Fixing the broken mess -a short story

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Posted: 4 years ago
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(This will start from today's dev shiva Bharat milap scene)

After hearing Sympathy in Shiva's tone for Raavi Dev looked surprised because he can't believe ki unka Shiva Raavi k liye irritation k alava bhi kuch feel kr sakta h.

"Shiva savera jaldi lane k liye ye jo nafrat k badal chhaye hai na tere aur Raavi k life main pehle unhe hata dekh savera apne aap aa jayega -Dev suggested him trying to correct somewhat of his wrong doings

Ae gadheda tereko bhai hone k nate thori choot kya di tu toh prem gyani ban gya aisa kuch nhi hone wala yahan main aur wo mami ki behen ki beti jaise h waise hi rahenge kuch badalne wadalne wala nhi -answered shiva rudely cutting him in between his gyan.

"Pata nhi sab par kya bhoot sawar h jo sabko lagta h ki main aur wo chipkali kabhi pyaar main padenge ek dusre k"-murmurmed shiva walking away from there.

But Dev hearing it just smiled and looked at him going thinking pyaar ki shuruaat toh ho gayi h bs tujhe ehsaas nhi h mere bhai.

Shiva walked towards the mandir area seeing his bhabhi there but as soon as he heard Raavi his feet stopped in mid -

"Acha hua usse din Rishita aa gayi wahan aur meri Dev se Shadi tut gayi kyunki ek aise insaan k saath toh main bhi khush nhi reh sakti jiske pass mujhe dene k liye kuch bhi nhi tha aise khokhle rishte se toh acha h na ek aise rishte main bandhna jahan koi emotion toh h bhale hi wo nafrat hi shahi Dev toh mujhse dosti tak nhi nibha paya kamse kam pyar na sahi Shiva shiddat se nafrat toh krta h mujhse"

Hearing her Dhara broke further but controlling her tears went to Raavi and turning her towards herself told _ Mera Shiva utna bhi bura nhi h Raavi ek mauka toh de usse pher dekh kaise teri jholi khushiyon se bhar jayegi .

"Kaise du mauka di ? kaise? Shouted Raavi frustrated ek din main toh nhi badal jayega na sab kuch 10 saalo purani h di 10 saal ki nafrat or mera dev k liye pyaar humara wajood k hissa h aise hi toh nhi apna wajood ko mita sakte na hum dono".Bandh to gaye h hum iss unchache rishte main pr khush, khush kabhi nhi rahenge di kabhi nhi _"saying so she ran away from there inside the haveli.

(Shiva looked stupefied at her retreating back and went inside the temple to his bhabhi.)

Seeing someone approaching Dhara hastily wiped her tears and looked up only to she her Shiva with red eyes looking at her painfully.

And seeing him the tears came back to her eyes and she whispered brokenly - "mujhe maaf karde shiva plz maaf karde meri ek galti ne mere saare bacho ka jeeven takleef se bhar diya na main R se Raavi sochti na ye sab hota aur na in sab main tu fasta plz apni bhabhi maa ko maaf krde"

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Love the start. Shiva overheard the conversation. Can’t wait for the next part’

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Very emotional update😭

Shiva overheard everything

Waiting for next

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Posted: 4 years ago
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This is so emotional.

Do continue soon

I would love to read more of this.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Beautifully written!! I was also holding onto hope that Shiva would at least hear some parts of the Dhara Raavi convo!!


Would love to see another scene where Shiva discusses some aspects of the convo with Dev and Dhara to Raavi!

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Beautiful story ❤


Please cont🤗

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Posted: 4 years ago
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dev aur raavi ke chakkar mein shiva ki life badal gai......

feel bad for raavi too coz dev ka fault hai

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Posted: 3 years ago
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The beginning was very beautiful!🌸

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