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Posted: 10 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: jeharshu

beautiful nd emotional os

loved it to the core


Thank you 😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: --Ari--

Shruthi girl,

That was WOW.! like WOW.! and if this was just an off idea from the comp OS i am scared to think what you had stirred up for the actual thing You are damn good.!
ARIII :) thank you so much, and btw dhanya has written a way better one for the contest sooo yeah B)
And Dude the sadism and angst in abeers part was ❤️ Anyone who likes sadism this well goes in my christmas list 🤣 you are in the top ten now 👏 I am a huge sadist =D Lets be sadist buddies...and what do I get for Christmas? ;)

You wrote it so freaking well I dont have words to describe how good it was. Like it wasnt like i was reading some OS in the forum but infact reading a real published novel from a best selling author. 👏
Oh wow. I'm honoured. That is a HUGE compliment, especially from you. Thank you :*
Mehers part was just perfect ❤️ she is so sorted . She knows what she wants and isnt afraid to pursue it. True woman of today. this girl makes me so proud 😳
Exactly. I never want to create a universe where Meher is not a complete BAMF.
Ooo and the ending was just yummm... it had me ☺️ I was so happy while writing that part...literally had the same reaction imagining it :P

Waiting for shameless. Please update soon :) It's coming :)

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Omggg.
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This was abs. outstanding!!
It was such a treat to read this... WOWO!!
Loveed both of them... abeer's sadism makes me emotional and sad and I lovee itt.
He suits it soo well and reminded me of the umbrella flashback and the beer bottle breaking confrontational scene during the office parry where he asks her why she's back and of course the epic drunk scene where he drops by meher, since he can't get over her- nothing beats it- such a brilliant scene.
Them Feeels*
Loved how sorted and head strong meher. Wish the divorce hadn't happened. She's such an amaazinggg woman- lovee her!
& the endingg- oh myy!
Ps, stilll awaiting shameless! '



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Posted: 10 years ago
#34
the Inner turmoil
the regret
the desperation
the pain
its beautiful!!!
the moment of truth
the reunion
the way you described it all...
a job well done!!
kudos
love
Rads😃

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: ..Enamour..

the Inner turmoil

the regret
the desperation
the pain
its beautiful!!!
the moment of truth
the reunion
the way you described it all...
a job well done!!
kudos
love
Rads😃


Thank you so much rads :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: hilly

Omggg.

...
This was abs. outstanding!!
It was such a treat to read this... WOWO!!
Loveed both of them... abeer's sadism makes me emotional and sad and I lovee itt.
He suits it soo well and reminded me of the umbrella flashback and the beer bottle breaking confrontational scene during the office parry where he asks her why she's back and of course the epic drunk scene where he drops by meher, since he can't get over her- nothing beats it- such a brilliant scene.
Them Feeels*
Loved how sorted and head strong meher. Wish the divorce hadn't happened. She's such an amaazinggg woman- lovee her!
& the endingg- oh myy!
Ps, stilll awaiting shameless! '




Thank you so much hilly!
You gave me such a feels trip right now - I absolutely loved those flashbacks!
Shameless is coming, just you wait!
Thanks again for reading, and so sorry for the late reply...I replied and then IF didn't post it 😡
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Posted: 10 years ago
#37
Author's Note:
IF f-ed up the formatting, so sorry for that!
I've fixed it now but if you read it before and found the change of voice weird, that was all IF.

WEDDING BLUES

When he knocks on her window, she's all decked up in gold and glitter, standing in front of her mirror, just staring at her reflection like she has been for the past hour. There is just one thought in her head: how am I going to nail that interview on Monday? She remonstrates herself a million times saying It's your wedding, fool, concentrate but the girl who set out to do something big in life can't stop and won't stop.


He taps his fingers on the glass again and she is broken out of her reverie. Their eyes meet and she instantly opens the window, letting him in.


"What are you doing here?" she asks, puzzled as she gives way for him to plant himself on the bed.


"I love the fact that you're not questioning my window-entering antics."


"I'm not surprised anymore, what are you doing here?" she repeats herself.


"I need to talk to you-"


"-and you can do that in an hour when I come for the sangeet, Abeer. Seriously, what's going on?" she asks furiously.


"Listen," he brings her gently closer to him, locking his fingers with hers. "This may sound impulsive, and it is, but it's the right thing to do. I'm setting you free." He looks down, dejected by his own words.


Meher utters the only syllable echoing in her brain, "Huh?"


"I realized I might have forced you into this marriage, and you'll never be happy with something you were forced into, just like I wouldn't be happy doing my dad's business. Just now, I saw your face - you don't want this, and I don't want anything for you that you don't want for yourself, so you can cancel it now, and I won't mind. Seriously I won't. We can still be together, or we cannot, anything- I've literally blackmailed you into marrying me, I'm sure you don't want to be with someone like that...anyways, let's not rush into anything, Oh god-I'm a f**king fool-I'm going to lose the only good thing- "


"Abeer, shut up."


That effectively silences him, like always.


"You're mad." but she's grinning at him.


"I am." he's rubbing the back of his head sheepishly, still anxious for her answer.


"You should go. I have to leave in half an hour." she says, flopping on the bed, throwing caution to the wind. God, does it feel good to sit down. "I'm getting married."


"You're getting married tomorrow, and you don't have to." he says as she tilts her head onto his shoulder, rejoicing in how perfectly it fits in the crook of his neck.


"True, I don't have to," she says, closing her eyes, "but I want to."


She can feel him grinning as he says, "You do?"


"You're stuck with me forever, man." she looks up at him and she doesn't know what he sees in her- goddammit he's perfect, and it makes her heart skip everytime she's reminded that he is all hers. "I mean, I was a little skeptical at first-"


"Oh please, a little skeptical? I stood 3 days outside your house-"


"-yes, I know, don't start again," she pouts. Shouldn't have put him through that, your heart was ready the minute he asked. "Anyways, I was more than a little skeptical, but you're an expert in convincing people, aren't you? I know I said we're young and dumb' and all that jazz, but...I don't know, this feels right, and something that feels so right-"


"-can't be wrong, I know. But you shouldn't marry someone just because he convinced you. You make me sound like a criminal." He turns away from her. So stubborn.


"I'm not," she protests fervently. "I'm marrying him because I love him, and if he doesn't know that maybe he shouldn't be marrying me too!" she pants, realizing she's been screaming. Why do we always end up in a screaming match?


"He knows it, he just doesn't want to do something silly and lose you!" he screams back.


"Abeer, I would run away with you now if you asked me." she says with conviction.


His shoulders relax instantly. "Don't worry, I won't make you do that, you'll lose your shit." They both chuckle.


"Really?" she asks, disappointed. Over the past month, the idea of eloping has become very tempting. It's efficient, cost-friendly and romantic, and that ticks all her boxes.


"You want to?" he winks.


"I don't mind." she shrugs and winks back, trying to act nonchalant as he bites his lip. Your lipstick will be ruined, Meher.


"You want to kiss me, don't you?" why does he know me so well? and why am I so pathetic at hiding my emotions?


"Shut up," she says, pushing him off her bed and towards the window. "Now if you're done talking, can you leave?"


"As if I have a choice," he mumbles, swinging his feet outside the window. She suppresses the urge to drag him back in and snog him senseless. "You're sure, then?"


She sighs. "Absolutely," she leans in and whispers, and tells herself screw the lipstick as she quickly touches his lips with hers before shutting the door on his face. He looks foolishly thrilled and almost skips his way out of the garden, into the darkness, and she finds herself wondering why she had ever been unsure of marrying this 12 year old goof.


Edited by VaticanCameos - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#38
Hey Shruthi!
I'm not entirely too sure what to say about this OS. The premise was nice but I don't know why but I felt like something was off. Maybe it was the pronouns that were used but there were some areas where I got confused about who Meher was talking about. :/

I don't know.. it just felt tanda compared to others. :(
Edited by asmaanixx - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#39

Woha! this was just so sweet.

She agreed to marry him not just because he stood there at her door step for 3 days, and its because she loves him <3 .She even was ready to elope with him😆.. This certainty in her decision... that was so like Meher. This little scenario that you weaved around it was utterly cute.

Abeer window entering antic, can he be any cuter than this!? ❤️

Thank you for the PM :)
Edited by .SSSS. - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#40
This was so adorable. .:)
it had something to it that brought a smile to my face..:)
Thank u for the pm..:)

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