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fattiwriter thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
#51
since I started sharing my story on this forum I see an interesting number of readers who visit this page 😊 but little comment and like 😕 I don't know if this story you don't like it 😭 or can be another problem that I don't know 😲 I ask each person who reads this story leaves a comment 😃let me know your opinion I trust you😉 you are there to help me to continue👏
Edited by fattiwriter - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#52
your story is good...only thing is the English is very different and thereby difficult to understand...
we all mostly read contemporary english...

i would love to help you edit your story, though my english isnt that good, but i love editing writeups...do let me know
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Posted: 10 years ago
#53
amazing update...
asim thank you for your courage...
finally charita got the news...
she is hurt...
but time will heal her...
it saved 3 life from ruin...
update soon...

dear anyone read or not i don't know...
but i will read this ff till end...😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
#54

Originally posted by: Akorshi

amazing update...

asim thank you for your courage...
finally charita got the news...
she is hurt...
but time will heal her...
it saved 3 life from ruin...
update soon...

dear anyone read or not i don't know...
but i will read this ff till end...😊


thank you AKorshi you are my best reader
Edited by fattiwriter - 10 years ago
fattiwriter thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
#55

Originally posted by: anjs

your story is good...only thing is the English is very different and thereby difficult to understand...

we all mostly read contemporary english...

i would love to help you edit your story, though my english isnt that good, but i love editing writeups...do let me know

sorry anjs but I know only that english for write if you want any explication ask me
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Posted: 10 years ago
#56
part 28

Asim feels very badly he locks himself in his room he does not want to talk to anyone and he does not want to see anyone Charita told him nothing she left without giving him an answer without rebelling or even insult him. remorse gnaws his heart he does not regret because he loved Devika but he regrets that things happen he regret to be faced with this situation and starts another struggle with himself lying in bed the lost spirit his brother kashi enter to see

-: I saw you go without greeting me so I told myself I must go and see my young brother (Asim looks smiled sadly but said nothing) things have happened badly with charita?

-: Why this things happen Kashi? why I have to cope with it? I broke her heart and I destroyed a friendship before her birth she left without saying anything

-: You had to do that Asim time will pick cracks you don't have a choice

-: Maybe I had a choice to not hurt her it's hard to subject this to someone

-: A break always do wrong and she'll forget with time may be she will meet someone who will make her forget but you if you did not do that you would have lost Devika the girl that you love more than anything and maybe you will not find someone to make you forget

-: Can be what you say is true but today Charita is broken she is sad when I met her I vowed to never make her cry

-: You regret right? (asks his brother) you regret to have left?

-: I regret to have to leave her of that way !! I regret that things did not have was in their place from the beginning. I never thought that one day I might hurt someone especially her (continuous Asim with eyes shine of tears),no one can understand me I'm not good at this moment everything are mingle in my head I felt a sadness that I can not control

-: Asim !! I'll ask you a delicate question but think long before answering me (Asim looks his brother still sadly expected the question) do you regret having known Devika?

-: no way. I don't regret to have known or have loved. she is the best thing that happened to me in my life she is everything for me but I regret to not have known her before and all that will not be reached and I have known Charita as friend

Devika at home awaits the call of Asim night fell and he did not call. she worries took her phone and calls him he sees her call does not want to answer and he said to his brother

-: it's Devika I don't know what I'll tell her you responds her please I can't talk to her now (and he spends his phone

-: But what I will tell her and why you don't want to talk to her?

-: Tell her what you want. told her that I'm not here or I'm out

-: Hi !! Asim you okay? I waited for you why you did not call

-: sorry it's not Asim is his brother

-: Excuse me heu ... I'm a friend to Asim I can talk to him? please

-: Asim is not there the whole after noon. heu ... he is not back yet he forgot his phone at home

she know he is not telling the truth Asim has not forgotten his phone he called her just before his meeting with Charita. she said thank you to Kachi and hangs up

-: Why don't you want to talk to her (his brother request gives him her phone)

-: I don't want speak with her in that state she may think that I regret and that I still love Charita Devika is very sensitive

Devika at home does not understand why Asim does not want to talk to her she asks herself thousands of questions

-: He has not forgotten his phone at home he don't want talk to me but why? maybe he has nothing to say he has not spoken to Chaita? or maybe he felt a pain for her he regrets and he does not want to leave her? he tries to avoid me!! or simply he wants to take his relationship with his first love he repented

she begins to fear and doubt. Asim told her he was going to call after but then he want not even talk with her she does not understand why. she waits all night his call she does not close her eyes and crying all the time she fears for her love she is afraid that all that she lived with him was an illusion and Asim has realized that he was wrong but she remains hopeful perhaps the morning he will call

Asim and Devika have saw the sun rise none of them were able to sleep Asim with remorse for having hurt Charita and Devika with her doubts and fears that Asim leaves her. while he is in his room to change he hears the voice of his father who called him he finished changing and go to see with his mother his brothers and their wives even his sister who came from her home they were all there waiting

-: What did you do (say his mother) you still realize what you wanted

-: The father of your fiance called (his father told him) he wants to know what it is spent with his daughter he wants to know why you broke up your engagement

-: I warned you yesterday that I did not want to get married why you don't want to understand?

-: You thinks that it's easy you decided to get married one day and another day you decide otherwise it does not please you and you stop all (said his father furious) when you take a commitment you become responsible for your act

-: When you are going make your request I tell you to wait my returned from the tour (he answers his father) it's you who have made this commitment not me

while he is in full disagreement with his parents his phone rings he looks to the call and this is Devika he does not respond and let it ring, she did not despair and recalls again and this time he hangs up

-: Responds told his father (who realized that he hiding something) may be that is import

-: No I take this call after

-: it's she which call you aright? (his mother says)

-: who is she (demand his sister who is not aware of anything)

-: Is this girl to the theater (answers his mother) is she who has destabilized him all that happens is because her

-: please mom (he said ) she had nothing in this story let her outside

-: Stop talking of all that (his father said) I met you because we must go at charita's home to solve this problem

Asim thought that taking his relationship with Charita all problems will be resolved but he has forgotten that he has a family and this family has a say in everything that happens he will having to explain and convince



Akorshi thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
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very nice update...
asim feeling hurt for charita...
he ignoring devika...
here devika too much worried...
asim's parents pressuring him to marry charita...
hope they meet with devika ...
then their opinion will change for her...
update soon...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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horrible his parents are...forcing him like this to marry Charita...and he is a spineless fool...caring so much for Charita, that he is avoiding talking to Devika...seriously Devika shud go far away from him...then he will realize what stupidity he was doing, thinking bt everyone except Devika's feelings
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Posted: 10 years ago
#59
part 29


Devika does not understand why Asim does not respond to her call and after a reflection she finds a response

-: He does not want anything to do with me I think that he chose to resume his relationship with her I must forget him

she goes to bed take a pic of Asim and her who was in her hand bag and began to remember all the beautiful memories that they have had she does not understand how Asim can forget all that and leave her so easily starts crying and falls into a new grief

in his side Asim is still fighting for his love and the decision of his father to go to the parents of charita displeases him he refuses to go

-: No Asim we must all go you have to give them explanations we must settle this problem and it is you who must do

-: My problem I have set I spoke with Charita and we put an end to this relationship

his father forced him to accompany them and they all go in charita's home arrived there they were well received

-: My daughter told me that her relationship with your son is canceled (her father said) but she did not give any explanation what is happened (talking to Asim )

Asim head down and said nothing he does not want it faced he did not think that this story arrives to the parents he thought end it with Charita and move to other things

-: responds Asim (said his father) your uncle talk to you give him an explanation

-: I just realized that I'm not ready to get married I explained that to charita

-: What do you mean by not being ready ( charity's father said ) if you want we can wait I know you have a tour to do we will wait for your return

-: The work that I do don't allow me to have a stable life (said Asim) and I don't want bring Charita with me in this adventure

nobody wants to understand Asim he does not want hurt them and say there is another girl in my life trapped by all these quiz swallows his words but interrogation is not finished Charita comes to his rescue

-: Asim is not the only responsible of that decision we have including both that we can not live together

Asim is pleased to see her finally he will hear her he will know her answer after leaving him in the cafeteria without saying anything and maybe he will be issued to feel remorse

-: But my daughter (his mother told her) you were happy to you marry him it's you who introduced him to us

-: Yes mom but it's was before that he decided to make his career I decided not to live like that I also don't want to marry

-: Don't try to hide his mistakes my daughter (Asim's mother says ) the truth is that ...

-: The truth is that I don't want to get married (don't let her finish) he has the right to live the life that he chooses (looking him)

everyone is okay to stop this commitment before its beginning Asim benefits the others doing their farewell he approaches Charita and said

-: I am very sorry to have caused you all this I did not want it ends like this

-: I have no hatred against you (she said with tears) and I keeps only the good memories of our relation

-: We stay best friends then (handing her the hand with a relieved smile)

-: I'm not ready yet Asim I did not want to endure your new life I'd rather we stay away for a while

-: Are you sure that everything is fine (he asks)

-: I've been thinking all night about it I took all our memories I found them interesting but I have not found any one reminded me that you had kissed me warmly you've never had a desire for me and I understood that we were friends a feeling that we have misinterpreted

-: I'm sorry to be in this situation but that does not mean it will not rest a place in my heart for you what is happened I did not choose

-: Asim !! (she said with a smile) you have not does it voluntarily you fell in love. me you were not in love with me you like me that's all but I see this time you are really and I want to wish you happiness

-: Thank you charita you relieve me I would have hoped that you stay friends with me but I know one day you'll be

happy with this answer he keeps a satisfied smile of Charita a little sad but understanding returns home after this morning full of emotions and of all that he forget Devika who does not stop thinking to him and believe that he will be called her to break their bond because she is convinced that he resumed his relationship with charita but Asim does not suspect anything pleased with his morning for him everything is back to normal except his parents who don't agree with him with what he does but he thinks they'll end by accepting all

-: So!! what is this story (told his sister who returns to his room to reassure herself that he's fine)

-: There is no story I'm not ready to get married that's all

-: You are not ready to getting married at all or you're not ready to get married with this girl

-: I have a career and I think I have time to think about marriage (he said avoiding her gaze)

-: This is a story that you tells to everyone and I know that this is not true look at me Asim (she said holding him by the arm) who is this girl whose mom was talking just now

-: What girl you're wrong (he is lying to her because he fears that her reaction is like that of his mother) there is no girl

-: The girl of the theater that your mother said she destabilizes you don't hide I'm your sister you can tell me (she looks him in the eye and asks him) you love her?

- Yes she's a girl that I met a few months ago and I fell in love with her (that last sentence he says quietly)

-: And mom refuses her because she is a dancer with you she wants you to marry Charita

-: I know very well her values it is not because she is a dancer that you should think ill of her

-: why mom has decided to go and ask Charita so she knows your relationship with Devika who told her about charita?

-: I talked with her of charita before meeting Devika but as soon as my eyes fell on her I felt something new in me (he says with a smile of love) but I was not sure of my feelings and I said to dad and mom waiting for the marriage I wanted to be sure of my feeling (he takes a sad look and continuous) but your mother as you know her she precipitated the things. is gone propose a marriage of charita just at the moment when I understand my feelings I love Devika and I want only her

-: I see you're really in love (said with a smile) your eyes shines when you talk of her what is her name?

-: Devika! (He said he was proud of his love but he remembers that he has forgotten her and he has not called he said shake) Devika !!! I forgot to call her
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Posted: 10 years ago
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amazing update...
poor devika totally hurt...
asim forgot her in all mess...
charita understood asim point of view...
asim now happy...
his parents still unhappy...
now asim's sister i hope do something...
update soon...

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