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Posted: 18 years ago
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Since everyone else is predicting DK's conversation before the wedding festivities start, I thought I'd try my hand at it...just my version on what should take place when DK finally talk. Bare w/ me...I'm not good at all at FF writing, so this is just an effort. 😛

Dev goes to Kaajjal's room, to find her standing by the window staring up at the night sky. She is lost in deep thought over the recent turn of events, and doesn't hear him come in. He takes heavy, determined steps towards her, coming to a stop just inches behind her, and places his hand on her shoulder. She gasps as his touch sends electric shocks through her body. Slowly, she turns to face him, but can't bring herself to lift her eyes, and look at him.

"Kaajjal?" His voice escapes in a desperate whisper.

She lifts her wet gaze to meet his. He lifts his hand and gently cups her face, his eyes locked on hers, as if silently pleading with her: "No tears." She looks at him now, and sees the pain in his eyes, a pain that conveys the sheer agony he's been through…a pain, accompanied with overwhelming love, and desire for her.

Kaajjal: "Mujhe maaf kar do, Dev. Maine tumhe kitna dard diya hai."

Dev: "Nahi Kaajjal, tumhe maafi mangne ki koi zaroorat nahi. Tum toh apna farz nibhane ja rahi thi. Tumhare uss failse mein, main hamesha tumhare saath tha. Tumhe khone ka dard tha, lekin mein janta tha, ke vahi meri galatiyon ki saza hogi."

Kaajjal: "Dev…"

Dev: "Kaajjal, tumhe maafi mange ki koi zaroorat nahi, kyounki mujhe tumse koi gila nahi. Par kya tum mujhe kabhi maaf kar paaogi? Maine tumhe galat samjha, tumhe itna zaleel kiya…"

Her hand flies to his mouth: "Nahi Dev, galat toh maine tumhe samjha tha…doshi toh main hoon ki apne pyaar ko pehchaan na payee…aur aaj meri wajay se hi nayantara aunty…"

Her words cut off as emotion took over…unable to look at him with this guilt, she turns her gaze to the floor, as the tears flow.

The mention of NT Mom brings tears to Dev's eyes as well. He slowly lifts his hand to her chin, and raises her gaze to meet his. Slowly, he wipes away her tears.

"Nahi Kaajjal. Mom ke maut ki wajay tum nahi thi." He says as she looks at him in utter disbelief.

"Haan Kaajjal – yehi sach hai. Sach hai ki maine tumpe galat ilzaam lagaya. Tumhe doshi tehraya jab tumhara koi kasoor hi nahi tha. Kaajjal, mom ko Karan ne mara hai…tumne nahin...tumne nahin." He says, gently caressing her face.

Her head reeling from all the information he had just revealed to her, unable to hold herself up any longer, she crushes herself against him, using him as her pillar of support, and lets the tears come, unshielded, and in the solace of his strength, she finally allows herself to shed tears for the woman that had been like a mother to her. Dev gently holds her for a long while until the sobs dissolve into small whimpers, understanding that she needs to just let it all out. Once her tears have calmed, he slowly pulls away from her, cups her face in his hands, and gently wipes away the last of her tears. "Ab aur nahin Kaajjal. Mom aaj bhi hamare saath hi hai. Aur jaanti ho, voh to tumhe pehle se hi apni bahu maanti thi."

With this, a small smile returns to Kajjal's lips.

"Main tumhe hamesha is tarah khush dekhna chahta hoon Kaajjal. Lekin pehle mere liye jaanna bahut zaroori hai, ki…kya tum is shaadi se khush ho? Bahar sabne apna apna faisla suna diya, tumse bina pooche. Lekin mere liye tumhara faisla janna zaroori hai."

Her gaze meets his again, this time with a renewed love for this man, who has in every way, fulfilled her every dream, every desire. For her, he is the epitome of love a so devine. She moves her hands to cup his face, and locks her gaze with his.

Kaajjal: "Dev, meri har khushi tumse hai. Meri zindagi ki har umeed, har armaan tum ho. Meri saansein tumhare naam se shuru hoti hai, aur tumhare naam pe khatam. Tum jaisa pati paana mere liye saubhagya ki baat hogi, Dev. Tumhari patni ban kar meri zindagi ki har khwaish poori hogi. Main tumhari hoon Dev, aur sirf tumhari ho sakti hoon. Ab main jaanti hoon ke Aditya se shaadi karke main kitni badi galati karne jaa rahi thi. Tumhare bagair meri saasein toh chalti hai Dev, lekin mera jeene ka ehsaas sirf tumhare saath hota hai. Main tumhare bagair adhuri hoon Dev, aur tumse poori."

Dev: "Kaajjal, main kabhi soch bhi nahin sakta tha ke meri zindagi mein khushiyaan laut aa sakti hai. Meri zindagi mein sirf andhera hi tha. Lekin phir, tumne aake meri zindagi mein itne rang bhar diye ke gham ki koi jagay hi nahi rahi. Main tumhe bata nahi sakta tumne mujhe kitni khushiyaan di hai. Lekin ab, yehi khushiyan mein zindagi bhar ke liye tumhe dena chahta hoon, Kaajjal. Tumhare har din, har raat ko mein pyaar se bharna chahta hoon. Itna pyaar ke gham kabhi tumhare kareeb na aa sake."

With his outpour of emotion, Kaajjal throws her arms around him and crushes herself to him tightly. He returns her gesture by wrapping his strong arms tightly around her, hugging her as if she was his lifeline. "I love you, Kaajjal." A tear rolls down her cheek sighlently. Finally, she was in the arms of the man she loved more than life itself. At last, she was in heaven. "I love you too, Dev. I love you, too."

*Phew*

And now, I'd like to say to all the FF writers around here (Kashish, Sammy, Autumnji), HOW DO YOU DO IT?!?! My gosh that takes so much effort!!! Better you than me, but today, I respect you even more, and salute your talent and effort.

Anyway, just thought I'd let myself indulge in some DK romance today as the forum is brimming with romantic thoughts, and the heavy rainfall outside isn't helping my current state of mind! 😳

Love,
~Payal

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Nupur9 thumbnail
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Ummph...Payal......You are fishing for complimenst...yeah... 😛
with all this modesty of your......
It was very...very ...good.....simple...to-the-point.....and yet covered all the emotions that needed to be conveyed...
eg saying sorry's, NT death cause...and finally the truth from kaaj's mouth...which is "her life has no meaning without HER DEV!"
Indeed very nice payal!!....And hopefuly we will have the good fortune to read many...many more fan-fiction's from you in future.
Remember all writer have their own distinct styles....and THAT is beauty of it.
Good Luck, Nupur
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Hey Payal That was amazing and wonderfully written 😳 ...I just read that part five times 😳 and right now I m really gasping for breath 😛 ...U hv written each and every emotions of Dev and kaajjal perfectly that I can actually imagine the entire situation right in front of my eyes 😳

I just hope in the serial also Kaajjal asks for forgiveness from dev and dev just hugs her tightly and there should b no interference of any unwanted species between their conversation 😳 😳

I think its really necessary for dev and kaajjal to hv a long conversation before their marriage so that they can not only sort out their differences but also try to respect each other's feelings and try to understand each other 😳 ...

Love and passion r not the only main ingriedents in a relationship;its very necessary to hv trust and understanding between each other and then only your love can touch greater heights 😳 😳 ...and DK needs to talk on this issue before getting married 😳

I hope their love creates history and they live together happily ever after till eternity 😳

Betwen Payal the dialogues between DK were just wonderful and extremely passionate 😳 ..waise whats the suhaag raat song?? 😛
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Posted: 18 years ago
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My God, Payal, that was aaaawwwweeeesssoooommmmmeeeee girl!!!!! Please don't under estimate your talent girl. And remember before putting me on a pedestal, you are the veteran Dev ki Deewaani!!!

Beautiful piece Payal....... 👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: jyoti06

Hey Payal That was amazing and wonderfully written 😳 ...I just read that part five times 😳 and right now I m really gasping for breath 😛 ...U hv written each and every emotions of Dev and kaajjal perfectly that I can actually imagine the entire situation right in front of my eyes 😳

I just hope in the serial also Kaajjal asks for forgiveness from dev and dev just hugs her tightly and there should b no interference of any unwanted species between their conversation 😳 😳

I think its really necessary for dev and kaajjal to hv a long conversation before their marriage so that they can not only sort out their differences but also try to respect each other's feelings and try to understand each other 😳 ...

Love and passion r not the only main ingriedents in a relationship;its very necessary to hv trust and understanding between each other and then only your love can touch greater heights 😳 😳 ...and DK needs to talk on this issue before getting married 😳

I hope their love creates history and they live together happily ever after till eternity 😳

Betwen Payal the dialogues between DK were just wonderful and extremely passionate 😳 ..waise whats the suhaag raat song?? 😛

Awww mishti, the only suhaag raat song I would dream for DK would be

Kabhie kabhie mere dil mein khayaal aata hain....... (Of course rakhee-amitji in mind)!!!!

Uffffff, here we go again!!!😳

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: jyoti06

Hey Payal That was amazing and wonderfully written 😳 ...I just read that part five times 😳 and right now I m really gasping for breath 😛 ...U hv written each and every emotions of Dev and kaajjal perfectly that I can actually imagine the entire situation right in front of my eyes 😳

I just hope in the serial also Kaajjal asks for forgiveness from dev and dev just hugs her tightly and there should b no interference of any unwanted species between their conversation 😳 😳

I think its really necessary for dev and kaajjal to hv a long conversation before their marriage so that they can not only sort out their differences but also try to respect each other's feelings and try to understand each other 😳 ...

Love and passion r not the only main ingriedents in a relationship;its very necessary to hv trust and understanding between each other and then only your love can touch greater heights 😳 😳 ...and DK needs to talk on this issue before getting married 😳

I hope their love creates history and they live together happily ever after till eternity 😳

Betwen Payal the dialogues between DK were just wonderful and extremely passionate 😳 ..waise whats the suhaag raat song?? 😛

Thanks Jyoti! :)

And as for the suhaag raat song...you think you're clever, but its not gonna happen - Like I said, I will only reveal it, when, in the serial itself, DK finally have their long awaited suhaag raat! Good try though! 😉

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Posted: 18 years ago
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awww payal .... this is beautiful ... as expected from you honey. u always write with soo much passion. i loved every bit of it. dev asking his princess tum is shadi say khush ho na .... uff, our devu is soooooo full of care and concern for her .... i love it ...

well done Payal ..... well done ... 👏

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: autumnleaf

Awww mishti, the only suhaag raat song I would dream for DK would be

Kabhie kabhie mere dil mein khayaal aata hain....... (Of course rakhee-amitji in mind)!!!!

Uffffff, here we go again!!!😳

Aw, I love that song... I still remember the first time I heard it - or listened to it - I mean, really listened to it, it gave me goosebumps!

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: Iloveapu

Ummph...Payal......You are fishing for complimenst...yeah... 😛
with all this modesty of your......
It was very...very ...good.....simple...to-the-point.....and yet covered all the emotions that needed to be conveyed...
eg saying sorry's, NT death cause...and finally the truth from kaaj's mouth...which is "her life has no meaning without HER DEV!"
Indeed very nice payal!!....And hopefuly we will have the good fortune to read many...many more fan-fiction's from you in future.
Remember all writer have their own distinct styles....and THAT is beauty of it.
Good Luck, Nupur

Thanks for appreciating my effort, Nupur. And thanks for the PM. I'm truly touched.

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: autumnleaf

My God, Payal, that was aaaawwwweeeesssoooommmmmeeeee girl!!!!! Please don't under estimate your talent girl. And remember before putting me on a pedestal, you are the veteran Dev ki Deewaani!!!

Beautiful piece Payal....... 👏

Thanks Autumnji. It was the 1st time I was doing something like this, so I wasn't sure. But thank you so much. Coming from you, this is like the greatest gift. I may be a veteran Dev Ki Deewani, but you're unmatched when it comes to stuff like this!

Thank you so so so much! 😳

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