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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hi guys ! Here's the update. Don't know if it's good or not, so any feeback appreciated


Part 3 : Shagun confession + Ishita needs time away from raman.


Ishita hurries up to get home. She puts her handbag at the Bhallas and go at the Iyers to bring them all at the Bhallas. They are all worried and keep asking her what is happening. But she justs says that they have to all be there because something important is about to happen. She calls Vandu and Bala too. Once they're there she finally speaks.

"Today is the day that it ends. We've all suffered enough with Amma's accident and we won't find peace until the culprit is revealed and put behind bars. As you all know, lately Raman has been protecting Shagun from going to jail and even though I understand his concern for his son, justice is blind as we say and a criminal -no matter who it is- should be punished. This is why I've asked you all to reunite today."

"Ishita, what is going?" asks Mr bhalla.

Right this moment, someone rings the door. Ishita goes to open and comes back with Ashok and a fearful Shagun. They are all very shocked to see them. Toshi wants to protest seeing the evil duo in her house but mr bhalla tells her to be quiet.

Ashok greets them and says "As Ishita may have told you already, today all will become clear." He explains everything about the accident and asks for their forgiveness. "Because of Shagun, I've put you all in a difficult time. And I'm here to apologize for it. Shagun will also apologize."

Shagun is reticent at first, but seeing Ashok's ice cold stare, she starts : "I'm sorry for all that happened but... but I just wanted to protect my son!! You should try to understand me!" She starts crying half real tears, half fakes.

Ishita asks "But why are you dragging Raman with you in all of this? Why did you ask him to protect you?"

Shagun responds "He is Adi's father. If I were to go to jail, Adi would have been the first to suffer! Who could have done things right if not Raman?!"

Ishita says "None of you made anything "right"! This could have stayed a family matter if you had come and explained everything to us. No one here would have sent Adi to jail!"

Shagun says "Oh please Ishita ! Stop this mahan act! I know the type of person you are, you do everything to steal Raman away from me and from his son!" Ashok rolls his eyes up hearing this.

Ishita scuffs "Stealing Raman from you? Shagun, Raman and I are MARRIED. And he knows how much I respect his relationship with Adi! I'm not stealing anyone."

Shagun starts screaming "You're a liar! I see clear through your games! Stop pretending being so innocent, I hat---"

Ashok shouts to interrupt her : "Shagun!" Everyone looks at him "We came here to apologize and I think we're done now. We should go to the police now."

"No one will go to the police" Mrs Iyer says. They're all shocked and look at her. She continues "If we send her to jail, Adi's life will be ruined and most probably Raman will never forgive Ishita. I don't want any hardship to come in my daughter's life. She had enough already." She gets emotional but continues "I do forgive you Shagun. I understand what lies a mother can tell in order to protect her children. Shagun apologized today and that is all that matter. Adi hit me with the car, but it was an accident, he didn't do it on purpose. This all needs to ends now." Saying that, she leaves to her house.

All are shocked but soon all iyers follow her. Ashok says goodbye to everyone and leaves dragging shagun. He looks at Ishita one last time before leaving. She looks at him too, being grateful for what he did. After he closes the door, Ishita sits down, she is relieved. If her mother considers this matter closed, then it is for her too.

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When raman comes back, everyone in the house is quiet. He gets a weird vibe from this all. He asks what happened but no one answer him. Then ishita gets up for the sofa and goes to their room. He follows her instinctively. She is standing with her arms crossed and without looking at him, she tells him calmly "Shagun came here and apologized for Amma's accident."

Raman is shocked "Shagun? Here?".

Ishita avoid his eyes because she has not forgiven him anything yet. "Yes, she was here with ashok, but they left now. Amma's has forgiven them."

"This 6ft2 lambu was here too? Ishita what is going on?"

Ishita is frustrated but try to keep her calm "What I just said : ashok and shagun came here to apologize to amma." Raman asks anxiously "Where are they now? Did they... was the police involved?" "No raman, don't worry, no one is going to jail, especially not shagun. You can relax." Raman feels the anger in ishita's voice but he is relieved that Adi won't have to see his mother in jail so he doesn't say anything.

Raman is hesitant but finally he speaks : "Ishita... I wanted to tell everything that happened earlier but i... I just couldn't. I'm sorry." Ishita doesn't respond so raman continues : "Also,... I want to thank you for what you did today."

"Well, you're welcome Raman but nothing would have been possible without Ashok, so I should thank him instead."

"Ashok? What are you talking about?"

"You heard me right. I should thank him. He was the one who came to my clinic and told me the truth. The WHOLE truth." She looks at him angrily, then continues "also he was the one to convince Shagun to apologize." Raman is so shocked, he doesn't believe it.

"How can you believe him? He is pure evil-"

Ishita interrupts him "We've met yesterday. He told me he would convince Shagun, and today here he was, with her."

Raman is getting angry. He doesn't like Ishita, his wife, talking about another man. He shouts "And you chose to trust him instead of me? Have you lost your mind Ishita? I'm your husband- "

She interrupts him again "Then start acting like one!!" She breathes deeply to calm herself down. "Raman, I know you had your reasons for doing what you did, but that doesn't mean you did the right thing or that you did it the right way."

"But Ishi-" "No Raman. I'm tired of your excuses. You BROKE my TRUST and today you dare tell ME who I should trust and who I shouldn't when YOU didn't trust me. This is... to much! You disgust me Raman."

Ishita starts going towards the entry door. Raman is shaken by her words but still asks her where she is going. She says in a cold manner "I'm going to see if my mother is ok. She needs me the most right now."

As soon as Ishita is out the room, Raman falls on the ground and starts crying.

Ishita takes her bag on the lunch table and goes towards the door. Toshi asks her what happened and where she is going, Ishita says that she needs to be with the Iyers right now but that she will be back when she'll be ready. Toshiji understands and makes Ishita bend to kiss her forehead.

At the Iyers, they are surprised to see Ishita. Mr Iyers is anxious and asks "... Is everything alright? Did... Did raman send you here?" IShita small laughs "No Appa. He didn't send me." ", with that, she answers the question he didn't dare to ask. And no I'm not leaving him."

Mr Iyer is relieved. Ishita goes in her room. Soon mrs iyers comes to spend a little bit of time with her daughter, she gives ishita a cup of tea and sits at the end of the bed.

She won't ask anything but Ishita knows her amma needs some explanations. Ishita says "Raman is thankful that we didn't send Shagun to jail." Mrs Iyers says "I knew it was the right thing to do. But Ishita, why are you here now? Shouldn't you stay by raman's side. You two have a lot to tell each other" Ishita wipes tears that had starting filling her eyes "Yes amma. We need to talk. But right now, I'm so angry and hurt that I can't even look at him in the eyes. I won't be able to listen to anything he has to say so there is no point in being at his side now."

"But he needs you. He is suffering a lot-..."

"And what about me Amma?" Mrs Iyers looks at her, surprised "Don't I have feeling too? Don't I feel the pain and hurt? Raman is the one who puts us in this situation Amma! I've been at his side in all obstacles, I've looked past his rude attitude and taunts to help him but he still didn't chose to trust me? Am I that unworthy of being trusted? Don't I deserve a little more respect?"

Mrs Iyers is worried "But Ishu-"

"Nooo Amma... Please. This marriage has been nothing except hardship till now, but I've hang in there and stayed strong... for Ruhi, for the whole Bhalla's parivaar that I consider my own, for you and Appa too. But I'm tired now and I think... Yes, I think I deserve a little break. " She wipes her tears again and recompose. "I will be back at his side, but I can't forgive him right away. I just can't Amma, not right now."

Mrs Iyer decides to let her daughter rest. She kisses her and goes back in the living room.

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Here it is guys ! If you've enjoyed this part, do hit the like and leave me a comment ! I love reading those ! Much love to all !


Part 4 (last part) : ashok and ishita back at the coffee shop.

Edited by rajji-cutest - 10 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow ..excellent update
Lookinf frwd to ur next1
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Very nice.
I love ishita n ashok s a team they r plain perfect
Very nice
Update super soon I love ur writting its soo natural
Loved the emotions in this part
Dialogues were bang on
Update super sooon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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loved ashok and ishita's team- and good job ashok
ishita's words to raman and at the end to her mother were spot on👏
update soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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awesome part⭐️
loved it😃
very realistic... 👍🏼
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I'm more than 3 months late with this update. I shouldn't even have bothered writing it but i don't like the feeling of having left an unfinished task behind. So here goes.

Part 4 FINAL : Ishita and Ashok, back at the coffee shop



Ishita has been at her Amma for the past 48h. Raman hasn't dared coming to face her but he tried to call her repeatedly since she left. It's midday, Ishita is looking at all of his missed calls when her phone rings again. The ID is unknown. She doesn't think Raman would be as shady as to hide his ID before calling so she picks it up.

I : allo ?

Ashok : Hi Ishita. It's Ashok.

I : Ashok? Why... I mean how are you?

Ashok chuckles : I'm fine thanks. You must be wondering why I called you right ?

I : Actually... Yes. Is everything alright?

Ashok : Yes... Yes of course. I just wanted to know if you'd be up for a coffee.

Ishita is a bit shocked but they've done it before and she has no reason to say no.

I : Yes. Why not ? Let's meet at the same coffee shop we went earlier, in... 2 hours, is that okay with you?

Ashok : absolutely, see you there. Bye for now.

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In the coffee shop, Ashok and Ishita sit down. They're a bit awkward but soon they get comfortable.

Ashok : I hope it's not too awkward for you to have coffee with me... Last time we did it on an impulse...

Ishita : No, not at all. Actually thank you for this. I didn't take the time to thank you properly for what you did for me and my family. Once the truth was being revealed, all the tensions seemed to fade away...

A : Even between you and Raman ?

Ishita is a bit shocked by his question. Ashok is very straight forward and insightful. He doesn't get burdened with manners and doubts.

Ishita : To be honest I need a bit of time, you know? I need to get over the pain. I've kept him out of my sight for the past few days and I'm already feeling better. I hate what happened but in the end, my mother is all well so that's all that matters.

Ashok : Raman has always been like that. He thinks that dealing with everything himself is the way to go, he takes too many responsibilities on his shoulders and he gets...

Ishita (interrupting him) : majboor? Yeah I got it...

They both smiles at that. Ashok continues : But he's not a bad man. He just gets a bit lost sometimes.

I : I wish he could ask for directions when he gets "lost". Things wouldn't get so confusing only if he shared what's going on in his mind.

A : I'm sure he will, he just needs to know someone will listen to him. Knowing him, I'm sure now that the accident matter is solved, he is dying inside for having lied to you. He's not like shagun who doesn't know the meaning of the words conscience or guilt...

Ishita : Oh by the way, how are things going on with Shagun?

Ashok : Nowhere.

Ishita looks at him surprised.

Ashok sighs and continues : once we got back from your house, she packed her things and went to live at some relatives with adi. Poor girl, she thinks I'm going to come crawling at her feet to get her back... She is so sure of herself, it's ridiculous.

Ishita : you are leaving her ?!

Ashok : To be exact she is the one who's leaving me, I'm just not going to get her back. Actually I've been thinking of making some changes in my life...

Ishita : what type of changes if I may ask ?

Ashok : First of all, I'll sell that big mansion I live in. That's way too big for me alone. Then I'll go on a vacation, a break from life is much needed. And finally...

Ishita : Finally what?

Ashok : I'll go back to the US. I came here 6 years ago to take in charge my father's enterprise and make it rise, now I think that my job is done, I'll let the control of the empire in my younger brother's hands and I'll return to the US to handle other business and maybe even try something new.

Ishita : you're leaving the country ?

Ashok : Yes. Here I feel like I'm seeing shagun everywhere, it's be easier to get over this break up if I'm at the other end of the world.

Ishita : You're quite lucky, not everyone gets to fly far away from their past !

They keep on chatting and laughing. They are both enjoying the moment : ishita realizes that ashok is smart and has a wild range of interests, while Ashok likes Ishita's wit and subtle humor.

3 hours later they realize they should probably go back to their own routine.

In front of the coffee shop, just before they separate ishita says "it's been really nice talking to you. What about we meet again in the upcoming weeks?"

Ashok : I'd love that but my vacation starts tonight. I'm going straight at the airport from here and I'm leaving delhi."

Ishita doesn't know why but she is feeling sad. She having the feeling you get when you've just made a friend at a train station and you realize that you'll never see them again. She is silent for a few seconds. Maybe their friendship was not meant to be in the first place.

Ashok holds out his hand for her to shake : "So that's a farewell here..."

Ishita shakes his hand and laughs it out : "I wasn't expecting that ! I wish you well Ashok. I really do."

They look at each other : "Same to you Ishita." They smile at each other and finally part ways.

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When ishita comes back at her home in the evening, she is still thinking about Ashok leaving the country just the way he came : determined and smoothly, as if everything was so easy for him.

In her thoughts she doesn't realize that she entered the Bhalla's house and not the Iyers ones. Everyone looks at her but Raman is the first one to get up and come closer to her.

R : "Ishita..."

Ishita thinks of ashok telling her that Raman must be feeling really bad for having lied to her. She looks at Raman and realizes that it's time to clear things between them.

I : "We need to talk." She tells him and goes into their room. He follows her and close the door behind him.

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Ashok is in the plane, reading the papers when suddenly he thinks about what Shagun told him a few days ago : "What is it Ashok? Do you get off on stealing all of Raman's women? First me, now this cow?"

Ashok thinks to himself : I guess Shagun knows me better than I know myself.

Since Ishita barged into his office, his mind has been filled with her. The way she can go from crying to laughing in a second, the way she smiles at everyone that meets her way, or the way she tilts her head on the side when she listens with attention, her big doe eyes filled with nothing but goodness. All of that, it has provoked something inside of him, a change, and he's trying his best to ignore it. One thing is sure, beautiful will never again have the same meaning to him.

He leans back on the headrest and closes his eyes, he remembers what Ishita told him a few hours earlier : "You're quite lucky, not everyone gets to fly far away from their past !"

He chuckles bitterly and says softly : "I'm not flying away from my past Ishita, I'm flying away from what may come."


"Sometimes leaving is the only way

to be there for someone."
Wesley Eisold


Voila ! Here was the final part of IshOk's ephemeral friendship.

If you've enjoyed, pleej to hit the like and leave me a comment. I know Ishita-Ashok is weird to imagine (but during the "majboor Raman" trach, Ashok wasn't as disgusting as he is now), so i'd love to hear your thoughts on it. Love to all !

Edited by rajji-cutest - 10 years ago
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Res

I forgot about this one Rajji! It's one of my favs from the Adi track!
Thanks for revisiting it. I will read it all from the beginning and come back to this space.
Thank you!


*EDIT*

I am so glad you finished this one. I remember thinking when I first read it how lovely this concept is - the thought in itself, that Ashok/Ishita were facing the same plight and could, just maybe, share in their pain.
What I loved best was that the characters remained in tact, yet there was an undercurrent of mutual understanding (albeit a bit awkward) between two characters who we've not really seen share screen space.

We haven't seen Ishita & Ashok really interact with one another in the show outside of just this once, but I think Ashok knows that Ishita is inherently just a good person. I think his equation with her starts and ends with Raman, but I don't think he truly garners any animosity for Ishita apart from that...even despite the whole entrepreneur assoc. position mess. His underlying motive is always RKB. I'd go so far as to say that he even respect Ishita for her devotion to her hubby n family. (Am I giving him too much credit? Did I tell you I believe in always giving people the benefit of the doubt? 😆)

The end, was perfect. I couldn't have asked for more. Her inherent goodness got to him and inspired him to change for the better. I can see her having that effect on just about anyone.

Loved this one, Rajji, really. I am so glad you decided to shine light on a completely different character angle and a mutual understanding between two characters who we will never get to see interact in this way on screen.


Originally posted by: rajji-cutest


omg i just thought of something : back when i wrote this it was supposed to be an ishra ss with a discussion between raman and ishita at the end but now that's i've written this, there is actually no raman-ishita discussion. I decided this one would be an IshOk ss.

just putting that out there so you don't get your hopes crushed. 🤗

I am so glad it didn't focus much on IshRa at all! I don't mind that there was no conversation because I can imagine how that conversation would have gone. On the contrary, I appreciate the IshOk angle. Loved their awkward "lets meet for a coffee" and loved the mutual well-wishes. I wonder if this angle will ever be explored in the show...probably not (I'd really like to see what Ashok really thinks of Ishita, as a person, mother, wife, etc.), but it was fabulous to see it here. THANK YOU! 🤗

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Originally posted by: -Payal-



Res

I forgot about this one Rajji! It's one of my favs from the Adi track!
Thanks for revisiting it. I will read it all from the beginning and come back to this space.

Thank you!


omg i just thought of something : back when i wrote this it was supposed to be an ishra ss with a discussion between raman and ishita at the end but now that's i've written this, there is actually no raman-ishita discussion. I decided this one would be an IshOk ss.

just putting that out there so you don't get your hopes crushed. 🤗
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i dnt hav prob wid ashok nd ishita's frdshp bt ashok lines was good...the beautiful meaning nt remains same fr me...nd im leaving not because of past bt what may cme in futre...tht was awesom...
bechara ashok clean bowled by ishu...
i read all parts in 1 go...
nice SS...i would love if i get 1 positve epi of ashok...this shagun she nvr change in YHM...so no use bt if ashok changes it vl b fun to see...
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Originally posted by: shavi2311

i dnt hav prob wid ashok nd ishita's frdshp bt ashok lines was good...the beautiful meaning nt remains same fr me...nd im leaving not because of past bt what may cme in futre...tht was awesom...

bechara ashok clean bowled by ishu...
i read all parts in 1 go...
nice SS...i would love if i get 1 positve epi of ashok...this shagun she nvr change in YHM...so no use bt if ashok changes it vl b fun to see...


glad you liked it !😳

this SS is inspired from Ashok from the BOOK custody, in the book, he is not negative or positive, he is neutral.

For now ashok is worst than shagun in the epi 😆

thanks for the reply !

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