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Posted: 10 years ago
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hola BDians😃
I had plans of introducing myself to this forums loo...ng back but due to one or the other reason couldn't!!
For those who don't know me ..
I am Rads a Passionate Writer
and love experimenting with my writing!!
I have been more inclined towards poetry than Fiction in the past and hence
Mostly love writing a combination of the 2!!
ie Poetry+ fiction
MehBeer is one couple that intrigued me from day 1!!
hence had to be coming one day or the other
scroll down for the OS
PS : have patience it might take me a while to update the OS!!
love
Rads😃

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Posted: 10 years ago
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COMPUNCTION

Every time I look in those eyes ,

I see something unsettling ,

I see hesitation ,

A ray of hope

And yet something ..probing,

He sat beside her, clasping her pale hands, in hopes of reviving her, reviving their long lost "Fairytale". *fairytale... who are you kidding * his inner voice mocked him as he slowly drifted into his worse nightmare" The Fateful night"that changed everything !! He could still remember that storming rage , the thunderous clouds , those heavy rains, he could still feel that storm building inside him, blinding him completely...what he could never ever forget about that night though was not that rain, nor that storm , it was those eyes!! Those unsettling eyes trying hard to make him believe what he saw/ heard wasn't true, there's more to it, they pleaded , but he wouldn't budge , he wouldn't listen, he couldn't, everything pointed towards the obvious!!

**********

8 yrs , that incident took away 8 precious years of their lives and still the misunderstandings, the hatred continued ,he'd of course pondered over a lot and tried to start afresh ,but in vain ,he was too late.. it was all over...the glass was shattered.

The unbearable silence ,the beeping machines around her almost lifeless body reminded him yet again of the fact that he'd been too late , too late to retrace his path ...those pleading eyes haunted him, he remembered how he'd made life miserable for her at Groove Station , the 8 day challenge, the media gimmick, he'd always had a trick up his sleeve, not to particularly annoy but just to ...be with her, he tried hating her more than once but his heart ripped that part of him apart...why...why can't I hate you...he'd once screamed in frustration!! And Today , life with its twisted sense of humor forced him to question...why couldn't I love you enough to believe in you!! To believe in your love, to believe in everything we ever had!!

Why!!!!!!!!!! He cried in anguish, as if to answer his question her eyes flickered , her hands twinged and he couldn't help but smile, " after every dark night, there's a bright morning sunshine"

We had been soulmates once,

You and I,

Then ego came knocking my door ,

Accompanying doubt,pride,

They took me far away from you ,

Where there was no looking back,

Yet nature had something else planned for us,

You and I ,

We met again,

Clashed again,

But I was determined not to lose you this time,

As I sat unsure of what may come next,

You came back as a renewed hope ,

And completing the shattered me,

You and I

Finally yet again

Became

We'

Edited by ..Enamour.. - 9 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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This is too good. Love the way you have written it.

Great work 👏
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ravinanaik

this is beautifull!!

awsome update!!

I am glad u liked it dear😃😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: .SSS.


This is too good. Love the way you have written it.

Great work 👏

I am so glad u liked it dear😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Loved it so much yaar...!!!
It was such a beautiful piece that I don't have words to explain it.
When abeer asked himself why couldn't he love meher enough to believe on her... it broke my heart...
The last lines... they suit mehbeer to well...!!!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: naina927

Loved it so much yaar...!!!
It was such a beautiful piece that I don't have words to explain it.
When abeer asked himself why couldn't he love meher enough to believe on her... it broke my heart...
The last lines... they suit mehbeer to well...!!!

awww...thank you so much for your appreciation😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Awesome!! it was such a fantastic read!! 😃 😛
Mehbeer ❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Eden_luvsKriya

Awesome!! it was such a fantastic read!! 😃 😛
Mehbeer ❤️

I am glad u liked it dear😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
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res 😆
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unres. Because i will forget if i dont do it now 😆

I didn't know you wrote.
That too sadistic stuff. Yumm. Jitna abeer ko tarpaoge utna mere dil ko sukoon milega 😆

You described the rain flashback really well. that scene is such an inspiration never gets old. there are about a 100 interpretations/versions of it yet every one is heart breaking.

Loved the poem the most though. The end bit with you and me become we Perfect ending.!
Edited by -TeekhiMishti- - 10 years ago

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