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Posted: 10 years ago
Hello Guys... this part is optional as i have written it just for my self satisfaction... This is the same part in which Romi broke into her house and apologized her but with slight difference. Read it only if u r interested.

Romi is standing outside Rachu's building and waiting the watchman to turn back side so that he can enter through the balcony... Finally he finds the opportunity and reach balcony which he used last time as well... After placing the items he had in his hand n arranging something in the balcony.. he enters the room with the help of glass window which he opened with magnet... He bumps in the side table n the metallic flower vase falls...

Rachu who was engrossed in her icecream and Romi hears the sound... She gets scared thinking someone broke into her house... "What if he is some burglar who came for robbery... Or what he is John's man who came to kill me...I wish I had not sent Bruno with Granny at last moment... Good Rachu!! U were scared that Bruno's presence might increase ur workload so now face the trouble." She thought. She picks the baseball bat which Granny has kept by side of her bed for her safety... After taking God's name proceeds towards the hall... She sees a silhouette picking something from the floor... "So he is thief" She thought and raise the bat to hit him without realizing that it's Romi who is trying to pick the fallen vase. At same time Romi turns around on sensing someone's presence... They bump into each other and lose the balance... Romi holds her by waist and they falls on the sofa.. Romi lying on the top of Rachu... She screams in fear.. "Bacha..." Before she can complete the sentence he places his palm on her mouth to shut it... With fear in her eyes she looks at him and twirls around to get up.. "Rachana" he said in a low voice... She stops moving on recognizing the voice..She was shocked beyond belief.. her heart was beating faster than usual coz of their closeness... He burns the lighter and places it before them.. Their lips failed to utter the word but their eyes was loud enough to talk on their behalf..

"Why u came here now?? "

"To apologize"

"But I am not in mood to forgive u... u hurted me very badly."

"But I can't see anger in ur eyes... u r surely pleased to see me here."

"Not pleased but surpri... I mean shocked"

"Ur happiness is visible in these twinkling eyes... I am really Sorry Rachana... I dint meant o hurt u... I was just.."

"Jealous?? U were jealous of me and Prem."

"No... why would I be jealous?? I was just angry on something."

"Such a pathetic liar u r..."

"And why would I lie.."

"Because u.. U too..."

"What I too.."

"Because u too like.."

Romi switched off the lighter so that her eyes can't say the truth which his heart is not ready... Rachu comes back to reality and pushes him.. He moves a bit and quickly she gets up and switches on the light.

"What r u doing here??" Rachana screamed loudly this time... Though aware of his answer, she wanted to hear the words..

He holds his ears and apologizes for his mistake. Rachana fakes anger and turns her face to enjoy some pampering... Max to max she was expecting him to go on knees and apologize sweetly and pamper her with few words but she was pleasantly surprised when he offers her some red flowers... She takes it from his hand without facing him and keeps it on the side.. tries to hide her smile and keep the stern face... Next he gives her chocolate saying... "Monu told me this is ur favorite chocolate... Let's start our fshp again??" She takes the basket of chocolate and keeps it beside flower... Blushing really hard but still showing fake anger... On not getting any response for few seconds she wonders whether he accepted defeat and left the house.. She turns around and to her surprise he was nowhere to be seen...

"Very good Rachu... he broke into ur house and offered sweets and chocolates but u wanted more pampering and see he is gone now... What was the need to fake anger for such long time." She scolded herself... Disappointed she turned around when she notices a candle glowing in the balcony... She goes out and smiles on seeing a cake kept over there with candles burning around it in a heart shape.. She smiles sweetly and looks around but can't see Raghav hiding behind the curtain.. She reads sorry on the cake and looks at the sheet roll kept on the side... she opens it and finds a beautiful portrait of her with sorry written over it.. Raghav comes out of the hiding and holds his ears again... She runs and hugs him in excitement... "It's beautiful... no one had ever made me feel so special" She said while hugging him... he was confuses whether to hug her back on not... A tear of happiness fell down from her eyes and he felt something wet on his neck... he realizes it's her tear and hugs her back. "Thank u Romi... I know the words u have said where really mean and hurting but the way u apologized... m glad u realized ur mistake... I hope u will never judge any girl by her dress." Saying so she broke the hug and tells him to come inside to cut the cake... She blows the candle and cuts the cake... They feed each other... Rachu was free with him just like with any other friend but he was feeling awkward as he was making all the efforts for the first time..

"Why this girls are so senti?? What special I did for her?? Any guy can do this things after searching the web.. the way I do. But why I am feeling happy to see smile on her face when I am doing all this to baba... May be coz i want her to stay happy in her last days.." He thought. "Last days... I wish this day never ends..." a feeble voice came from his heart.

"So how u managed to come out of Rehab... m sure no one knows about it as it is against the rule."

"When there is a will there is a way. I think I should go now... before anyone notices my absence."

"Stay for some more time...Being the volunteer I can take u outside."

Romi nods in affirmative.. He too dint want to go.

"What a girl she is.. she has a bf still she doesn't mind stopping a stranger in her house. What if I am a dangerous guy... What if I rape her... Stupid girl who doesn't care about her security n may be not loyal towards her bf... Will she tell that guy about me?? " Romi thought.

"Why the hell I stopped him?? He is a stranger and it can be dangerous for me than y do I trust him so much?? Why do I think that he can never harm me and why I feel secure with him... Rachu u r a gone case... u do not know anything about him still u stopped him... But I think it's the best opportunity to know him... After all I.. I love him... love him?? No.. like him. " Rachu thought.


P.S. : Sorry for typos and all other mistakes. No proof reading.

Regards
Vish
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Posted: 10 years ago
Awesome the way rag do those things t please kalpi n sharing of cake beautiful lovely update
Edited by sweet1308 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
nice update di...vish di plz KVG bhi update kero jaldi...plz can't intezar kero...plz na jaldi di...dat 1 is my fav of all urs ff
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: sweet1308

Awesome the way rag do those things t please kalpi n sharing of cake beautiful lovely update


Thank u dear.. m glad u liked it.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: bricka.tiwari

nice update di...vish di plz KVG bhi update kero jaldi...plz can't intezar kero...plz na jaldi di...dat 1 is my fav of all urs ff


Thank u dear...

I will update that FF tomorrow and i promise i will try to give a longer update. Sorry but right now m working on another FF and can't stop that in mid. But tomorrow u will get KVG's update.😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
wow vish dear..awesome hai yaaršŸ¤—šŸ¤—šŸ¤—
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Posted: 10 years ago
the optional update was s dreamy and good. 😃 keep it up. šŸ˜ƒšŸ‘ā­ļø
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Posted: 10 years ago
Wow loved this improvised version too Vish!!! Tussi great ho!!!! Awesome!!! I was so happy last time just reading about all this and then now again!!! Lovely update.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Really nice update. Like rags sorry to rachu.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Awesome Vish! Now I understand why you needed to write the improvised version. I loved it. Though I liked the old version too, after reading this the other one seems so rushed up. This is slow, romantic and sweet as well. Also covering all the grounds, even Bruno. You are simply awesome. Hats off to you. You never cease to amaze me! šŸ¤—

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