SS: Miles Away- last chapter updated!

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hello guys, this obsession with writing and the show is getting overboard now but I just couldn't stop myself from writing another piece of short story. I'm sorry for spamming this forum with nonstop posts and oh also on my replies on the 'OS her firsts' which seem to be lagging now, I'll get back to each one of those I've missed so far.


A big thank you to all the awesome readers for encouraging me to write more and improve in the process. Let me know your take on this one too.

Happy Reading!

Amna


Chapter 1- page 1
Chapter 2- page 4
Chapter 3- page 9
Chapter 4- page 12
Chapter 5- page 17
Chapter 6- page 22
Chapter 7- page 23

Thank you note on page 16
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Chaptert 1

As she brushed her hair before going to bed, she kept thinking about the events that took place during the day. The day he left for the united kingdom to represent his team in the next line of product where his company had won the tender. He had been delighted when he shared the news of his new accomplishment, he had worked hard she knew. Those late sittings at office, being on call for no end at times. It was sudden, his representing the team in person and when he broke the news at home there was a gush of mixed reactions, from romi being super excited, his dad being proud, his mother being apprehensive for his a-month-long absence into a foreign country, to her being perturbed. She thought she was incapable of being vulnerable anymore, she never thought a mere thought of somebody's absence will make her this distressed.

It started in the morning when she was packing his luggage and eyeing him at equal intervals as she kept putting in the bag his formals, casuals, toiletries while he gets his documents and files from the desk and book shelves and shoves them in the laptop bag. He glanced at her every now and then to see some reaction, some reflection of his turmoil on her face but instead she looked too composed and occupied at the task at hand. He was still having second thoughts about his departure thinking of the Prevert at his home in his absence. He couldn't forget the last time he was away in the same situation and it turned out to be such a predicament. He stood in front of the mirror now, all decked up and looked at her reflection standing near the cupboard keeping back the extra stuff she took out.

"I'll be all right." She replied his unvoiced question when she found him staring at her.

He turned around and took over the task of zipping up the suit case. "I know, its him I'm worried about now." Masking his worry behind his sarcasm. She could only sigh at his quirp and turned away to get him his cell phone because she was afraid if she stayed next to him she would give in to her desire to hold him to her once before he leaves her sight for a month. It was the longest he would be away from home. From her.

As much as he tried to be near her, finding some way or another to just take her in his arms to find solace for even a minute she only moves away only to look after his needs either to get toiletries from the bathroom, his cologne from the table or his cell phone from the charger. With her back facing him now she gets the phone off the charger, he gathers all his courage to give in to his desires and he takes a step forward but only to be stopped by two small hands around his waist, hugging him to her. She produces her angelic face from his side and asks "are you going today papa?"

He nods before taking her into his arms and asks her "what do you want me to bring you?"

"A doll." After giving his question much thought. The last few minutes of privacy were disturbed by his mother's chantings, wishing his son all the wish and success and just like that he left for the airport in a rush without so much as a last glance at her, let alone a hug.

As she keeps the brush down and turns to sleep next to thier daughter, her thoughts were intruded by the ringing of her cell phone.







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Posted: 11 years ago
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Lovely start ..
Pls cont soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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yayyy another story from you😃 (doing a happy dance)...LoL😆
omg, i just loved the 1st chapter⭐️
awesome start👏
i could feel the tension and i dunno but i found it quite emotional👍🏼
they are gonna miss each other soo much😭
am really looking forward to this 1😃
do continue soon
take care
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice start... Pm me ur coming updates...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice start
do continue n pm m
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Beautiful. ?.continue soon... n can u pm me plz
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Posted: 11 years ago
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reallyyy awesummm startt!!! completely loved how u wrote! something different also from the other forum stories! go aheadd!!
im waiting for next part! plsss PM me whn u update! thankuuu in advance!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome start! Plz pm wen u update
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Posted: 11 years ago
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so good...their inner turmoil...not letting other knw about how they felt...so real...
loved it
continue soon...
pls pm me wen u update
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