ShiVi OS: First time's the charm ||18+|| Pg. 2 - Page 5

Riya!!! Hii.... Omg this was really good... I had to read it twice because i was laughing tok much the first time round imagining the scenario🤣🤣🤣

Their impatience and the fighting between making out was so them!! Proper comment when i read it aaram se!

Thank you for tagging. I have been very mia since it's been crazy closer to holiday season 🙄🙄

Lizzie🤗!!! I don't really know why you called this unconventional... Because it's not how most people see their first time being when they're imagining it? But in reality, this happens more often is what I feel like..

That aside, this was super funny😆! The moments where you almost think they can't possibly be talking about sex, then the next moment you realise oh they are! Despite that, Shivi had their own little romantic moments, and it was great seeing them be such a real couple, I suppose. Almost as if they aren't in that sometimes unreachable world of fiction that they live in more often...

PS Nalla has a sex toy in the car? Show Rishita might be more satisfied, ya know? If you were the one writing Nalla down, pretty sure he sleeps on the floor more often than not these days..

PPS I know I haven't read the last few chapters of your SS, but college keeps me suuuuuper busy! I'll probably get to it, sometime... Sigh...

This has got to my fav piece of writing from you! I never wanted it to finish!

It was so intense, passionate, romantic and hilarious all at once.

I love how you managed to describe the whole scene using just dialogues.

Originally posted by: Miss.M

Riya!!! Hii.... Omg this was really good... I had to read it twice because i was laughing tok much the first time round imagining the scenario🤣🤣🤣

Their impatience and the fighting between making out was so them!! Proper comment when i read it aaram se!

Thank you for tagging. I have been very mia since it's been crazy closer to holiday season 🙄🙄

Hi Min! Glad you found it funny because that's what I was aiming for more than anything! Will await your longer comment hopefully soon!

Originally posted by: Pottermeow

Lizzie🤗!!! I don't really know why you called this unconventional... Because it's not how most people see their first time being when they're imagining it? But in reality, this happens more often is what I feel like..

That aside, this was super funny😆! The moments where you almost think they can't possibly be talking about sex, then the next moment you realise oh they are! Despite that, Shivi had their own little romantic moments, and it was great seeing them be such a real couple, I suppose. Almost as if they aren't in that sometimes unreachable world of fiction that they live in more often...

PS Nalla has a sex toy in the car? Show Rishita might be more satisfied, ya know? If you were the one writing Nalla down, pretty sure he sleeps on the floor more often than not these days..

PPS I know I haven't read the last few chapters of your SS, but college keeps me suuuuuper busy! I'll probably get to it, sometime... Sigh...

Hi Sathya (hope I got your name right!)

I'm so glad you enjoyed this and found a thread of realism in the whole interlude because more often than not sex is like this - funny, weird, messy and not the romantic, passionate stuff you see/read in fiction. I was glad I was able to get ShiVi out from their fictional universe and make it seem like they inhabited our real world for a while!

About Dev having a sex toy, I really hadn't thought much of it except as a plot device to use as punchline! 😆

Perhaps it means that Rishita isn't really satisfied with their sex life or it could mean that they're into some really adventurous, next-level, kinky stuff! 😆

Oh, and by unconventional I was referring to the fact that this had only dialogues. I realize it can be frustrating for readers (some did tell me it was and then the humor won them over!) because of no descriptions. I know it was difficult for me, as a writer, to write since I had to put in everything in the dialogue that you would normally see in descriptions, such as the expression on their faces or the tone of their voice. It's extremely challenging, I can tell you that much! It's like telling a writer to write without using the letter 'e'! 😆 But also fun!

Thanks for reading, Sathya and no problem about the SS. You'll get to it when you'll get to it! 😆

Originally posted by: evilxbalaa

This has got to my fav piece of writing from you! I never wanted it to finish!

It was so intense, passionate, romantic and hilarious all at once.

I love how you managed to describe the whole scene using just dialogues.

Hey Hinna! Wow, you liked this more than anything else I've written? That's true validation! And you saying that you could feel all those emotions! Wow, I'm really stoked I could manage that with only dialogue!

P.S If you enjoy this style of writing you should check out my OS series on Sholay's VeeJai here.

Ye dosti hum nahi todenge

It's something I'm super proud of. It's not popular at all, it got like 2-3 likes, but I love it! (as much as love my VeeJai 😳)

Thanks again, Hinna!

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Hey Hinna! Wow, you liked this more than anything else I've written? That's true validation! And you saying that you could feel all those emotions! Wow, I'm really stoked I could manage that with only dialogue!

P.S If you enjoy this style of writing you should check out my OS series on Sholay's VeeJai here.

Ye dosti hum nahi todenge

It's something I'm super proud of. It's not popular at all, it got like 2-3 likes, but I love it! (as much as love my VeeJai 😳)

Thanks again, Hinna!

I dont know who they are😆 but this story is already added to my library

Isnt there a thread for it?

Originally posted by: evilxbalaa

I dont know who they are😆 but this story is already added to my library

Isnt there a thread for it?

These two idiots

And don't blame you for not knowing who they are. This is probably the only fic to exist with them as a gay couple and pretty sure the ship name was made up by moi! 🤡

Nope, no thread, cos I wouldn't know where to post this!

PS This was written for Pride month!

Another sizzling hot piece by you.. and a totally unconventional one! I loved reading it ☺️

Sundari and susheela by Shiva cracked me up totally.. that sounded like something Shiva would come up with 🤣

So ShiVi did the deed in Dev's car🤣

Apart from these bits which cracked me up, the rest had me going up in flames! 🔥

Originally posted by: GrilledCheese

Another sizzling hot piece by you.. and a totally unconventional one! I loved reading it ☺️

Sundari and susheela by Shiva cracked me up totally.. that sounded like something Shiva would come up with 🤣

So ShiVi did the deed in Dev's car🤣

Apart from these bits which cracked me up, the rest had me going up in flames! 🔥

Thank you! So glad you found this worth reading! 😳

You really think Shiva in canon has a goofy sense of humour like the Shiva in this fic? (I’d like to think he does but idk if there’s been any evidence of it in the show)

What do I call you btw?

Happy Holidays! ❤️