Mehbeer TS: Him And Her-Part 3-Page 4 - Page 3

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Posted: 10 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: florine_20

nice one ari.
the possibility that abeer's father was the master mind in their separation is high
and that meher never used the money given to her can surely get them back un future.
well written.


thank you so much. :) well there are alot of possibilities. lekin BD ke track record ke hisaab se nothing we think ever happens 🤣 lets see. glad you liked it though :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: --Ari--


kya timing hai 🤣🤣
work in progress 😉


mera timing sahi hi hota hai...bass tu hi update jaldi nahi likhti 😆

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Posted: 10 years ago
#23

Originally posted by: war_is_peace


mera timing sahi hi hota hai...bass tu hi update jaldi nahi likhti 😆


mai kya karu agar mere net ka character dheela hai 🤣
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Posted: 10 years ago
#24
Last part. Most prolly 😆 Didn't come out right i feel. But khair. Do leave your comments and feedback :)
PART 3

When a life comes to an end, they say every moment ever spent or cherished flashes before your eyes,

He closed his eyes,

She was the only one that flashed before his eyes.

The only thing that matters in life is not the days but the moments they say, the moments that make you laugh until you cry and cry until you laugh,

She opened her eyes unable to take it anymore,

He was the only one that recurred in every moment of hers.

There wasn't a shred of hope. Everyone saw his sinking physical condition, but it was only his one best friend- Nisaar who realised

His sinking physical condition was because of his sinking emotional state.

His reducing life-line was because of his decreasing will to fight and live.

And thus the only girl who could bring him back was called.

She would be his life,

He would be her saviour.

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Hours earlier she was insulted; her love was valued on the scale of crores.

She had left the hospital broken.

He lay in the hospital bed numb.

Hours earlier the house had witnessed her reminisce the beautiful past and memories, now all there was to see was heart-break.

She wanted to forget him, but he was the only one before her eyes.

He didn't want to remember her, but his eyes kept searching for her.

Memories had driven her to him one last time before leaving him forever.

She owed him this much.

He needed a lot more.

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Every-one silently observed as the girl who was his life stepped into abeer malhotra's room and occupied a place at his bedside.

Her hands touched his,

His heart recognised hers.

So many questions, answers and memories lay aside as,

His defeated heart started beating again,

Her broken soul started to mend.

8 years their eyes had searched for each other, yet denied it, 8 years their hearts and souls yearned,

Her eyes never left his.

His soul conversed with hers.

There was so much to be spoken, but the silence spoke louder than words.

His every caress was a silent apology.

Her every smile was a renewed promise of love.

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Edited by --Ari-- - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#25
loved it *muah*
i wish it was longer or never ended 😆
feels like sab kuch khatam ho gaya ab kya karu? 😭

i loved that past present connect in the whole story...n this different style is damn gud...naa koi dialogues naa kuch...par u kno abeer ki awaaz sunne ke liye mere kaan taras gaye end mein 😭
kuch toh bolta kya chal raha hai dimaag mein...bichaara

abhi aur 100 OS likh...jaldi...warna mai life mein kya karungi? 😭
Edited by war_is_peace - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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It was absolutely beautiful Ari! 🤗

Very, very well done. The emotions and inner turmoil and the way their hearts and souls reconciled with each other was really well written.

The only thing that has gotten me confused is this part: He didn't want her to remember her, but his eyes kept searching for her.

Is it simply supposed to be,"He didn't want to remember her, but his eyes kept searching for her." ?

Other than that, I had no problems with this update. If this is going to be your last, then are you planning on writing something else?
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: war_is_peace

loved it *muah* *takes a bow* thats good enough for me . meri mehnat safal hui 🤣

i wish it was longer or never ended 😆 this itself felt dragged to me. bina dialogues ke itna likhna was 🤢
feels like sab kuch khatam ho gaya ab kya karu? 😭 ab aap kuch likhiye 😉

i loved that past present connect in the whole story...n this different style is damn gud...naa koi dialogues naa kuch... i really like that way of story telling in the story. picked it up from there. and i wanted the emotions to do the talking in this one 😉 par u kno abeer ki awaaz sunne ke liye mere kaan taras gaye end mein 😭 khamushi ki bhi zubaan hoti hai 😉

kuch toh bolta kya chal raha hai dimaag mein...bichaara uske dimaag mei sirf uski biwi k khayal chalte hai 🤣

abhi aur 100 OS likh...jaldi...warna mai life mein kya karungi? 😭 jo hukum 🤣

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Heights of sadism , just read first part
U penned it very well buddy , every line portrayed their emotions so well
End part Dikhadiya ha chudailgiri😡 okay I am running for next part😆
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Posted: 10 years ago
#30
Omg Ari how did u manage to wrote an is wit no dialogues yaar...i love the lines on bold..every line has so much of depth n so much of love n longing...i loved it...

Start a new ff of this sort..wic would go fr 30 chapters. :P no dialogues but beautiful bold words of love..agony...reminiscents n relationship :)

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