FF: Do Dil Mil Rahe Hain...update on pg18

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aisha1

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Posted: 18 years ago

#101

i love this part howwww cute , yaar cont soon know lol haaaaaaaa

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ladoos

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Posted: 18 years ago

#102

hey all! thanx for all the kind words 😊 i have started my next part already and i want to make sure that i make you all happy. so it's going to be a LLLOOONNNGGG one 😉 hope to have it up soon but no promises...laterz...

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zoya

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Posted: 18 years ago

#103

ten days!!! out with it already!!!! 😡 😛
seriuosly..its too hot to beg....but im begging here...plz plz

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Prerna

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Posted: 18 years ago

#104

wow..you are a really good writer..why don't you apply for a job at KEKTA's Balaji telefilms..Anyone at Balaji listening..here is a real writer in the making and much better than all your creative directors put together who have reduced KSBKT to a boring drag..
wow man u r really good..please continue..even if we are not really always replying..I am sure we all are waiting for u to contine !!
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Afreen

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Posted: 18 years ago

#105

that wa sawesome!!!!! i mean you really have to be a writer!!!! i loved it and i am waiting for the next part..... by the way i'm nirja ok? can you give me sum tips on writing???? plz??? 👏

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Mansi Roy

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Posted: 18 years ago

#106

Great one!! 👏 👏 👏 Waiting for the next part!!

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ladoos

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Posted: 18 years ago

#107

thanx for all the kind words guys! my next part is shaping up pretty nice but i'm not done writing it yet...and prernade...thanx but i'm not sure if i'm all that talented to be writing anything professionally...there's better writers here but i appreciate ur kind words & support...and norahjones526 or nirja...i'm not a writer at all...this is only my second fanfic that i am writing...i have never written anything else before & as for tips on writing...well...i don't have any to offer really...i just write what comes to my mind...there are no outlines, no brainstorming sessions or anything...it's all spur of the moment but i do envision the scene as i'm writing it...if i find it hard to envision then i don't write it...i guess this is my secret...and as for destinyz & mars007...thanx for ur kind words & i love the fact that you guys are eagerly awaiting the next post & thank u all for taking the time out to reply...it gives me an energy boost and i get very excited & as a result i push myself to post the next part as soon as i can...it's taking me so long these days because of work load...i hardly have time to just sit & relax for a minute but i'll do my best to have the next part up soon...cheers till then! 😛

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Afreen

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Posted: 18 years ago

#108

i am waiting eagerly for your next part and tell you wat you have inspired me so watch out for my ff on manthan kt and l kt... lets hope its as gud as yours.....
luv u
nirja

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ladoos

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Posted: 18 years ago

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RECAP:It had been years since the whole family had been this happy and laughing together. Tulsi's eyes filled with tears of happiness but before the tears could travel far, KT wiped them & hugged Tulsi. She understood what her Baa was feeling & she was happy for her. Manthan had noticed the affectionate gesture by KT and smiled. He felt something tug at his heart watching KT but before he could think about what had just happened, Mihir had pulled him into a bear hug laughing and all was forgotten in a moment.

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That same night @ Tulsi & Manthan's dinner date…

"Dadi, order whatever you like," said Manthan cheerfully, sitting across from Tulsi. Tulsi looked at the menu & couldn't even pronounce some of the dishes listed. She looked bewildered at Manthan, "What should I order? I don't know what any of these dishes are," said Tulsi disheartened. Manthan smiled, "Dadi, we're at a Thai restaurant. Of course you wouldn't know what any of these dishes are," said Manthan simply. Tulsi shook her head, "Then why did you bring me here? Can't we go to an Indian restaurant instead?" pleaded Tulsi. Manthan sighed & said, "Variety, my dear, is the spice of life. I brought you here so you could try something different; something other than Indian food for a change. Aren't you tired of eating the same stuff over & over?" Tulsi leaned over & lightly whacked him on his left arm & said, "Are you allergic to Indian food? I'm telling you that I have no desire to try anything other than Indian food." Manthan didn't see a way out of it so as a final attempt, he said, "Fine. But I have one condition. I'll order something for the both of us. You will try it and if you don't like it then we can go wherever you like, ok? Tulsi sighed; Manthan had really taken up after his grandfather. Mihir was also just as stubborn if not more. Tulsi gave in thinking that she should not dampen Manthan's mood. He had put in a lot of effort to do all this. Both of them had left for their dinner date soon after Mihir was done pulling Manthan's leg. And when Tulsi was about to sit down beside Manthan on the passenger seat, red roses had been awaiting her. And he had also gifted her a small box of chocolates. As silly as it sounded, Tulsi had started to feel that she actually was on a date. Tulsi smiled as she saw Manthan debate with himself on what he should order for her. Finally, he ordered their dinner and winked at the waitress saying, "Take your time sweetheart." Tulsi saw the waitress blush and walk away shyly. She shook her head & said, "What was that Manthan?" Manthan looked up at Tulsi & asked, "What dadi?" Tulsi gestured towards the waitress that had just left. Manthan smiled in understanding & asked, "Do you smell something burning? *sniff sniff* It's quite strong. Don't you think?" Tulsi sniffed a few times & then replied, "I don't smell anything & don't try to change the topic." Manthan rolled his eyes & said, "Come on Dadi. What I meant was that you are just jealous." Tulsi blinked several times before asking, "Jealous? Of what?" "Of that waitress," said he, simply.

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It was quite late when Tulsi & Manthan returned from their dinner date. Most of the family had gone to sleep after waiting for them. Manthan had called home to inform all that they would be late & to not wait up for them. But Mihir & Karan were still up waiting for them when Manthan & Tulsi walked in. Mihir looked up from the file that he was going over with Karan & said, "I thought you two had eloped." Manthan replied, "Tulsi dadi wanted to after having such a nice time with me but I convinced her otherwise for your sake." Mihir smiled, "I'm so grateful to you. Thank you!" Tulsi smacked the back of Manthan's head and turned to her husband, "Don't you have any shame?" Karan laughed and asked, "Did you have a good time Ma? Manthan didn't bother you too much, did he?" Tulsi smiled at her son's concern, "Yes, I had a very nice time & yes, all he did was bother me." KT, who had been in the kitchen putting away the last few dishes, leaned against the kitchen door & stood listening in the shadow as the hall light by the kitchen was turned off & she had switched off the kitchen light as well. No one had noticed her but Manthan had seen her from the corner of his eye. Instead of acknowledging her presence, he sat down next to Karan facing the kitchen & KT as Tulsi joined her husband on the couch opposite Karan & Manthan with her back to KT.

"Manthan, what is this that I am hearing? Why did you trouble Maa?" Manthan smiled sheepishly & looked over to Tulsi for some help. Tulsi shook her head & smiled at the two of them. "No Karan. You misunderstood me. Yes, it's true that he troubled me but not the way you might be thinking." Tulsi continued after a pause seeing Karan & Mihir's confused faces. "Are baba…Manthan was flirting with other girls while on a date with me. How rude!" exclaimed Tulsi. Both, Mihir & Karan, exchanged glances & then broke into fits of laughter. It took one glare from Tulsi to shut them up. No sooner had they stopped laughing, Mihir made a sniffing noise. *Sniff Sniff* "Karan, do you smell something burning? Man, it's strong!" Manthan couldn't hold it in anymore. He laughed out loud and remembered that he had said the same thing to Tulsi during dinner earlier. Tulsi's mouth fell open at Mihir's words & she gave Manthan a dirty look. Tulsi defended herself, "There's nothing burning here. And unlike what you might be thinking…I'm not jealous!" KT smiled to herself hearing Tulsi. She had been standing there amused this whole time but Tulsi's words left a huge smile on her face. She had never seen her Baa act this silly and she loved it. She silently thanked Thakurji for the joy & peace that she could see on Tulsi's face and asked Thakurji to make sure that her Baa remained this happy if not more, the rest of her life. She also asked for the exact same thing for another person…Manthan. She had also never seen him this relaxed, happy & at peace with himself. She smiled unknowingly as she watched him get up to give a high five to Mihir. Color rose to her cheeks as soon as Manthan looked up & caught her looking at him. She lowered her eyes immediately and looked away. She then started inspecting her left hand & could only thank her lucky stars that she was standing in the shadows. She finally stole a glance at Manthan a few moments later but he had sat back down next to his father & was pulling Tulsi's leg again with Mihir's help & with Karan sitting there trying to control his laughter. KT smiled once again & went back into the kitchen. She came out moments later with two glasses of water in a tray. Karan smiled at her as she approached them. Tulsi was surprised to see KT still up. "What're you still doing here? Shouldn't you be sleeping?" asked Tulsi. KT only smiled in response & handed her a glass of water. "I told her to go to sleep but she insisted on waiting up for you. She said that she cannot go to bed without giving you your medicines as you would forget otherwise. That's like an ideal daughter," finished Mihir with a smile. Tulsi smiled proudly and asked, "Whose daughter is she after all?" KT smiled at Tulsi & went over to give Manthan a glass of water but he shook his head & with a frown, whispered a "No thanks" and KT's smiled vanished into thin air. Mihir grinned & answered Tulsi, "Mine of course." KT stood still for a few seconds not listening to Tulsi & Mihir's silly argument & then with a hurt expression turned around to leave but the words, "Umm…can I get something else?" stopped her. She took her time to turn around & kept her eyes glued to the floor. She didn't want to see him frown at her again. He stood up & stuffed his hands into his jeans & continued, "Umm…umm…" Mihir, Karan, & Tulsi were now looking at the two & Tulsi spoke up, "Are bolo na kya chahiye. KT laa degi." Manthan looked at Tulsi with a nervous smile & scratching the back of his head with his right hand said, "Actually, I was feeling like drinking coffee" turning to KT "but I don't want to trouble you. I'll take some juice instead if you don't mind." KT, without looking up, turned around & silently made her way into the kitchen.

After 10 minutes, Manthan was engaged in a light chat with Karan & Mihir. Tulsi had gone to her room to change. Mihir was saying something when Manthan looked at his watch. It had been well over ten minutes already and KT had still not come with his juice. He was wondering what was taking her so much time when he heard Karan calling his name. He turned to his father & saw him & Mihir staring at him. "Yes dad?" Karan asked, "Where are you lost? Papa is saying something to you." Manthan looked over at Mihir & apologized, "I'm sorry Dadu. What were you saying?" Tulsi came back down a few minutes later & joined the three men as Tulsi wanted to get Karan & Mihir's opinion on something. "I'll be right back," said Manthan & left from there.

KT was in the process of taking out cups when she heard the liquid rising in the pot that she was boiling. She dashed over to the stove & quickly turned the stove off & lifted the pot & placed it on the marble kitchen counter. She went back to the cabinet & took out the remaining two cups & walked back to the pot with the empty cups in a tray. She started pouring the steaming liquid into the cups and was just finishing putting the pot away in the sink. Manthan had come to see what was taking her so long but he had stopped at the kitchen door when he saw her lost in her own world, busy with work, and a sweet smile on her lips. He had opened his mouth to say something but nothing had come out. Something tugged at his heart again but he, once again, didn't take note of it. But what he had noticed & was at the moment, preventing him from making a sound was the smile still playing on her lips. He didn't know what it was about her smile but it seemed so familiar. He stood there watching her silently & trying to recall something but nothing seemed to make sense. KT carefully picked up the serving tray filled with cups & a plate full of cookies. She turned and was heading for the door without looking up when Manthan's voice startled her. "Do you need help?" KT almost dropped the tray but Manthan quickly reached out to steady the tray in her hands & said, "Sorry, I didn't mean to scare you. I had just come to check on you as you hadn't come back." KT placed a hand on her chest & took a deep breathe & managed a whisper, "It's okay." Manthan looked at her flushed face & asked, "Are you ok?" When she didn't respond he asked, "Can I please have that juice now?" KT looked up at him for a second before making her way around him & saying, "Sure, help yourself. It's in the fridge. I guess you don't want this coffee then," said KT, hurt that he had not noticed that she had made coffee for him.

Manthan turned around to face her. He then looked at the tray in her hands & realized why it had taken her so long. He couldn't believe she had made coffee for him. As much as he wanted coffee, he had not wanted to trouble her & had requested juice instead. He didn't know what to say to her. He stood there looking at her & thought back to when she had treated his wound that everyone else had failed to notice, even himself. He thought back to other moments when she had tried to help or had been nice to him and now…she had taken the trouble to make him coffee when she could have easily given him juice & gone to sleep. He felt another tug at his heart as he looked at her but she kept her gaze lowered. He realized that she rarely ever looked at him straight in the eyes & that he had never ever looked into her eyes. He observed her face carefully & stopped at her lowered eyes. He, once again, had a feeling that those eyes were familiar along with that smile. He closed his eyes for a second to recollect his thoughts & then looked at her again. He realized he wanted to look into those almond shaped eyes. He was curious to find out what it was about them that was so familiar. He came closer & stood inches from her & cleared his throat looking at her carefully & said, "KT." She had sensed him coming closer & her heart had started beating faster than ever before. She looked up at him and found him staring at her. She froze at having him so close to her & found it difficult to break the eye contact as he held her gaze. She saw surprise, confusion, & happiness in his eyes one after the other. She finally looked down slowly & walked out of the kitchen, leaving behind an astonished Manthan. The few seconds that she had looked up for were enough to let Manthan know where he had seen those eyes before.

KT handed coffee to both Karan & Mihir & turned to give Tulsi boiled milk & her medicines. Tulsi cringed at the sight of the medicines but one look at KT's face was enough to tell her that there was no way she was going to be able to skip her medicines tonight. She looked at Mihir for help but he flashed her a sarcastic smile. Without further delay, she took her medicines from KT & gulped them down & then took the milk from her. Tulsi noticed an extra cup of coffee & inquired KT. "It's for Manthan," replied KT. Tulsi smiled at her & said, "Thanks for staying up for us beta. I am exhausted & I needed my nightly boiled milk. I wouldn't have had the energy to make it if you hadn't stayed up." She noticed that Manthan wasn't around & asked no one in particular, "Where's Manthan?" KT didn't say anything & instead sat quietly next to Tulsi. Karan & Mihir were quietly having there coffee as they too were tired from the long day at work. Tulsi continued, "You know KT…Manthan loved that watch that I gifted him," said Tulsi, happily. KT smiled at her enthusiasm & said, "I'm glad Baa." Manthan walked in then & sat next to Karan & directly across from KT. She felt a little awkward with him around & was about to get up to leave when Tulsi said, "KT, give Manthan his coffee otherwise it'll get cold." Manthan noticed KT hesitate for a second & then get up to give him his coffee with her eyes lowered. She forwarded the cup to him but he ignored her. The other three were once again engaged in a chat & failed to notice what was happening between the two. KT didn't know what to do & stood there for a good minute or two till she finally whispered softly, "Manthan, coffee." Manthan looked at her then but still made no effort to take the cup from her. He stared at her while she stood there not knowing what to do nor understanding why he was doing this. What had she done now? KT kept wondering over & over while keeping her gaze on the floor. And Manthan had resolved to not take the cup from her until she made eye contact with him. He was confused & refused to accept that she was the girl of his dreams. She couldn't possibly be the same person or could she? KT, frustrated at him, was about to turn when he stood up & whispered, "KT…won't you give me coffee?" She finally looked up at him, not believing what he had just said. She was about to say something when his eyes made her forget everything. It was as if he was trying to say something to her & once again she saw what she had seen a little earlier in the kitchen when their eyes had made contact. She didn't understand what it was that she saw in them but his eyes seemed to be searching for something. It was as if he was trying to confirm something.

They both stood there looking at each other till KT started to feel the heat & color rise to her cheeks from his intense gaze. She lowered her eyes & broke the trance. Manthan looked around startled & as he saw her moving away, he took hold of the cup of coffee she was still holding & in the process his fingers brushed the back of her hand & a current seemed to pass through her. She inhaled deeply & closed her eyes. Manthan had felt it too but he drew his hand back the instant he felt it. He still refused to believe that KT was the girl from his dreams. The eyes in his dreams were always smiling, friendly & coy these days but he only saw confusion & annoyance for himself in KT's eyes & thus, he concluded that it wasn't her that he had been dreaming about but someone else who's eyes resembled KT's. Manthan smiled at finally having resolved this mystery & sat back down with his coffee. KT, meanwhile, had already sat down next to Tulsi and was observing Manthan. She didn't understand his behavior towards her these days. And why was he interested in her eyes all of a sudden? As she dwelled more on this the more confused she became. She shook her head a little in an attempt to try to clear it & then started picking up the now empty cups of coffee & milk. Manthan was still sipping his while talking to Karan & Mihir but she didn't bother waiting for him to finish & headed towards the kitchen to wash the three cups & head to her room. She came back out within 2 minutes & made her way towards the stairs & said good night as she passed everyone.
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That same night…

Manthan was dreaming again. But he could barely see anything. Everything was so blurry due to the fog & unusually lit. It was as if he was walking among clouds. He tried to look all around but he was lost. He had never been here, he thought. Then all of a sudden something white & very soft fell on his face & slid down his face. He closed his eyes to breath in the wonderful lily scent from the white fabric. As he opened his eyes he saw a figure clad in all white, disappear in the near distance. He squinted to get a better look but it was gone. He looked down & noticed even he was dressed in a white suit with a white shirt and white shoes. He sighed & leaned on a nearby tree. He rested his head back on the tree & tried to envision the enchanting eyes that had haunted his dreams for the last two or three months. Why didn't they appear tonight? he thought. That's when he heard the soothing cham-cham sound of someone's payal (anklet). His eyes shot open & he looked around frantically to see where the sound was coming from. Surprisingly, the fog seemed to be clearing away. He tried to slowly make his way to where the sound was coming from but couldn't see anyone still. After a few minutes he finally saw something very white ahead but he couldn't make out what it was because the fog had still not cleared. As he got closer, he realized it was a girl clad in a white salwar kameez with long silky black hair. She had her back to him & was humming a sweet tune. He slowly approached her and stood a few feet behind her, observing her. He wanted to say something to her but his throat seemed to have dried all of a sudden. He had a feeling that he knew her. The enchanting eyes flashed in front of him and he froze. Could this be her? The girl of his dreams? Yes! His heart screamed out. And the words were out before he could stop himself, "Who are you?" The girl didn't jump, scream, turn around or get startled like he had thought she might. Instead, she stood there quietly with her back still to him & after a few seconds of silence, she spoke, "The same who you've been dying to meet. The one for whom you've changed yourself. The one whose eyes help you sleep peacefully at night." His heart was racing now. He took out a trembling hand out of his pocket & slowly placed it on her right shoulder. He slowly began to turn her around & closed his eyes. He wanted to remember this moment the rest of his life and wanted to capture it perfectly. As he slowly opened his eyes & focused them, he couldn't help but, "AAAAHHHHHHHHH!" Manthan screamed at the top of his lungs. What stood in front of him could only be a nightmare & not a dream, he thought. In front of him stood Mohini, clad in a white & silver designer sari with her hands covering her ears. Manthan didn't stop screaming till he jumped out of bed. Mohini chachi? he thought. Eww-eww…YUCK! He couldn't possibly have been dreaming about her…could he? He finally realized that he was out of bed & Mohini was still standing by his bed where he had first seen her. "I'm not dreaming?" asked Manthan confused. Mohini gave him a very quizzical look & asked, "What're you talking about? Have you gone mad?" Manthan looked back at her & asked, "What're you doing in my room?" Mohini rolled her eyes & said, "Beta, your mom wanted me to wake you up. It's 11 a.m. in case you haven't noticed yet & we have a party tonight. She needs some help & asked me to make sure you got up." Manthan put a hand over his chest & breathed a sigh of relief. Thank god! he thought. Mohini stood there watching him. Totally frustrated that she had disturbed him & as a result, he had failed to see who his dream girl was, he forced himself to ask sweetly, "Yes Chachi. Did you need something else?" Mohini smiled at him & said, "No, I just want to make sure that you don't go back to sleep." It was Manthan's turn to roll his eyes but of course, Mohini didn't notice as she was glancing at her nails. He finally said, "No, I won't go back to sleep. Happy?" Mohini smiled & said, "Good. Now hurry up & get ready & come downstairs." Manthan only nodded his head as she walked out closing the door behind her. Must remember to lock the door next time, he thought. He was about to head to the bathroom when he glanced at his bed again. I'm sure nothing will happen if I squeeze in 5 minutes more of sleep. Then he thought of how his dream got interrupted & he never had a chance to see her face. Maybe she'll come into my dreams again. Mom has plenty of people to help her in the meantime. He slid under the covers & dozed off within a few seconds.

It had been 45 minutes since Mohini had gone to wake Manthan up but he still hadn't come down. He must have gone back to sleep, thought Tanya shaking her head. "What am I going to do with this boy? I don't have time to wake him up & ensure that he gets ready without another delay," said Tanya, talking to herself. As she approached Manthan's door she saw KT walk past her with a plate full of daisies. "KT…where are you going?" asked Tanya. "Chachi…I was just going to go put new flowers in the mandir." Tanya called her over to her & said, "Archita can do this also. Will you do me a favor?" KT smiled & said, "Of course. Tell me." Tanya peeked inside Manthan's room to confirm that he was still sleeping & then quietly closed the door. She turned to KT & placed a hand on her shoulder & said," I need you to make sure that Manthan wakes up & gets ready. I need all the help I can get & I need him to get somethings from the market as I have all the other kids doing one thing or the other. Beta, Karan told me at the last minute about this & I don't even have 5 minutes to spare." The smile disappeared from her face. Tanya noticed & said, "I know you're a bit uncomfortable around him but please? I need you to do this for me. Trust me, you'll be fine & he won't get angry with you. If he does, you tell me & I'll give him a good beating. Please?" Tanya pleaded & although, hesitantly, KT agreed. Tanya relieved, thanked her and left to get back to her work. KT swallowed hard as she stood fidgeting outside Manthan's room. She took a deep breath & slowly opened the door.

hope u all enjoyed this part...i spent a LONG time trying to make it worth your wait! and i'm hoping that my hard-work has paid off 😛 please do share your thoughts on it! 😊

Edited by ladoos - 18 years ago

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zoya

@destinyz

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Posted: 18 years ago

#110

uffff itna wait karwayaa!!!!!! i thought ud never update again.... and now uv left the best part out!!!!
no fair.... dont make me wait for soo long for the next update...

loved this one... spec the way manthan seems to flrt with tulsi... too bad we dont get that in the tv serial!

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