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Posted: 9 years ago
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This is what happens when Darshan Raval's song makes me sentimental😭. The words in italics are flashback scenes and in bold are the lyrics of the song "Ab Phirse Jab"😉 I suggest you to open the link, let the song load and play when you read the word, *Music* in the OS, in the background, only to fell the emotions😳. If this turns out to be bakwaas, I'll know that my assumption skills are up to the mark😆. Also celebrating my 16350 posts🥳.

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My original work and if found similar to other stories, please let me know, I'll delete this one.😊

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Posted: 9 years ago
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The sky was dark and it looked as if it would rain. She smiled happily and looked at her father who as reading a book, "I Too had a Love Story".

"Papa, baalish..." She said cheerfully. He looked at her and the sky through the window. He smiled at his excited daughter and picked the keys of the car, knowing exactly what that smile meant. Mishri picked his mobile and dialed a number, "Bhaiyu, baalish..." The three year said in excitement... "Maachi, Bhaiyu ko leke aa jaao na...pleety please..." She said only to make Kabir laugh. She cut the call and he helped her sit in the car. She spoke continuously in her baby voice about the rains, while he just went in the past...

*Music*

"Nisha, no, don't get wet..." He said, but he couldn't help but admire his 9 month pregnant wife, who was enjoying the rains.

"Kabir, kya pakau ho yaar tum? Baarish mein bheeglo todha sa, pyaar kar lo todha sa..." she said and winked. She turned and looked at the roses on the plant, whose beauty was more prominent due to the rain water. He walked closer to her, but she wasn't aware of the same. He went and stood close to her, feeling her presence and smiled. He held her hand and she turned to face him. He smiled as she hugged him.

Ab phirse jab baarish hogi
Teri yaad mujh ko aayegi, aayegi

Nisha started coughing suddenly. Kabir broke the hug, "Bheegne ka nateeza dekha? Chalo, andar chalo..." She nodded in a no furiously. He looked at her sternly. She sighed and walked towards the house. He laughed and followed her.

Ab phirse jab baarish hogi
Teri yaad mujh ko aayegi, aayegi

"Papa, pahuch gaye..." He heard her voice and looked at her. She smiled cheekily and struggled to open the door. Not able to do so, she made an angry face at Kabir. Kabir unlocked the car, and she rushed out in the garden.

"Promise me Kabir, you will never stop our baby from enjoying the rain" She said, as she watched the some drops get dissolved in the mud and some trickle down from the leaves of the plants in their garden. He nodded his head, just to calm her down. "Acchooo..." she sneezed. Kabir, "baby ki chodo, apni dekho...baarish mein bheegne ka nateeza..." He said and went in the house to get her medicines.

Ab phirse jab baarish hogi
Teri yaad mujh ko aayegi, aayegi

He watched as the drops fell on his angel, dressed in blue frock. She twirled and laughed, not at all sad that she couldn't collect the rain drops. She was happy, and so was he. He felt a tap on his shoulder, so looked up, to see a smiling Dolly stand near him. Ahaan rushed to join his cousin.

"I miss her" He said, as Dolly sat next to him on the bench. "Me too..." Dolly replied, as she looked at the tear that trickled down his cheek.

Ab phirse jab baarish hogi
Teri yaad mujh ko aayegi, aayegi

Kabir came back to the balcony of the house, with bottles of medicines in his hand, only to find Nisha missing, and before he could call out her name, she heard him call out to him, pain evident in her voice. He rushed in the garden, only to get the shock of his life. Nisha was lying on the ground on her back, with blood oozing out from the back of her head.

Tum gaye, aise gaye
Ke ab kahan aaoge laut ke

"I am Sorry, we couldn't save your wife..." The doctor said to him, after an unsuccessful operation of 3 hours. Kabir stood numb, with no reaction on his face. He kept looking at the doctor, and then at the baby in her hand. His hands were trembling, and he didn't muster up the courage to hold her.


Tum gaye, aise gaye
Ke ab kahan aaoge laut ke

"Kyun Nisha?" He said to his wife, who was lying breathless on the stretcher. "Mishri aur mujhe kyun chodke chali gayi tum, kyun?" He said and cried. He cried his heart out, but no one heard him, no one wiped his tears... no one felt his pain...He felt alone...

Ye chand bhi pheeka, galiyan sooni..
Mannatein meri kya usne suni

He held her hand and kissed it and then, kissed her forehead. "I am alone Nisha..." He said, but she heard none of it.

Ab phir se jab baarish hogi
Teri yaad mujh ko aayegi, aayegi

"Papa... dekho, lain dlops..." Mishri said and came running to him. She held his hand and kissed it. He looked at her surprise. "I lub you Papa..." She said and kissed his cheek. "I love you Kabir..." he remembered her saying those three magical words in her sweet voice and kissed Mishri's forehead.


Ab phir se jab baarish hogi
Teri yaad mujh ko aayegi, aayegi

"I love you too Mishri..." He said, as he saw a strange woman standing away from them, looking at them. Her umbrella prevented him from seeing her face.
Ab phir se jab baarish hogi

He walked closer to the woman, his heart beat speed increasing every step he was closer to her.

Teri yaad mujh ko aayegi, aayegi

Suddenly, she disappeared only to make Kabir realize that he was imagining her... imagining...

Ab phirse jab baarish hogi

His Nisha...
Teri yaad mujh ko aayegi...

His Love...

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Wrote after long on NiBir, so likes/comments are criticism are more than welcome.


Edited by ...Shibu... - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Shibhanzzz it is more than beautiful❤️
Your words contain so much power dat it directly reflects the emotions 😭
I m crying yr 😭
Kudos to uh 👏 for presenting such a beautiful OS in unique way... 👏
I m in love with this song from now...
Har scene har fb k emotions lyrics se beautifully match krre the... 👏
Thankyou for giving us such a lovely OS...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow! This was so beautiful Shibu!!
This is one of my favourite songs and now you made me love it even more! ❤️
As I always say, sadness as an emotion has its own unmatched beauty! And you have brought that out very beautifully!
Each line of the lyrics was so fitting of the flashback described!
That moment where, in the flashback he cries and there is noone to hold his hand and at the same time in the present, Mishri holds his hand! Lovely moment that was! ❤️
Loved how you ended it with him hallucinating Nisha!
Do write more shibu! and thanks for pm 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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I also love balish 😳 and this was awesome 😊 and the song 😳 mishri is cute😃 but nibir 😭 keep writing... 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Omggg shibu soo sooo beautiful.speechless ❤️ but 😭 😭
perfect match fr d song ❤️
luved it ❤️
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Shibu...beautiful os..emotional too...Loved it..😛
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Superb update
Loved it
Thnku for the pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow so so beautiful 👏
And emotional too 😭
Song was perfect... Loved it...!!
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Awww beti that was superbly written... upto the mark shibu... one can actually feel what kabir feels and as far as song is concern... darshan can make anyone cry with his superb voice and songs ❤️

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