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Posted: 10 years ago

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nice start, wow so he is finally thinking why she left, wonder how his conversation with Purab will go

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Lkb79

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Mina, I loved this!!! Read it yesterday and wanted to tell you I was so glad you had Abhi grow a brain and Pragya reclaim her dignity. Now the writers need to follow your lead.

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Posted: 10 years ago

#53

Beautifully written as always!

You and your amazing stories never fail to blow me away!

I really love how realistic this is, like I really want something like this to happen! Hehe, if only you were the writer for KKB 😆

I cannot wait to read more!

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indi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#54

Thank you Mina!!! Loved loved it!!! It was awesome!!!! Dumb Abhi can't understand this Pragya ... !!! Want him to suffer some heartache too!!!

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Posted: 10 years ago

#55

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[quote=-Tia-]Pragya will first deny to want anything to do with him. But he will charm her to it. [/quote]

Ahem. I thought you'd be wrong, because I thought this was gonna be a serious story, but it looks like you know all versions of Abhi all too well. I didn't think I could write charm, but I think Abhi is about to make me try 😆

[quote=bewakoofLadki]awsome
pls write d second part too soon
waiting [/quote]

Aww thank you! Hope you will like the next part 😊

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Originally posted by: MsTiara
WOW!
AMAZING & very well written!

Please update soon!

😳 Thank you so much!! Appreciate your enthusiasm, lol. Hope you will like the next part too 😊

Originally posted by: gauri92
absolutely brilliant.so im hoping that purab can tell abhi the truth and abhi can apologize (and keep apologizing for a long time).But where do you see this story going? will abhi still continue with the divorce as per pragya's wishes or will he feel like giving it a second shot all of a sudden? or will they get divorced, become friends of sorts and then abhi falls in love with her?so many scenarios...depends on how long you want to make this story...

Thank you for your comment! Yes, Abhi may have a lot of making up to do...As for where I want to take this story, well, I'm hoping to keep it short! Mostly it'll be about confronting the truth...and there will be a positive/hopeful ending for AbhiGya, still figuring out exactly how to get them there! Thank you for sharing your thoughts, I am always interested in this kind of conversation 😊

Originally posted by: AWriterAtHeart
Amazing as always! I have truly become a fan of your writing Mina. You're simply fab with bringing together emotions and settings without going overboard. I know I keep saying this but it is always a pleasure to read your works. Nice job and do update soon! Raz

Oh my goodness, thank you! Your comment makes me so happy and proud, hehe. I'm really glad you are enjoying my work. And I will never get tired of hearing that so feel free to repeat yourself as long as I keep entertaining you 😉 Thanks Raz, I hope you like the next part.

Originally posted by: Alishba4
Amazing...totally loved it

Thank you for reading and commenting!

Originally posted by: Rozy77
awesome start dear
beautifully written
looking forward to the next part...

Thank you for your lovely comment! Hope you will like the next part when it is posted 😊

Originally posted by: Nitya_Suresh
It was awesome.. Really loved it so much.. I seriously look forward to seeing what happens next.. I actually hope this happens in the serial as well. I am so happy reading this...

Wow, thank you so much! I'm so happy you like the story. I think the serial is going to do something more dramatic with more secrets and misunderstandings, but yes, surely one day Abhi will see the truth that Pragya is the farthest thing from a gold-digger...thanks for reading, hope you will like the rest of the story too 😊

Originally posted by: crtkelly
Hi There, First time poster to this forum, but just had to compliment you on your story; Wow, this is really great! Kudos to your writing style and this story in particular. This is an Abhi not normally seen on the serial, and I love it (not to say that I don't enjoy his antics on the show) its a refreshing change. Anxious for your update!

I am so honoured that you're commenting on my story! Welcome to the forum, hope you will join us for all the wacky fun we have here 😆 Thank you so much for your comment, I'm so pleased that you like it. Yes, we have yet to see Abhi's thoughtful side on the show, but I think maybe it's there, under all the rockstar nonchalance and misunderstanding-driven anger...we'll just see I guess. Thanks again and do please keep reading, hope to see your posts throughout the forum 😃

Originally posted by: .logs
amazing yaar... pls continue soon...

Thank you for the comment my friend! You also are a loyal reader and I really appreciate your encouragement. Hope you will like the next part!

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Originally posted by: -Yuks-
I was waiting for someone to write something like this. I can't stand all this wedding nonsense going on right now.
Wonderful storyline!

Interesting that you were thinking along the same lines. Yes, the show is surely going to put us through a lot of nonsense going forward. Thank you so much for your comment, it means a lot to me that you read my work because I remember you from my lurker days in other forums 😳

Originally posted by: bewafa
Really well-written and well-thought out! I actually wish this was a longer FF.
Looking forward to your update!

Gosh thank you so much! Looks like it will have a few more parts after all, hope you will keep reading and commenting 😊

Originally posted by: Kesha_H.
please continue soon its really very interesting and pm me if yu can

Thanks for your comment! Not sure if it will keep being interesting but I hope you'll keep reading. I'm sorry, I don't do PMs [:S]

Originally posted by: aumigi
Loved the concept. Please update soon.

Thanks! Hope you like the next part, the concept sort of evolved...

Originally posted by: sparikh
Loved the concept; the blind brother:( Can't wait for Purab to put Abhi in his place for his Di! -Sona

Oooh I like your idea! I wrote it a bit differently here but yes I would love to have Purab stand up for his Di. Let me know what you think of the next part. Thanks so much for your comment! 😃

Originally posted by: JazzyM
Mina - there is so much meaning in this sentence that I'm bowled over. Awesome piece of writing. With all their bickering, it's very clear that they do have each other's back covered. You captured it beautifully. Thank you yar!

Awww Jazzy ❤️ So glad you liked that sentence...and yes, I really wanted to convey the way they have each other's back! It's an important part of their dynamic for me. Thanks so much for reading & commenting! 🤗

Originally posted by: ...Shakti...
aw mina i loved it! and mina since yoru first os your writing has improved sooo much this one was purely perfect!loved it! was absolutely brilliant can't wait for the second part

Aww thank you Shakti! Love your comments ❤️❤️❤️ And lol thanks, I guess practice makes perfect? Hahahaha I do keep having AbhiGya ideas so lets see what else I end up writing...

Originally posted by: amritafan
Wow awesome.cont soon

Thanks for reading and commenting, hope you like the next part 😊

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Originally posted by: -Smiles-
Loved this!! Please continue soon :)

Thanks for your lovely comment!

Originally posted by: aash2302
Very nice..atleast in a fic abhi has got brains to think about pragaya that she is not a gold digger and how waste are his gf and sister.waiting for the next part

Haha yes Abhi does have brains, he's just easily distracted/manipulated. Thanks for reading and commenting, let me know what you think of his thoughts in the next part...

Originally posted by: -Laiba-
amazing, keep it up nd continue soon :D

Thank you dear! Really appreciate your comment, hope you like the next part.

Originally posted by: shivaniaroraji

Waiting for next update

Originally posted by: greenbutterfly
awesome can't wait to read more please update

Sorry for the wait 😳 Hope you like the next part, thanks for your comments!

Originally posted by: samig
nice TS. want to see purab clearing all the misunderstanding of Abhi about his and pragya's relationship. Do update soon and please post me also

Thanks for your comment! Yes, Purab plays an important part, though he doesn't get a lot of lines...let me know what you think of the next part! Sorry, I don't do PMs [:S]

Originally posted by: daisydee425
Awesome

Originally posted by: whitelily
Superb

Thanks! Really appreciate your comments 😳

Originally posted by: rbb1
nice start, wow so he is finally thinking why she left, wonder how his conversation with Purab will go

Thanks dear, you are a loyal reader and commenter, love seeing your likes al over the place! He does have a conversation with Purab though it's kind of offscreen, let me know what you think...

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Originally posted by: Lkb79
Mina, I loved this!!! Read it yesterday and wanted to tell you I was so glad you had Abhi grow a brain and Pragya reclaim her dignity. Now the writers need to follow your lead.

omg thanks, really appreciate your thoughtful comment! Not sure you will like what I have ahead for Pragya and Abhi but please keep reading and tell me your thoughts even if critical! And haha the writers probably have some more dramatic stuff in store but yeah maybe we will get a scene someday of "Abhi stares at legal papers over scotch" 😉

Originally posted by: Vanilla.Sky
Beautifully written as always! You and your amazing stories never fail to blow me away! I really love how realistic this is, like I really want something like this to happen! Hehe, if only you were the writer for KKB I cannot wait to read more!

Awww thank you!!! ❤️❤️❤️ Lol if I were the writer for KKB it would be really boring 😲 Hope you like the rest, do let me know!

Originally posted by: indi
Thank you Mina!!! Loved loved it!!! It was awesome!!!! Dumb Abhi can't understand this Pragya ... !!! Want him to suffer some heartache too!!!

Haha thank you dear Indi! I wanted Abhi to suffer to buuut the story seems to have taken a different turn. Let me know what you think, and thanks for reading and commenting!

Edited by -mina- - 10 years ago

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Posted: 10 years ago

#59

Ufff you all are FANTASTIC. I couldn't even keep up with your comments and feedback, but thank you SO SO SO much for sharing your thoughts and opinions! Please keep commenting, it gives me so much motivation.

To those who liked the serious tone of the first part, you will probably like this part, but maybe not the rest of the story...I haven't finished it yet but it's starting to look rather fluffy 😳 And yes, it grew beyond a two shot...there will be a few more parts, not sure yet how many! 😃

Thanks again everyone! Hope you like this part, let me know whatever your thoughts!

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As he drove to Pragya's house, it was all Abhi could do to keep his attention on the road. His mind kept playing back the conversation he'd had with Purab the previous evening.

Purab had not wanted to tell him anything. Abhi had asked him for the full story of his relationship with Pragya, but Purab had just said "What does it matter now, Bhai? Aaliya is my present and future. For better or worse, we'll make it work." He looked tired and sounded resigned, and for the first time Abhi really saw how unhappy Purab was. He began to wonder if it had been a mistake to put so much pressure on his best friend...and had he made the wrong decision for his sister's life?

But Abhi didn't want to get distracted with other concerns; he just wanted answers about Pragya. So he pressed Purab, insisting that he didn't want secrets between them anymore. He asked Purab how he'd met Pragya, how long they'd been together, whether she'd taken money from him. Purab tried to avoid and redirect the questions, but finally, he lost his patience and blurted, "It was never her! It was never her, Bhai. I loved Bulbul."

And then the whole story finally tumbled from Purab's lips. How he'd met Bulbul through work, and she'd gotten the wrong idea about him, but misunderstanding and arguments somehow turned to attraction and hope. How he'd meant to tell her about Aaliya, how he'd meant to tell Abhi about Bulbul, how time had somehow got out of his hands. How he'd been shocked to see Pragya as Abhi's bride at their reception, and how he'd been ready to tell Abhi everything then and there. How Pragya had stopped him, and convinced him that they couldn't say anything - to protect Bulbul. How Bulbul had requested him to marry Aaliya, for Pragya's sake and for fear of their mother's health given Pragya's past failed relationships. How for him, Pragya was first Di because of Bulbul, and then Bhabhi because of Abhi; how Aaliya had been completely wrong in her assumption that he had ever been romantically involved with Pragya.

As he listened to Purab, Abhi felt his doubts and confusion start to clear...only to be replaced by shame, guilt, and a growing determination to fix everything...somehow.

Abhi was appalled by the role Aaliya had apparently played in all this, but that was a problem to solve later. Instead, as he brooded over Purab's revelations during his sleepless night, he thought about what a negative picture had been painted of him. Pragya and Purab had thought that he would harm Bulbul. How could they believe that? What could he have done to an innocent young girl whose only crime had been loving someone unavailable to her?

It was impossible to imagine taking any kind of revenge on Bulbul, even with Aaliya's hysterics to motivate him. Bulbul was so sweet and open, so lively and playful that he never would have believed she was scheming for Purab's money. She was young and immature and naive, and if he had known that Purab had fallen for her - he would have understood.

But somehow it had been so perfectly easy to misunderstand Pragya. It had been possible to imagine mature, self-possessed, reserved and enigmatic Pragya as a scheming gold-digger. Because she was older, and less open...and less pretty.

That was it, really. Aaliya had seen Purab and Pragya close together and assumed they were involved. And she hadn't seen what a handsome, dynamic young man like Purab could see in an older, more serious, normal-looking woman like Pragya. So she had assumed it was all about money, because somewhere along the way, Daadi and Abhi had failed to teach her that there was more to life than money.

And then Abhi, out of blind love for his sister, had taken revenge on Pragya...an innocent girl whose only crime had been to marry to please her mother rather than herself. And that was no crime at all.

Pragya had borne all his torture, his taunts, his flaunting Tanu in her face. He'd been cruel about her looks and her personality and her character. According to Purab, she'd done it for her sister and her mother. But why, then, had she also done so much for him? She had covered for him with the police, even trying to use her own jewels to pay off that paanwaala. And she had supported all his lies to Daadi, right down to that last morning, when she didn't once take Tanu's name as one of the problems between them.

For all the answers he finally had, Abhi found himself stuck with one, new, much harder question - how could he make up for all that he had done?

The more he thought about the kind of future Pragya was facing, the more he felt ashamed of himself. The courts might accept a no-fault divorce petition, but with her complicated past, society would surely find something to blame on Pragya. She would be seen as the celebrity cast-off, the defective woman who just couldn't make any relationship stick. Even if some man some day managed to look past all that, the families of potential suitors would always hold the fact of her previous marriage against her. No one would know or care that it hadn't been anything close to a real marriage.

Abhi faced the ugly truth that somehow he had become the villain in Pragya's life. Pragya had had two broken engagements but never a real love story, and now because of him she would have to add a failed marriage to her list of heartbreaks. He remembered all the little things she would do for him, seemingly automatic wifely habits like folding his clothes and bringing him coffee. He thought about how seriously she had taken the role of Daadi's bahu, doing her best to fulfill all her relationships with his mostly indifferent relatives. He realized that during Aaliya's wedding preparations, she had often gone out of her way to meet his demanding sister's every little wish, as if she were really a loving bhabhi catering to an adored nanad.

Pragya had wanted to make the marriage work, even though she found out it was a lie on the very first night.

And that made him angry.

He felt guilty and confused about his own actions, but thinking about the choices Pragya had made, he started wondering, why hadn't she fought harder? If she'd done so much to be a good wife and daughter-in-law, why had she just quietly walked away when he told her to? She could've told him everything the day after Purab and Aaliya's wedding. She should have stood up for herself and for the truth. She had certainly earned her place as his wife, even if he didn't want her there. She didn't deserve to spend a lifetime being blamed and looked down on for what really been an extended act of sacrifice for her sister's safety and his sister's happiness. So why was she willing to end everything with all these secrets still in place?

Finally Abhi reached Pragya's neighbourhood. He knew there wouldn't be enough space to leave his car in front of the house, so he found somewhere a bit distant to park. He put on his sunglasses and walked quickly, hoping no one would notice him. He didn't have time for fans this morning.

As he was about to cross the road across from Pragya's house, he suddenly heard her voice.

"Please try and understand Suresh. I can't marry you."

*cue dramatic music* Oh no! What now! How long will Mina make us wait for an explanation? 😲

Don't worry my loves, this continues in the very next post! Just the tone changes dramatically so I thought I should end here. Anyone who thought they were reading a mature, well-thought out story, please stop here. I thought I was writing one of those, but turns out Abhi can't stay serious long enough 😉

Thank you for reading and please, please, please continue to like and comment! You all are the best readers an ff writer could hope for and I really appreciate everyone who takes the time to read my stories 😊

Edited by -mina- - 10 years ago

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Sooo guys this is kind of a half chapter...I couldn't leave you all hanging with the end of the last part, so here's what happens next, it's just really short 😛

As he was about to cross the road across from Pragya's house, he suddenly heard her voice.

"Please try and understand Suresh. I can't marry you."

Abhi stopped dead in his tracks, his heart suddenly thundering in his ears as Pragya's words filtered through to his brain. He looked wildly around and then realized he was standing underneath the window of what must be Suresh's flat. Pragya must be up there talking to that double battery...about marriage?!

Without thinking about what he was doing, Abhi leaned against the building and tried to keep hearing the conversation happening above.

"I can't marry anyone, Suresh," Pragya was saying. "Even after the divorce. I'm just not meant for marriage."

"Don't say that!" Suresh sounded like a teacher scolding a student. "I know we could make it work, Pragya. We want the same things now, family and partnership. Let's be sensible about this -"

"No, Suresh. I just want a quiet life. I just need my job and my mom and my sister, the way things used to be."

"But I know it's not comfortable at home for you anymore. Sarla Aunty is so mad at you-"

Her mother's mad at her? Abhi wondered. Because she didn't stay with me or because of the lies? From what little he knew of his mother-in-law, both reasons seemed possible.

"Ma will get over it. Mostly she's just mad at Abhi," Pragya answered.

Abhi felt an inexplicable twitch of delight at hearing Pragya say his name, and he wasn't even offended by what she said. It's OK Auntyji, I'm mad at me too.

Suresh was apparently stuck on one point, and instead of replying to her he presented a new argument. "Pragya, I know you're hurting because of everything that happened, but that's only because it's all so fresh. You just need to move on from Abhi, I know that will help. I'm your friend, I can help you forget him -"

The hell you can! Abhi thought, wild with outrage. What is wrong with that double battery, trying to marry someone who is already married! He turned to go up the stairs to Suresh's flat, unwilling to listen to any more of a conversation that shouldn't even be happening.

Apparently Pragya had the same idea, because by the time Abhi was halfway up the stairs, she was stepping out the door of his flat. She turned to Suresh and patted his shoulder awkwardly. "I know you just want to help, Suresh, but I will be ok. I just need you to be my friend. We can do that, right?"

You don't need a friend who wants to marry you, Abhi thought irrationally, watching from his half-hidden position on the stairs.

"Of course Pragya. I just want you to know that I'd do anything for you, that's all." He placed his hand over Pragya's and gave an odd sort of twisted-half smile.

Pragya smiled at him in return, a smile Abhi rather thought he didn't deserve. Then she turned to leave, and Suresh closed the door behind her.

If he wanted to, Abhi had about 10 seconds to hurry back to the street before Pragya could see him. Instead, he stayed rooted to the spot, watching for Pragya to round the corner and start down the stairs.

Pragya didn't see him until she had already started down the stairs, and then she almost tripped as she stared at him in surprise.

"Y-you?" She stuttered as he caught her elbow and steadied her back to her feet.

"Eeey, chashmish," Abhi said with a grin, suddenly thrilled to be back to the old and familiar. She was wearing her dark purple umbrella anarkali, and her glasses were a bit crooked. "We need to talk."

~continued in Part 3 - Second Half~
~Click here for Part 4 Teaser~

So, serious, questioning Abhi seems to have taken the backseat to impulsive & hot-headed Abhi again! Forgive me, dear readers, who wanted a more grown up story. Abhi didn't let me write it, he insists on being himself. 😡 😆

I have no idea when I can update the next part as it isn't anywhere close to being written...so please be patient with me...and tell me your thoughts on what should happen now!

Thanks for reading and for your likes and comments!!

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