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Originally posted by: lilanda

THIS WAS SO CUTEEE

Originally posted by: mishtypiya

amazing..

Originally posted by: ARandKJFan

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Will comment on both updates together! :)

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Ari and Flames, good job guys <3

Ari's shot:

After interacting with you today, who would have thought you like writing sadistic stuff. 😆

I love how you've explained his emotions and the connection between the dumbbells and Renuka :)

Him being a broken man and how he wasn't able to accept that Sanyukta affected him was so pure :')

It was an amazing beginning which could leave anyone waiting for more.

I have a few complaints though 😆

Punctuation theek kardo yaar and women ko woman kado xD Seriously, commas aur capitals daalegi toh it will become perfect. That's the only complaint I have from you 😆

Also, Cancer ghisa-pita hogaya hai 🤔

Other than that, your part was perfect <3

Flames' shot:

AAAHHH Flames, ab tera kya bolun?

It was perfection meri jaan <3

I'll say this once, you have a flair for dialogues. They suit the character and your style very well. ^_^

And I LOVE this past. It is SOOO what I want in the show. I want his father to be the villain for the simple reason that he instigated/coerced Randhir against his mom.

So yes, brilliant concept <3

Final SanDhir convo stole my heart.

I love how he's still strong yet broken and instead of sympathizing with him, Sanyukta is trying to get him back. It's something I would expect from her.

"Rank 1 talks about his disinterest in the subject, could this be more hilarious"

This is my favorite line xD

Burning! Can I hug you? Thwnkew SO much meri jaan!
I am really happy that the Best SS writer of the week has taken out her valuable time and commented her! xP Love ya!

Keep writing the two of you.

Thank you for the oh-so-awesome read :D