Rudra Ki Daastan - (Updating)

CONTEST : IPL 2026 Prediction Game

First Previous

Page

Frequent Posters

HayemeraSarun

@HayemeraSarun

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#11

you are a beaaauttifuulll writer...😃

Quote

Sumneet

@Zeffy

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: kantamistry
you are a beaaauttifuulll writer...😃

Thaaak you so much, really appreciate your kind words!!

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

Stunner

+ 8

Posted: 11 years ago

#13

I really like the concept and your Hindi is also very good, just need a bit more attention on the grammar and the little details. :)

As far as the story goes, its coming across nicely but am a little confused about the last few parts. Was it Paro who had always been sitting next to him or Nandini? And if it was Paro, how come he didnt recognize her straight away or did he? That bit is not very clear, at least according to me.

But other than that a very touching piece. :)

Quote

Sumneet

@Zeffy

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: AngelTeen
I really like the concept and your Hindi is also very good, just need a bit more attention on the grammar and the little details. :)

As far as the story goes, its coming across nicely but am a little confused about the last few parts. Was it Paro who had always been sitting next to him or Nandini? And if it was Paro, how come he didnt recognize her straight away or did he? That bit is not very clear, at least according to me.

But other than that a very touching piece. :)

Wow thank you for taking the time and patience to read. Ha Ha 😆, yup grammar always needs fine-tuning, glad you noticed, only an experienced writer like you would mention it. Hindi was the subject that I scored the least in,while at school, with all the non-hindi ones topping it instead, guess at least abhi it could improve.

Now you pretty much pointed out a major blooper, Rudra has seen Paro so why would he be confused between her and Nandhini, I have to re-write quite a lot now. Need to get my story right. So thank you for that.

Well agar aap ko touching lage, toh I guess no other encouragement ya inspiartion could work better!!

Edited by zeffy2k2 - 11 years ago

Quote

Sumneet

@Zeffy

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: shutter
Babe, I just got to reading a part of it!!!!!
Is that girl in his class Paro??? But if she is Paro, he'd have recognised her, wouldn't he????

But no, she can't be Paro because in another entry he writes about some holiday and says that Paro must also be having a holiday... Good one!!!!

More of it laters...

Well looks like all of us reading the post have the same expression, 😕😕.

So I guess need to concentrate reaaly this, get my story line right and not get excited and type along some words.

Thank you for being supportive and encouraging me at the same time, 😃!!

Quote

Bioinfo_Chaitu

@Bioinfo_Chaitu

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#16

actually mainey ye pehley hi padha tha , but confuse ho gayi ke kya comment karun , i got emotional after reading this post 😭and u write really well, pls keep updating 😳

Quote

Sumneet

@Zeffy

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: bioinfo
actually mainey ye pehley hi padha tha , but confuse ho gayi ke kya comment karun , i got emotional after reading this post 😭and u write really well, pls keep updating 😳

Ha Ha kuch sabhi ka aisa hi reaction hai, after reading this post. Need to work on it immediately. Aapne effort liya comment ke baare mein sochne ke liye, issi se pata chala ki kitna improve karna hai.

Thank you for your kind and encouraging words!! 😃

Edited by zeffy2k2 - 11 years ago