Take my breath away: ShiVi FF - Page 26

Originally posted by: IshqKaRang

Arrrrgggghhhhh these two fools!! And the absolutely horrible timing everyone else has!! Damn!

Also, can we have Shiva beat up Dev? Give him the thrashing he deserves?

Also, can Raavi outright reject Dev? And stand up for her and Shiva? I can’t bear a repeat of what’s happening in the show!!

Adding a formal request for both the two points down below! 🤡❤️

Oh wow! What did I just read? Girl, you are one of the best in terms of writing a scene between Shiva and Raavi and make sure you include all their characteristics and tashan to make it very interesting. Loved their swimming pool encounter❤️ But the ending though, Shiva is angry and disappointed, Raavi is stunned😕

Can we have a continuation to this one to see how both come out of this mess and make Dev spill the beans about him being in love with another girl. I just want Shiva and Raavi to move ahead as there is clearly an attraction between the two.

Originally posted by: nikkiGarg

This is wonderful… I loved each and every single chapter …❤️

Thanks so much for reading and the comment! I'm so glad you're liking it!

Riya!! I'm so glad I decided to peek in early today! Usually I'll wait till later but this epic read would have been delayed. I love anything and everything to do with gyms and fitness centres.

This was mind blowing. I didn't know how exactly you were going to get them to interact there considering they hadn't spoken to each other. Also thank you for not having her crazy about Dev, being better friends with Krish than either of his older brothers and questioning her feelings for Shiva.

The description of them swimming made it feel like I was watching a race! I was cheering them on not being able to decide who I wanted to win for the bet (and what the prize would entail) and what would a swimming pool with two attractive and attracted people be without some desire and "foreplay" thrown in.

Krish anywhere has really bad timing 😂😂😂 but I'm glad it's moved away from the limbo and now hopefully one or the other will move this forward.

Do continue soon.. As always eager to read more of your writing!

Originally posted by: EuphoricDamsel.

HOLY MOTHER OF A WEASEL WITH HOT CROSS BUNS !!!

What did I just read?!

Wha- how- haaaaawwwwwwwwwww

Okay first thoughts first : Oh How I miss swimming like no one's business!

Moving on : I cannot count the number of times I've blushed or gone all 'YIKES' while reading this. There was this electricity! All charged up!

DAMN!

Bless Tushar for giving us a pool scene! May he get married happily and have an awesome life!🤣

This whole piece was SO RAUNCHY and WITHOUT the actual deed at that. How'd you do this? Teach me Master! Teach me! I was reading the dialogue 'You Little Minx' when my mother snuck up on me and now she thinks I'm unstable. 🤡

Can we all agree and give Krish a 'Boycott Order / Desh Nikaala' what's his problem man? Why does he interrupt everything? huh.

Dev's AGREED??! [Aag boi Shiva upcoming CANNOT WAIT]

Even if he did I didn't like Krish going all "You're gonna be married" like hello?! consent? She'll be asked right?

*Manifesting Aag Boi Shiva with all heart*

PLEASE UPDATE SOON MAN IMMA STARVED OF RAUNCHY STUFF THAT DOESN'T EVEN HAVE THE DEED.

I NEED THE NEXT PART LIKE NOWWWWWWWW!!!

Oh Lord, I'm cackling like a goose reading this comment!

Holy mother of weasel with hot cross buns is going to be my go-to expression from here on! 🤣

And dear God! 😳I'm no master or anything, but so kind of you to say so.😳

I love writing 'almost' moments, more than actual moments. I find the build-up and the raw, unresolved sexual tension more delicious than the actual sex! So I'm glad you thought this one was raunchy without anything actually happening which is exactly what I was aiming for! 😳

Ha ha., poor Krish. He's being unnecessarily vilified just because I decided to make him the party pooper this time. 😆 Don't kill the messenger guys! 😆 Dev ko maaro, Krish ne kya kiya? 😆

Also, I love your nickname for Shiva- Aag Boi Shiva! 🤣

And yes, God Bless Tushar! 😆

Originally posted by: IshqKaRang

Arrrrgggghhhhh these two fools!! And the absolutely horrible timing everyone else has!! Damn!

Also, can we have Shiva beat up Dev? Give him the thrashing he deserves?

Also, can Raavi outright reject Dev? And stand up for her and Shiva? I can’t bear a repeat of what’s happening in the show!!

The horrible timing everyone else has is courtesy me, the author! 😎😆

Shiva beating up Dev! 😲 My. my - we're getting bloodthirsty here! 😆

Raavi rejecting Dev will depend on Shiva- maybe? But yeah, she needs to stand up for herself first. She shouldn't marry Dev if she doesn't want to - whether or not she wants to be with Shiva. Consent is everything!

Thanks for reading and I hope you enjoyed the update despite the frustration! 😳

Loving each and every update........ Waiting for next one..........

Originally posted by: Miss.M

Riya!! I'm so glad I decided to peek in early today! Usually I'll wait till later but this epic read would have been delayed. I love anything and everything to do with gyms and fitness centres.

This was mind blowing. I didn't know how exactly you were going to get them to interact there considering they hadn't spoken to each other. Also thank you for not having her crazy about Dev, being better friends with Krish than either of his older brothers and questioning her feelings for Shiva.

The description of them swimming made it feel like I was watching a race! I was cheering them on not being able to decide who I wanted to win for the bet (and what the prize would entail) and what would a swimming pool with two attractive and attracted people be without some desire and "foreplay" thrown in.

Krish anywhere has really bad timing 😂😂😂 but I'm glad it's moved away from the limbo and now hopefully one or the other will move this forward.

Do continue soon.. As always eager to read more of your writing!

Aww thank you, Min! I knew when I dropped the hint about a race in their Never have I ever game, I knew that this race was coming some time. I didn't know it would be as soon as the next update.

About her not being crazy about Dev, I have never watched the show except for some ShiVi scenes, so it was easy enough for me to go canon divergent. I also thought it would make sense for her to be friends with Krish (here I assumed that Raavi and Krish would be close in age though i could be wrong about that!)

Omg, I feel so flattered when you say you could picture the swimming race! I think that's what every writer aims for- to create an imagery in their readers' minds and I'm glad I was able to do this!

Oh yeah, things won't be in limbo, because I want to get things wrapped up, unlike the show that only wants to drag them out! 😆

Thank you for reading, Min! 🤗

Originally posted by: Odette_delusion

Loving each and every update........ Waiting for next one..........

Hey, thank you so much! It's been daunting for me - posting on a forum where I don't actually follow the show. But you guys have been so welcoming of my stories. I'm truly grateful! 🤗

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Aww thank you, Min! I knew when I dropped the hint about a race in their Never have I ever game, I knew that this race was coming some time. I didn't know it would be as soon as the next update.

About her not being crazy about Dev, I have never watched the shoe except for some ShiVi scenes, so it was easy enough for me to go canon divergent. I also thought it would make sense for her to be friends with Krish (here I assumed that Raavi and Krish would be close in age though i could be wrong about that!)

Omg, I feel so flattered when you say you could picture the swimming race! I think that's what every writer aims for- to create an imagery in their readers' minds and I'm glad I was able to do this!

Oh yeah, things won't be in limbo, because I want to get things wrapped up, unlike the show that only wants to drag them out! 😆

Thank you for reading, Min! 🤗

And I thank you for the canon divergent dynamics that are essentially still canon shivi.

The exact ages are unknown in the show (since there is some difference from pre leap and post leap) so this may well be possible and a fresh angle to look at it from.

You are definitely one of the few fiction writers that provide enough for the imagery, making the experience more enjoyable.

Cannot wait to see what other experiences you churn out. (Now I'll stop gushing so you can do some more writing 😆)