually felt by te reader and they are actually moved.... I am deeply humbled! "Lament, is a word that brings out the unfinished, Melancholic mode of something or someone" - I think the title was so apt for this story. Lament as I mentioned in reply to another comment on this post is a word, by virtue of its own has a deep underlying essence of melancholy... but when I read your commnet... I wanted to say this... which I didnt earlier that ... Lament... is a word , that I feel has music flowing through it... a musical feel to it...music expressing pain... a hearttugging tune..of pain.... and a rainbow is a view that inspires... and the two together represent... souls in bound in togetherness... experiencing the a pain, that only a deep feeling of longing for togetherness can bring forth...and if its of any significance here... lament is a word I like... jus the feel and the way its sounds when I say it...

In one sense, i felt the sorrow of the man and the feeling of hopelessness of his mistakes and the realization of what he is going through and at some point while i was reading it, i felt hope for him too.. It felt like he still had a chance to redeem himself! Loike he still had the chance to forgive himself and embrace the rainbow...( I don't know whether i making much sense here!) Totally understood your view point... although my idea differed a bit on the second half of your thought.... guess... I can never brush off the feeling of hope in my writings no matter how hard I try to bring in hoplessness! 😆 But on a serious note... yeah ... when I re-read the story after reading this particular comment of yours.. I realized.. that yeah...ur interpretation of the rainbow and his feelings was quite unique... thank you! And oh yeah, you made perfect sense... and made me feel good... coz someone saw sense in what I wrote! 😆

How do you come up with such nice titles to all your writings. They come straight from the heart when I see or feel something... I cant really explain it... but the words jus drift into my mind... and its usually I think of the title at the end but this time it was alongside the thought that I wrote the title too! I wouldn't call this one an FF. This is more like an individual writer's thoughts on the Man and the Woman potrayed in this writing. This was not an FF nor an SS.. but it was a extension of a thought... of jus one thought... and you were bang on when u said... it was individual writer's thoughts ...! Bang on there! Thank you for understanding!

You have magic in those fingers. Bless my soul, it aint me... its the almighty who has been unsually kind to have given me the ability to express what I fee l in all humbleness~ you and neetu are some of the few people who have absolute creativity and writing skills to enhance it. *bows down humbly *I hope i'm making sense. *u are making perfect sense! * I loved this one. - Thank you! It was awesome. Thank you so much !

Let me know if i made sense. Ab itna sab kuch maine reply main likha ... now your turn to let me know if I made sense! 😆

Originally posted by: LadyZaib

thanks sareeta, awesome lament, be it regrets or be penance of ones mistakes, what could have been. beautifully composed, Thank you soooo much Iffat! So glad you liked it.. and yes when u do get ur works published i will be lining up for a signed autograph. Bless my soul! Thank you so much! It is so humbling that my works are being looked forward to! Thank you! This IF has given much to me... shall always treasure that!

i am printing this and taking it with me to read again on the plane, yes i would not call this a FF, this is writing in pure form. Yeah, I never called it one too but since kuch tho bulana padega I called it SS... but in all honesty... I dont like calling any of my writings are fictions... they are simple extensions of simple thoughts 😊 Thank you!

thanks for the pm, keep it coming i will catch up on my return Sure will look forward to that! 😊

aapki coder dost

Originally posted by: Saregama_fan

okay... wow... I guess I couldn't help myself... 😳 ... that was beautiful... just beautiful... I would love to give my interpretation right away ...but I need to let all that sink in first... but right now only one word is coming to mind... "Wow"... "Wow" 👏👏👏

Originally posted by: Saregama_fan

Lament of the Rainbow the title itself holds so much meaning... I mean the Rainbow is something we all associate with beauty, something magical, a dream a thought that there might a magical world out there where things are better off then they are here on earth... and at the same time we are saddened b/c we can never reach or touch or go there... but still there is a ray hope that maybe somehow ...someday... di.. you really amaze me... okay going to have to read the story again to fully grasp it.. but I get a feeling that Shiv, either rejected the girl's love or cheated on her... at first I felt like he had cheated on her... but as I read on I got more of a feeling that he couldn't return the love she gave him. Or more like he couldn't understand her love for him and his love for her... and now that she is gone he is starting to see it... and it may be too late... but there is still the hope that maybe maybe someday they both will understand it together... I hope I making sense... I could go on and on but I am afraid I would probably make no sense what so ever.. hehe😳 ...like she was in front of him just like his love her but he could never see it... and now that he is... she is not there ...but there is a hope ... that is what I feel... I maybe totally off... 😳 ...it is like he couldn't understan love, he was confused... but when he saw confusion, pain and questions in her eyes, it was all answered for him... everything became clear to him.. now he was ready to open up ... b/c he understood... but now she was gone to not hear what he had to say... like when she was listening he was silent...and now that he is ready to speak she is gone... but there is still hope that maybe someday she will be there and he will not be silent... I don't know... but I feel there is a lot of hope... maybe that is just me... but I think things will work out for the better now.. b/c he understands himself now... okay I will stop now...hehehehe... 😳