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Posted: 8 months ago
#81

Mrina, what about part 3? It's been a few days now...a man in a suit and tie stands in a field of flowers

Posted: 8 months ago
#82

Originally posted by: LadyWhistledown

MRINU DIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIsmiley31

I LOVED THISSSSSSSSSSsmiley27

I know... I know... I'm late as usualsmiley18 But, my stupid office trip came in the way, and I haven't been online in a loooooooooong time!

But, now that I'm here, I have a lot to sayyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!

Coming to the 2nd Chapter, Roshi yaaaaaarr! Itna attitude!

Talha Pookie kitna koshish kar raha hai bechara!

I love how Talha is dealing with her in this light-hearted, teasing way, and his amusement at her annoyance. Banda knows that she'll come along one daysmiley36

And I loved the way he uses Baba and Mohid's names unflinchingly to get his wayyyy... smart husbandsmiley2

And Rosh, how long will you lieeee? Kya tum sach mein sirf Baba ke liye yeh sab kar rahe hosmiley2

Talha reaction when he sees Rosh in her Walima outfit... Hayeeeeeeeesmiley42

And Roshi... you know that Talha's complements are real! Ab bano mat! Aur kitna tadpaaoge meri Talha kosmiley19 Bechara!

But Mrinu Di... the way you've incorporated those subtle inner thoughts Roshi, that she is on her way to acceptance *chef's kiss*smiley31

This is such a wonderful piece of writing, but it's toooooooo shortsmiley18

I WANT MOREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!


Love,

Niyasmiley31

Niyaaaa!smiley31

Thank you so much my pyaari.smiley27 I really had to incorporate Roshi's innrer thoughts for a more complete reading experience. Personally I have started feeling that one person POV feels very incomplete while reading.smiley24

I'm so happy to hear that you enjoyed reading it and yes, I know Part 2 was shorter than the first one... but I wasn't sure how to conclude the story so I had to stop where I did.

Last part is coming soon... I am working on it.smiley4

Love,

Mrinu di

Posted: 8 months ago
#83

Originally posted by: Aazeen02

Mrina, what about part 3? It's been a few days now...a man in a suit and tie stands in a field of flowers

a man says sorry for the delay in front of a white background

Posted: 8 months ago
#84

No sorry baby... I was just asking...smiley31
Posted: 8 months ago
#85

Originally posted by: Aazeen02

No sorry baby... I was just asking...smiley31

I’m writing. Just the last scene pending.smiley9

Posted: 8 months ago
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Posted: 8 months ago
#87

This is so beautiful Mrina... so deep and raw between Talha and Roshi... a conversation like this should have been in the show as well... not that I am complaining about the last episode and their conversations but this too would have been emoted so well by Ahad and Dananeer... smiley27smiley27

Look fwd to reading more of your writings and thanks again for tagging me smiley20smiley20

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Posted: 8 months ago
#88

you are such a good writer smiley27 love how you wrote teasing talha in first part to him sharing his pain in last part never for a second I thought they were any different from the serial. Keep writing :)

Posted: 8 months ago
#89

Originally posted by: tulip.johar

This is so beautiful Mrina... so deep and raw between Talha and Roshi... a conversation like this should have been in the show as well... not that I am complaining about the last episode and their conversations but this too would have been emoted so well by Ahad and Dananeer... smiley27smiley27

Look fwd to reading more of your writings and thanks again for tagging me smiley20smiley20

Thank you so much Tulip.smiley31

I wanted to keep it similar to the show yet do something different. I wanted to make sure Talha confessed his love while talking to her about the accident and Roshi had to probe and push him to get him out of his shell and actually vent out.smiley27

I'm so glad you enjoyed reading.smiley31 Next one shall come soon.smiley9

Posted: 8 months ago
#90

Originally posted by: jenshad

you are such a good writer smiley27 love how you wrote teasing talha in first part to him sharing his pain in last part never for a second I thought they were any different from the serial. Keep writing :)

Thank you so much Sara. I'm glad you enjoyed reading my work.smiley27 I wanted to keep the characters true to the show yet put my spin to it. This was a tough one to write but I'm happy it worked out.smiley9

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